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|The pursuit of wealth has become the main motivation for many business owners nowadays.
2 - @Rose20 From your introduction, I understood that you are going to present the benefit of pursuing wealth. However,...
Writing FeedbackRose20 - Apr 28, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 29, 2020
|Writing task 1: GRAPH CHART ABOUT OVERSEAS VISITORS
2 - You should write 4 paragraphs The number of foreign tourists to three tourist spots in a European country =>...
Writing Feedbackmtrhuynh - Apr 28, 2020 / bellapham - Apr 29, 2020
|Environmental protection - THE TASK 2 WRITING ESSAY.
2 - You need to avoid run - on sentences. It makes the sentence presentation difficult to understand. You also should...
Writing Feedbackhankpham88 - Apr 28, 2020 / Holt - Apr 28, 2020
|WRITING TASK 1 of IELTS: teaching parental skills to reduce juvenile delinquency
2 - The prompt paraphrase is incomplete. The more accurate way to have close that paragraph was with the first sentence...
Writing Feedbackathonyemilya - Apr 28, 2020 / Holt - Apr 28, 2020
|WRITING TASK 1 of IELTS: Customers at Three Restaurants
5 - Always follow the same format for Task 1 1. Introductory (Paraphrasing plus key point) 2. Overview 3. Body Paragraph...
Writing Feedbackvanessazhang00 - Apr 28, 2020 / TaraAryal23 - May 2, 2020
|IELTS Task 1: Diagram on rainwater processing.
4 - Do not over analyze the essay. Learn how to summarize sets of information in the presentation to avoid being...
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Apr 28, 2020 / Holt - Apr 29, 2020
|Are computers the most vital innovation?
Writing FeedbackAmy Tran - Apr 28, 2020 / Holt - Apr 28, 2020
|Ielts task 2 Problems caused by living in a foreign country speaking another language
Writing FeedbackLearner_english1 - Apr 28, 2020 / Learner_english1 - Apr 28, 2020
|Television advertising should be prohibited for young children.
Writing FeedbackSvucetich - Apr 27, 2020 / vanessazhang00 - Apr 28, 2020
|This modern life has provided more opportunities for women to take a part in many sectors
4 - - Check your spelling carefully: particular skills - I do not see a necessary correlation between your sentences and...
Writing FeedbackFauziasmaa - Apr 27, 2020 / emillia2003 - Apr 29, 2020
|DOSE EXTINCTION IS THE MOST PRESSING ISSUE NOWADAYS
Writing Feedbackemillia2003 - Apr 27, 2020 / emillia2003 - Apr 28, 2020
|Schools should encourage instead of forcing student to learn a foreign language
3 - I am unable to review your essay for content responsiveness, coherence, and cohesiveness due to the lack of the...
Writing Feedbackcderfly - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 28, 2020
|IELTS TASK 1: The chart shows the percentage of renewable energy in total energy supply in Australia
3 - While your essay is over the word count, it has problems with punctuation and grammar presentation that will force...
Writing FeedbackTayla Phan - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 28, 2020
|whether company move to the rural is a good thing?
2 - You should not be offering a personal opinion in an essay that only requires you to discuss the topic...
Writing FeedbackFancy - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|Opinions differ on whether students are afforded the right to learn what they really want
2 - The prompt is asking you to discuss this from 2 public points of view and then from a personal...
Writing Feedbackhuy2108 - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|[ILETS TASK 2] should children get formal study at school as early as possible
Writing Feedbackjeffery0929007 - Apr 27, 2020 / jeffery0929007 - May 2, 2020
|Internet plays an important role in daily life recently
Writing Feedbackminhnguyen810 - Apr 27, 2020 / minhnguyen810 - Apr 27, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: Advantages and Disadvantages of being a celebrity
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Apr 27, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 28, 2020
|Air travel has become more prevalent by virtue of providing flexible options of price to passengers
Writing Feedbacksweetorange - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|The bar chart shows the percentage of government spending on roads and transport in 4 countries
2 - @Nguyen Hua Please be carefull with your data. Government spending in UK peaked at 12% in 2000 not in...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Hua - Apr 26, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 27, 2020
|Write sentences to answer the questions: about a teacher
3 - @thanhnguyenTHICH What Hafsa feel "out of place" in your essay is the misused of some words and phrases because...
Writing FeedbackthanhnguyenTHICH - Apr 26, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 27, 2020
|Extra money for employees' exceptional work - how this management approach is effective?
2 - Let's start with the lack of synonyms in your restated introduction. The description "extra money" was already used in...
Writing Feedbacknhatbinh - Apr 26, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|Creativity of older people in business, comparing to the young workers
3 - Your first paragraph, which is supposed to be a prompt restatement isn't very clear. While the first sentence might...
Writing Feedbackhana0510 - Apr 26, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|Three Steps to Create an Enduring Marriage - Rough Draft for peer review
2 - Your thesis statement should not be presented in the second paragraph. You have to present that as a part...
Writing Feedbackvindiola35 - Apr 26, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|Australian Bureau of Meteorology weather prediction - Cambrigde 1, test 2, writing task 1
Writing Feedbackhoangvu - Apr 26, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|Essay about few languages are increasing in use, while the use of many other languages is declining.
Writing FeedbackGiangDao - Apr 26, 2020 / GiangDao - Apr 27, 2020
|IELTS task 2: DEBT CRISIS: should banks examine financial ability?
2 - Your last sentence in the paraphrase totally ruined an otherwise perfect restatement and response. Do not give an opinion...
Writing Feedbackkhanhlinh2310 - Apr 26, 2020 / Holt - Apr 26, 2020
|To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance?
2 - Do not use the pronoun "we" since the reference pronoun in this prompt is singular. So use the pronoun...
Writing Feedbackishankaplish - Apr 26, 2020 / Holt - Apr 26, 2020
|Several languages are in danger - should governments spend public money on saving these languages?
6 - Thank you!...
Writing Feedbackaini1103 - Apr 26, 2020 / aini1103 - Apr 30, 2020
|Discuss about the growth of juvenile delinquency
Writing FeedbackNguyenBaoNgan - Apr 26, 2020 / emillia2003 - Apr 27, 2020
|Scandals are useful - GRE Issue topic
3 - @Holt Thank You for your review on the essay response. It is much appreciated and will help me in...
Writing Feedbackshaunak09vb - Apr 26, 2020 / shaunak09vb - Apr 26, 2020
|Why drinking age is under 21 years old in USA
4 - @Jiaxin0229 Despite the wrong title that you gave I think your essay is good. Though it is a little...
Writing FeedbackJiaxin0229 - Apr 26, 2020 / Hafsa257 - Apr 26, 2020
|IELTS WRITING: Undereducated people
Writing Feedbackhuyjunnie - Apr 25, 2020 / Holt - Apr 26, 2020
|Essay about setting homework to students with positive and negative views - IELTS task 2
Writing FeedbackSmile12_12 - Apr 25, 2020 / Holt - Apr 26, 2020
|IELTS Writing Part 2: People are tending to purchasing stuff from online marketplaces
4 - @Smile12_12 @Holt Thanks for your feedbacks. Actually, this is the third time I write a Writing Task 2, so...
Writing FeedbackVanitasInanisa - Apr 25, 2020 / VanitasInanisa - Apr 26, 2020
|We most resent in others the very flaws that we ourselves possess.
Writing FeedbackHafsa257 - Apr 25, 2020 / Hafsa257 - Apr 26, 2020
|Will newspaper remain the most important source of news although more people read news online?
Writing Feedbackanhtran - Apr 25, 2020 / anhtran - Apr 25, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - ENVIRONMENT TOPIC
2 - This is not an essay that will achieve a passing score. You did not properly respond to the prompt....
Writing Feedbacktung53202 - Apr 25, 2020 / Holt - Apr 25, 2020
|CBEST Writing Technology is very much a part of modern life. Many people see technology as a force
Writing Feedbackweilinh - Apr 24, 2020 / weilinh - Apr 25, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2: Pros and cons of private healthcare system
4 - @Holt Thank you so much for your feedback! I wouldn't have realized that without your help. I've always had...
Writing Feedbackpan1911 - Apr 24, 2020 / pan1911 - Apr 25, 2020
|IELTS task 2: modern innovations bring a lot of problems than benefits
4 - Why are you presenting a negative reason in your first reasoning paragraph? Your essay was doing well until you...
Writing FeedbackLadybugssss - Apr 24, 2020 / Holt - Apr 25, 2020
|IELTS Task 1 - Line Chart (The USA and China birth rate)
2 - I think it's better for you to breakdown each year from 1920 to 1950 since the chart is shows...
Writing FeedbackLeo2109 - Apr 24, 2020 / Athiyya17 - Apr 25, 2020
|non-exam, arts-based subjects should be compulsory in the secondary curriculum. Agree or disagree?
2 - I found this to be a very confusing essay to read. Most likely because the first reason does not...
Writing FeedbackTQuan - Apr 24, 2020 / Holt - Apr 25, 2020
|The line graph compares the proportions of fertility in China and USA from 1920 to 2000
2 - The reporting is good enough to possibly warrant a passing score. There are few errors in spelling and grammar...
Writing Feedbackthutra14101 - Apr 24, 2020 / Holt - Apr 24, 2020
|IELTS task 2: Cause and Solution to extinction of wild animals
5 - I think in general, you've done quite a good job. Just some minor problems I think you can work...
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Apr 24, 2020 / hangvu248 - May 1, 2020
|The graph delineates the temperature differences among Paris, Boston, and Melbourne
2 - Please remember that in order to write 240 words, you will need to have 40 minutes to write an...
Writing FeedbackHoangNguyen27 - Apr 24, 2020 / Holt - Apr 24, 2020
|Living with friends rather than with families badly affect the community. Do you agree or disagree ?
2 - When paraphrasing this essay, the response to the question will help you restate the question in a manner that...
Writing Feedbackluvtea2507 - Apr 24, 2020 / Holt - Apr 24, 2020
|The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one
Writing FeedbackThao4real - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 24, 2020
|A 'fresh crisis' is probably a hardship or an obstacle that we have to overcome
3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. In my previous essay I made the same mistake of not putting the...
Writing FeedbackHafsa257 - Apr 23, 2020 / Hafsa257 - Apr 24, 2020
|IELTS - task 1 The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy
2 - This is a 20 minute task. It requires a summarized discussion of the given data. That should be completed...
Writing Feedbacknguyentmtran - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 23, 2020
|The percentage of overweight children in some societies has increase. Causes and problems?
2 - A word of advice, try to avoid using long sentences in the prompt paraphrase. Since you are first gauged...
Writing FeedbackJery - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 23, 2020
|Essay about a music power, which provides a way to unite people - IELTS task 2
2 - Your opening paragraph is not enough of a paraphrase for the examiner to see this as a properly developed...
Writing FeedbackSmile12_12 - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 23, 2020
|What are pros and cons of international travel?
2 - You could actually discuss this essay using 2 advantages and 2 disadvantages to help explain your point and in...
Writing Feedbackmoonchan98 - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 23, 2020
|The proportion of people who implemented physical activity on a regular basis in Australia
4 - It would have been better if you have written two separate body paragraphs, one for boys and the other...
Writing FeedbackSon Bui - Apr 23, 2020 / mywritingsTT - Apr 23, 2020
|Transport - the line graph show the quantities of goods
Writing Feedbacksamsumkite - Apr 22, 2020 / Holt - Apr 23, 2020
|Learning by a failure? Mistakes can teach you a lesson.
Writing FeedbackHafsa257 - Apr 22, 2020 / Hafsa257 - Apr 23, 2020
|Advantages and disadvantages of showing criminal trials on TV
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Apr 22, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 23, 2020
|Essay about transportation ( IELTS TASK 2)
2 - @vugiang Sorry Giang, I accidently posted my comments before I finished it and I can't edit the previous comment....
Writing Feedbackvugiang - Apr 21, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 22, 2020
|Canadian residents and their place of living - IELTS Test task 1 bar chart
2 - @tesshung Regarding task achievement: I think your overview is a little bit too detailed so it does not...
Writing Feedbacktesshung - Apr 21, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 22, 2020
|Write an essay on the following topic: Some people believe that discipline hinders creativity.
4 - @yeeeeeenvo Your essay is long. You should limit the words you use. "Creativity is considered to be one...
Writing Feedbackyeeeeeenvo - Apr 21, 2020 / Hafsa257 - Apr 25, 2020
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