Holt Educational Consultant
Oct 24, 2017
Undergraduate / College essay on moving from one place to another back to back and my experience with it [5]
Rishan, there is something highly familiar about this essay. I seem to recall having edited this exact essay about a year or so ago at this forum. Are you reapplying to college using the same essay? Did you have a profile here before that was suspended and you got a new profile so you can get free advice again? Please be honest with me here. I need to know if this is your original work or if you plagiarized this essay. With regards to the essay, it does not fit the prompt. It would be better if you changed it to the prompt that asks:
Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
This is less of an obstacle story and more of a background narrative. That is why I am suggesting the prompt change. If you wish to use this essay, then you will have to use a different prompt. If you want to use the prompt, then you have to change the essay.
Rishan, there is something highly familiar about this essay. I seem to recall having edited this exact essay about a year or so ago at this forum. Are you reapplying to college using the same essay? Did you have a profile here before that was suspended and you got a new profile so you can get free advice again? Please be honest with me here. I need to know if this is your original work or if you plagiarized this essay. With regards to the essay, it does not fit the prompt. It would be better if you changed it to the prompt that asks:
Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
This is less of an obstacle story and more of a background narrative. That is why I am suggesting the prompt change. If you wish to use this essay, then you will have to use a different prompt. If you want to use the prompt, then you have to change the essay.