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|Ielts Writing Task 1 bar chart The average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different
Writing Feedbackhallynguyen13579 - Feb 18, 2020 / GATE - Feb 18, 2020
|People visiting nations - a line chart bellow by summarizing the information
Writing Feedbackmaitrang95 - Feb 18, 2020 / maitrang95 - Feb 19, 2020
|Reasons for seeking happiness and successful in foreign countries.
3 - This is an IELTS Task 2 question. Are you practicing to take that test? You did not specify if...
Writing Feedbacksou78 - Feb 17, 2020 / Holt - Feb 18, 2020
|Turtles in India (four different species) - IELTS Writing Task 1, line graph
3 - This represent (Noun - Verb agreement) an increase of 30 turtles "In contrast, LeatherBack ... and 90 turtles."...
Writing Feedbackjoseipg - Feb 17, 2020 / Nguyet Tran - Feb 23, 2020
|IELTS Task 2 - Railways development or Roads development
3 - On the contrary, you did not do a very good job on this essay because you did not immediately...
Writing Feedbackbeekill - Feb 17, 2020 / Holt - Feb 18, 2020
|[ IELTS TASK2] About - socialize online trend
Writing FeedbackIsabella00 - Feb 17, 2020 / Isabella00 - Feb 18, 2020
|Encouraging a sense of competition in children or teaching them cooperation?
2 - Since you are self studying, the first thing I want to call attention to is your word count. Always,...
Writing Feedbackhallynguyen13579 - Feb 17, 2020 / Holt - Feb 17, 2020
|My views on Online Courses Learning
3 - Some grammatical and spelling mistakes: -THESE days there are ... -... network speed and EQUIPMENT OR PIECES OF...
Writing FeedbackCloudfly - Feb 17, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 17, 2020
|The popularity of different Scottish attractions between 1980 and 2010
3 - While the general review that you did in the second version is acceptable, you should also be looking for...
Writing Feedbackhuyduongts - Feb 17, 2020 / Holt - Feb 17, 2020
|IELTS Task 1: In the chart - British Men and Women in further education
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Feb 17, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Feb 18, 2020
|General Training - Task 2 - Type: Agree or Disagree - Subject: ban smoke, public areas, countries
3 - There will be points deductions for this essay because you changed the prompt response requirement in your paraphrased paragraph....
Writing FeedbackGaucho - Feb 17, 2020 / Holt - Feb 17, 2020
|Ielts Writing Task 1: spending on three different telephone services in the USA
2 - You forgot to include the inclusive years of the graph, in the overview summary. This means that your summary...
Writing Feedbackthiendinh3 - Feb 16, 2020 / Holt - Feb 17, 2020
|Truth in relationship between people
4 - Some grammatical and spelling mistakes: -... the truth is, to be honest, and DO not lie. -... easy...
Writing Feedbacksou78 - Feb 16, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 18, 2020
|Life is better today than it was 100 years ago. Do you agree?
Writing FeedbackDung918 - Feb 16, 2020 / hallynguyen13579 - Feb 17, 2020
|Most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. Problems and solution
3 - Your prompt paraphrase is incomplete and lacking one sentence to complete a paragraph. You have not indicated the discussion...
Writing Feedbackaprilmk - Feb 16, 2020 / Holt - Feb 17, 2020
|Ielts Writing Task 1: the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester
3 - To me, you should replace spend most hours for on watching; - had climbing --> climbed as this activity...
Writing FeedbackNguyet Tran - Feb 16, 2020 / aprilmk - Feb 16, 2020
|WRITING TASK 1 - number of graduates of different gender in Canada
4 - "Tree years later" --> I think you missed the typing, it should be "three years later" And again, you...
Writing Feedbackshinxg - Feb 16, 2020 / Nguyet Tran - Feb 20, 2020
|Writing Task 2 - Education - Higher Education - Both Views
4 - Hi @Holt and @shinxg, Thank you very much for your feedback and comments, which help me so much....
Writing Feedbacktimmy88 - Feb 16, 2020 / timmy88 - Feb 17, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2: High consumption of soft beverages - reasons and solutions
3 - Some grammatical mistakes that you could fix: ... essential part OF ... ... in THE competitive market...
Writing Feedbackduongthao - Feb 15, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 16, 2020
|The computer provides us with convenience and eliminates manual work
3 - @Holt Thanks for your advice. I will try a mixture of singular and plural ownership pronouns in later writing....
Writing Feedbackshinxg - Feb 15, 2020 / shinxg - Feb 16, 2020
|Crime in two countries comparison. REVIEW MY IELTS WRITING OF LINE GRAPH
Writing Feedbackbeckycyy - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020
|What are the causes and effects of global warming? Suggest some possible solutions to this problem.
2 - I will assume that this was written as an English writing exercise and that you were allowed to research...
Writing Feedbackstella52 - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020
|Describe a film/movie you would like to share with your friends
2 - Spoiler Alert! You were being asked to do a movie review, without telling the whole story of the movie....
Writing Feedbackson2409 - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020
|IELTS task 2 - adolescents have to take part in campaigns to contribute to the community
Writing Feedbackminnadoan - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020
|IELTS TASK2 About Spending money on construction of new transportation or improving old systems
2 - This was never an agree/disagree essay prompt. Why did you discuss it that way? The prompt discussion instruction is...
Writing FeedbackRaeeeee - Feb 13, 2020 / Holt - Feb 14, 2020
|Ielts Task 1: Gross Domestic Product including IT and Service industries in the UK from 1992 to 2000
4 - @Holt: Thank you so much for your valuable feedback. I am working on it, that's exactly what I am...
Writing FeedbackNguyet Tran - Feb 13, 2020 / Nguyet Tran - Feb 14, 2020
|[IELTS TASK 2] About success: Some people are born with talents, however some are taught
5 - You should not add your personal feelings (Example: I greatly admire Messi) in your essays. Try to avoid informal...
Writing Feedbackdienrol - Feb 13, 2020 / lildaisy - Feb 13, 2020
|Computer technology vs Maintaining public libraries
4 - Some grammatical and spelling improvements: - In the modern life... - ... important part IN our lives. -...
Writing FeedbackDaisyhanoi09 - Feb 13, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 17, 2020
|"Why you should drink wine daily" a proposal essay.
2 - The proposal should offer an idea into how the topic will be discussed. This should be a compare and...
Writing FeedbackSjames6 - Feb 12, 2020 / Holt - Feb 13, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: THE BEST WAY TO TEACH TEENAGERS ABOUT THE DANGER OF CRIME IS EX-PRISONERS
NEW - In recent years, imparting teenagers about the consequences of crime is necessary. Some people consider that ex-prisoners are an...
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|Living alone is trending, do you think it is positive or negative
5 - Your essay have some wrong spelling, but overall you have good vocaburary and ideal. Good job....
Writing Feedbackcorn - Feb 12, 2020 / linhcong - Feb 20, 2020
|School, Education, Society - [IELTS Writing task 2]
Writing Feedbacklinhcong - Feb 12, 2020 / linhcong - Feb 12, 2020
|Magical Tool - [IELTS ACADEMIC-WRITING TASK 2] MUSIC'S EXTRAORDINARY ABILITIES
3 - Good work. This type of writing could very well land you within the 6 band score based on the...
Writing FeedbackNgoc98 - Feb 12, 2020 / Holt - Feb 12, 2020
|It's hard to define happiness - why? The intrinsic and extrinsic factors
3 - I really appreciate the time and effort you put into assessing this essay. I have noticed the teachers have...
Writing FeedbackHeiden - Feb 12, 2020 / Heiden - Feb 12, 2020
|Reducing traffic accidents by penalizing drivers? [IELTS WRITING TASK 2]
5 - It's reasonably good. But the way to improve road quality should be more specific in paragraph 3. And in...
Writing Feedbackthingoc - Feb 12, 2020 / shinxg - Feb 12, 2020
|Student behave badly these days. Why occurs? Give solutions
3 - Since you did not provide information as to whether this essay was written as an exercise for a specific...
Writing Feedbackhtnanh2310 - Feb 12, 2020 / Holt - Feb 12, 2020
|[IETLS ACADEMIC - WRITING TASK 2] MOBILE PHONE - ANTISOCIAL INVENTION?
Writing Feedbacktranggnh - Feb 12, 2020 / tranggnh - Feb 12, 2020
|Different views about the amount of money paid to top sportspeople.
5 - Actually, I'm in favour of the perspective that athletes deserve the money they earn because their occupation demands many...
Writing Feedbackparviz - Feb 10, 2020 / htnanh2310 - Feb 12, 2020
|General Training - Task 1 - Type: Job Application - Subject: Social events' organiser
2 - It is important that you know that just because other people tell you how the might have written the...
Writing FeedbackGaucho - Feb 10, 2020 / Holt - Feb 10, 2020
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Pros & Cons Technology affects Social relationship
7 - I think it is better for you to use at the opposite end of the spectrum rather than nevetheless...
Writing FeedbackKieric - Feb 9, 2020 / corn - Feb 12, 2020
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF TRAVELLING ALONE
4 - Basically, your essay did not follow the original prompt at all. The original prompt is: Some people like...
Writing Feedbackjacinthejanny19 - Feb 9, 2020 / Holt - Feb 10, 2020
|Discuss about child begging in Vietnam and state my opinion on it. (approximately 150 words)
4 - @Holt I am appreciated your help. Actually, this is the entrance essay for university. Also, since this is the...
Writing Feedbackdaphnepham - Feb 9, 2020 / daphnepham - Feb 9, 2020
|Extreme sports are dangerous and should be banned - is it a good option?
Writing Feedbackrearthinkite381 - Feb 9, 2020 / rearthinkite381 - Feb 9, 2020
|General Training - Task 2 - Type: Agree or Disagree - Subject: television, laziness, socialisation
3 - @Holt Thank very much for your feedback, I appreciated it. I will use your suggestions to improve my next...
Writing FeedbackGaucho - Feb 9, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 9, 2020
|Computers are regarded as the most influential invention of the last century
3 - The whole discussion does not follow the required parameters of the original topic. I am not sure why you...
Writing Feedbackdieuthaonguyen - Feb 8, 2020 / Holt - Feb 9, 2020
|(IELTS WRITING TASK 2) Population aging: effects and solutions
3 - This is a task 2 essay. That means the first paragraph should be a paraphrase or restatement of the...
Writing Feedbacktuanhnguyen2611 - Feb 8, 2020 / Holt - Feb 9, 2020
|Ielts task 2. In recent years, people are likely to live alone instead of starting a family
Writing FeedbackMai Nhu Y - Feb 8, 2020 / corn - Feb 12, 2020
|Eating vegetarian of Vietnamese people
Writing FeedbackBig Boss - Feb 7, 2020 / Big Boss - Feb 7, 2020
|Countries should try to produce all the food for the population and imports
2 - Based on the original prompt for this discussion, it appears that you have cut and paste some references from...
Writing FeedbackEveIssabelle - Feb 6, 2020 / Holt - Feb 7, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE OPINION
2 - You are still confused as to how to approach the public point of view with personal opinion essay. The...
Writing Feedbackthanhthanh96 - Feb 6, 2020 / Holt - Feb 7, 2020
|A survey related to studying the purpose of adults and the distribution in their academic cost
Writing FeedbackSteve Nguyen - Feb 6, 2020 / Steve Nguyen - Feb 8, 2020
|Cost of living is rising. Effects and solutions?
3 - foods resources is are becoming scarcely -> you should get rid of "is". I agree with @Holt, you...
Writing Feedbackaprilmk - Feb 5, 2020 / emailbr - Feb 6, 2020
|It is right that university graduates should earn more money than less well educated people
3 - Being a degree discussion essay, your paraphrase will be seen as lacking in addressing the task requirement. You cannot...
Writing Feedbackparviz - Feb 5, 2020 / Holt - Feb 6, 2020
|The comparison on how much the petroleum was produced and consumed in 7 areas in the year of 2002
Writing FeedbackEveGreen - Feb 5, 2020 / EveGreen - Feb 5, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Pie chart about population rate
Writing Feedbackthaolinh - Feb 4, 2020 / thaolinh - Feb 5, 2020
|The distance between the rich and the poor is enlarging due to development of technology - Ielts 2
3 - Well, in your introduction, I think you mean the fast-moving of technology has created ? Anyway, come to your...
Writing Feedbackkylie luong - Feb 4, 2020 / Samathan - Feb 5, 2020
|IELTS task 1- The places visited by different people living in Canada.
Writing FeedbackmywritingsTT - Feb 4, 2020 / mywritingsTT - Feb 6, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 TOTAL WORLD OIL RESOURCES AND CONSUMPTION
2 - The foremost concern I have with this essay is the fact that you did not bother to spellcheck your...
Writing Feedbackjohnle29 - Feb 4, 2020 / Holt - Feb 4, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. Give reasons and solutions
4 - One of the major mistakes that students make when writing these reason and solution essays is that they tend...
Writing Feedbackthanhthanh96 - Feb 4, 2020 / Holt - Feb 4, 2020
|Essay on the American identity and fast-food places with image analysis
2 - There are only 2 sections of this essay that I have a problem with. The first, is the introduction...
Writing Feedbackhlatif01 - Feb 3, 2020 / Holt - Feb 4, 2020
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