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|IELTS Task 1 : Recruitment English Teacher and French Teacher in Ontario between 2001 and 2007
5 - Hi I have some suggestions for you. I hope it will develop your writing skill decreased slightly --->...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 29, 2016 / tyar32 - Aug 30, 2016
|Suzana Herculano-Houzel: What is so special about the human brain?
2 - Another question comes from studyresearch about time spent by ... For instance, orang people need 8 hours per day...
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|Summary TED Why By Feeling You Are Ugly Is Bad For You.
3 - Hi Farida, Ten thousands people every month google "Am I Ugly". This leads to depression for teenagers. I...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016 / daya93 - Aug 30, 2016
|Women Who Were Abused As Children Are Likely to Die Earlier - Summary Article
2 - The number of respondent ==> respondents The number of respondents in this research for about (are about )...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016 / rosadesiana - Aug 29, 2016
|"Successfulness" - SUMMARIZE TASK 5 - BRAND LOYALTY
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|Ontario staffing job for teaching English suddenly fell down (2005-2007 timeframe) to just under 30%
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016 / fikni05 - Aug 29, 2016
|The number of French and English graduates who found job as a teacher in a big Canadian city
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 29, 2016
|Years ago, living in a small community was a common thing. Now the world has urbanized.
2 - Overall, these are well-written paragraphs. Not only that, you have answered what is being asked in the prompt. Just...
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 29, 2016
|Aristotle: 'being happy is essential for our lives to continue'; Happiness and its importance IELTS2
2 - Hello Eric First of all, actually this question above you should answer, but after I have read your...
Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Aug 29, 2016 / hailun11 - Aug 29, 2016
|'Education is priceless asset.' People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons
2 - Hi Reza! Education is the priceless asset. This is because governments or factories ... This is...
Writing FeedbackRezaAnandatama17 - Aug 29, 2016 / dinartika19 - Sep 2, 2016
|Summary: The law of 33% (Tai Lopez)
3 - Hi ilham, - Each person will have a good life neverthelessalthough some will not get it. It is...
Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Aug 29, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - The map illustrates an overview of before and after the construction
2 - The map illustrates an overview of ... i prefer to write: The map illustrates two circumstance of an island:...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Aug 29, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016
|Benefits and drawbacks of modern technology. Writing Body Paragraph IELTS Writing Task 2.
2 - Hi Selvi. These are my corrections for your writing ... since the introduction of THE Internet which supportS...
Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 28, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 29, 2016
|Overall, the most Bulgarians who tend to leave their country finished education at secondary level
2 - ... planning to leave Bulgaria based on levelS of education between 2002 and 2008. IN THREE SEPARATED YEARS; 2002,...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 28, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 29, 2016
|Modern technology and its global impact on human. Writing body paragraph.
2 - ... about modern technology today is pollution, since vehicles and major ... ... with vehicles and factories hashave contributed...
Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Aug 28, 2016 / swr10 - Aug 29, 2016
|It Is Easy to be Healthy - but not for everyone
3 - ... hard to do while others believes it is easy, providedif they really intend ... Another reason is modern...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 28, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016
|One and multiple idea paragraph. IELTS writing task 2: making body paragraph
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|IELTS TASK 3: MAKING CONCLUSION AND BODY PARAGRAPH
Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 29, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 CONCLUSION PART - sincere answers for different issues topics
3 - Hallo meimei :) I left a comment here.. I hope that it will useful to improve your writing skill.....
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Aug 28, 2016 / Permata992 - Aug 29, 2016
|Should parents give their children any social knowledge? Or they will get it just in school?
2 - Hay alfadmishal2, may this can help you ;) ... responsible to give their kidschildren (children is plural from...
Writing Feedbackalfadmishal20 - Aug 28, 2016 / Hary01 - Aug 28, 2016
|Healthy lifestyle is difficult to have in modern world, but simple efforts can make our life better
NEW - Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle....
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|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : CONCLUSION for global trade, working children and community service
2 - Hallo riaan.. i will give you suggestions especially about content of your conclusions. I guess for questions no 1...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 28, 2016 / Beauty17 - Aug 28, 2016
|Task 2 : The Way To Have Healthy Lifestyle essay
3 - Hi Miss Sofy. I have read your writing closely. Actually, I need the question of yours in order to...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 28, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 29, 2016
|Bulgarians' who planned to come to other country - their education level has been evaluated
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 28, 2016 / twid - Aug 28, 2016
|'Find time for yourself' - The Way To Have Healthy Lifestyle essay - Task 2
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 28, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 28, 2016
|Level of Education of People In Bulgaria who Tend To Leave Their Country
2 - Hello Your text is nicely done, but you could use having it improved stylistically. The suggested adjustments are...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 28, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Aug 28, 2016
|Teaching how to do good manners are one of parents' role, they should lead kids in the right way.
4 - To be a good have social order in community ... Both parents and the school have a vital role...
Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Aug 28, 2016 / nazzia30 - Aug 28, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - JOB SATISFACTION IS AN IMPORTANT ELEMENT OF INDIVIDUAL WELL BEING.
2 - Hello Evantasy03 These are my some corrections for your writing anyway For most people, jobs take the majority...
Writing FeedbackEvantasy03 - Aug 28, 2016 / hailun11 - Aug 28, 2016
|The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the production stages of silk cloth
2 - hi! there are some suggestions and corrections of mine. hope it will be helpful ... explain about what...
Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Aug 28, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 28, 2016
|From the egg to the moth transformation / "TWIST" as one of the stages of silk-cloth's production
2 - aloha ashelarisa48, I would try to give you my best; These diagrams illustrate the silkworm's life ... ...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 27, 2016 / bung ilham - Aug 28, 2016
|Are parents supposed to teach proper social behavior to their children?
2 - Hi Nice essay i just made a few changes "supposed to teachproper social behavior to their children" "teach children...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 27, 2016 / Jettypile - Aug 27, 2016
|Metamorphosis of Silkworm and Process of Producing Silk Cloth
3 - silkworm producing eggs in mulberry leaf =>It does not produce eggs in mulberry leaf, it just lays its eggs...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 27, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 28, 2016
|Children attitude depends on parents or teacher?
3 - Hi Hikuma. These are my corrections for your writing. make you sure to review those so that you do...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 27, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 27, 2016
|Parents have responsibility to teach children respectable attitude to live in society
2 - "parents have the responsibility "teachtheirchildren" I will be honest here i did not understand what you were trying to...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 27, 2016 / Jettypile - Aug 27, 2016
|Cocoon can produce 300 - 900 metres of thread. Life cycle Of silkworms / steps to produce silk cloth
3 - when moth lays downs eggs in mulberry leaf. larva consumeseats mulberry leaf Larva makescreates silk thread ...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 27, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 28, 2016
|The cycle of silkworms' life and the silk cloth manufacturing process are presented on the diagram
3 - whereas silk cloth takes five steps; select, boil, unwind, twist, and weave. in my opinion, you can change these...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 27, 2016 / Iforsa - Aug 27, 2016
|Summary Article Global Warming Started to Happen In A Long Time Ago
2 - Hello Your text will sound much better if some of the contained sentences are to be paraphrased as...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 27, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Aug 27, 2016
|Task 2 Who Have The Responsibilities To Teach Children To Be A Good Members Of Society?
2 - I personally believe that parent is the one who have ... I personally believe that parent have to take...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 27, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 27, 2016
|School and parent, two important things that influence character of children
5 - Being kind and good[redundancy, both words deliver same meaning]citizen of societyshould be taughtsince children age. [too general, and possibly...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 27, 2016 / RAY93 - Aug 28, 2016
|The common silkworm's life cycle and how silk cloth is harvested from them
4 - Hi Farida, I have been an avid reviewer of your work, wether it is an analysis, an essay, argumentative...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 31, 2016
|How to produce silk cloth and silkworm life cycle, IELTS task 1
3 - Corrections for your summary :) Paragraph 2 The process to be a silkworms is beganare begun from eggs...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 27, 2016 / hirani03 - Aug 27, 2016
|task 2: children should teach children how to be a good members of society
NEW - Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good members of society. Others however believe...
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|The events of 2016 may seem bleak, but the study of history offers some context
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 27, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 28, 2016
|Summary : the mission to find the world's rarest cat in jungles of Java
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 27, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 28, 2016
|(TED Talks) Why good hackers make good citizens
3 - hi ekaa.. ... was the greatest hacker of all the time because of because his belief that government...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 27, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 27, 2016
|People believe that the technology has driven them to face great development in their daily routine
5 - Hi ibal28 Great to know that you are in essay forum now. yay! well, this is my correction for...
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Aug 27, 2016 / fikni05 - Aug 29, 2016
|Over recent decades, people face tremendous transformation because of the cutting-edge of technology
2 - Hi Seed. Welcome to Essay Forum. You have been the right medium to improve your skill. You are supposed...
Writing Feedbackseed12 - Aug 26, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 27, 2016
|'only a few companies could stick out over 5 years' - WHAT MAKES SMALL BUSINESS SUCCESSFUL ?
6 - Hii rosa, this is my suggest 1. (Don't forget to distinguish between passive and active, use the correct...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 26, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 29, 2016
|LEARNING VACATION as a new concept of holiday in 20th century - SUMMARY TASK 3
5 - hii.. t of holiday inthe 20th century ... not only to learn exciting subject but also stimulating...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 26, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 27, 2016
|Most people believe educational stakeholders are the best teacher. Agree or disagree?
3 - Hi Swr10, below are my thoughts on your argumentative essay. Introduction - Most people believe that educational...
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2016
|Parents have been through a lot of things, that's why I believe that they are outstanding teachers
4 - hai dipa i have some suggestions for you i hope it helps In the worldNowadays, people believe that...
Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Aug 26, 2016 / rian31 - Aug 30, 2016
|Parents are imperative to teach their children - even more than the professional teachers
3 - From that stand point --> standpoint , I totally agree that ... Although some people believe that stake...
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Aug 26, 2016 / swr10 - Aug 26, 2016
|Summary : The World English Mania
3 - Hi! there a several corrections and suggestions for you. happy writing! There are aboutapproximately 2 billion people in...
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Aug 26, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 26, 2016
|TED (What we can do to die well)
5 - Hi Naoki, I'd like to suggest you additional correction. The expenditures occupy 15 percent of the ... ====>The...
Writing FeedbackNaoki28 - Aug 26, 2016 / ibal28 - Aug 27, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2 (Introduction and Conclusion): Major advances in technology over recent decades
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 26, 2016 / eddies - Aug 26, 2016
|SUMMARY TED 1, CLIMATE CRISIS - ALGORE; he urges the society to decrease the bad effects of it.
4 - climate crisis or the climate crisis ?? chose or choosing? thx miss ocaaaaaaaaaa.. happy writing...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 26, 2016 / Qara52 - Sep 2, 2016
|The general welfare of all its people is a necessary condition for the well-being of a society.
3 - For a society to thrive means that ... Nowadays, some people thinks that individual successful more important than...
Writing Feedbackhelmme - Aug 26, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 27, 2016
|Writing Task 1 (US Airline satisfaction level) and Task 2 (The need of healthy meal to children)
3 - Hi Ziad, - The chart and table show the satisfaction level of passangers and aspect point of ......
Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 26, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016
|Both parents and school should obligate to keep the children fit.
3 - hi! i give you some corrections and a suggestion . hope it would be helpful Nowadays, an unhealthy...
Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Aug 26, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 28, 2016
|Information about percentage of passengers satisfaction level of US air travel service
2 - Hello, daya23 The chart provides us information about precentagepercentage of passangers satisfaction ... ... assisted within the chart,...
Writing Feedbackdaya23 - Aug 26, 2016 / Naoki28 - Aug 26, 2016
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