Writing Feedback / Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial [2]

Do not merge your personal opinion with the public discussion points. The format for your response paragraph, based on the way you framed your opinion statement, is that of a stand alone presentation. That means you have to write a separate paragraph that uses the first personal pronouns to indicate that you are discussing your point of view, separate from the others, who should be referenced as third person pronoun indicators. Do not use group pronouns for your personal opinion. That is not how this essay is formatted. That is why your essay will be considered under developed in the presentation. Although you can support a particular point of view, you should do that without trying to use the influence of other opinions.

Writing Feedback / Many people believe that, by taking risks, ones are much more likely to be successful in their lives [2]

It is not going to be proper for me to review the quality of your writing based on an essay that does not follow the correct word number for the presentation. Limit yourself to writing a maximum of 300 words only or you risk not finishing your actual writing during the test. An open ended essay will receive an automatic failing score. Remember that. Write only the right number of words within 40 minutes. In this case, your 3rd paragraph is over developed, while the 2nd paragraph is under developed. Do not just keep writing words. Make sure you write words that count towards a proper score. You lost your capacity to properly discuss the advantages and disadvantages because of the word count focus. It is the quality of your discussion that actually matters.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:In some places,young people find it difficult to communicate with older people? Why? Solution? [2]


This statement will immediately result in a failing score for this particular paragraph. You have informed the examiner that you are not presenting a restatement, but rather, you are immediately discussing the topic as presented. That is not the way the first paragraph of a task 2 essay is written. Once you do not write a proper paraphrase with writer's opinion and thesis statement, the essay could actually risk getting an immediate failing score. Be more cognizant of the writing format as required for the task next time. That is not to say that you did not do a good job in that writing that paragraph, because you did. It is just lacking in terms of task accuracy requirements, and is also incorrect in formatting, so it runs the risk fo being the cause for you to fail this test.

Writing Feedback / The line graph depicts three companies in terms of tonnes of waste produced, over 15 years; TASK 1 [2]

Please be consistent with your use of punctuation marks. You have some ommitted punctuation marks, as well as some incorrect punctuation usage in the essay. Both of which will result in GRA deductions for you. Along with that, you need to familiarize yourself with the formatting requirements of the task. This is a 3 paragraph analytical report. So you have to separate the trending sentence from the rest of the report. The trending sentence is always included in the summary overview for cohesiveness and coherence in that paragraph. Any time that you start citing actual numbers or referring to the image, you are already writing a reporting paragraph. Start a new presentation line when you find yourself doing that.

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1 (The line graph reveals information on the waste output of three selected businesses) [2]

The presentation has an error in the final presentation. You should have separated the trending sentence from the actual reporting and analysis presentation. The trend should have been merged with the summary overview for maximum scoring effectivity. This is actually a 3 paragraph essay, which you did present, just not in the correct manner so you would end up with scoring deductions more than anything else because of it.

Maybe it was an oversight on your part. You should have hit the return button at the point where the essay said


. That was the point where a new paragraph, discussing the actual content of the line graph, should have been presented. It was a mistake anyone who is starting to write this task would make. You need to familiarize yourself with the cut-off points when it comes to clearly informing the reader.

Writing Feedback / How individuals can contribute to environment protection. [2]

The prompt restatement is incorrect. You are expected to reword the whole original topic presentation in your version. Do not use selective paraphrasing in this case. You will get a failing mark for task accuracy when you do that. You cannot tailor the prompt restatement to the opinion that you wish to discuss in the essay. You have to properly represent the discussion first, then present your opinion, then focus on the explanation and supporting information for that point of view. Your current restatement will get a failing score.

While the reasoning paragraphs are acceptable, the concluding summary is improperly presented. You failed to properly recap the discussion within at least 40 words or 2-5 sentences. The current conclusion is unacceptable and will not get a passing score since it does not meet the scoring requirements.

Graduate / My Statement of Purpose for UT Austin for Electrical Engineering Program [2]

This is more of an academic biography than a statement of purpose. So you should consider rewriting the statement of purpose to better suit the reviewer's need for specific information from you. In order to write a more proper essay, you should first, consider pondering what your actual purpose for studying in a masters program actually is. Consider your educationa;l, professional, and personal goals in relation to this. Discuss how these elements combine to push you towards the need for more learning. What do you expect to accomplish careerwise? How will this make you better at your job? Consider your career path going forward. How does the purpose suit your long and short term goals? What is the most important element that you consider as a purpose that could push the reviewer to believe you are worth giving a student slot to?

Research Papers / Prison privatizations - Maria [2]

I am unclear when it comes to the actual topic for discussion in this essay. The introduction paragraph is not helpful in presenting the focus of the essay, why it is important to discuss these, and what the purpose of the research paper is. Without these elements introduced at the start, it becomes confusing to continue reading the essay. Most of the essay relies on in-text citations, which does not really do much for the research paper because you are not taking the time to expand on a personal reference point or public opinion discussion that would help with the validity or contradict the validity of the discussion points you decided to highlight.

Writing Feedback / How does it feel moving towards the twilight? [2]

Please note that you only have 40 minutes to write a simple discussion for this topic. You will not have enough time to complete almost 600 words in an actual presentation. You will end up with a failing essay presentation due to an unfinished discussion consideration. I know that some teachers tell you that you just have to keep on writing until the time is up and you will get a passing score. Do not believe that. The word count does not matter. What matters is how well you can explain yourself quickly. Prove your English comprehension skills and your ability to discuss in everyday English terms. Keep it short due to the time constraint. That is what matters to the examiner when he is reviewing and scoring your essay. As long as you write between 250-300 words, you will stand a good chance of passing the test, provided your discussion is on point.

Writing Feedback / The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. [2]

Good work. However, since there are 2 images involved, you should have used the 4 paragraph presentation. That way your second paragraph would not have been as long as it is in this presentation. You could have better balanced the discussion on the page and lessened the stress of the reader who would have a difficult time keeping track of the discussion presentation in that long paragraph. Paragraphs that carry too much information tend to be confusing to the reader. It affects the clarity of the presentation and minimizes the ability of the reader to take note of important points in the discussion. While the essay is good overall, it will lose some points in the C+C section due to the uneven paragraph length.

Grammar, Usage / THIS SENTENCE IS CORRECT, ISN'T IT? ANOTHER WAY TO REWRITE? [2]

The sentence is incorrectly written. The subject-verb agreement / placement is not correct. The sentence structure is also not correct. You have the start of the second sentence in lowercase when that should be in uppercase. The thought that can be identified by the reader, but it will take about 2 readings for an English Native Language speaker / reader to understand what you are trying to say.

A better way to have written this sentence would have been:

1. Air pollutiion may become more serious over time as vehicles continously emit smoke into the air.
2. As vehicles continously emit smoke into the air, over time, air pollution becomes a more serious problem.

Writing Feedback / Overpopulation is the world's most serious environmental problem. [2]

Your paraphrasing was off to a good start. The basis for the succeeding discussions were also well established. However, the succeeding reasoning paragraphs were problematic, confusing, and sometimes, too far from the original topic for the discussion. These are the reasons that you will lose heavy points in the final scoring consideration.

Reasons to be discussed that support your idea that overpopulation is not the most serious environmental problem should be presented in both discussion paragraphs. It will help your overall coherence and cohesiveness score when you focus your discussion on overpopulation and its perceived causes as the most serious problem. For example:

1. Overpopulation does not cause a lack of food supply.
2. Overpopulation is not always the result of more pregnancies and birth, it could also be caused by over migration.

These 2 discussion reasons do not change the basis for discussion in the presentation. The root subject is still overpopulation. The reasons why it is not the worst environmental problem is constant. The connection remains between discussion and transition points.

Writing Feedback / [IELTS WRITING TASK 2] EDUCATION - vocational training [2]


This is not an extent essay. You need not over state your opinion. Just keep it simple. You will not gain extra points for the over emphasis. Good work on the restatement and opinion presentation by the way. It is coherent and cohesive. You should get a good preliminary score for this paragraph.

The book learning part is not a supporting reason for your opinion so it should not be included in the presentation. Remember that you are supposed to justify your opinion as the correct one. Therefore, you should have taken the 2nd reasoning paragraph and divided it into 2 paragraphs instead. You will only receive a score for the supporting explanation paragraphs. When you alter the reasoning, the examiner will deem the essay under developed and give it a lower score.

Writing Feedback / [IELTS WRITING TASK 2] More and more students at university today are not chosing to study science [5]


They do not need to enjoy studying science. They are not choosing to study science. Those are 2 different and unrelated discussion points. You have changed the focus of the discussion in a manner that will negatively affect your TA score. Your failure to respond to the questions in a manner that creates a proper thesis sentence will also result in your lack of a properly developed and presented restatement + opinion presentation. This problems will result in a reduced preliminary Task Accuracy score.

The outcome of the lack of science graduates does not match your discussion paragraph. You are discussing business when Science is mostly related to medicine, computers, or other tech fields. You veered off the discussion path here and will not receive a score for this presentation. Always relate the discussion to the given focus points. It is unfortunate that you made these errors in an otherwise good effort piece of essay writing. You need to make sure you meet those standards next time.

Writing Feedback / The chart below show reasons why Americans travelled and the pie chart what problems concerned them [2]

There is an immediate problem to be found in the summary overview presentation. The first, is that you wrote the explanation using a run-on sentence when you should have used 2 stand alone sentence to reference the separate images and content. The second, is the lack of punctuation usage at the end of the paragraph, leaving an open sentence in the presentation. Both errors will result in GRA deductions in the preliminary scoring section.


Wrong word usage. Use the plural form, statistics. You are dealing with more than one information reference point here.

When writing the trending statement for 2 different images, provide clarity to the reader. You need to separate the information presentation by identifying which type of image is associated with the given information. Otherwise, the presentation becomes confusing for the reader, resulting in further GRA deductions.

Writing Feedback / Online games should be banned. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Justify your answer. [3]

Good work on the prompt restatement. However, you are not using everyday English words that the examiner would appreciate seeing in your essay. While I understand why you would want to show off your advanced English vocabulary, the examiner is actually more interested in how you would explain yourself to a lay person, an ordinary person who speaks normal English, without going high brow since the discussion does not need that sort of word usage. This is just an everyday discussion presentation.

You cannot give an opinion and then switch your discussion to a comparative discussion. The instruction for this essay is for you to present a single opinion, with 2 justifications in the reasoning paragraphs. When you contradict yourself, the examiner will deduct points for lack of opinion clarity and also, he will not score the unrelated discussion paragraph. So you will lose word count consideration and also receive deductions for not writing 250 words minimum.

Writing Feedback / SHOULD SCHOOL CHILDREN BE GIVEN HOMEWORK (OPINION)? [2]

What do you think about homework? Do you see it as a necessary part of learning? Why did you not present an opinion of your own in the last part of the prompt restatement? The missing opinion actually harmed your writing because the examiner does not know what you think about the subject you were given to discuss. When the opinion and thesis statement is missing, he cannot give you a task accuracy score based on the relevance of your opinion to the given discussion.

As a single opinion essay, the examiner is looking for your ability to explain your personal opinion in a manner that would show how well you understood the topic and your reasoning considerations. The writing format is not proper for the given prompt. It will pull down your Task Accuracy score and in the process, affect your overall final score. The examiner does not want to search for your opinion, he needs that presented beforehand. The rest of the essay should flow from there.

Writing Feedback / Nowadays, mobile phones and internet have become increasingly important in people's social life [2]

The advantages presentation is far better than the disadvantages discussion. You clearly have a better idea of how to explain the benefits of mobile phones and internet connectivity because you have the personal experience to fall back on in the explanation. The same cannot be said for the disadvantages paragraph. The ideas presented are not fully developed. The explanations are too short to be as believable as the advantages presentation. Your reliance on presenting several pieces of information, without really developing those topics and explanations are what led to the lack of connectivity and understandability of that paragraph. Next time, focus on developing connected reasons and explanations for a more developed paragraph.

Writing Feedback / The graph below show the number of overseas tourist to three paricular areas [2]

The task is to complete a simple analysis of the given image. That should be completed within 200 words / 20 minutes, which ever comes first. You cannot write an almost task 2 length essay for this presentation. You will not be able to complete the presentation during the actual test. It is important that you learn to write quickly and coherently within the given time frame and word allowance because of the time pressure factor. I cannot properly assess your writing in this instance because you over wrote the essay. It is not an accurate representation of the kind of writing that you can present during the actual test. You should write another essay, one that is more in tune with the writing recommendations for a task 1 essay the post that new essay for review in this forum.

Writing Feedback / Essay about behavior in schools is getting worse. [2]


Do not refer to a particular educational level in your restatement. This was not indicated in the original prompt. Doing so will change the discussion focus and result in accuracy deductions for your first paragraph.


What emergency problem? This is another inaccurate restatement in your presentation. Perhaps you meant it is an emerging problem? Which is totally different from an emergency. Your word usage is obviously wrong, regardless of which word you actually wanted to use so you can expect LR deductions and GRA deductions for your writing errors.

The essay will not get a passing score because you only discussed one aspect of the 2 discussion points. What happened to the solutions presentation? These solutions cannot be limited to just one liners or simple explanation references in the paragraph. You need to build on that presentation in the same manner as the reasons presentation.

Writing Feedback / In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books [3]

Good work on presenting the basis subjects for the discussion in your restatement and thesis section. However, you wrote the basis as a run-on sentence. It should have been separated into 2 topic sentences for clarity. Never write long sentences with merged ideas in a task 2 essay. You will end up getting huge deductions in the GRA score.

Overall, the writing uses simple English words, which limited your LR errors. You have clear thought presentations in every paragraph. The discussions are concise and the transition is acceptable. You have shown care in writing and developing your reasoning paragraphs. These will serve you well when the sectional and overall scoring is provided for your essay. It will get a passing score. Just improve upon your writing at this point. You are on the right track.

Writing Feedback / Task: In the past lecture was the traditional method of teaching a large number of students [2]


It is not necessary to indicate how the essay will be written. You already made that clear in the prompt restatement. What you should have done was presented a topic basis for the advantage and disadvantage that you plan to further develop in the later paragraphs. Do not forget that you need to provide your opinion, at least based on the writing instruction, in general form. In this case, it is not an opinion you are being asked to give. You just have to give an idea of how you will be discussing the topic. That way you will meet the TA writer's opinion section requirement.

Remember to edit your work before submission to avoid unnecessary deductions. In this case, you did not capitalize a certain first word of a paragraph, which will result in a minimal GRA deduction in terms of writing rules, plus additional writing deductions for incorrect word usage and the like.

Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: Some people think that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. [2]


You are missing the personal opinion. The first paragraph is therefore incomplete. You cannot receive full scoring considerations in this case. Review the writing instructions at all times. Check the instructions against your content. What is missing? Does your response align with the writing instructions? Make sure that you accurately meet the writing requirements. Specially in the TA section. Never miss a scoring consideration like you did here. Your preliminary score will suffer for it.


You cannot state your personal opinion as a part of the conclusion. This must be included in the reasoning paragraphs because the conclusion is meant to only wrap up the discussion presentation. Nothing more. So your essay could receive a failing mark because you did not follow the writing instructions.

Writing Feedback / Historical information of residential areas is fascinatedly looked for by recent inhabitants [2]


There is no argument referenced in this discussion. An idea or public opinion was presented for discussion. Examiners will deduct points each time you exaggerate the content of your prompt restatement because it alters the thought behind the original topic presentation. Avoid such over statements going forward. It affects the task accuracy statement.


Whose satisfaction? The subject of the sentence is missing although the verb is there.


Why is this important? The thesis statement is incomplete. Do not just repeat the information provided for the writing. You have to offer the examiner an preview into the succeeding paragraph topics.


Wrong timeframe. So you are saying they are interested only in properties no longer in their possession? That is not the implication of the original writing instruction.

These are the preliminary observations of the errors in your writing. The most common errors are always made in the promot restatement +writer's opinion section. Start improving at this point for now.

Writing Feedback / Task 1 (barchart): Percentage of Canadians which gave money to charitable organisations by age [2]

The trending statement is too over emphasized. You do not need to present the middle part. The trend is based only on the highs and lows, ups and downs of the given data. So focus on those aspects only. That should not be more than 1-2 sentences. The rest of the information should be folded into the actual reporting paragraphs.

Be careful when writing your paragraphs. Aim for balance in sentence presentation. Stick to a minimum of 2 sentences per paragraph, even if it is presented in the last paragraph. Pay attention to your punctuation usage. You forgot to close the sentence in the last paragraph. You have to make sure you meet the GRA requirements when it comes to that aspect. You do not want to receive technical deductions in the final score.

Writing Feedback / The questions received by the tourist information office by letter or email, and by telephone [2]

I am not sure if you can complete this essay within 20 minutes. You wrote almost enough words for a task 2 essay, which takes 40 minutes to write. You will more than likely not be able to write this many words within 20 minutes. I understand you wanted to deliver a complete analysis but, for a task 1 essay, a simple and quick analysis will gain you a better score than a wordy presentation. This is like a quick essay quiz in an actual academic setting. How fast can you write if you only have 10 minutes to explain yourself in writing before the class ends? It appears you are not ready for that yet. Not based on this writing. Your analysis is good, but over presented.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 - The use of water by four different countries (%) [3]

The summary is incomplete. The sector divisions should be listed to help add clarity to the references in the trending statement. Thes should be mentioned separately, before the same mentions in the trending statement. Yes, it may seem repetitive, but that is how the best outlines for the task 1 essays are designed. The summary is too important to leave to chance. It is a large percentage of your final score. The varying measurement presentation is good and should help boost your score. However, in the final paragraph, you did not cover all of the countries in the report so that was not a very informative presentation. You should have used at least 4 sentences to make that a better source of information.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 ACADEMIC - TOPIC: EDUCATION; In the modern world, schools are no longer necessary [2]

The first sentence of your prompt restatement is unnecessary. You need to be more focused on presenting the actual information in the first paragraph. In your current presentation, The second sentence is more applicable to the paraphrasing needs. Do not open the paragraph with unrelated content. Unrelated content is any information that is not a part of the original presentation. Those sentences will result in task accuracy deductions on your part. Such demerits will make it more difficult for you to achieve a passing score later on. Your defense is weak. Your personal opinion is not properly developed. You cannot defend the opposing side in a discussion where you were asked to clearly state your opinion and why your opinion is the correct one. Your opposition to your own belief will result in a low scoring essay. Mostly because you proved you do not support your own belief enough to convince the reader that your opinion is the best one.

Writing Feedback / Write essay about consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007 [2]

Always present a complete summary. Your information is good, but lacking one vital piece of information. You did not list the start and end years of the measurement. That time frame is integral to the clarity of the summarized presentation and also, a better understanding of your trending statement.


Since you are offering specific information in this part, it should be a separate anlytical paragraph already. Make sure you can identify when the trending statement has ended and the analysis reporting has begun in future essays. The minute you mention any specific information, the year, the measurement, or anything similar, you are no longer writing a trending statement. You are already reporting and analysing the essay.

Writing Feedback / Newspapers, books? Internet offers people satisfying methods to get unlimited access to information [2]

Try to limit the presentation to 300 words. Keep track of how many words you can actually write within 40 minutes. Then try to stay within that word range for all the essays you will be writing going forward. That way you will not have to think about keeping track of time and word number during the actual test. Remember that you need to use less words to better explain yourself in a Task 2 essay. I noticed that you focused too much on the word count that you did not realize that your sentences were not always coherent because of it. Most of the time, your sentences lack proper information and clear thoughts / idea presentations. The problem with the C+C of the essay will be the main cause of deductions in score. Aside from that, you may not complete the writing of this essay during the actual test due to the over writing you did. Once an essay does not have a proper concluding summary, it will get an automatic failing grade.

Writing Feedback / A topic of interest regarding the money for building the roads rather than new railways [2]

The prompt for this essay asks you to discuss "To what extent do you agree or disagree?" You are not being asked to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the proposed topic. So, based on the incorrect response to the prompt, you will get a failing score as a preliminary task accuracy consideration. You did not align your response to the prompt. It is in the incorrect format. So even though you did an acceptable job in restating the prompt, the incorrect writer's opinion will result in a failing portion for the score. Now, you will be given points for all of the discussion you provided and the language use and sentence clarity but, these will not be enough to result in a passing score for you in this test.

Writing Feedback / Advertising has become an inevitable part of our lives. [2]

You have used an incorrect discussion format in this instance. Since you opted to use the 3 opinion discussion method, you should have had 2 public opinion explanations prior to your personal opinion paragraph. The reason being that the instruction is to discuss both opinions THEN present your own discussion points. You did not follow that format response in this presentation. Therefore, you will only be scored on 2 out of 3 discussion points. This will lead to a conclusion that your essay is under developed and as such, requires more explanation before it can achieve a passing score. You might be able to get a close to passing score or even a low passing score with this writing, but it will not achieve full scoring consideration because of the lack of proper discussion development.

Writing Feedback / Consumers being overwhelmed with commercial advertisements since fierce competition among companies [2]

The promot restatement is acceptable but, the writer's opinion is not. You did not directly respond to the extent questions, nor did you offer a proper thesis statement for the related solutions. As such, this preliminary paragraph may not receive a preliminary passing score. This will be a problem for you in the later scoring considerations. You did not fully develop a correct reference statement.


Do not use modern English slang when writing academic essays. Always use the complete and formal word. You could lose points in the GRA and LR section when you use word short cuts unnecessarily.

The essay will not receive a passing score due to the incomplete discussion presentation. You did not address the main question in the discussion which is to what extent the influence... This should come from your personal opinion and be addressed as such in one of the 2 reasoning paragraphs.

Writing Feedback / A controversial topic if governments should invest on railways rather than on roads [2]

The first sentence is unclear in reference. What is people's repair? It is a reference that does not connect with the original topic nor does it reference a clue as to what the new presentation will be about.


The examiner does not care what you will do in the essay. What he wants to know about is the basis of your opinion in short form, for building upon in the 2 reasoning paragraphs. Failure properly provide a thesis statement in the restatement + writer's opinion will result in a failing score for that particular paragraph. Since that is a large percentage of the final score, you must do well in that section if you are to get a good overall passing score.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1 the number of people eating more than 5 portions of vegetables and fish per day [2]

The first major deductions to this essay will be applied to the GRA score. Please note that you are expected to follow the proper way of writing English sentences. That means, each starting word of a new sentence is always capitalized regardless of whether it is a proper noun, verb, or what have you. Keyboards do not automatically capitalize that letter during the actual test since you are being tested for grammar knowledge and compliance. You also did not capitalize nouns in the sentences such as English. It appears that you have a weak understanding of the English grammar rules or, you chose to ignore those rules when writing this practice test. This is actually a failing type of writing because of the GRA errors.

Writing Feedback / Students desire to study other courses beside their majors [2]

The prompt restatement is a bit confusing. If there are only some students claiming something, then why is there an argument with the other party? It does not make sense to claim an argument unless both parties are in disagreement. That is not clear in the essay. The reference should have been framed as a disagreement for clarity in the restatement. Your opinion is also not properly supported by simple reasoning presentations in the paragraph so your opinion is not fully developed as a simple explanation.

As far as defending your reason, you are weak in that aspect because you did not fully support your opinion. You used the first paragraph to justify the opposing opinion, which means, you are not convinced by your own opinion. The reviewer will score this as an under developed essay. Next time, defend only your opinion over 2 paragraphs.

Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS Task 2: These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries [2]

While I do commend your effort in writing this essay, and you did do a good job in writing it, this is not the kind of essay that would get you the best score in an actual test. You could have used a better writing format to respond to the question. It is important to use a comprehensive, concise, and coherent discussion presentation in the reasoning paragraphs to aid in increasing your score.

Since this is a comparative analysis response essay, it would be better if you discuss the advantages and disadvantages based on exactly that. Use an advantage, then explain its disadvantage in one paragraph. Then, in the next paragraph, take a disadvantage then explain the advantage. That is the response format that best suits, and always gains the highest marks for this type of discussion format.

Writing Feedback / The number of magazines sold per person [2]


You should have taken the time to identify how the countries were enumerated in the presentation. That way the reader would not have been confused by your country references in the trending statement. Listing the countries is important in the summary because it establishes the listing presentation for the succeeding paragraphs.


Since 2007 has already passed and there is no reference in the image to that year being used for projected sales, you should not make that assumption in the given presentation. You are not allowed to alter the given informationf or any reason. So if you did this to create an interesting presentation, you ended up harming your final score instead. Do not alter or infer anything other than the contained information.

Writing Feedback / The two maps below describe a number of alterations which took place on a small offshore island [2]


You should not be referring to the positioning of the images on the screen. The examiner is assumed to not have access to the image so you cannot make any statements that would require him to look directly at the image for information confirmation.


This is not a task 2 essay. You will be given demerits for presenting a personal assumption in the presentation. You cannot make this a personal report because it is supposed to be an unbias analysis of the given information. Avoid such a reference going forward.

I like how you presented your trending statement at the end of the report. It creatively summed up all of the information that you previously provided into a final outcome presentation. Good work!

Writing Feedback / Traffic and accommodation problems increasing, the government encourage some businesses move rural [2]


This is an advantage and disadvantage comparison essay. When writing such an essay, you are not asked to give an opinion about the given topic. Rather, you are simply to provide a comparison of perceived advantages and disadvantages, allowing the reader to come to their opinion or conclusion regarding the topic at the end of the essay. Your writer opinion score for this section will instead come from the reasons you will provide for the reasoning paragraphs.


You cannot argue in this essay for the aforementioned reasons. Such statements alter the original discussion instruction because it creates a single opinion discussion format. That is a prompt altertation that would be considered an incorrect response format, thus givign your essay an automatic failing score.