Holt Educational Consultant
Mar 9, 2021
Research Papers / The Effects of Human Activity on Climate Change (Seeking criticism and main points of weakness) [2]
Remove the in-text citation in the first paragraph. The first paragraph is your thesis paragraph or introduction to the topic so you do not need to refer to cited information at that point. You can integrate that information in a later paragraph. You do not need to have a citation in every paragraph. In fact, that seems to be the main problem with your information presentation.
The paper feels like more than half of it is based simply on in-text citations, cut and paste presentations meant to help you meet a word count requirement more than anything else. There is very little analysis in each paragraph because you are reliant on the information you have found to help create this reference paper. You need to reduce the citations and use more personal analysis in the paragraphs after every citation. The reason for that is that the professor will be looking for your insight and actual learning from the texts that you have been reading, in relation to the discussion you are trying to create.
Remove the in-text citation in the first paragraph. The first paragraph is your thesis paragraph or introduction to the topic so you do not need to refer to cited information at that point. You can integrate that information in a later paragraph. You do not need to have a citation in every paragraph. In fact, that seems to be the main problem with your information presentation.
The paper feels like more than half of it is based simply on in-text citations, cut and paste presentations meant to help you meet a word count requirement more than anything else. There is very little analysis in each paragraph because you are reliant on the information you have found to help create this reference paper. You need to reduce the citations and use more personal analysis in the paragraphs after every citation. The reason for that is that the professor will be looking for your insight and actual learning from the texts that you have been reading, in relation to the discussion you are trying to create.