Writing Feedback / Media give so much attention to celebrities and almost forget about ordinary citizens [NEW]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They shoud spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

Nowadays, media give so much attention to celebrities, such as their lives or relationships. Some people argue, the media should report more about ordinary people lives than celebrities. I tend to disagree with the second statement since I think both of them are important, but celebrities are more important.

Ordinary people lives are common things. They talk about surrounding such as people activity, occupation, or crime that happens in society. Media should show this news, so people can know about what have happened in their local area. As in rush-hours, people will busy with their work or their family, a TV program that shows ordinary people will help people them so much to know a particular thing in their area.

However, celebrities' news are more important. Actors, singer, or footballers are as example of famous person. Their lives were usually reported as an extraordinary thing. It is true since they have unusual live. Only certain people can be like them. Taking a footballer as an example, so many people can play football in this world but not many of them can survive and be the professional one. so many things that we can learn from them such as hard-working, never give up, or polite. Something that really hard to do, but they can do it. It is not easy to tackle obstacle than reach their dream. That is why we have to learn from them and media should be pay more attention for them.

To sum up, I believe that both of news are necessary for people but I think celebrities news more important than ordinary people. Due to they have unusual life that make us inspired.

Writing Feedback / The range of fresh regular teachers in Ontario - back from 2001 to 2007. [5]

The graph below shows information about the reqruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007.

The line graph gives information about the range of fresh regular teachers in Ontario. The information goes back from 2001 to 2007 and covers english and french languange teachers. Overall, a number of teachers who teach english slightly increase over those years, meanwhile french languange teachers went up a lot. Generally, it can be seen that demanded of french languange teachers bigger than english teachers.

The number of english and french languange stood at similiar point. It was about 70 percent in 2001. For the following year, the number fell by 20 percent.

It was started from 2003 to 2007, there was a different trend for each teachers. The number of french teacher slightly rose and hit a high point at 70 percent in 2007. While, teachers who teached english still drop until 2003 to 40 percent. The range of french teachers has remained fairly stable between 2003 and 2004 at 40 percent, but it was plunged to over 20 percent in the end of 2007.

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  Percentage of first-year teachers with regular teaching jobs by year of garduation
  

Writing Feedback / Kids tend to eat what they like or do want they want to do, without considering the adverse effects [5]

Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle.

Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

At present, the way of children live become unhealthy. They tend to eat what they like or do want they want to do without considering the adverse effects. Some people believe that both academic institution and parents have responsibility to solve this problem. I tend to agree with this statement since most of children time is spent in school and home.

Some unhealthy lifestye is refers to dietary or food consumption. Many children choose to eat junk food or unhygiene one. This is responsesibility of schools and parents. For instance, many kind of food that offer in school. In the rest time children will choose attarctive food, which is unhealthy. As the effect children have digestion problem or any diseases. It is one of school responsisbility since they have authority to prevent stall food from selling bad dishes. For parents, they have to pay attention to their children like give them box meal, so they do not need eat extraneous food at school.

Unhealthy life style of children also include in developing sedentary and mundane activity. Nowadays, children have more chance to access computer or internet. Due to this case, they will have same and long activity all day. For instance, a game online or video game. Children usually addicted to this invention because it is so fun and challenging. It is good if they use it in normal time. But it will become dangerous since it is too much. Some illness will follow them. Such as, eyes problem as they have too much time in focus on screen and fewer sleep or sleepless due to fact that play is more enjoyable for them than study even sleep. So, for this time, parents have to control children leisure and their sleeping time.

In conclusion, the way of children life is influenced by people around them especially the academic institution and parents. As the effect, both of them have to endeavor solve this problem since what children do now will give effects in their future.

Writing Feedback / The kind of trouble that society usually have after moving overseas [4]

Writing Task 1: Integration Problems For People Living Abroad

The bar chart gives information about kind of trouble that society usually have when they move to overseas according to ages. Generally, people aged 35-55 years old have sorting out health as the biggest problem they faced out, meanwhile for young people weeding out finances become the first problem, and searching schools for children become the last problem in all ages.

For young people, looking for money is the biggest problem. A problem experienced by just 34 percent. Society with age 35-54 choose money as the second problem although the percentage is bigger than young people which is 35 percent. Only about 23 percent people over 55 have this problem.

Healthcare become the most problem in middle and elderly people have. Both of them have similar value about 36 percent. Old people choose health care as the first problem they have, although less than the other ages.Young people take this problem as the second one.

Looking for schools children is the last and the less problem that people have in every ages. The biggest percentage is had by people aged 35-54 about 19 percent. Then, it is followed by young people and eldery people.

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  The chart shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries.