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|Taking a gap year for going a vacation or getting a job is being part of teenager's lifestyle
3 - hi.... ... that it is very valuable for them in order to improve their mentality Nevertheless, the...
Writing FeedbackRezaAnandatama17 - Aug 15, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 17, 2016
|The Beauty and Darkside of Fireflies
3 - Hi, here are my alternative statements for u : - The shape of fireflies by evolutionary types...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 15, 2016 / molly16 - Aug 15, 2016
|My opinion about TEDTalks: Gary Haugen "The hidden reason for poverty the world need to address now"
5 - hello tata, overall, your essay is good and i believe it can give us more information about it. but,...
Writing FeedbackTata77 - Aug 15, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 14, 2016
|IELTS TASK II suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food
Writing FeedbackRezaAnandatama17 - Aug 15, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 15, 2016
|Summary an article III: First wearable brain scanner to probe people with amazing gifts
2 - Hi Fadhylah. I am delighted to read your writing. In my perspective, you have shown the better progress. I...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 15, 2016
|What it means to be a teacher? The Myth and the Reality.
Writing Feedbackshadels27 - Aug 14, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 15, 2016
|'put limitations on the internet' - IELTS task 2: solutions for reducing internet potential risks
2 - Hello, rockprincess! First and foremost, I believe this is a great start to a good, enthralling essay. I...
Writing Feedbackrockprincess - Aug 14, 2016 / shadels27 - Aug 14, 2016
|Working parents, leaving their children in order to keep up with their needs - (pros and cons)
2 - In this busy world, this is full of problems (...) ,consequently, parents have to stay hours ... ......
Writing FeedbackMohammad88 - Aug 14, 2016 / rockprincess - Aug 14, 2016
|Juveniles tendency to suspend their university degree by working or traveling for a year.
3 - hello Iforsa :) I'm trying to give you suggestion, in IELTS writing academic, please do not repetition in...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 14, 2016 / Halim15 - Aug 15, 2016
|Writing Task 1: Explaining two tables about the reasons to travel abroad and the destinations
4 - Hi Hirani, - There are two tables that show some information [...] Here is the alternative: The first...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 14, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 15, 2016
|Work or travel? The dilemma of adolescents after finishing third school and before beginning college
4 - Hi Halim. I am delighted to meet this medium. I have read your writing closely. Let me help you...
Writing FeedbackHalim15 - Aug 14, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 17, 2016
|[Task 2] What makes a good teacher? Training or personal qualities?
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Aug 14, 2016 / yon959 - Aug 15, 2016
|Continuing Study to University Contrasted to Working or Traveling
2 - Hi, hirani, I tried to correct your essay but after reviewing, I think i should give you some advice...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 14, 2016 / yon959 - Aug 14, 2016
|TED Video 3: Reduce Pancreatic Cancer Diseases
5 - Hi! I am trying to give you some changes.. Pancreas cancer is a disease which make makes many...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 14, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 15, 2016
|Business, tourism or another reason for travel and which destinations were chosen? (1994-1998)
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 14, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 14, 2016
|Writing Task 1: Source of table by IELTS Cambridge, Test 1 - travel destinations
2 - Greetings Mr / Mrs fadilah, Just let you know what came up in my mind. I still don't understand...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 14, 2016 / ramzi06 - Aug 14, 2016
|Nowadays, many adolescent choose to be a worker or a traveler for a one year
3 - Hi, Fadhila here is my suggestion Nowadays, many adolescent choose to be a worker or ... working or...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 14, 2016 / jomul01 - Aug 15, 2016
|According to the graph, British people spent approximately 170.000 pounds on photographic film
3 - it is better when you write the introduction with the passive sentence The horizontal bar chart describes how...
Writing Feedbackintana28 - Aug 14, 2016 / adip - Aug 15, 2016
|Is it true that the technological improvement will devastate the conventional abilities and habits?
NEW - When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to...
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|Brits spent much more money than other Europeans on some consumer goods
3 - Hello llmy! In an attempt to give feedback that already has not been given before, I'll keep my...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 14, 2016 / shadels27 - Aug 14, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 "Unemployment should be made to work"
2 - Hi risty... This is my correction for you. Please re-correct if there are some mistake. others believe...
Writing FeedbackRisty01 - Aug 14, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 14, 2016
|A Carnival, not A Crusade. Essay about the influence of Rio Olympic Games to Brazil
4 - hii, here my correction ;) -in your essay, it's too much punctuation error. such as, space, period, and...
Writing FeedbackEnvyfire213 - Aug 14, 2016 / bbcheesecake14 - Aug 16, 2016
|TASK 1 The first chart below shows the result of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 p
3 - Hi Halim, The first paragraph If you find multiple table, it is better not to write the introduction...
Writing FeedbackHalim15 - Aug 14, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 14, 2016
|TASK 1: the percentage of common vehicles used by holidaymakers during their vacation in New Zealand
3 - Hi, Sofi :) Firstly, it seem that your writing is too short. I doubt that it include 150 words,...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 14, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 14, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 Cambridge 8 The Reasons and Destinations of Visit Abroad
3 - Farida, you need to complete the way that you present the information in the overview / introduction of your...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 14, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 14, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 Cambridge 8 : The Benefits And Drawbacks of Youth People Who Postpone Their Education
2 - Hi Farida. I am delighted to read your writing. Actually, this is a good job. I will give you...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 14, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 14, 2016
|Working or traveling before starting the studying has pluses and minuses to be considered by youths
2 - hi eka, somethng something don't it is better when we avoid use apostrophe in academic sriting. for...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 14, 2016 / Iforsa - Aug 14, 2016
|High taxes on fast food to solve the problem people who suffers health diseases from it
NEW - Consuming too much fast food made people suffers from health diseases in some countries. Upon this problem, there...
Writing FeedbackKhatarizNS - Aug 14, 2016 / — -
|IELTS TASK 1: Practice test - purpose and destination of visit abroad by UK residents
2 - Hi Eka, I think you should do grouping more and use comparative sentence so people who read your...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 14, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 14, 2016
|The privately owned houses overtook leading position in the British housing market.
2 - Hello adip... your essay is good,.. there is a little correction from me,.. In 1985, privately owned...
Writing Feedbackadip - Aug 14, 2016 / intana28 - Aug 14, 2016
|Consumer expenditures in Europe / Traditional skills in the era of technology
Writing Feedbacktyar32 - Aug 14, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 14, 2016
|Gaining any jobs are pivotal aspect due the fact that people need money for living
2 - Here my corrections: - it will decreasingdecrease the poverty. Modals (will, might, should, must,,, ) + V1 - they...
Writing Feedbackadip - Aug 14, 2016 / Risty01 - Aug 14, 2016
|Need some help in Ielts writing task 1: Essay of bar graph (about sales of digital games)
2 - hallo lucas... i'd try to correct your essay As can be seen from the graph... in this sentence...
Writing Feedbacklucas xavier - Aug 14, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 14, 2016
|The death rate is projected to incline and reach over 0.7 percent in Scotland from 2016 to 2020
2 - Hi Ramzi... I am very keen on reading this writing. I will give you a few suggestions to improve...
Writing Feedbackramzi06 - Aug 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 14, 2016
|Analisys of the chart - transport used by visitors during travel in New Zealand
3 - Hi Ella, The percentage of holidaymakers using train is 20 ... Train has lower percentage than coach but higher...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 14, 2016
|Many people in urban society have unhealthy lifestyle while others always try to keep their body fit
Writing Feedbackintana28 - Aug 13, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 : Travelled Abroad, Why Travelled Abroad and Destinations Over the Same Period
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016 / intana28 - Aug 13, 2016
|The most Bulgarian aged 15-60 planned to stay in their country with no intentions of emigration
3 - Hello ramzi, thank you for your comment. The horizontal bar chart illustrates the percentage of Bulgarian people aged...
Writing Feedbackintana28 - Aug 13, 2016 / intana28 - Aug 14, 2016
|International Visitors to New Zealand : Reason for visit
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016
|Task 1 "Percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK"
2 - Hi Risty, one of the most important skills in writing task 1 is the outstanding ability to group the...
Writing FeedbackRisty01 - Aug 13, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Aug 13, 2016
|The number of people with higher education level who planned to leave Bulgaria increased every year
2 - Hi Intan. These are my correction to improve your score. The vertical bar chart describes the percentages of three...
Writing Feedbackintana28 - Aug 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 13, 2016
|Discuss the possible advantages and disanvantages of making unemployed people take any job.
Writing Feedbackgrintdevereaux30 - Aug 13, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 15, 2016
|An essay about the argument of whether people spend too much time on enjoying themselves
Writing FeedbackLansium - Aug 13, 2016 / Lansium - Aug 14, 2016
|In 1985, privately owned housing stood at more than a half in the total of 22 million homes in U.K.
2 - Hi, Fadhil, I have to say you have great skill in grouping the data, yet you are not qualified...
Writing Feedbackgrintdevereaux30 - Aug 13, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Aug 13, 2016
|A work that can give minimum salary should be obtained by people who remain jobless
2 - Hi kobayakawa07, here are some advice I would like to give you. If you have any question, feel free...
Writing Feedbackkobayakawa07 - Aug 13, 2016 / lucas xavier - Aug 14, 2016
|In the modern era, internet has become one of the greatest things in the world
Writing FeedbackHalim15 - Aug 13, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016
|In 2005, there were 27 million homes in United Kingdom, and most of them in private hands
2 - Hi Mahdi.. I have read your writing closely. Your creation is good, but it needs development. I hope you...
Writing Feedbackkobayakawa07 - Aug 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 13, 2016
|Task 1 - The percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1985 and 2005
2 - Hello molly,.. It is clear that while the number of housing (...) highest position in 2005. The proportion...
Writing Feedbackmolly16 - Aug 13, 2016 / intana28 - Aug 13, 2016
|Living in a small community allows to build a common bond and safe neighbourhood
4 - I am sorry to say you should under surveillance your spelling and the article after OF and please be...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 13, 2016 / adip - Aug 14, 2016
|Hiring jobless people develop their living standards, give practical skills and integrate in society
2 - Hi Mekar, it is rather silly to comment your essay without seeing the question as this will lead the...
Writing Feedbackmolly16 - Aug 13, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Aug 13, 2016
|IELTS Task 2: tax for junk food and education to consume healthy products
5 - halo Halim15, thank you for your correction, but I would like to explain my essay "most people" is...
Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Aug 13, 2016 / bung ilham - Aug 14, 2016
|Activities and positive thinking; people over the age of 65 can improve health and extend their life
Writing Feedbackmolly16 - Aug 13, 2016 / Halim15 - Aug 14, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : WORK OR TRAVEL BETWEEN FINISHING HIGH SCHOOL AND STARTING UNIVERSITY STUDIES
NEW - Topic : In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high...
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|There are three advantages and disadvantages of being person who lives in a small village.
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016 / kobayakawa07 - Aug 13, 2016
|The world today tends to consume junk food instead of preparing food at home
2 - Behaviour of people in today's world tendspeople = plural Ironically, the consumer of this kind of food getting...
Writing FeedbackMarzukimaros - Aug 13, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016
|Most visitors who go to New Zealand like to use car as transportation, at more than sixty percent.
2 - Hi Atikah.. I cannot help you to give the suggestion as you have not attached the picture. I hope...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 13, 2016
|Longer life spans. Cutting edge of technology has driven advanced facilities in health sector.
2 - People' life tends to be longer than even before and it argued that -> compound sentence people's life...
Writing FeedbackRisty01 - Aug 13, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016
|TOEFL Independent Writing:Nowadays, it is much easier to achieve success with help from one's family
4 - Hi joe, - For instance, peoplesomeone who was born in a silver spoon with his mouth needwealth family...
Writing Feedbackjoetuanlt - Aug 13, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 15, 2016
|Most people use a private transport to enjoy their vacation in New Zealand
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 12, 2016 / molly16 - Aug 13, 2016
|The line figure presents three kinds of demographic trends in Scotland from 1940 onwards
2 - Adi, here are some additional insights for your analysis :) A breakdown of three demographic trends proportion in...
Writing Feedbackadip - Aug 12, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 13, 2016
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