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|People usually choose their jobs which offer a higher salary than others
3 - Hi Eggshell, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope that this is just the start...
Writing Feedbacklqmsf100 - Jul 9, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 11, 2016
|People have different views on when to let children learn a foreign language. (IELTS)
2 - ... learn a foreign language is better for children. (this is correct but ''them'' is more correct usage...
Writing Feedbackmandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016 / zombibezelye - Jul 9, 2016
|Six categories of energy consumed / predicted to use - in the US over a period of 50 years.
4 - HI Mandy, below are my suggestions for your analysis. - It's clear that the total amount - of...
Writing Feedbackmandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 11, 2016
|TOEFL: a large number of celebrities are not equipped with skills necessary for a politician
4 - Celebrities dive into politics for the sole reason of using their popularity and "people image" to increase their vote...
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Jul 8, 2016 / Eric_Rom - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS2: advantages and disadvantages of distance learning; time and transportation / useless classes
3 - Hello Truong, I would like to give additional insights in accordance to the above comment from one of our...
Writing FeedbackKarunaTruong - Jul 8, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Jul 8, 2016
|Is children education a difficult task now because of the distraction of "evil high-tech devices"?
4 - Here's a mistake: ... easier task for parents nowadays because of all the convenience and advantages of cell phones,...
Writing Feedbackimets - Jul 8, 2016 / mandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016
|Talk about the pros/cons of this era as is full of daily inventions.
4 - Hi Smith, first of all, your essay is very relevant to todays world. You made sure that the information...
Writing Feedbacktwid - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|In a modern world people always face the dilemma to own a car. Perspective for the next 20 years.
3 - Hi Khaleed, I can see that you received a comprehensive feedback from one of our EF contributors and I...
Writing Feedbackkhaledd - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 22, 2016
|Information technology subjects should be focused instead of unusable subjects such as music or art
3 - Hi Jakkapong, welcome to the EssayForum :) although it is quite late to respond your essay. I hope that...
Writing Feedbackcantaloup - Jul 7, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 16, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents
4 - Hi Chiang, first of all, I find your analysis very accurate to the graph, it is not only using...
Writing Feedbackyunana - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|We can't affirm that the living certain place is better.
3 - Dear Hien, I think that comments and remarks above have mostly summed up the changes and enhancements, you need...
Writing Feedbackhohien - Jul 6, 2016 / Sunrise011 - Jul 23, 2016
|IELTS Essay about the freedom of creative artists -
5 - No worries wauiwa, I would be glad if my feedback is really helpful. I have just read in IELTS-simon...
Writing Feedbackwauiwa - Jul 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 8, 2016
|The causes of less productive agricultural land degradation during the 1990s in 3 continents
2 - Naomi, you need to complete the way that you present the information in the overview / introduction of your...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jul 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 7, 2016
|Does Nation require to teach same curriculum throughout the country?
3 - Hi Shanti, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope to provide you with the most comprehensive and accurate...
Writing Feedbackshanti03 - Jul 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 6, 2016
|What are the advantages and disadvantages of the using new technology to teach students ?
4 - Hi Thuy, below are the remaining suggestions to correct rather enhance your essay; - Therefore, the students will...
Writing Feedbackthuydung257 - Jul 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 6, 2016
|Discuss causes and effects of lacking students in science.
NEW - It is true that lacking students in science is becoming a widespread phenomenon in every single country. There seem...
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|Fewer languages can make communication easier, so why bother to protect them from dying out?
5 - I think you have written a decently well essay, and everyone else that commented first pretty much sums up...
Writing Feedbackmandy51425 - Jul 5, 2016 / adamzwang - Jul 6, 2016
|Information in the graph about four kinds of delivering transportation methods in UK
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|The construction of public parks or a sport field for students? Proper funding allocation.
Writing FeedbackYoyang - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|The demand of transportation is higher than ever and it leads to many chronic issues faced by human
Writing Feedbacktpkhai - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|People tend to buy some goods which are not essential for them, even being short of money. IELTS2
3 - Hi Radita WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website to be, not only helpful...
Writing Feedbackraditandinia - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|As contemporary music is becoming more popular, we tend to forget about traditional music. IELTS2
4 - Hi Andy, here's another leg of the modifications for your essay. - And IfShould we want - ButHowever,...
Writing FeedbackPribsHolic - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 6, 2016
|Essay about recording keeping through video or witing
Writing FeedbackDinesh123 - Jul 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 6, 2016
|Being a celebrity: a dream or a nightmare?
9 - Hi Majd, I hope to provide you further enhancement for your essay. - Generally, fame is usually( yo...
Writing FeedbackNarelS - Jun 30, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|[ielts Task 2 ] International Travel and Mass Media ease people learning other countries
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jun 30, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 1, 2016
|Many people think that regions affect successful person. State your opinion.
5 - Hi! I personally think that you could give more examples in this article. It is very good that you...
Writing Feedbacktwid - Jun 30, 2016 / Titus14 - Jul 6, 2016
|Environment; Let me know if this issue essay of GRE is proper or not and rate on the scale of 1 to 6
3 - HI Divya, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we aim to provide you with helpful and...
Writing Feedbackbldivya5 - Jun 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 30, 2016
|Eating at home has many advantages; it's safer for us because we know what we are going to cook
4 - Hi Quan, WLECOME to the Essay Forum Team, I'm glad every time we welcome new members of this wonderful...
Writing FeedbackSlimeTim - Jun 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 30, 2016
|'console games became the least popular': The global sales of different types of digital games IELTS
3 - Hi Chou, here's another take for your essay. - The bar chart illustrates the four different - All...
Writing Feedbackcc71268 - Jun 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 29, 2016
|Differences in the universal trend in using water for 3 distinct purposes over a period of 100 years
Writing Feedbackknhusone - Jun 28, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 29, 2016
|(TOEFL) Are people earning a lot of money qualified as a successful person?
3 - Hi Elisa, here's another take on your essay. By the way, before I get started, I just want to...
Writing Feedbackelisa27 - Jun 28, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2016
|IELTS: Social Networking Good or Bad to children? The high rate of internet usage concerns people.
5 - Thanks for your guidance! I will take care of my careless mistakes on both spelling and grammatical error...
Writing Feedbackahfish - Jun 27, 2016 / ahfish - Jul 13, 2016
|More studying means a better education. IELTS Writing #2 - Boarding schools vs Day schools
2 - Naomi, I would like to try to asses your writing based on IELTS writing task 2 band descriptors. There...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jun 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 29, 2016
|Some people concede that life was superior in major avenues 100 years ago.
4 - Hi Azamat, I can see that you have posted several essays in this forum. I think that you've already...
Writing FeedbackAzamat98 - Jun 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 2, 2016
|A good leader needs to have clearly defined principles and should not change his beliefs
Writing Feedbackyoue - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2016
|People in the UK above the age of 4, who chose either listen to the radio or watch TV during one day
4 - Hi Naomi, aside from knowing the difference between task 1 and task 2, you also have to know the...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2016
|Mankind hinges today on the advancement of technology and most people are lost without it
3 - Hi Virel, indeed, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope this is just the beginning of a great...
Writing Feedbackvirel - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Youngsters with lower artistic skill aren't mandatory to engage in art syllabus
3 - HI Aulia, below is another take on your essay. - lower artistic skills are not - mandatorymandated to...
Writing Feedbackculprit23 - Jun 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Solutions to low birth rate in developed countries
3 - @ichanpants89 I really appreciate your helpful suggestions! But I still have two questions. 1.How do I replace FANBOYS? Especially...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jun 26, 2016 / Titus14 - Jun 27, 2016
|Fewer languages in the world has its merits; How to write an opinion essay about languages?
3 - Hi Mansurbek, I would like to help by adding a few suggestions to the other half of your essay....
Writing FeedbackMansurbek19 - Jun 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Healthy lifestyle and state budget. IELST writing task 2 - update question 25 June 2016
Writing Feedbackpriscaoktav - Jun 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Happy Moonlight Festival- create your own festival
2 - Hi Maibellinenguyen, I highly appreciate your description of the festival, but I think you should use vocabulary more carefully....
Writing FeedbackMaibellinenguyen - Jun 26, 2016 / knhusone - Jun 26, 2016
|I strongly support the idea of charging the foreign tourists higher
3 - Hi! I would like to suggest you to replace some of the 'historical' with 'ancient', this will make your...
Writing Feedbackknhusone - Jun 25, 2016 / Titus14 - Jun 27, 2016
|Characteristic of business models.
4 - Hi Yuan, I would like to share my thoughts on your writing project. First of all, the presentation of...
Writing Feedbackcylimitless - Jun 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|People may do different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health?
2 - Hi Huy, here's another take on your essay with the focus on the first and second paragraph of the...
Writing Feedbacktruongquanghuy - Jun 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Admission to a school should not depend from a person's gender - task 2 writing ielts
Writing FeedbackThewhisha - Jun 24, 2016 / mahamansoor - Jul 5, 2016
|GRE: "Humans in Kaliko islands" Argument
3 - Hi Brian, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope you find this website not only...
Writing Feedbackhanbrianlee - Jun 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|What a strategies you have to adopt to be a good listener? Someone correct me this paragraph.
Writing FeedbackAtchane - Jun 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 5, 2016
|GRE: "Educational institutions should not dissuade students from pursuing unlikely academic careers"
3 - Hi Cj, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, this website aims to provide you with the most credible and...
Writing Feedbackmrcjthedj - Jun 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2016
|Should government invest more money in a city infrastructure instead of public transportation?
2 - Matt, I would like to deliver my feedback in the detailed descriptions below. I hope this would be helpful...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Jun 24, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 24, 2016
|A COMPARISON OF TRIPS UNDERTAKEN BY CARS BASED ON GENDER - WRITING IELTS TASK 1
3 - Hi Ilham, it is nice to read another IELTS essay practice of yours. I would like to point out...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jun 24, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 24, 2016
|Debate about whether to teach children competitiveness or create a spirit of cooperation in them
4 - HI Tran, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope you find this website credible, useful as well as...
Writing Feedbackknhusone - Jun 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 24, 2016
|The FAMILY. As a beginner, I need your help so much. More importantly, my examination is coming
2 - Hello thanhlac98 Overall, your text is nicely written, but a few things could be improved. The suggested adjustments...
Writing Feedbackthanhlac98 - Jun 23, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Jun 23, 2016
|"teaching children at home is best for a child's development" - do you agree with this statement?
3 - Hi Vadim, below are my observations on your essay; - the length and physical presentation of the essay...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Jun 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2016
|It is not necessary to attach the teacher's payment to the student's learning capacity
3 - Hi Bidhan, I would like to contribute in the enhancement of your essay. I focused on the last 2...
Writing Feedbackbidhan - Jun 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 THE POSSIBLE CHANGE AMONG SOCIETIES DUE TO THE SOPHISTICATED COMMUNICATION TOOLS
5 - Hi Muhammad, Overall your essay is well-qualified I think you should change Taking a smart phone as an...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jun 23, 2016 / KarunaTruong - Jun 24, 2016
|Writing task 2: Modern technology in work place. Disadvantages to relying too much on technology?
5 - paragraph 2, "a computer" change to" the computer" paragraph 3, "work to" change to "work with" . "a problem"...
Writing FeedbackKarunaTruong - Jun 22, 2016 / Wendy Li - Jun 22, 2016
|Football World Cup and other sports allows people to release their patriotic emotions in a safe way.
3 - Hi Maxim, below are additional help that will hopefully enhance your essay. I will focus on the first 2...
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - Jun 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|The Process of Produce Cement and Concentrate
3 - Hi Puja, thank you for making sure that you have included the diagram in your analysis. Below are my...
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|Mining is tearing up our environment!
4 - Hi Katelyn, I can see that you have gathered a very comprehensive feedback from one of EssayForum contributors. I...
Writing Feedbackih8writing100 - Jun 21, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 23, 2016
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