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|Topic: Leading countries must contain a majority of elderly people. Do you agree with?
2 - Hello Your text does make certain sense but it could use being improved stylistically. The suggested adjustments are...
Writing Feedbackfazilcansizoglu - Jul 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Jul 15, 2016
|IELTS: In many countries, there are 24 -hour TV programs. Is it a positive or negative development?
2 - Keely, I would like to suggest you to write based on IELTS writing band descriptors of Task 2. It...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 15, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 15, 2016
|Human activity have posed a serious threat to the environment.
4 - Thanks so much ichanpants89. You have motivated me to write more as I am learning a lot. I will...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 14, 2016 / payal1982 - Jul 15, 2016
|Pros and cons of taking year off and traveling as a backpacker or working in a small company; IELTS2
6 - Thanks everyone's wonderful help and advice! Sure I will write more and hope to recive your comments and...
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jul 14, 2016 / yon959 - Jul 17, 2016
|The effects of corruption on society - it's the chronic problems on the top of the world
Writing Feedbackjanjira - Jul 14, 2016 / janjira - Aug 4, 2016
|Learning a new language early is good or bad? It's definitely a wise decision.
2 - Hi Peter, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we are greatly pleased to welcome yet another...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Jul 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 20, 2016
|Television, newspapers, magazines - fake and manipulating news out of this reality?
4 - Hi Payal, I like your clear opinion, however your essay is not structured well as Ichan explain above. Good...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 13, 2016 / madmoiselle - Jul 17, 2016
|IELTS: Does Advertising encourage people to buy in quantity rather than promoting its quality?
6 - Hi Mochtar, I have posted new writings. I am so glad to receive your corrections because they are...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 13, 2016 / kantyjang - Jul 15, 2016
|Technology versus art - what is an essential subject for children at school
3 - Swati, welcome to EssayForum :) I believe that this is a good place to improve your writing skill. I...
Writing Feedbackdgr8swati - Jul 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 13, 2016
|Would you rather be a leader or a member of a group? Leaders also learn a lot / experience asset
2 - Mingyu, the detailed descriptions below are my contributions toward your essay. I hope you find it helpful. 1st...
Writing Feedbackseconddaniel - Jul 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 13, 2016
|Water used for different purposes in six wide territories all over - IELTS. ACADEMIC WRITING, TASK 1
3 - Dinara, I would like to try to asses you based on IELTS writing band descriptors of Task 1. I...
Writing Feedbackdolcedi - Jul 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 15, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98
Writing Feedbackyunana - Jul 12, 2016 / ALDI - Jul 12, 2016
|IELTS: People live in small family units rather than big family groups. Is it positive or negative?
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 12, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|These days young people are less reliant on their parent's advice to make important life decisions.
4 - spending more time alone and accessing to internet platform. who are'tnot familiar with internet. I think It is...
Writing Feedbackseconddaniel - Jul 12, 2016 / madmoiselle - Jul 17, 2016
|The way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology; IELTS writing task2
3 - Hi Phonepasong, Please find my feedback and I hope it will be useful The introduction is little...
Writing FeedbackPhonepasong - Jul 12, 2016 / payal1982 - Jul 14, 2016
|In under developed countries, touriusm has disadvanages and can be said the opposites
Writing Feedbacktwid - Jul 12, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 12, 2016
|The earth: a living place where neat sceneries and nature's beauty are only part of people's fantasy
2 - ... and industrial zones due to the exceedingly hurtful noxious gases of manufacturers being tossemitted into the air ...
Writing FeedbackSunrise011 - Jul 11, 2016 / lacusclyne - Jul 12, 2016
|Help me with this essay. Essay about "Teaching method"
3 - Nowadays, new technology is increasingly being incorporatedused to teach students instead of traditional method: lectures. I think that...
Writing Feedbackchomchom - Jul 11, 2016 / twid - Jul 12, 2016
|The goverment should reduce the amount of money spent on local environment problems
3 - Hi Aldi, I can see that you have gathered a very comprehensive feedback from one of EssayForum members and...
Writing FeedbackALDI - Jul 10, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 15, 2016
|People are never satisfied with what they have; they want something more or something different
Writing FeedbackSunrise011 - Jul 10, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 20, 2016
|Payment Disparity in Sports: Sexist or Economic
3 - Hi Julian, indeed WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family. We hope that this is just the start of this...
Writing Feedbackcrzydude42 - Jul 10, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Results number of vistors to Ashdown Museum
7 - this is my body paragraph Such period of refurbishment, the dissatisfied proportion account for two-fifths of all...
Writing Feedbackyunana - Jul 9, 2016 / adip - Aug 12, 2016
|People usually choose their jobs which offer a higher salary than others
3 - Hi Eggshell, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope that this is just the start...
Writing Feedbacklqmsf100 - Jul 9, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 11, 2016
|People have different views on when to let children learn a foreign language. (IELTS)
2 - ... learn a foreign language is better for children. (this is correct but ''them'' is more correct usage...
Writing Feedbackmandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016 / zombibezelye - Jul 9, 2016
|Six categories of energy consumed / predicted to use - in the US over a period of 50 years.
4 - HI Mandy, below are my suggestions for your analysis. - It's clear that the total amount - of...
Writing Feedbackmandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 11, 2016
|TOEFL: a large number of celebrities are not equipped with skills necessary for a politician
4 - Celebrities dive into politics for the sole reason of using their popularity and "people image" to increase their vote...
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Jul 8, 2016 / Eric_Rom - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS2: advantages and disadvantages of distance learning; time and transportation / useless classes
3 - Hello Truong, I would like to give additional insights in accordance to the above comment from one of our...
Writing FeedbackKarunaTruong - Jul 8, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Jul 8, 2016
|Is children education a difficult task now because of the distraction of "evil high-tech devices"?
4 - Here's a mistake: ... easier task for parents nowadays because of all the convenience and advantages of cell phones,...
Writing Feedbackimets - Jul 8, 2016 / mandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016
|Talk about the pros/cons of this era as is full of daily inventions.
4 - Hi Smith, first of all, your essay is very relevant to todays world. You made sure that the information...
Writing Feedbacktwid - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|In a modern world people always face the dilemma to own a car. Perspective for the next 20 years.
3 - Hi Khaleed, I can see that you received a comprehensive feedback from one of our EF contributors and I...
Writing Feedbackkhaledd - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 22, 2016
|Information technology subjects should be focused instead of unusable subjects such as music or art
3 - Hi Jakkapong, welcome to the EssayForum :) although it is quite late to respond your essay. I hope that...
Writing Feedbackcantaloup - Jul 7, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 16, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents
4 - Hi Chiang, first of all, I find your analysis very accurate to the graph, it is not only using...
Writing Feedbackyunana - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|We can't affirm that the living certain place is better.
3 - Dear Hien, I think that comments and remarks above have mostly summed up the changes and enhancements, you need...
Writing Feedbackhohien - Jul 6, 2016 / Sunrise011 - Jul 23, 2016
|IELTS Essay about the freedom of creative artists -
5 - No worries wauiwa, I would be glad if my feedback is really helpful. I have just read in IELTS-simon...
Writing Feedbackwauiwa - Jul 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 8, 2016
|The causes of less productive agricultural land degradation during the 1990s in 3 continents
2 - Naomi, you need to complete the way that you present the information in the overview / introduction of your...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jul 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 7, 2016
|Does Nation require to teach same curriculum throughout the country?
3 - Hi Shanti, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope to provide you with the most comprehensive and accurate...
Writing Feedbackshanti03 - Jul 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 6, 2016
|What are the advantages and disadvantages of the using new technology to teach students ?
4 - Hi Thuy, below are the remaining suggestions to correct rather enhance your essay; - Therefore, the students will...
Writing Feedbackthuydung257 - Jul 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 6, 2016
|Discuss causes and effects of lacking students in science.
NEW - It is true that lacking students in science is becoming a widespread phenomenon in every single country. There seem...
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|Fewer languages can make communication easier, so why bother to protect them from dying out?
5 - I think you have written a decently well essay, and everyone else that commented first pretty much sums up...
Writing Feedbackmandy51425 - Jul 5, 2016 / adamzwang - Jul 6, 2016
|Information in the graph about four kinds of delivering transportation methods in UK
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|The construction of public parks or a sport field for students? Proper funding allocation.
Writing FeedbackYoyang - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|The demand of transportation is higher than ever and it leads to many chronic issues faced by human
Writing Feedbacktpkhai - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|People tend to buy some goods which are not essential for them, even being short of money. IELTS2
3 - Hi Radita WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website to be, not only helpful...
Writing Feedbackraditandinia - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|As contemporary music is becoming more popular, we tend to forget about traditional music. IELTS2
4 - Hi Andy, here's another leg of the modifications for your essay. - And IfShould we want - ButHowever,...
Writing FeedbackPribsHolic - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 6, 2016
|Essay about recording keeping through video or witing
Writing FeedbackDinesh123 - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 6, 2016
|Being a celebrity: a dream or a nightmare?
9 - Hi Majd, I hope to provide you further enhancement for your essay. - Generally, fame is usually( yo...
Writing FeedbackNarelS - Jun 30, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|[ielts Task 2 ] International Travel and Mass Media ease people learning other countries
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jun 30, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 1, 2016
|Many people think that regions affect successful person. State your opinion.
5 - Hi! I personally think that you could give more examples in this article. It is very good that you...
Writing Feedbacktwid - Jun 30, 2016 / Titus14 - Jul 6, 2016
|Environment; Let me know if this issue essay of GRE is proper or not and rate on the scale of 1 to 6
3 - HI Divya, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we aim to provide you with helpful and...
Writing Feedbackbldivya5 - Jun 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 30, 2016
|Eating at home has many advantages; it's safer for us because we know what we are going to cook
4 - Hi Quan, WLECOME to the Essay Forum Team, I'm glad every time we welcome new members of this wonderful...
Writing FeedbackSlimeTim - Jun 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 30, 2016
|'console games became the least popular': The global sales of different types of digital games IELTS
3 - Hi Chou, here's another take for your essay. - The bar chart illustrates the four different - All...
Writing Feedbackcc71268 - Jun 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 29, 2016
|Differences in the universal trend in using water for 3 distinct purposes over a period of 100 years
Writing Feedbackknhusone - Jun 28, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 29, 2016
|(TOEFL) Are people earning a lot of money qualified as a successful person?
3 - Hi Elisa, here's another take on your essay. By the way, before I get started, I just want to...
Writing Feedbackelisa27 - Jun 28, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2016
|IELTS: Social Networking Good or Bad to children? The high rate of internet usage concerns people.
5 - Thanks for your guidance! I will take care of my careless mistakes on both spelling and grammatical error...
Writing Feedbackahfish - Jun 27, 2016 / ahfish - Jul 13, 2016
|More studying means a better education. IELTS Writing #2 - Boarding schools vs Day schools
2 - Naomi, I would like to try to asses your writing based on IELTS writing task 2 band descriptors. There...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jun 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 29, 2016
|Some people concede that life was superior in major avenues 100 years ago.
4 - Hi Azamat, I can see that you have posted several essays in this forum. I think that you've already...
Writing FeedbackAzamat98 - Jun 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 2, 2016
|A good leader needs to have clearly defined principles and should not change his beliefs
Writing Feedbackyoue - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2016
|People in the UK above the age of 4, who chose either listen to the radio or watch TV during one day
4 - Hi Naomi, aside from knowing the difference between task 1 and task 2, you also have to know the...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2016
|Mankind hinges today on the advancement of technology and most people are lost without it
3 - Hi Virel, indeed, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope this is just the beginning of a great...
Writing Feedbackvirel - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Youngsters with lower artistic skill aren't mandatory to engage in art syllabus
3 - HI Aulia, below is another take on your essay. - lower artistic skills are not - mandatorymandated to...
Writing Feedbackculprit23 - Jun 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
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