Holt Educational Consultant
Oct 24, 2016
Undergraduate / Say Yes to Saying No by Melody Jung [6]
There are just some simple revisions to be applied to the essay at this point. It really came out to be a piece of excellent work on your part. Here are the corrections that I suggest you make to the essay.
...placating others instead ofdisappointing ANGERING them...
FOR EXAMPLE, My classmates... better alone butregretfully BEGRUDGINGLY agreed. ..
these groups SESSIONS harmed me more than they IT benefited me...
... else left ME UNCOMFORTABLE AND WITHOUTno room to say "yes" to myself.
Although THE WORD IS so simple, consisting of only ...
Saying "no"has become IS the greatest gift I can COULD possibly give to myself.
.... even whenit is contradictory to others IT CONTRADICTS OTHER OPINIONS...
... the two characteristics I most admire IN A PERSON.
There are just some simple revisions to be applied to the essay at this point. It really came out to be a piece of excellent work on your part. Here are the corrections that I suggest you make to the essay.
...placating others instead of
FOR EXAMPLE, My classmates... better alone but
these group
... else left ME UNCOMFORTABLE AND WITHOUT
Although THE WORD IS so simple, consisting of only ...
Saying "no"
.... even when
... the two characteristics I most admire IN A PERSON.