Writing Feedback / Sumary of Hiking the Inca Trail in The Andes Mountains [11]

Macchu Pichu is the ancient site in the Andes Mountains and tt was discoverd by archeologist in 1911. Macchu Pichu had been considered a sacred place for a long time. Although only few poeple is known about the activities that took place in that place, it seems that the function for obeserving the astronomy. The wonderful architecture and mystery of ancient culture attract thousand visitors throughout the world. They can access it by vehicle but hiking along Inca trail is the most populer track. Along the trip poeple can enjoy many marvels like magnificient orchids and birds. The trip has become so well-known since 2005. Eventually the government established the policy to protect natural environment and ruins. There are regulations about porters wage and the maximum of weight. It causes the price more higher. Therefore just a few visitors can access it but both of the environment and workers can be protected.

Writing Feedback / "green movement" - What is Ecotourism ? (Interesting tourism) [6]

The ecotourism concept arise out "green movement" that have meaning to preserve the natural environment. The goals not only avoid harming the environment but also give beneficial for local ecology and society. Ecotourism offers many types of destination like natural destination. It can spend a few weeks in remote area with local resident. Ecotourism look for enviromentally friendly accommodations such us renewable resources and recycling. It also seek out hotels and tourist companies that hire mainly local staff. Ecotourism usually don't use cruise ships because they produce not only a harmfull emmisions but also many tons of garbage and wastewater. The growing of ecotourism interest causes many companies advertise themselves as ecotourism companies although not all the companies practice the principle.The travelers must choose carefully and ensure that the company practice the ecotourism principle. The positive side is that become the indication of ecotourism development.

Writing Feedback / TED - Averting the Climate Crisis. Make the massive persuasion campaign. [3]

What can you do about the climate crises ? In couple of days, we acquire the new temperature records in January. Prior average of januaries is 31 degrees but last month reached 39.5 degress. There are some cuases that spark the conditon. First of all, US contribution within globar warming under bussines as usual. Then there are cars and trucks leading the global warming because they are very significant and have the lowest standards in the world. The more global warming pollution come from buildings. To avoid the climate crises we can reduce emissions in home like buy green electricity, be a green consumer and make a decision to live a carbon natural life. Utilizing carbon calculator is neccesary in order to you can exactly count CO2 emissions. Next, you can consider making your business carbon neutral. Integrate climate solution into all of your innovations. Become catalyst of change in society, teach others about climate crises, and active in the politic to make democracy work. Make the massive persuasion campaign to influence many people Let's rebrand global warming "climate crises" instead of "planet collapse".

Writing Feedback / Beneficial relaxation. Learning vacation is a new kind of holiday [5]

Learning vacation has a new concept to provide a different experience. It prefers to spend the time by learning something new rather than spending vacation time on a beach. The participators are able to enjoy a broad type of the travel such as join a prehistorical obeservation, study a biodiversity in the rain forest. Although at first the learning vacation was popular for young people who were still in school. Nowdays, it has been more prevalent for adult. Financing of arts school has become a good preference to spend the learning vacation. The participants will directly acquire the guidance of specialist. Britain also accept the adult travelers to join few days course throughout the country. The upside of the vacation is more economical than tradisional vacation because the travelers can arrange the trip by themselves without involving travel agent. There are many posibilities of learning vacation, so you can choose appropiate with your wish.

Writing Feedback / Maintaining repeated customers is a prevalent aim within a business. My summary about Brand Loyalty [2]

Mantaining repeat customer is a prevalent aim within a business. Most of the enterpreneurs prefer to keep a committed clientele rather than to draw a new customer. Psychological bond is the most important factor creating a brand loyalty while tertiary need has strong role to create a true brand loyalty. Customers pertain to their product with the symbolic status for instance buying a clothes worn by an artist. Loyal customers are difficult to reverse because they have strong trust for a product. Brand loyalty occurs when people have much more money to spend. In period of downturn economic, customer is less selective and prefer to buy a cheaper product. However the condition doesn't exist in the other countries having disposable income. The Brand loyality is not populer in a country having fewer choices and price as the priority.

Writing Feedback / My summary task about social Networking [9]

Recently, The popularity of a social networking on the internet has rapidly risen throughout the world. The social networking facilitates many people to share their personal information created by community. The data shows that three-fourths of the internet users operate the social networking among the people of all the ages. The super popularity of the social networking gives advantage and disadvantage to users. The upside is to ease to connect with friends, relatives and old friends. The entrepreneurs as well use it to run their enterprise, to find out the job vacancy, or to look for a new client. The internet eradicates the need of the space and direct communication. On the other hand, the damages of the social networking have risen. It has some potential risks like most people spend immense time with their online friend causing less time with their local community. The Adolescents have been influenced easily. The social networking will affect our social life.

Writing Feedback / Logging impact. A great deal of the industries commit the activities of cutting down trees. [3]

The summary of Environmental Impacts of Logging

A great deal of the industries commit the activities of cutting down trees. They need it for the raw material of various products. The logging can generate the downside for the environment like pollution, habitat loss and climate change. Trees give the protection to the soil. Their leaves are able to prevent the top soil run off when the rain comes. The roots can avert the direct erosion as well. The felling of the trees directly harms the water habitats because it will speed up the erosion. When the erosion occurs, the materials of soil will consume the oxygen and cause the oxygen reduction in the water. The deforestation also maintains pollutants airborne where the acid rain is caused by this situation. Moreover, it contributes to twenty percent of the carbon dioxide emissions in the worldwide responsible for creating of the climate change.

Writing Feedback / The amounts of meat, salt, and fish consumed in China, starting from 1985 to 2010 [5]

Writing task 1 : Food Consumption in China

The line chart compares the amounts of meat, salt, and fish consumed in China, starting from 1985 to 2010. It can be clearly seen that the fish consumption numbers were much higher than other foods.

The fish became the most popular food in China as long as 25 years. The figure of fish consumption always grew even bigger in every year, with rare exception between 1990 and 1995 where the consumption rate drastically pulnged until 100 grams per person in each week. Thereafter the number of meat consumption rapidly increased to 900 grams in 2010.

In 1985, The consumption of salt reached about 490 grams. Afterwards the number of salt consumption always gradually declined and reached the lowest figure in 2010 (200 grams) . On the other hand, the meat consumption had the lowest figure in 1985 (100 gram). Nevertheless, people consuming the meat constantly went up time by time and recorded the biggest number of meat consumption in 2010 where it achieved 200 grams.

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Writing Feedback / Men are more likely to sign up for the fitness membership, than women - according to the bar chart [3]

Writing task 2 : Fitness membership

The bar chart shows the number of people becoming the fitness membership, starting from 1970 to 2000. Overall, it can be clearly seen that as long as 30 years the man had the highest rate of fitness membership and the lowest membership belonged to the women group.

In 1970, the number of women joined in the fitness membership reached the smallest figure at 1000 people and the women group registered in 1975 had the same figure as the female members in 2000 where the members attained 2000 people. The following five years, the rate of women members recorded 1800 people and increased even bigger to 2800 members in 1985 where it had the equal numbers with 1995.

The men members had the same number in 1970 and 1990 (2100 members), while the highest number of fitness membership was achieved by the men in 1995 (5000 members). In the next five years, the figure of the men members dropped sharply to only 1000 members. Nevertheless, 4000 men were recorded as the fitness membership In 1975.

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Writing Feedback / A great deal of the birds carry out the migration in every year [2]

Summary task 2 : Bird Migration

A great deal of the birds carry out the migration in every year as long as warm season because the best circumstance can be achieved for laying egg and feeding their cub. The bird migration occurs two times in a year, in the spring and the autumn. During the breeding period, most birds traverse the Northern Hemisphere having higher latitude. Afterward they turn back to the Southern Hemisphere. However, some birds do not conduct a distant migration, as they prefer to breed in the high place. During migration season, the numerous birds travel across the several hundred miles about eight hours a day as the maximum flight time. They use their fat accumulated to be a lot of flesh in the body for meeting the energy need during migratory period. The migratory birds have a natural ability to be the remarkable navigators and intuitive sense of direction.

Writing Feedback / The coal was the most popular energy source in France - years 1995 and 2005 [4]

Writing task 3 : Comparison Energy of Production

The pie charts compare the percentage of France's energy production in 5 categories in 1995 and 2005. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the highest production of energy was coal, while other had the smallest proportion in both years.

The coal was the most popular energy in France, it successfully broke a record as the greatest proportion by 1995 (29,80 %) and 2005 (30,93%). The production of petro in 1995 was higher than in 2005 at 29,27 % and 19,55 % respectively, when it was also recorded as the biggest difference of proportion. On the other hand, there was a slight increase of gas production in first and second period, when it produced 29,63 and 30,31 percent successively.

The nuclear and other became uncommon energy which was produced in both years. The nuclear energy produced in 1995 was 6,4 % and increased to 10,1 % in 2005. While the production of other was 4, 9 percent and grew even bigger to 9,1 percent in 2005.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 4 : the amount of water consumption overseas by sectors and land [NEW]

The line graph compares the amount of global water consumption based on three different sectors from 1900 to 2000, while the table shows the using of water in Brazil and Congo in 2000. Overall it can be clearly seen that the using of global water showed an increasing trend in every sector. On the other hand , Brazil had the higher amount of water consumption in all variable than Congo.

In the beginning period, Industrial sectors almost had the same amount of consuming water as domestic need about 100 km3, while 500 km3 was used by agriculture. Around the period, the water consumption of three sectors gradually grew even higher, when domestic need consumed the least water at 400 km3 and industrial field used about 1000 km3 in 2000. At the same time, agriculture successfully broke a record as the highest sector which consumed water about 3000 km3.

In Brazil, the number of population was about 33 times higher than Congo in 2000 at 176 and 5,2 million of people respectively. Congo's people consumed 8 m3 where it was less than brazilian at 359 m3. In addition to, 26,500 m2 land in Brazil could be irigated by water and only 100 km2 in Congo.

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Writing Feedback / The historical records notify that the circus (oldest show today) have existed since the ancient era [4]

Summary : History of the Circus

The historical record shows that the circus have existed since the ancient era and become one of the oldest show today. The circus which we know presently still pertain to the ancient Romans where that empire acquainted the circus to the world. The circus maximus performed many shows in large venue for entertaining people. Chariot races, for instance, were the most popular sport, while the other event also held in circus maximus like gladiator fight. The modern circus appeared for the first time in England. By the end of 1700s, Philip Astley, an Englishman, had held the first modern circus, while he exhibited a spectacular stunt riding on horse back. Then, Philip also showed the other entertainments like clowns, acrobatics and trained animal shows. In the early 1800s, the popularity of circus started to emerge in United State. Joshua Brown founded the circus tent in 1825 and utilized it to travel around city to city. What we know as a circus today is adapted from brown's circus.

Writing Feedback / Writing task 5 : The Development of An Island [3]

The two figures depicts the development of an island based on tourist facilities. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the island generally became more crowded with many new accomodations and other supporting facilities like restaurant, reception, swimming area, pier, footpath, and vehicle track without giving impact to natural resources.

In the beginning time, before facilities were constructed, an island just had some trees and beach. Most areas still were empty without any special facilities. Over the time, the island shows a significant development, while many facilities supporting the tourism have been built including accomodation, restaurant, reception, pier and swimming facilities in beach. Although there are so many new facilities built in the island, the trees and plant still exist in the same number.

In addition, footpath and vehicle track have been built to make an integrated tourism facilities. The footpaths were made to connect the accommodation and beach, while vehicle track were built to facilitate amongst the restaurant, reception, and pier.

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Writing Feedback / History of the first headlamps. In 1831, Horatio Allen founded the track illuminator... [2]

The light was a complicated matter before electricity lamp was founded because the wind blowing were easily to extinguish the flame. In the first time, the train went on a trip during the day since the railway had considered fully dangerous in the night. In 1831, Horatio Allen founded the track illuminator which actually did not cast much light, however it was the remarkable invention. In the following years, oil was used to generate the train through a curved reflector , while Schenectady and Troy Railroad used a whale oil lamp where it illuminated the railway approximately 100 feet . During 1849, The calcium lamp cast the light up to 1000 feet was created, but just two companies used it. Eventually, the train utilized acetyline to substitute oil lamp because it could ride out the wind. In 1851, the first electric headlamp was discovered , however it still had two downsides namely it need its own generator and the parts were fragile during the train travel. In the United States, Goerge C.Payle invented headlamp which was more effecient electricity in 1897. Finally, the invention of electric headlamp facilitated train to travel 24 hours and all climate conditions.

Writing Feedback / Some of people think that wealthy life and high salary are essential for personal happiness [4]

Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success.

People have their own meaning of happiness, some of them think that welfare life and high salary are the most essential correlation in personal happiness, but the rest believe that other factors, such as family harmony and healthy life contribute towards achieving happiness. I am going to discuss both views and giving my opinion as a conclusion in the end of the writing.

Nowadays, there is no denying that money has the strong influence in people lives since most people require money to buy what they want to buy. People with the decent job will have more prosperous life than others who don't have proper job because they receive much more money. It will make them have a bigger chance to meet their wants, buying deluxe car and purchasing luxurious house, for instance. In some cases, extra efforts are needed to attain affluence and it will reduce the quality of personal life such as lack of familiy time.

On the other hand, people living in happy family which can accept the real circumstance of family members especially in economical condition can be other happiness sources. For example, in some states one just has middle income or even low income, their family will not give an intense pressure. The family encourage in positive ways such us giving support and motivation instead. Next, health, other factors, can affect toward being happiness. With the healthiness, people can participate in many activities giving them many satisfied experiences.

In conclusion, i would like to say that economic success pertain to personal happiness. however those other factors also have a great consideration in the pursuing of happiness. But, i firmly believe that others factors such us family harmony and health body will be the real happiness in our life.

Writing Feedback / Some editors have a great deal of consideration before broadcasting news on television or newspaper [5]

Writing task : News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers

At the present time, the rising amount of news on television and newspaper has significantly influenced people views. Thus some editors have a great deal of consideration before broadcasting on television or newspaper. However I believe that the good news should be much more reporting than the bad news.

There are several factors which affect the journalist's decision to broadcast and print the news. Firstly, news editors have to ensure that the news is an interesting and latest news since it will give them more chances to appeal people to watch or read their news. when the news is watched or read in big amount , it will impact to company's income. In addtion, they perhaps draw a lot of comercial advertisement of many business companies. Secondly, the grade of news popularity is necessary to atrract the reader. It common happens when people have the strong curiousity toward personal life of well known people such as artist, musicians and the leaders of government institution.

Recently, we know that the local and national media have a tendency to report bad news in many cases, for instance the hedonism of artist life style. It causes many people in particular youngster to imitate this regard. Most of the time, the media also report about other bad news such us crime and corruption. It would be better if good news are broadcasted because it will give the positive contribution to the nation.

In conclusion, there are some factors which affect the news editors' decision to broadcast and print the content of news. I believe that the good news are suppose to have a big proportion to report because it will give more benefit for most people.

Writing Feedback / A Fuel Tanker Fire in Mexico's Gulf Coast [5]

A horrible accident happened in Mexico's gulf when an oil tanker of petroleos mexicanos , called the burgos, transporting about 168,000 barrels had burned on Saturday. However, after having fought to extinguish the fire for a day, firefighting boats could blow out the blaze successfully and they had to use chemical materials against the flame. Fortunately, there are no victims in this tragedy. After this incident, the authority set off inquiring the factors causing the fire in the vessel . In a fact, any oil flow had been averted by Burgos' double hull since the volatility of fuel could affect oil vaporization. Apart from this, actually the burgos had taken step to ward off the oil spill to reach the coast by spreading the booms about a mile of containment.

Writing Feedback / Creativity is as important in education as literacy and we have to treat it with same status. [3]

In this topic, the speaker would say about creativity. It is as important in education as literacy and we have to treat with same status. Children action often become representative of creativity because they are not frighten to be wrong. Sometime to be wrong will create something new that never found before. However when every child always gets a strong push to avoid the mistake, they will be afraid to do something and their creativity will disappper. Today, this situation common happen . As the children grow up, many people will educate them strictly. In addition, education system is considered in the idea of academic ability, while the main purpose of education is to prepare people for getting job forbid everything not useful such us music and art. Thus many people having highly-talented and creativity hesitate to enter the school because there will not a proper service for their talent. At the end of speech, the speaker said that we need start to reconstruct our mind about the richness of human capacity and remind the principal education. Our task today , we have to make our children understand creative capacities for the richness, so they can face the future.

Writing Feedback / In this topic, the speaker talks about the idea of mastery and mind [2]

In this topic, the speaker would talk about the idea of mastery and mind. He said that nowadays many people have a trouble with mathematic since they do not understand about that lesson accumulated in their learning. For instance, when getting algebra, students have many gaps in their knowladge because they are not able to grasp the lesson. This case happens as the result of tradtional academic model which point to exponent and assignment each day. Afterward they would get a regular test. The students have artificially constrained their knowladge and take the trouble of identifying those gaps. On the other hand, the concept of mastery learning is oppsite. It prefer to fix the time and duration to learn something. Thus, the model will help students to understand exponents and reinforce their mindset. They are able to master concept of lesson while building the mindset as well. It means that the students will have a strong perseverance to learn. Instead of focusing in the lecture, the class can be more active when student can interact and share their knowledge to deepen their material.

Writing Feedback / Animals Starving in Venezuela Zoos [2]

During an economic crisis, many animals in Venezuela's Caricuao Zoo, for instance rabbits, tapirs and birds undergo starving since the administrator of the zoo faces the financial problem to buy animal's food. The decline of oil price is considered as a factor causing economic downturn, thus the country may not supply the basic needs and other necessity including animal's food. The zoo's worker have been feeding lions, tigers and elephants with fruits. In the long term, this situation will affect negatively to animal's health , while it is able to impact on psychology at the short time. In may, three animals died causing others are moved from Paraguana Peninsula to a park in Merida. In fact, the condition is not only in Venezuala but also in other countries and has been becoming global problem. In march, 200 animals died in the Khan Younis zoo in southern Gaza because of the lack of feed as the result of the war between Palestine and Israel. In addition, the Taiz zoo in Yemen also experiences the same circumstance.

Writing Feedback / Chris Anderson explained about four keys to be an extraordinary public speaker. [4]

TED : Secret to Great Public Speaking

In the video, the speaker, Chris Anderson, explained about four keys to be an extraordinary public speaker. First of all, the idea becomes an important secret factor influencing people to make a good speaker. Idea is an array of information which connect collectively amongst many views . Therefore, it is going to become individual's point of view. Every person has his or her own idea to consider a phenomenon. For Instance, people looking a young women must have different prespective when they have to spell it out. In public speaking, a speaker must have the spesific idea which is talked in front of the audience. It is able to be strengthened with explanation and example as it will be easier to be understood by audience. Secondly, the speaker has to have interesting idea to attract the attention of audience. In this case, Using the new or unique idea can appeal their interest effectively. In addition, starting public speaking with languange which is easy to be got by audience is an essential factor to pull up audience's attention. Finally, the speaker obligatorily ensure that the idea is exceptionally important to be shared since it is able to inspire and give many upsides in human's life.

Writing Feedback / Meet the First Baby Born with 3 Biological Parents [2]

A recent time, there was an uncommon event when the baby was born with three biological genetic and doctor John Zhang led the childbirth process in Mexico. this news was reported by the new scientist magazine. In the first time, the method actually experienced controversy in particular The United States. However, As professional doctor, Zhang had to save the life of baby. In this case, mother brought an abnormal DNA that can harm the baby's health. Thus, the baby was susceptible to get ill and give a higher risk of death. To avoiding this situation happen is vital to take the partial mother's DNA which carried disease and substitute with the donor's egg. After happening the situation, some health specialist stated that they agreed toward what doctor Zang had done.