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|Forming a Learning Group - Help me correct this short essay !!
2 - @MokNguyen Try to be more precise with your sentence construction. What this means is that you should try to...
Writing FeedbackMokNguyen - May 11, 2019 / Maria - May 11, 2019
|Essay about wiretap authorisations-need your corrections
2 - @Menurulilmi Watch out for your usage of punctuation, preposition, and appropriate grammar. To ensure that you have the appropriate...
Writing FeedbackMenurulilmi - May 11, 2019 / Maria - May 11, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Purposes of films
4 - @greynd Make concise sentences through merging your thoughts and not needing to create separate lines for them. Doing this...
Writing Feedbackgreynd - May 10, 2019 / Maria - May 11, 2019
|Seeking early independence from parents - TOEFL
Writing FeedbackDK23 - May 10, 2019 / DK23 - May 10, 2019
|Bigger benefits of learning a new language in primary school instead of waiting until middle school?
2 - @sillyman2000 A couple of notes to consider: 1. Be wary of your sentence construction. 2. When you're mentioning numbers,...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - May 10, 2019 / Maria - May 10, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1: NEW RESIDENTIAL CONSTRUCTION
3 - Hi hellomango, 1. Always include the original question. You are likely to be judged on how properly you...
Writing Feedbackhellomango - May 10, 2019 / greynd - May 10, 2019
|Tax increase on fast-food industry - IELTS task 2 - evaluation and grading
2 - @anchen259 Evade unclear sentence construction. This creates unnecessary wordings in your essay that would cloud its overall meaning. What...
Writing Feedbackanchen259 - May 9, 2019 / Maria - May 9, 2019
|The Pros And Cons of Social Media and Digital Communication to People
2 - @KeithSun I commend your writing skills. It's appreciated how you are able to merge together short and lengthy sentences...
Writing FeedbackKeithSun - May 9, 2019 / Maria - May 9, 2019
|An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own country
2 - @sappi Avoid redundant words. When you are writing within word counts, being precise is vital because it will determine...
Writing Feedbacksappi - May 7, 2019 / Maria - May 7, 2019
|Is it better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school?
5 - I think you should do more writing practice because you did not even meet the word requirement. In addtion...
Writing FeedbackDang Ngoc - May 7, 2019 / sillyman2000 - May 10, 2019
|Rising the fee of petrol as the best approach to solve traffic and pollution problem?
Writing Feedbackquynhuyen1012 - May 6, 2019 / quynhuyen1012 - May 7, 2019
|Midnight exam - write story. story in 150 words.
2 - Watch out for the lack of preposition in your essay. This can affect the flow of your content. Make...
Writing Feedbacklethixuantrinh - May 6, 2019 / Maria - May 6, 2019
|WHAT IS THE REASON FOR PARENTS PUTTING TOO MUCH PRESSURE ON THEIR CHILDREN TO SUCCEED.
Writing FeedbackKrystal318 - May 6, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 7, 2019
|Ielts writing task 2: Should media focus on lives of famous people.
Writing Feedbacktrangnguyen02 - May 5, 2019 / trangnguyen02 - May 6, 2019
|Living in a foreign country where you speak with non-local language would make communication problem
3 - I rewrited one of your sentence as: "The immigrants would also lost their old friends in their homeland...
Writing Feedbackcocococco123 - May 5, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 7, 2019
|Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables between countries. IELTS TASK 2
3 - Hi, Eddy Suaib Thank you so much for your valuable feedback and mentioned my weak points that I need...
Writing FeedbackHassan91 - May 5, 2019 / Hassan91 - May 5, 2019
|The hardware implementation and software design of the collector based on STM32; Bridge Monitoring
Writing Feedbackzzz185369 - May 5, 2019 / zzz185369 - May 5, 2019
|ielts task 2 Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists only
2 - A few key terms I want you to work on: punctuation, grammar, and preposition. In terms of substantiation...
Writing Feedbackgianglt98 - May 5, 2019 / Maria - May 5, 2019
|Short essay, topic: what can you do to make the school greener?
4 - You should remember to add a comma after your transitional words (First, Second,...) I rewrite one of your...
Writing Feedbackposoohyun - May 5, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 6, 2019
|IELTS: Some people prefer team sports rather than those which can be played individually
2 - Watch out for your usage of preposition. I would also recommend looking into using alternatives that are more appropriate...
Writing Feedbackchauking09 - May 4, 2019 / Maria - May 4, 2019
|The advantage of study in college (Respond Essay)
2 - A couple of key revisions... In your first paragraph: [...] there are 190 000 job vacancies that...
Writing Feedbackpuppy1111 - May 4, 2019 / Maria - May 4, 2019
|Write a paragraph with 140 words about anything that you are interested in life, work, school, etc.
3 - @thach102 I think that the direction of your essay would be dependent on what you would want your essay...
Writing Feedbackthach102 - May 4, 2019 / Maria - May 4, 2019
|Teaching a foreign language at primary school is better than secondary school. Discuss pros and cons
3 - Try to use words that are more academic by nature. These are words that do not create a casual...
Writing FeedbackKenvin Do - May 4, 2019 / Maria - May 4, 2019
|Parents' responsibility in children caring_ Argumentative essay
4 - @puppy1111 @Maria Thank you so much for giving constructive feedback. I will try my utmost :) :) :)...
Writing FeedbackVan_Anh_Meo - May 4, 2019 / Van_Anh_Meo - May 6, 2019
|Short essay on immigration (IELTS task 2)
4 - Are you trying to write an IELTS essay task 2? This essay is good. However, it seems that you...
Writing Feedbacklouisepham - May 3, 2019 / eddies - May 5, 2019
|WRITING PART: PROFITS OF READING BOOKS
2 - Grammar and composition would both need to be worked on. Try to also use formal/academic language to establish an...
Writing FeedbackHarryPii - May 3, 2019 / Maria - May 3, 2019
|The shopping sales on the Internet in four different sectors in Canada
4 - Maximize your space for essay writing through omitting the usage of words that are unnecessary. Evade repetitive lines that...
Writing Feedbacktonyynguyen97 - May 3, 2019 / Maria - May 3, 2019
|Statistics of underground station passengers in London during the period from 6am to 10pm.
Writing FeedbackChristinaduong - May 3, 2019 / Christinaduong - May 6, 2019
|METHODS Section: Factors that Influence the Destination Choice of International Students
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - May 2, 2019 / TriceLiu - May 2, 2019
|Meiko's fifth treasure story
2 - Your grasp of language is to be appreciated. Aside from this, however, I would recommend that you try to...
Writing FeedbackAnnaphan90 - May 2, 2019 / Maria - May 2, 2019
|Obesity solutions - More children in developed countries are becoming overweight
Writing Feedbackavinashksh - May 1, 2019 / avinashksh - May 2, 2019
|Nowadays, we all have the opportunity to learn things by ourselves using several sources.
4 - @TriceLiu thank you so much for your advice. I'll make treasure of them @Maria you pointed out my...
Writing Feedbackalessandra_dac - May 1, 2019 / alessandra_dac - May 2, 2019
|TASK 1 _ The level of satisfaction with the healthcare system in four countries in different years.
Writing FeedbackBaotram - May 1, 2019 / Baotram - May 2, 2019
|Ielts-Writing-Task2-divorce rates skyrocketing recently
Writing Feedbacktonyleekakit - May 1, 2019 / tonyleekakit - May 9, 2019
|The inconvenient that a computer bring to us
2 - Watch out for the forms of the words you are using, especially if you are using multi-purpose ones that...
Writing Feedbackhaiorss - Apr 30, 2019 / Maria - Apr 30, 2019
|Right vs wrong for children - IELTS Writing
Writing Feedbackwidyakusu - Apr 30, 2019 / widyakusu - May 2, 2019
|TASK 1- PEOPLE ATE FIVE NO-MEAT PORTIONS PER DAY
2 - One humble suggestion from me: This bar graphic doesn't indicate clearly each percentage of these three groups in...
Writing Feedbacknhulong2201 - Apr 30, 2019 / hhching126 - Apr 30, 2019
|Money and social status as a factor for a career choice
3 - Many thanks for correcting my essay again! Your comment is definitely helpful for me, but I have a little...
Writing FeedbackWendy15 - Apr 28, 2019 / Wendy15 - Apr 28, 2019
|The immigrants should whether form their community or adopt the new local culture
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Apr 27, 2019 / Linh Dieu - Apr 28, 2019
|Today some people have to work away from their family. What are the advantages and disadvantages?
4 - Dear Maria, thank you very much for your helpful comments. I have read them very carefully. Best regards, Hoa...
Writing Feedbackdohoa - Apr 27, 2019 / dohoa - May 11, 2019
|Write a paragraph about your accomlishment you have had
3 - @Honglinh1996 Given that you are only given a paragraph, I would opt that you try to be straightforward and...
Writing FeedbackHonglinh1996 - Apr 27, 2019 / Maria - Apr 27, 2019
|ELECTRICITY IS ONE OF THE MOST IMPORTANT DISCOVERIES
3 - @Krystal318 Technicalities-wise, I would recommend that you try to use more appropriate (ie. words whose meanings are more in...
Writing FeedbackKrystal318 - Apr 26, 2019 / Maria - Apr 27, 2019
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Education from school or parents?
4 - @trinhmaicoi Try to not be repetitive when you're constructing your essay. When you find yourself repeating the same...
Writing Feedbacktrinhmaicoi - Apr 25, 2019 / Maria - Apr 26, 2019
|IELTS 12 Test 8 Task1: Electricity is produced by geothermal energy
3 - Thanks Eddy! Actually there were in total four paragraphs and I accidentally made the first on in...
Writing Feedbackhhching126 - Apr 25, 2019 / hhching126 - Apr 29, 2019
|All School Subjects or Subjects of Interest - Ielts Task 2 Essay
4 - Thank you so much for your valuable advice, it's really helpful, I'll try to fix my essay. Thanks...
Writing FeedbackErica Atlas - Apr 25, 2019 / Erica Atlas - Apr 28, 2019
|Abolishing public transit fares to cut chronic traffic congestion
3 - @nguyenphuonganh Like what I tell most people, try to be more concise with your language. When you're constructing sentences,...
Writing Feedbacknguyenphuonganh - Apr 25, 2019 / Maria - Apr 26, 2019
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|The frequency of people in the USA consumed in fast food eateries - Ielts cambridge 12 task 1 test 5
4 - Firstly, I would suggest switching up your usage of verbs/words to have more appropriate content. Let's take a...
Writing Feedbackmamemai - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|Space exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year. -Ielts Task 2 Essay
4 - I recommend that you try to be more concise with your language, especially because you are dealing with word...
Writing Feedbackshaminder42 - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|The significance of the music: traditional and international - IELTS 2
3 - I think you should change other ways to express the sentence That's the significant of music. . It's somehow...
Writing FeedbackEdmund19990717 - Apr 23, 2019 / trvaanh - Apr 24, 2019
|Specialization in one sport at an early age
2 - You can improve your essay through incorporating more substantiated content in its entirety. Try to evade laziness when it...
Writing FeedbackTra My - Apr 23, 2019 / Maria - Apr 23, 2019
|IELTS AC 12 Test 7 - the perceptions of high speed rail in a country
Writing Feedbackhhching126 - Apr 23, 2019 / Maria - Apr 23, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1 Line Graph - number of consumers who spent money on a books in some European Countries
3 - I really appreciate your useful advice😄 I will try to modify it to improve my writing skills😄...
Writing FeedbackHanhan0109 - Apr 23, 2019 / Hanhan0109 - Apr 26, 2019
|Should state and local authorities offer tertiary education to all students with no charge?
Writing Feedbackktran88 - Apr 22, 2019 / ktran88 - Apr 22, 2019
|If you had the power to change anything in your country, what would you most like to change and why?
4 - @gviiivayh Thank you a lot for your advice. i always feel that i add too much unnecessary information in...
Writing FeedbackKrystal318 - Apr 22, 2019 / Krystal318 - Apr 23, 2019
|Space Exploration and Humankind Existence - IELTS TASK 2
5 - There should always be a balance when it comes to constructing your sentences. While I generally advise people to...
Writing FeedbackLincoln1608 - Apr 20, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|Hard Work vs Luck - what determines people's success?
5 - Hello Your opening and ending paragraph are quite the same. You both used "play an important role". I suggest...
Writing Feedbacktoannguyenduc - Apr 19, 2019 / Krystal318 - Apr 26, 2019
|IELTS2 - It's students, not teachers, choice to learn the material. Who's of control over studying?
3 - Thanks a lot for your comments, I didn't think I would get such a great and in-depth response to...
Writing FeedbackPracticeEssay445 - Apr 18, 2019 / PracticeEssay445 - Apr 22, 2019
|TOEIC- What are the advantages and disdvantages of teenagers having jobs?
3 - @joanne1203 I suggest rephrasing your first paragraph to answer more directly to the question. The phrasing of the question...
Writing Feedbackjoanne1203 - Apr 18, 2019 / Maria - Apr 18, 2019
|Writing task 2- Should the media limit bad news?
4 - @Maria thank you so much for your detailed comments. i'm trying to keep not creating complicated sentences... you also...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Apr 18, 2019 / Hammy - Apr 20, 2019
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