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|TED (What we can do to die well)
5 - Hi Naoki, I'd like to suggest you additional correction. The expenditures occupy 15 percent of the ... ====>The...
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|IELTS Writing Task 2 (Introduction and Conclusion): Major advances in technology over recent decades
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 26, 2016 / eddies - Aug 26, 2016
|SUMMARY TED 1, CLIMATE CRISIS - ALGORE; he urges the society to decrease the bad effects of it.
4 - climate crisis or the climate crisis ?? chose or choosing? thx miss ocaaaaaaaaaa.. happy writing...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 26, 2016 / Qara52 - Sep 2, 2016
|The general welfare of all its people is a necessary condition for the well-being of a society.
3 - For a society to thrive means that ... Nowadays, some people thinks that individual successful more important than...
Writing Feedbackhelmme - Aug 26, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 27, 2016
|Writing Task 1 (US Airline satisfaction level) and Task 2 (The need of healthy meal to children)
3 - Hi Ziad, - The chart and table show the satisfaction level of passangers and aspect point of ......
Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 26, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016
|Both parents and school should obligate to keep the children fit.
3 - hi! i give you some corrections and a suggestion . hope it would be helpful Nowadays, an unhealthy...
Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Aug 26, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 28, 2016
|Information about percentage of passengers satisfaction level of US air travel service
2 - Hello, daya23 The chart provides us information about precentagepercentage of passangers satisfaction ... ... assisted within the chart,...
Writing Feedbackdaya23 - Aug 26, 2016 / Naoki28 - Aug 26, 2016
|Children are picky-eaters, therefore they have unhealthy lifestyle and prefer to consume junk-food
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 26, 2016 / ZiadRasyid24 - Aug 26, 2016
|The Roles of Parents and Teachers in Controlling Diet for Children
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2016
|Healthy way of life promotion. Most of children are accustomed with unhealthy lifestyle.
3 - Hi Eka, on promoting a healthy lifestyle, I personally think that as much as a parent can suggest what...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2016
|The advanced technology in food production has made them produced fastly with many additives.
3 - hi... These four groupsare responsible to children lifestyle that is government, food industry, schools and parents. they have...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 26, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 26, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - GOOD NUTRITION FOR CHILDREN LEARNING ACTIVITIES
4 - hi daya, i read your essay. I think your writing is good. I just find some grammatical mistake and...
Writing Feedbackdaya23 - Aug 26, 2016 / Heru22 - Aug 26, 2016
|Customer satisfaction and specific aspect of flying experience with airlines in the United States
2 - hi... The chart and table highlightgives information about the percentage of (...) aspect of flying experience with airlines...
Writing Feedbackayu sasmita08 - Aug 26, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 27, 2016
|'study hard and nourish your body' - healthy food for children at school (writing task 2)
2 - hi... The advent of the new education era... students to be smart with a goodhigh intelligence. There is...
Writing Feedbackayu sasmita08 - Aug 26, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 26, 2016
|Who is Responsible Of Children Unhealthy Lifestyle? How to tackle this problem?
2 - Hello Faridadwi18 I applied a few stylistic adjustments to your text. They are as follows: On the...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 26, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Aug 26, 2016
|IELTS - Writing Task 1 Satisfaction Level of Customers Airlines
2 - Hi Nurul, below are a few suggestions for your analysis. - satisfied the customers are on traveling -...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : Healthy Food support The Learning Process of School Children
3 - Hi tyar, - I think it is correcttrue that children can study moreeffectively if get enough nutrition....
Writing Feedbacktyar32 - Aug 26, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 26, 2016
|Children have a tendency to select unhealthy lifestyle, especially to consume hyper-palatable food.
3 - Schools has an essential (...) healthy life since itthey teach children about education trend issue => redundancy you...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 26, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 26, 2016
|IELTS - Writing Task 2 Providing healthy meal at school
2 - Hi Nurul Ilmy. I am pleased to read your writing. You have shown a rapid positive progress. It is...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 26, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 27, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 : Customer Satisfaction levels in the US with Airlines in 1999, 2000, and 2007
2 - Hi. Hikmatyar Overall, your writing is great, you have state and explain the data appropriately. However, here some advice....
Writing Feedbacktyar32 - Aug 26, 2016 / hasbi - Aug 26, 2016
|The percentage of people's trouble when they live abroad in the other countries, based on the age.
4 - Hi lovely classmate, - ... when they living abroad in the other countries ... ... which have the...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 26, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 26, 2016
|Writing Task 2 "Are the appearance more important than the quality of work"
3 - Hi, Ziad :) Today, the appearance of a person is very imperative and representative his personality. Therefore, some...
Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 26, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 26, 2016
|Four Ways to Tell If Your Roommate Is Using Your Computer without Permission
5 - Hi hirani, - This is article based on a reality while lived with another onewhich people live in...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 26, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 26, 2016
|The Problems of People Who Stay in Foreign Country
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 26, 2016 / ayu sasmita08 - Aug 26, 2016
|How to See the Upcoming 'Great American Eclipse' (SUMMARY)
5 - Since 1979, total eclipse never crossescrossed American continent (past > 1979) ... because the total eclipse willwould cross...
Writing FeedbackErpin92 - Aug 25, 2016 / Hary01 - Aug 30, 2016
|TED - Averting the Climate Crisis. Make the massive persuasion campaign.
3 - Hi Aris! we acquireecquired the new temperature records in January. Prior average of januariesJanuary's tempereature The...
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Aug 25, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 30, 2016
|"green movement" - What is Ecotourism ? (Interesting tourism)
6 - Hello there, let me give some correction for you ... ... out "green movement" that have (has) meaning to...
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Aug 25, 2016 / zian41 - Sep 19, 2016
|Scientists discover a planet similar to Earth. Summary Article from National Geographic
5 - hi,,,, this is some correction for you Lately, Mediasthe media reports a rumor about finding a ......
Writing FeedbackHeru22 - Aug 25, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 26, 2016
|Ecotourism is the concept of sustainable tourism management. (Summarizing)
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 25, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 13, 2016
|Before I die i want to.... (doing what you want)
4 - Hi there..., here is my valuable feedback. Let me tell you that short sentences are always better...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 25, 2016 / eddies - Aug 26, 2016
|People experience problems while living abroad, especially those in the middle age (35 - 54)
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 25, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 27, 2016
|The chart gives information about problems that people who live abroad may face.
4 - Hi there..., let me give you some valuable insight as per you report writing. Bear in mind that including...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 25, 2016 / eddies - Aug 26, 2016
|What is ecotourism? It knows the importance of environmental preservation - summary task2
2 - Hello Rosa! I try to give you a different variation to write paragraph one. Hope it helps. Ecotourism...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 25, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 25, 2016
|The Challenge of Starting Introductory Writing, Will You Address Some Suggestions?
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|Two earthquakes were happened in Myanmar and Italy and they are not connected to each other
3 - hi naoki, keep writing ^^9 Two earthquakes were happenedhappening in Myanmar and Italy just caused the different...
Writing FeedbackNaoki28 - Aug 25, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 4, 2016
|Summary and definition of ecotourism - safe traveling
2 - - please explain the meaning of what ecotourism is. - ecotourism ==> ecotourist also still STRIVE to have...
Writing FeedbackQara52 - Aug 25, 2016 / rosadesiana - Aug 25, 2016
|Summary of passage what is Ecotourism?
3 - Hi Mr. Patta Welcome to Essay Forum. You have been the right website to improve your writing. Hopefully, you...
Writing Feedbackpath83 - Aug 25, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 25, 2016
|Summary Article Children : Leave them Alone
5 - ... developmental psychologist and a writer and Paula Flass ... using two "and" in a sentence could lead confusion...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 25, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 25, 2016
|Summary of Travelling in the Ancient Ruins in Peru.
5 - Hi path, let me give some feed for your essay site Machu Piccu have draweddrawn of prehistorical Incan...
Writing Feedbackpath83 - Aug 25, 2016 / Aris05 - Aug 25, 2016
|The main concept of ecotourism are make good environment and get income without injuring it
Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Aug 25, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2016
|Sumary of Hiking the Inca Trail in The Andes Mountains
11 - hi.... Macchu Pichu is the ancient site in the Andes Mountains .... Mountains and ttwhichwas discoverddiscovered by archeologist...
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Aug 25, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016
|PRACTISING IELTS WRITING TASK 2 INTRODUCTIONS.. - three examples
2 - Hi, your English is very good! Here are my suggestions. ... through borders and it makes [it]...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Aug 25, 2016 / TJLuschen - Aug 25, 2016
|MAKING INTRODUCTION; discussing benefits and drawbacks, giving opinions on issues. IELTS TASK 2
3 - ... goods that we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries. ... become ineffective which spend...
Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 25, 2016 / Heru22 - Sep 1, 2016
|INTRODUCTIONS FOR ESSAYS ABOUT DIFFERENT ISSUES - IELTS WRITING TASK 2
2 - halo gempii welcome to essay forum. it nice to read your introductions.. here some corrections from me.. One...
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|Resume - New National Monument Created in Maine's North Woods
2 - Hi Aida.. Welcome to EF. You have been a right medium to enhance your writing skill. I have read...
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Aug 25, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 25, 2016
|Advice for my exercise - FOR INTRODUCTION - IELTS WRITING PART 2
5 - NowadaysIt's too common you can use other words like recently or these days or directly mention the year ,...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 25, 2016 / Iforsa - Sep 1, 2016
|Here is my exercises of introduction in IELTS writing task 2 - are these appropriate responses?
Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Aug 25, 2016 / TJLuschen - Aug 25, 2016
|Trying to paraphrase it to write introduction paragraphs (IELTS writing practice)
3 - Hi there..., let me give some valuable insight as per your short opening paragraphs. It is always good to...
Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Aug 25, 2016 / eddies - Aug 26, 2016
|Question one, two and three - several introduction of IELTS task 2
2 - Hi Erpin, welcome to EssayForum I can see that you still experience some difficulties in composing a well-developed...
Writing FeedbackErpin92 - Aug 25, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 25, 2016
|CHECKING INTRODUCTION PART OF IELTS WRITING TASK 2
Writing Feedbackfikni05 - Aug 25, 2016 / Heru22 - Aug 25, 2016
|Examples how to make good introduction for writing task 2
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|Hiking The Inca Trail, Machu Picchu in Peru
4 - Hi Rosa Desiana ! My apology, my previous comment is not finish yet actually, accidentally i click the "post...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 25, 2016 / jomul01 - Aug 25, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 SEVERAL POINTS OF INTRODUCTION
2 - Hello Fazlur27 I rewrote some sentences for you so that they sound better (stylistically): 1. Increasing world...
Writing FeedbackFazlur27 - Aug 25, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Aug 25, 2016
|Three questions - checking Introductions for IELTS Task 2
Writing FeedbackHeru22 - Aug 25, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 25, 2016
|Couple questions to answer - global trade, kids at work, unpaid community service
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Aug 25, 2016 / TJLuschen - Aug 25, 2016
|Several Introductions of Writing Task 2
Writing Feedbacksaskia98 - Aug 25, 2016 / saskia98 - Aug 25, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK2 SEVERAL EXAMPLE OF INTRODUCTION
2 - aloha Naoki, below are my suggestions for you: 1st answer ... we can take many goods(products) which are...
Writing FeedbackNaoki28 - Aug 25, 2016 / bung ilham - Aug 25, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 The Problems Which People Will Get When Live Abroad
3 - hi! i'd like to give you some corrections, hope you can follow through. happy writing! Overall, the group...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 25, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 25, 2016
|Life in foreign countries brings a lot of difficulties.
4 - Hello, I will offer you a new form of introduction. Here is the following. The provided bar chart reveals...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 25, 2016 / Naoki28 - Aug 25, 2016
|Some jobs can pay high salaries but require employees to leave their family and friends.
4 - hi.... ... pay high salaries but require employeerequire employees to leave their family and ... The reason is...
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