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|Abolishing public transit fares to cut chronic traffic congestion
3 - @nguyenphuonganh Like what I tell most people, try to be more concise with your language. When you're constructing sentences,...
Writing Feedbacknguyenphuonganh - Apr 25, 2019 / Maria - Apr 26, 2019
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|The frequency of people in the USA consumed in fast food eateries - Ielts cambridge 12 task 1 test 5
4 - Firstly, I would suggest switching up your usage of verbs/words to have more appropriate content. Let's take a...
Writing Feedbackmamemai - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|Space exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year. -Ielts Task 2 Essay
4 - I recommend that you try to be more concise with your language, especially because you are dealing with word...
Writing Feedbackshaminder42 - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|The significance of the music: traditional and international - IELTS 2
3 - I think you should change other ways to express the sentence That's the significant of music. . It's somehow...
Writing FeedbackEdmund19990717 - Apr 23, 2019 / trvaanh - Apr 24, 2019
|Specialization in one sport at an early age
2 - You can improve your essay through incorporating more substantiated content in its entirety. Try to evade laziness when it...
Writing FeedbackTra My - Apr 23, 2019 / Maria - Apr 23, 2019
|IELTS AC 12 Test 7 - the perceptions of high speed rail in a country
Writing Feedbackhhching126 - Apr 23, 2019 / Maria - Apr 23, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1 Line Graph - number of consumers who spent money on a books in some European Countries
3 - I really appreciate your useful advice😄 I will try to modify it to improve my writing skills😄...
Writing FeedbackHanhan0109 - Apr 23, 2019 / Hanhan0109 - Apr 26, 2019
|Should state and local authorities offer tertiary education to all students with no charge?
Writing Feedbackktran88 - Apr 22, 2019 / ktran88 - Apr 22, 2019
|If you had the power to change anything in your country, what would you most like to change and why?
4 - @gviiivayh Thank you a lot for your advice. i always feel that i add too much unnecessary information in...
Writing FeedbackKrystal318 - Apr 22, 2019 / Krystal318 - Apr 23, 2019
|Space Exploration and Humankind Existence - IELTS TASK 2
5 - There should always be a balance when it comes to constructing your sentences. While I generally advise people to...
Writing FeedbackLincoln1608 - Apr 20, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|Hard Work vs Luck - what determines people's success?
5 - Hello Your opening and ending paragraph are quite the same. You both used "play an important role". I suggest...
Writing Feedbacktoannguyenduc - Apr 19, 2019 / Krystal318 - Apr 26, 2019
|IELTS2 - It's students, not teachers, choice to learn the material. Who's of control over studying?
3 - Thanks a lot for your comments, I didn't think I would get such a great and in-depth response to...
Writing FeedbackPracticeEssay445 - Apr 18, 2019 / PracticeEssay445 - Apr 22, 2019
|TOEIC- What are the advantages and disdvantages of teenagers having jobs?
3 - @joanne1203 I suggest rephrasing your first paragraph to answer more directly to the question. The phrasing of the question...
Writing Feedbackjoanne1203 - Apr 18, 2019 / Maria - Apr 18, 2019
|Writing task 2- Should the media limit bad news?
4 - @Maria thank you so much for your detailed comments. i'm trying to keep not creating complicated sentences... you also...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Apr 18, 2019 / Hammy - Apr 20, 2019
|IELTS: What are the factors and strategies of a worldwide issue: fresh water limitation?
3 - @ZeldaDoan In terms of content, I can see how you have substantiated your key points fluidly. The readers would...
Writing FeedbackZeldaDoan - Apr 18, 2019 / Maria - Apr 18, 2019
|IELTS- effects advertisement on consumer goods sale
3 - @Jipsa Jadwani The content of your essay deviates a little bit from what is being asked for in the...
Writing FeedbackJipsa Jadwani - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 18, 2019
|Improving people's health by cleaning the environment. TOEFL writing
4 - In my opinion is more common there are some factories producing polluted water ..., if people drink contaminated water,...
Writing Feedbackzlb20187515 - Apr 17, 2019 / traviekingston96 - Apr 20, 2019
|Why sports are important to people? TOIEC Writing
2 - Divide your composition into separate paragraphs to follow the general rules and conventions of writing. I recommend that...
Writing Feedbackjoanne1203 - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|Respecting teachers today vs in the past
2 - I like your composition. The simplicity of your language wonderfully plays out; it enables the readers to have a...
Writing Feedbackadl - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF EATING OUT
3 - Hi Margaret, I found that you missed some article, including "a", "an" and "the". offer a great view,...
Writing FeedbackMargaret 2019 - Apr 17, 2019 / joanne1203 - Apr 18, 2019
|In many countries day by day rubbish (garbage) is increasing. Why is it happening? What can be done?
3 - My advices- 1. Your introduction part is little deviated from the topic...your opening sentence is focusing on overpopulation. It...
Writing Feedbackmaipthao12345 - Apr 17, 2019 / Jipsa Jadwani - Apr 19, 2019
|IELTS 1 - The given maps illustrates how campus of Woodwards University changed from 1985 to today
2 - I would omit lines that you do not necessarily need. Let's take your first sentence as an example. In...
Writing FeedbackBatu - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|Task 2 IELTS. Topic: LAW. Should defendant's criminal record be available in legal cases?
2 - I would suggest changing the formatting of your sentences at times. This can enhance the flow and the structure...
Writing Feedbackicebear24 - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Modern communication vs Writing letters
2 - I appreciate the structure and content of your essay. I do have a couple of recommendations that can better...
Writing FeedbackThuan Tran - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|IELTS - many youngsters choose to shop as one of their favorite leisure activities
2 - You should create a more balanced argumentation format for your essay's structure. Notice how roughly two-thirds of your essay...
Writing Feedbackwriting7 - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 16, 2019
|I was ghosted by a girl and I just let it go
2 - Are you writing this for a creative writing class? You should always ensure that your language is articulated smoothly....
Writing Feedbackbenny812 - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 16, 2019
|ielts: Fair earnings - sports professionals can earn a lot of money
3 - I think it would have been better if you had explained clearly for the topic sentence. Your second point...
Writing Feedbackcorda - Apr 15, 2019 / trvaanh - Apr 24, 2019
|Timing for choosing a job
Writing Feedbackyoona_crocodiles - Apr 15, 2019 / yoona_crocodiles - Apr 16, 2019
|Topic: Young people read few books. What are the reasons for this problem and what can be done it?
2 - I would firstly recommend that you watch out for your usage of the definitive article the. There were instances...
Writing Feedbackdhue1998 - Apr 15, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|IELTS 2: Whether children should be taught to distinguish right and wrong.
3 - Hey! I pretty much like your essay and the way you organize the ideas is good. However, if this...
Writing Feedbacktammy23 - Apr 15, 2019 / icebear24 - Apr 17, 2019
|The dilemma of whether to earn a living or continute studies
3 - @kwang_ha You should be more clear with your language. From the get-go, it was quite unclear which position you...
Writing Feedbackkwang_ha - Apr 14, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|Employment of youngsters would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole
2 - Are you working with a maximum word count? This can significantly change my perception of the entirety of the...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Apr 13, 2019 / Maria - Apr 13, 2019
|Whether it's necessary that children should learn to manage their money at young age
3 - @yuanyinan Are you working with a specific word count? If you are, then I suggest that you try to...
Writing Feedbackyuanyinan - Apr 13, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|IELTS 2 - Working and traveling abroad as the main factors to learn an different language?
NEW - Importance of Language Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order...
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|Advertisements are misleading for children or they provide knowledge?
NEW - adverts impact on children Some people think that advertisements are misleading for children while others claim that they...
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|IELTS is sharing information always beneficial?
2 - Hello leeyunwei I think this is a great essay as it hardly contains any grammatical errors and your ideas...
Writing Feedbackleeyunwei - Apr 12, 2019 / coke - Apr 12, 2019
|Actors, story, and music - three factors that build up a good movie
2 - Your construction of sentences is decent. I would only say that in terms of structure, you could opt for...
Writing Feedbacklailai5203 - Apr 12, 2019 / Maria - Apr 12, 2019
|IELTS task 2: Whether women are more good at parenting than men is under hot debate.
Writing Feedbackhappypassexam - Apr 11, 2019 / TJLuschen - Apr 11, 2019
|IELTS: Plan-cancelling letter to a friend
2 - I would suggest that you revise your opening line.While it is nice that you are being straightforward, I would...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Apr 11, 2019 / Maria - Apr 11, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Should computer skills be included in education?
3 - I think you should use more linking words to start your paragraphs for examples Firstly, Secondly, In conclusion to...
Writing Feedbackminhtung97 - Apr 10, 2019 / trvaanh - Apr 13, 2019
|Essay: Should parents reward their children with money for each good grade from school?
4 - Dear Coke: Thank you for your feedback. It really helps me a lot. Sometimes when I come across...
Writing FeedbackFuntomas Chen - Apr 10, 2019 / Funtomas Chen - Apr 11, 2019
|IELTS: Is direct actions or donation of money more preferable to help someone?
3 - Thank you @Constance for your detailed correction. I really appreciate your help in each paragraph....
Writing Feedbackcoke - Apr 9, 2019 / coke - Apr 10, 2019
|Issue Essay for GRE AWA section - All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ....
Writing Feedbackpg1811 - Apr 9, 2019 / pg1811 - Apr 12, 2019
|Social mindset - some people try to look younger than they really are
Writing Feedbackprisid - Apr 9, 2019 / prisid - Apr 9, 2019
|Writing Part 2 - Citizens know little about their neighbors. Reasons and solutions.
3 - @Alicia2019 I think that your essay is impressive on its own. However, I do have a couple of suggestions...
Writing FeedbackAlicia2019 - Apr 8, 2019 / Maria - Apr 8, 2019
|Unethical and immoral advertising in our daily lives
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|Youth crime, reason and solution
3 - regarding to point #3, I don't understand the usage of alongside. We'll be happy to help again if this...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|Significant developments in the field of information technology and its effects for the future
2 - I would recommend that you watch out for your modifications in the verbs.There were instances sprinkled throughout your essay...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / Maria - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - aids by developed countries to third-word countries
3 - thanks a lot...
Writing Feedbackahmedaly11 - Apr 7, 2019 / ahmedaly11 - Apr 8, 2019
|Writing Part 2. What factors may have caused that highly qualified graduates are without job?
4 - I think it's better to illustrate your article by first stating reasons, and give some suggestions corresponding to these...
Writing FeedbackSyIlhamzultami - Apr 7, 2019 / sgyyan38 - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - Prolonged incarceration or... Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Writing Feedbacksgyyan38 - Apr 7, 2019 / sgyyan38 - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - Opinion - Is our planet in peril?
3 - Depending on the application of this article, simple and clear introduction is usually welcomed in examination. You may consider...
Writing Feedbackmailnaycuachi - Apr 7, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|Should we use a bicycle as our main form of transport?
Writing Feedbackhendrac15 - Apr 7, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 7, 2019
|Ielts 1 - statistical information on the amount of flora and fauna extinction in tropical forests
2 - I would switch your first two sentences. In the process of doing so, you could briefly expound and touch...
Writing Feedbackicebear24 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|IELTS 2: In some regions, a great number of young adults are elected for key roles in the government
4 - @andrewfoy273 Hi there. I have a few words to say on this Paragraph 1 these two viewpoin this two...
Writing Feedbackandrewfoy273 - Apr 6, 2019 / mailnaycuachi - Apr 7, 2019
|Options on transportation improvement
3 - @tcl1120 Great start for your essay!I do still have a couple of key recommendations to better your structure and...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|Childcare preparation to all new parents
3 - Thank you for your valuable comments. May I adopt "In fact" or "Nevertheless" replacing the word of "Perhaps"...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019
|Sport stars are paid too much for what they do. Discuss your opinion [IELTS]
3 - good article with range of lexicon. I would recommend you to consolidate the point 1 and 2 to...
Writing Feedbacknguyenholinhchi - Apr 6, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019
|Essay (Problem-Solution-Evaluation Essay) about Drones
2 - I would suggest simplifying your language to make your sentences more precise and comprehensive. It would be appreciated by...
Writing Feedbackdynastylee0929 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
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