Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed [2]

The essay starts off strong with a very good prompt restatement, a clear writer's opinion, and an excellent thesis statement. However, the presentation encounters problems when it gets to the reasoning paragraphs. The discussion format becomes incorrect.

As this is a single opinion essay, the examiner will score only the paragraphs that align in reasoning with your presented writer's opinion and thesis statement. Any irrelevant paragraphs, those that do not support he discussion, not be considered nor given a score. Therefore, it is important that you keep your discussion aligned to the single opinion defense format.

When a comparison essay is written in place of a single opinion, the examiner will reduce the score due to the non applicable paragraph and in the process, lacking word count. That means the essay will not receive passing marks.

Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2 - These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born [2]

The word count is within an acceptable number. However, the essay itself is not well written nor developed. The prompt paraphrase and writer's opinion is not in an acceptable paragraph form as it is a run on sentence. There should be at least 3 stand alone sentences in that paragraph comprised of:

1. Restatement
2. Writer's opinion
3. Reason for the writer's opinion

Reading the body paragraphs, I have to say that the idea presentations are not properly executed. The sentences are often run-on or merely stating information without developing the explanation. These problems exist for most of the paragraphs which will lead the essay to be scored based upon an under developed idea presentation. It is a failing score presentation.

Writing Feedback / Essay about The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites [2]

I will admit that you have met the word count requirement of this essay task. However, having met the word count and actually having an essay that follows the best scoring format are 2 different things. While your word count will prevent deductions based on having less than the minimum number of words written, the fact that you are not writing in proper paragraphs will result in deductions for the C+C and GRA scores.

A task 1 essay requires a minimum of 3 sentences per paragraph in order to be accepted as a completely developed discussion. You are writing in run-on sentence forms here. These long sentences are often unclear and do not follow the conventional sentence structures. These sentences will receive deductions and the incorrect paragraph formatting will receive even more deductions in terms of TA considerations. This is a failing score essay.

Writing Feedback / [WRITING TASK 1] Percentages of tourists who used different types of transportation when traveling [2]

The location of the chart is not important to the reader. Why? The reader is assumed to not have any access to the image you were provided with. So there is no sense in indicating the location of the image. That is irrelevant to the report. Just report on the information directly without any extra useless information.


You do not have to ask the reader to do this. It your job to report accurately on the information in a manner that the reader can understand. They do not have to be instructed to remember anything. That is not their job. Their job is simply to understand the report you are giving them.

The essay is too long. You are writing ineffective, difficult to read, and over informed task 1 essay. You may not get a passing score with this kind of writing.

Graduate / Personal Statement for Master Application at China University XJTU [2]

I am confused. Are you applying for admission to the university? If so, then there should not be any mention of the scholarship request in the personal statement. The scholarship request should be addressed in a different and more appropriate essay. Reviewers who see pleadings for scholarships in the personal statement frown upon such practices and tend to ignore the applicant at that point.

Being a masters degree student means your personal statement should be based on more relevant and recent undertakings. It should not be referring to your biography stemming from childhood. You are losing focus. The reviewer will not pay much attention to the sob stories you are telling in your essay because those are childhood experiences that no longer have any bearing on who you are today. Go for more recent information about yourself. Discuss yourself as an adult, rather than going from childhood to adult and back.

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1 TEST 1 CAMBRIDGE 17 (TOWN OF NORBITON) [2]

The image is over analyzed. You need to write only up to 200 words for this task otherwise you will cut into the writing time of your task 2 essay. It is easy to overwrite the task when you do not practice writing using a timer. You have to use a timer in this case because you are writing a time sensitive task. You need to know exactly hoe many words you can write during the actual test inclusive of editing and finalization time for the writing. This essay shows signs of not being proof read or edited for content. There are grammatical and sentence structure errors that were not corrected before the submission of this work. You should be able to say things simply in an essay of this sort. Keep it concise.

Letters / Motivational essay to study a bachelor degree at the Copenhaguen Business School [2]

Please edit the beginning of your essay. You should be focusing only on the motivational aspect of your interest in enrolling in the school. You should not be presenting a personal biography to the reviewer. He will overlook that aspect as it is not part of the motivational consideration aspect. The story of you working as a waiter, that will not be considered either. When a motivational letter is written, it is done so with the understanding that you have a deep personal connection with the course that you wish to enroll in. That you have some sort of advocacy for the career path you have chosen that you wish to fulfill through the acquiring of advanced studies and training. This particular piece of writing does not meet those expectations. It should be written over from the start, using the correct perspective and relevant information.

Writing Feedback / Essay about interview in most large companies [3]

There is absolutely no way that this essay will receive a passing score int he actual test. You only have 40 minutes to complete your writing. The time allotment does not give any time to write a more than 500 word essay. You will fail the test automatically because you will have an open ended presentation. Remember that you have 1 hour for the written tasks. 20 minutes for the first task, 40 for the 2nd. However, you will not have a timer available to you during the test. You have to time yourself. Divide the writing time accordingly between the 2 tasks. Failure to properly allot writing time will result in an incomplete presentation, leading to a failing score. There is no way you can conclude a 500 word essay in 40 minutes. Not when you even have to review, revise, proofread, edit, and finalize the content within 40 minutes.

Scholarship / GKS - Personal statement /psychology/ [2]

I am confused by this application essay. Are you applying for the U or G program? It appears you already have a diploma in psychology, but you are applying to Korea as an undergraduate again? Is that what you are saying? Also, are you applying under the university track? Not the embassy track? Information requirements for the personal statement under the university track is different from the embassy track. Your essay seems more geared towards the embassy track. Your university reference is weak and really unimpressive. It appears to me that you have accidentally combined the 2 application channels in this essay. You need to clarify which track you really want to use. The overall information is actually unimpressive. It is ordinary at best and lacks any stand out academic or professional information that could help catch the attention of the reviewer.

Writing Feedback / Essay about the waste collection by recycling centre - writing ielts task1 [3]

While the information stated in the report is correct and the word count was met, the essay will encounter heavy deductions in the area of formatting and response presentation. Why? The task 1 essay must be presented over a series of 3 paragraphs. Stand alone paragraphs should analyze and report on different aspects of the bar graph. This was not properly accomplished in this task. It is too compressed for the reader. It comes across as confusing to read and difficult to follow. It will affect both the C+C and GRA scores in the end. Heavy deductions in those sections, plus the formatting problem, will result in an essay that can only receive a failing score.

Writing Feedback / Visitors that traveled to five countries in four years - IELTS [2]

The summary overview is incomplete and will receive a failing score. The summary of information should be represented in at least 2 sentences. The trending statement is also missing from the first paragraph. So the required short form information is not present. It will only receive a partial not passing paragraph score because of the missing elements.

You cannot refer to "I" in the task 1 essays. That is because the writer must be impartial with regards to information presentation. As such, you should have used either 3rd person pronouns or no pronouns at all. You cannot offer any information coming from a personal point of view in an analytical reporting essay. The task 1 essay must carry a neutral tone at all times.

Writing Feedback / Some people think that children perform better in a single-sex school [3]

The essay is based upon the writing instruction, " To what extent do you agree or disagree?" This thesis foundation question was not responded to in the first paragraph. Therefore, the writer's opinion will not be given a score. The preliminary TA score will be based on an irrelevant response, which will lead to a failing starter score. It will be difficult for you to recover from this particular error in response writing. As the writing is irrelevant to the prompt provided, the examiner will still award points for the response. However, the essay will not receive high marks since it is not aligned with the expected response format. It is more than likely that this essay will fail in an actual setting.

Writing Feedback / Hosting international events - IELTS writing task 2 [2]

The first thing I noticed about this writing was that you only wrote 256 words. I feel that is not enough to properly highlight your written skills based on the scoring considerations. The examiners tend to view more favorably on essay between 275 and 300 words long. Please try to write a longer essay to merit a better score in the future.

Reading the prompt paraphrase and writer's opinion, I have to say that I am disappointed as you did not paraphrase the original prompt properly. The original data is not accurately represented. You have included information that belong in the body of the discussion, not in the paraphrasing section. There is also no thesis statement provided. Therefore, The TA score will be a failing one since the paraphrase is not related to the original discussion. This means, based on the word count, and incorrect paraphrasing, the essay is already going to get a final failing score. There are also several other problems existing in the essay but the ones I stated are the reasons why the essay will immediately receive a failing score.

Writing Feedback / Consumption of processed food in Australia - Ielts writing task 1 [2]


Was there a mention of the inclusive years for this time frame? For accuracy purposes, the year coverage should be mentioned as the starting year and end year.


Incorrect sentence structure. You need to use 2 trending sentence explanations. One explanation for the previous trend, the other for the expected or upcoming trend. Do not use a run-on, long, or compressed sentence. It confuses the reader and results in GRA along with C+C deductions for the paragraph.


What happens leading into 2025? Your analysis is incomplete. The information covers a 25 year period.

As for the word count, you more than met the qualifier, but you did not develop the discussion strongly enough to warrant a higher scoring consideration all around. Try to explain more. You can write up to 200 words for this purpose.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 It is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centre [3]


This does not offer a measured response. It shows that you do not have a clear opinion to support instead. A measured response is ideally presented as:

- I strongly...
- I emphatically...
- I wholeheartedly...

To name but a few measured response phrases that can be used to show that you have a solid opinion, rather than an uncertain point of view. An uncertain point of view will result in an automatically failing TA score, making it impossible for you to pass the test based on the remaining scoring considerations.


This is your proper opinion presentation. It cannot be presented in the conclusion. Doing so will result in an automatically failed essay score because the requirements of the concluding summary were not followed in the final paragraph.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1 The graphs below show the cinema attendance in Australia and the average cinema [3]

Your summary overview should have a shortened version of both the graph and table information. The same goes for the trending statement. There should be 2 of everything in the presentation, within a properly written, cohesive presentation. Learn to properly use connecting words and phrases for this purpose. Doing so will help you present all of the information in the paragraph in a related form.

There is never too much information in an image. There is only an incorrect way of framing the presentation. Always bear in mind that you are allowed to write up to 5 sentences per paragraph for your explanation. 5 idea and explanation based sentences, not run on or simply long sentences. That is how you can best address all of the information provided in each image. Fully utilize your sentence allowance per paragraph.

Undergraduate / Colors - Subject of Personal Importance -- Scholarship essay [3]

The art aspect of the presentation has forced you to deviate from the actual information requirement. While this is an artistic discussion, it fails to focus on a singular person, instance, or activity as required by the reviewer. You are too focused on the colors for it to actually depict an aspect of direct relation to you. Having already established that your art is not good enough tells me that you know you should not be writing about this topic for this prompt. You have to discuss an event, person, or activity that served as a character building exercise or inspiration point for you. Right now, the essay is confusing to follow. It is too roundabout in discussion when what you need is a direct to the point presentation.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 2 correction - Ragonean [2]

Thank you for letting me know that you are self-studying for the test. I will make sure to help you as best as I can since there is no one else helping you with your preparations.

Unfortunately, your essay is too long to actually be written within the 40 minute time frame. You need to write no more than 300 words for this task. A long essay opens you up to more grammatical and technical errors in your writing. Keeping it short allows you to have some extra time to review and edit your paper. The quality of your thought as quickly presented is more important than the word count. Short essay = less mistakes. I'll provide you with a more comprehensive review with your next essay. The one that better meets the word count requirement for a 40 minute writing task.

Scholarship / Masters of science in Agriculture and food security [2]

You need to revise this essay. There should be 2 university choices presented. Either 2 universities with the same masters course or 2 different courses with different targets for you as a student and professional. While you have clearly explained your skills and how you plan to use the educational improvement in your country, that is not the focal point of this essay. What you have to do is show that you have chosen universities that will help support your development as a professional through its educational programs and training facilities. This must be done twice in the essay. That is because the reviewer would like to consider your explanation in relation to your actual academic qualifications and the university student considerations.

Writing Feedback / Unrestricted fresh water usage - IELTS task 2 [2]


There is no need to indicate this part. You already stated that this is your opinion. It is automatically understood that you will be discussing this opinion in the essay.


+S for the plural form.


You are over discussing the topic. You need to fully explain only one reason in support of the point of view. Creating too many discussion points creates a longer, but not necessarily well scoring essay. When an idea is under developed or little explained, it causes GRA deductions instead.

Sadly, the main reason this essay will fail is because you used your personal opinion as the concluding statement. That is unacceptable as the concluding section is used only to summarize the previous discussion points. Your personal opinion should be a stand alone 3rd paragraph instead. Due to the lack of a proper concluding summary, the essay will automatically receive a failing score.

Research Papers / The Advantages and Disadvantages of Nuclear Energy [2]

The research paper had a very clear start and offered an exciting promise for the information to be presented. Then, as the presentation progressed, it became apparent that you are merely mimicking what the information you found stated. What then became lacking in the presentation is a balanced comparison and contrasting consideration stemming from your opinion as the writer of the paper. You tend to just post the citation, then leave it at that. The reader becomes uneasy later on as we just keep reading the citations with little to no explanations or opinions coming from you. That creates an imbalance in the presentation and leaves the essay under developed in terms of the advantages and disadvantages discussion.

Writing Feedback / The Crucial Role of School in Shaping Lives [2]

As an essay writing guide or outline, I would have to say that this bullet listing works well. It outlines the discussion points you wish to highlight and also effectively reminds you to stay on track with each paragraph discussion or research information presentation. This practice will help you develop a well informed presentation to your reader. You cannot limit yourself to just the guide suggestions you have provided though. You must extend these discussions with more information and effective reasoning to allow the paragraph and research paper to achieve an effectiveness when it comes to promoting your opinion and reasons as believable. Go ahead and use this as your writing guide. It works well for the purpose you developed it for.

Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2 - Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning... [2]


You are not providing a thesis statement as required in this paragraph. You must provide the reason for your opinion as required by the guide question. It is not going to be good for the preliminary score of this paragraph to have a missing element in the response as it will result in a score deduction for that section. In relation to this, you need to extend your concluding summary by another sentence to meet the scoring requirement for that section. The run on sentence will again, be a score reduction on your part. Consider extending your reasoning paragraphs as well. You have written only 250 words, which is the minimum word count, but will not help to increase the overall score, per section. Aim for 275 to 300 words next time.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Wrinting Tast1: The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in... [2]

You need to create a better summary overview. Follow the required 3-5 sentence format for that section to achieve a good GRA score. Your current version will receive reduced GRA and C+C scores due to the run-on sentence presentation. It is also important that you do not misidentify the image that was provided for the report and analysis. This is not a chart, it is, to be specific, a line graph. Your current overview is weak and will not receive a passing score.

Your inability to write singular ideas in complete sentences will be the main reason that you will fail the task 1 test. That is because you are unable to create cohesive and coherent sentences / paragraphs. Such a mistake in thought presentation will fail your C+C and GRA scores.

Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2: personal info online [2]

The prompt restatement is barely related to the original prompt. This will be judged to be unrelated to the original discussion and receive a failing score for the paragraph. The writer's opinion does not respond correctly to the given question. The score for that section will again, be a failing one since it does not respond in the correct format. The essay will start with a failing score, meaning it will not get a passing score in the overall consideration.


There is no need for this stand alone paragraph. All that is required is a properly worded paraphrase and opinion statement. This stand alone sentence will not receive a scoring consideration.

The discussion paragraphs do not relate to social media networks or online banking. While a low score will be provided for a somewhat related discussion, it will not be high enough to result in a final passing score.

Writing Feedback / Tet holiday is believe to be the most favourite one among Vietnamese people [2]

As an English writing exercise, I appreciate the efforts you have placed into the writing of this short essay. Reading this from the point of view of a teacher, I can see the areas where you need further improvement such as adverb and verb usage, word usage, and sentence formation. Being a native English speaker, I will get a little bit frustrated while reading this because of the confusion that your weak English writing areas causes in the presentation. It is important that you pay attention to your vocabulary in particular because that is where your biggest writing problem can be found. For example:


This sentence was doing just fine until you got to the highlighted section. What is a parallel sentence? That is a confusing reference. Perhaps it is translated to English from your vernacular in this form, but it does not make any sense to a native English speaker. What exactly were you trying to say? You tried to use an advanced sentence presentation, but then failed to actually address a clear idea, affecting the coherence of the overall sentence.

Scholarship / Freight forwarder - Why did you choose proposed course and institution - AAS [2]

The reviewer is not interested in the story of corruption in your country. He is interested in the reasons why you chose specific courses at specific universities in Australia. Rather than being so informative about the corruption in your country as you did in this essay, you should instead, be connecting the corruption and its resolution to your university course and academic institution choice. That way you use the information in a more creative and acceptable manner for the reviewer to consider. Opt to deliver a more insightful consideration of course and university choices. Those discussions are quite unimpressive in this presentation. It does not contain any remarkable reasons for your decision to study in Australia.

Writing Feedback / 3. The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked [2]

The summary overview and trending statement are clear and quite strong in this case. The comprehensive presentation of these 2 discussion points in a clearly connected paragraph means the exam taker has a good grasp of the English language. There is a slight problem that will lower the score of this essay though. The fact that the image was only identified as a graph, without the specific type of graph indicated, leaves the reader confused as to how to imagine the information to be provided in his imagination. This will lead to a lower GRA preliminary consideration due to the confusing nature of that sentence.

Uniformity in the paragraph presentation will also help increase the overall score for this presentation. It is important that you present at least 3 sentences, instead of only 2 in every paragraph. An academic paragraph is composed of at least 3 sentences.

Writing Feedback / Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. [3]

The prompt restatement should be composed of at least 3 sentences. While the first sentence clearly restates the original topic, the writer's opinion, based upon the given guide questions appears to be missing. That means, the essay will receive a failing score consideration for that section. The examiner will not give a score for merely repeating the discussion topics as listed. It does not create a complete restatement and response paragraph for the preliminary TA score.

Do not use sentence fillers as opening statements for your reasoning and effects paragraph. Due to the time constraint placed on completing the task, use subject sentences to open that paragraph instead. A subject will clearly direct the discussion for the paragraph, leading to a much better score in the C+C preliminary section later on.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 2: More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. [4]

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When one is thinking, one is considering all options and uncertain of the correct response. That is why one cannot say "I strongly think". You can "think hard" meaning deep analysis, or you can "Heavily consider" a certain thought, but you cannot "strongly think" as that implies that the writer does not have any solid opinion yet. You have to remember that the Task Accuracy score considers a clear writer's opinion in the preliminary scoring stage. When there are words of uncertainty used, the score for the writer's opinion goes down due to the lack of decisiveness of the writer. He fails to deliver a strong and measured opinion statement at that point.

Undergraduate / NTU Personal Statement Essay - Skills or experiences that are relevant to the programmes applied for [2]

I think there is not enough passion displayed in this essay because of the mix and match approach you took to writing it. There is no clear passion to speak of, because you discussed several work related or training experiences that do not tie in directly with the passion you spoke of in the first paragraph. That passion should have been the basis of everything else you discussed in the essay. A clear direction should have been developed beginning with passions, leading into skills development, and the adversities you overcame while developing your passion and related skills. Anyway, my opinion might be wrong. Since this has already been submitted, there is no sense in delving deeper into the content of the essay. It is all up to the reviewer now.

Scholarship / Why do you select New Zealand? [3]

The response does not offer solid information to the reviewer. You are giving what is called a "non-response". That means you are offering what looks like a proper answer to the question at first glance but, upon repeated reading, there is no actual straightforward information provided by the writer. You have mentioned anything but generic responses to the question that shows a lack of proper consideration for your study choice and destination. Even though this is a character limited response, you must find a way to include specifics that will show how aligned your target educational process and achievements align with the offerings of New Zealand. Be specific. What are the weaknesses of Indonesian education that is a strength for New Zealand? Why do you consider it a strength?

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 2: More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. [4]


You cannot use words of uncertainty in your writer's opinion. If you are not convinced of your point of view, then do not expect the examiner to believe you either. The job of the writer is to convince the reader that his opinion is correct. When you are doubting your own opinion, you will have failed to meet the clear writer's opinion requirement of the TA section.


You are missing the verb "Be" in relation to connecting the subject to the action being stated. You should have caught this error if you have proofread your essay before submitting it for a grade. Your GRA score will receive deductions because of this error. You need to remember that it is not enough to meet the word count. It is important that you meet the word count in a positive scoring manner.

Scholarship / 202x GKS U - Personal Statement (University Track - Physical Therapy) [2]

The first thing I will advise you to do is write a totally new essay. Do not rehash your old information when completing a new application. Improving it will not help because you will still be retaining the old information. Instead, offer up a new essay, indicate that you applied before but did not make the cut. Then proceed to inform the reviewer about the changes that you have made since then that should have helped to make you a more viable candidate for this years application cycle. Remember to work that information into your responses to the guide questions. By the way, since this is a university track application, spend time discussing the reason you chose this university in connection to your desire to study in Korea. That is missing from this presentation.

Undergraduate / Personal statement as a medical scholar undergraduate gks [3]

I hope that you have only shown me a draft of your actual essay. Please tell me that this is not the essay that you plan to submit to the GKS reviewers. This is such a simplistic presentation that it fails to achieve the purpose of the GKS personal statement. Have you reviewed the writing guidelines for the undergraduate applicants? If you have, then it should be clear to you that you have not fully developed this response essay in terms of the information required. While the essay does touch on some aspects of the writing guide, you failed to expand it to an impressive extent. In some instances, you totally miss out on discussion points from the writing guide. The essay needs further and proper information development.

Writing Feedback / Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. [3]

197 words does not meet the minimum word requirement for the Task 2 essay. This sort of presentation would receive an automatic failing score. Why would that happen? The minimum word requirement is 250 words. Meet that number and the essay will not receive percentage deductions for not meeting the minimum word count. when the percentage deduction is applied this early on in the preliminary scoring portion, the achieved score is a failing one. When the additional deductions are applied for the other scoring sections, it becomes impossible for you to achieve a passing score overall. Even if you do well in those sections, the fact that your essay failed 50% of the test already due to the under word count will prevent you from getting a final passing score.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2_ ENVIRONMENT [3]

Good work on the paraphrasing. Bad job on the writer's opinion. The writer's opinion is a TA scoring consideration that is based upon the clarity of the preliminary supporting explanation of the writer's point of view. It is not scored based upon how well you repeat the writing instructions. Although the restatement of the problem is good, the paragraph will receive a failed preliminary score because you did not give a summarized version of your opinion and discussion points.

The essay is overwritten. That is just one aspect of the problem though. There is no proper sentence development presented for simple, compound, and complex sentences. The ideas presented are difficult to understand due to the unclear thought patterns present, reducing the C+C score. This essay might not receive a passing mark in an actual test setting.

Letters / Motivation letter to Germany embassy in computer science for master degree [3]

The motivation letter is very weak. It does not offer the consul any exceptional talents, notable skills, or achievements of note that would help plead your case for a visa. Student visas are normally awarded to those who show a potential to change the field of study he is interested in or, shows an immense talent based upon early accomplishments, prior to formal academic training in computer science. I do not ready any of that sort of information in this presentation. I would not say that this is an impressive presentation. I would call it a forgettable one if any. Achievements and a desire to gain more of these while studying in Germany would help create an enhanced motivational letter.

Scholarship / A leader of people - a short essay on a subject of personal importance to you [2]

The essay has room for improvement. For example, you should have had an expanded discussion regarding how you ended up in the president position when that is not what you applied for. You could have expanded on any leadership skills that you had at the time but did not notice. Yet it went noticed by some and that is why you ended up being offered the highest position instead.

Try to achieve formatting balance in the presentation. A formatting balance is achieved when the paragraphs are long enough to match each other in terms of content and lines in the presentation. It shows a more balanced discussion and allows the reader to learn more about the writer. Try to include more information in your writing next time.

Writing Feedback / Writing task 1: The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours [3]

There are 2 separate images, the reference to the information of the images must be separate also. It is confusing to read the first sentence since it combines information about the images, without an actual reference to each image. The summary overview must clearly state what is in each image because the information refers to different comparison points.

Use less words to provide a summarized analysis of the images. Writing almost 300 words within 20 minutes is next to impossible during the actual test. The ability to quickly state and analyze information is necessary in an English based classroom since short quizzes and recitations are based on that premise. There was no need to use such a wordy analysis in this case.