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|The information about the main factors of lack productivity of farming land over the world
4 - ....... the main lack productivity factors of agrarian DECREASING PRODUCTIVITY ...... ....... were presented in the percentage includes...
Writing FeedbackSarlindaDS_27 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|Tourist arrivals in Japan from 4 different countries between 1990 and 2010
2 - Hello... Good Morning Mr. Amrillah :) Let me tell you my opinion about your summary :) Actually, I...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Oct 29, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Oct 30, 2016
|Responsiblity of Parents and School Toward Children to be a Good Member of Society
2 - INTRODUCTION Overall it is a very short and simple introduction while you only paraphrased the question then wrote...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Oct 31, 2016
|In 1990s the land in North America was most affected by over-cultivation factor with 3.3%.
4 - hello, i have some suggestions for your writing. ... number with over-cultivation, which the percentage was 28 which...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 29, 2016 / delvis92 - Nov 1, 2016
|In 1990s Europe became the widest area affected by land degradation. Why? Over-grazing.
2 - INTRODUCTION *a few errors in sentence structure *repetitive [ineffective sentencing] *appropriately selected information as overview even though with...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|Two diverse opinions about the best place to teach children about being a good member of a community
2 - to teach the child, but others think that better you add comma before conjunction (because, but etc) ...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Oct 29, 2016 / badafebriani17 - Oct 29, 2016
|Parents are more competent than school to show children how to be a decent citizen
5 - INTRODUCTION overall this is enough. you paraphrase the question then giving your personal opinion which indicated that you...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Oct 31, 2016
|Some organisations have a standard requirement for their workers to wear formal uniforms
6 - Hi Septia Dara here some suggestions for your writing wear is suitable for dress, so wear dress,...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Oct 29, 2016 / Cachaaaaaaaa - Oct 30, 2016
|Reasons for the decrease of land production and explanation for soil degradation in the world
3 - INTRODUCTION *flaws in paraphrasing question incompletely *unclear overview [although had selected information to be presented as overview, it...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|Good attitude is a must for everybody to show that we need someone else. Parents, school and society
3 - Why don't you delve towards the psychological side of parents at home and teachers at school on the behavior...
Writing Feedbackmardian24 - Oct 29, 2016 / shadow7 - Nov 1, 2016
|People needs others since they born, grow up until die.
2 - INTRODUCTION OVERALL, I LIKE THE WAY YOU PRESENT YOUR INTRODUCTION AND GIVING DETAILS OR GENERAL STATEMENT RELATING TO...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Oct 31, 2016
|Causes that farming land couldn't produce effectively and effect of it in three countries in 1990
2 - Hi Mardian, Here's my contribution towards your essay, particularly in IELTS writing task 1. I hope you can follow...
Writing Feedbackmardian24 - Oct 29, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Oct 29, 2016
|Europe had the largest total land degraded with 23% caused by deforestation and over-cultivationd
3 - INTRODUCTION *successfully paraphrased the question *presented an overview, but did not cover all the main trends Thetabel shows...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|People's life satisfication and two different types of factor that make them happiest
2 - Hi Septia, Here's my analysis of your report summary of IELTS task 1. 1st paragraph: - The graphsbar...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Oct 29, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Oct 29, 2016
|A comparison of information about main factors that agricultural land became less productive
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Oct 29, 2016 / ReskiRamadani88 - Oct 30, 2016
|Certain people say that children must learn to become part of society at school
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Oct 29, 2016 / kiki23 - Oct 30, 2016
|Proportion of factors why production of farmland decreased in 1990s
6 - Hello Pram! Allow me to give you some suggestion. 1. Be careful with tenses. In task you should...
Writing FeedbackPramudia27 - Oct 29, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Nov 3, 2016
|Who is the responsible for teaching pupils? Their parents or their teachers?
2 - Hello...Good night Mr. Ivan :) Amazingly, I cannot found anything your mistake in grammar, sentences structure, tenses and...
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Oct 29, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Oct 29, 2016
|Mom and Dad should be the teacher for social life of their children
6 - INTRODUCTION overall, this is a good introduction. You successfully delivered your introductory paragraph with strong opinion related to...
Writing FeedbackPramudia27 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 1, 2016
|The causes of losing productivity of global land and the regions affected by the degradation in 1990
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Oct 29, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Oct 29, 2016
|The huge number of advertisement motivates customers' buying unnecessary goods. It may be true.
2 - "Celebrities such as (...) movie stars, and idols have amazing ... Correction made: use the word "and" in the...
Writing FeedbackKillua - Oct 29, 2016 / abhavsar - Oct 29, 2016
|Is school a suitable spot for pupils to study about how to adapt in the social society?
2 - For the first, please you always attach the question so that others can easily give valuable feedback of your...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Oct 31, 2016
|The two figures which provide data about the land degradation in 1990s
3 - INTRODUCTION *tenses and sentence form (active-passive), subject+verb agreement errors *appropriately selected information to be presented as overview although...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|Writing Task 1 - the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain
NEW - The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Oct 29, 2016 / — -
|British people prefer hamburgers more than other fast food - research for 1970-1990
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Oct 29, 2016 / mem77 - Nov 12, 2016
|Proportion of money spent on junk food, statistics from 1970 to 1990
3 - all rates of income most - most of the income rates Despite some minor flaws, overall this essay is...
Writing Feedbackryan31 - Oct 29, 2016 / kenant - Oct 29, 2016
|Appetite for fish and chips in Britain. How much money spent people there?
3 - Hi hujjatul19, Here's few notes for you: people with high income dominate the number of expenses... --->...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Oct 29, 2016 / WasishaSisha - Oct 30, 2016
|Highest cost of housing in United States and lowest for transportation in Japan - Bar Chart
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Oct 29, 2016 / ryan31 - Oct 29, 2016
|The proportion of spendings on five different basic needs in several developed countries in 2009.
3 - ... about the proportion of spending money on five different basic needs in several developed countries in 2009 ...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Oct 29, 2016 / faizunaa17 - Oct 29, 2016
|Diverging trends in the shares of money spent on five different items in four countries
2 - Dear Ryan, there are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct my responses, ... information about...
Writing Feedbackryan31 - Oct 29, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Oct 29, 2016
|The pie charts compares household expenses in 7 different categories in a 60-year period
6 - Dear Andika, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too! In this case,...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Oct 29, 2016 / mem77 - Nov 12, 2016
|The number of people reading books by men and women
4 - Hello riandi! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) ... number of people who are...
Writing Feedbackryan31 - Oct 29, 2016 / septiadara29 - Oct 29, 2016
|The popularity of reading books by citizens of Burnaby between 2011 and 2014
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Oct 29, 2016 / dils - Oct 31, 2016
|Getting promotion is the biggest chance for people.
Writing Feedbacksydneynguyen - Oct 29, 2016 / sydneynguyen - Nov 1, 2016
|The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents, and crime
Writing Feedbacksydneynguyen - Oct 28, 2016 / sydneynguyen - Nov 1, 2016
|Should we spend more money on schools and hospitals than large, splendid buildings in a city?
2 - However, other people but it also reduces crime and illiteracy. Hospitals with high technology will have better treatments which...
Writing Feedbackalvisphantom - Oct 28, 2016 / euphorain - Oct 28, 2016
|Writing Task 2: Is dress smartly more important than quality of work?
NEW - Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these...
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|Discussion of disposable society and some issues that are around us everyday.
Writing Feedbackhoathiendiep - Oct 28, 2016 / ryan31 - Oct 29, 2016
|Crime is an old phenomenon. Its rate has been growing significantly now-a-days.
3 - Thanks to all...
Writing FeedbackTANJIN - Oct 28, 2016 / TANJIN - Nov 2, 2016
|Writing Task 1: How satisfied are you with your life? What would make you happiest?
7 - ... satisfaction increases sharply until reach ... ... the n increase gradually ... Starting from 15 to 20 years...
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Oct 28, 2016 / Wilyaftika23 - Oct 29, 2016
|Problems of crime rise and how to solve those
2 - Hello Your text could be improved if you apply the following adjustments to it: which bother [...]...
Writing FeedbackKimichi89 - Oct 28, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Oct 28, 2016
|How to see the thoughts you don't know you are having - Article Summary - To know your brain
2 - Hi Lincoln.. These are my thoughts. Actually, this is good, but I offer you a few improvements. GOOD LUCK...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Oct 28, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Oct 28, 2016
|The answer people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives
3 - The graphgphs provide information about (...) that make people happy (health and money) along their ages until 75 +...
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Oct 28, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Oct 29, 2016
|The number of student's accommodations (WT 1)
3 - Hello @Fadhilahumar91 I read ur writing . There are some correction that is checked by others ...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Oct 28, 2016 / TANJIN - Nov 2, 2016
|It's not enough for company to provide uniform and to be good looking without workers' competence
5 - Hello, anna, your essay is good, but i will give you some suggestions: 1.Be careful countable and uncountable...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 28, 2016 / ReskiRamadani88 - Nov 2, 2016
|Summary TED: The best question that people always say
5 - Hello, i will give you some suggestion: 1. Be careful with your spelling and do personal exerciceexercise like...
Writing FeedbackMathew88 - Oct 28, 2016 / ReskiRamadani88 - Nov 1, 2016
|Some young people are omitting or forgetting to learn many basic skills because of modern technology
NEW - Over-reliance on modern technology means that people are failing to learn, or forgetting, many basic skills. To what extend...
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|There's a good effect of having business suit but the value of performance in job is most important
3 - The famous company usually applied a rule for the employees to look more impressive in every they do work...
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Oct 28, 2016 / Pramudia27 - Oct 29, 2016
|The unemployment and careless of society have impact on the rise of the crime level
4 - Halo koko.. overall your essay was good and i found some shopisticated words.. However, i looked some words...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Oct 28, 2016 / Beauty17 - Oct 29, 2016
|TED article - David Christian- The history of our world
3 - Dear friend, You wrote: ...differences between human and another beings is human have ... You have used...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Oct 28, 2016 / sydneynguyen - Oct 28, 2016
|Fish Swims to the Same Nest Each Year Just Like Migrating Birds
2 - it disappears for the month and travellingit should be "travels" because it is parallel structure offshore to feed....
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Oct 28, 2016 / amrillahmk - Oct 28, 2016
|The level of cheerfulness in life of spouses and singles based on age groups
2 - Hi Anna Let me give you some correction Overall, wed(married?) people are ... Then in old un-marriedunmarried...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 28, 2016 / Yonathan - Oct 28, 2016
|Several possible factors which trigger crime rate and the best action to prevent criminal activity
2 - Hello Brother Let me give you some advices The first factors is poverty in specific place where...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Oct 28, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Oct 28, 2016
|This essay will examine the explanation why the crime rate is enhancing and suggest some ways out.
2 - Helllo Afdhel Let me give you some advices As i learn in writing class. writing task 2 consist...
Writing FeedbackAfdhel - Oct 28, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Oct 28, 2016
|Probably the most worrying threat to our lives at the present time is crime - causes and remedies
2 - Hi Sasariri here some corrections for your writing gangster even becoming a killer (much better to use murderer...
Writing Feedbacksasariri - Oct 28, 2016 / Cachaaaaaaaa - Oct 30, 2016
|Formal clothes in a workplace. Quality of work above appearance.
2 - HI, let me give some advice, perhaps useful for you. 1.who use the danger equipmenttools or working in the...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Oct 28, 2016 / Dioba - Oct 28, 2016
|A combination of difficulties when living in a foreign country
3 - here are my suggestions i suggest you, to put your overview into your first paragraph ... finding...
Writing FeedbackTANJIN - Oct 28, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Oct 29, 2016
|This essay will examine the reasons why criminal wrongdoing increases annually
3 - Hi Abrahamlinlocn, here's my suggestions for your body 1 ...to access numerous informations ... ...not only search...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Oct 28, 2016 / nda18 - Oct 28, 2016
|The offspring is a happiness factor for married couple.
3 - Hi Ifra, below are my suggestions to enhance your analysis essay; - whichthat camecome from married - married...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Oct 28, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 28, 2016
|This essay will examine the motives why people commit a crime and discuss some possible solutions
4 - Hi nda18. Here are my suggestions for you. The predominant problem the world face thesethis day is the...
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