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|Topic - Animals not anymore as a food source, or a "product"
2 - Zombu, this is an extent response essay. That means that you cannot just "lean towards" an opinion, you actually...
Writing Feedbackzombu11 - Mar 8, 2019 / Holt - Mar 9, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Why national leaders should spend more money on public transportation
2 - Nguyen, your essay does not follow the discussion prompt as it is provided. This is a 5 paragraph essay...
Writing Feedbacknguyenxuandinhpq - Mar 7, 2019 / Holt - Mar 8, 2019
|Have classmates much bigger impact on a child's success at school? What about parents influence?
3 - Bich, the term is "influence" not influent. Also, is this an IELTS Task 2 essay? Or was this just...
Writing Feedbackbichloan - Mar 7, 2019 / Holt - Mar 8, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2 - Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language
3 - Crystal, all of your reasoning paragraphs only present talking points but no actual explanation of the talking points. These...
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 6, 2019 / Holt - Mar 7, 2019
|Some people think instead of preventing climate change, we should find ways to live with it. Agree?
2 - Doung. the word "are" is used to denote the plural form of "is". The term "evidence" is in singular...
Writing Feedbackduonghoang - Mar 6, 2019 / Holt - Mar 7, 2019
|Writing task 1: Compare the access differences to the city hospital in 2007 and three years later
2 - Thu, your essay meets the word count but not the paragraph count. Each comparison points for the two maps...
Writing Feedbackoutofblue - Mar 5, 2019 / Holt - Mar 6, 2019
|WORK CONDITIONS AND TIME TOPIC. THE TEST IN 2-3-2019.
2 - Hello dinhphong, Firstly, the prompt has never mentioned any trend in making alterations of works so I think...
Writing Feedbackdinhphong - Mar 5, 2019 / coke - Mar 9, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 - Foreign languages not only for travellers or abroad workers
2 - Ashraf, your essay did not address the prompt discussion correctly. One only has to compare the original discussion instruction...
Writing Feedbacknokia1995 - Mar 4, 2019 / Holt - Mar 5, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2: Too much fast foods consumed and higher tax as some solution
2 - Hong, this was a very well written essay until you had to write the concluding paragraph. The concluding paragraph...
Writing Feedbackyirapyirap - Mar 3, 2019 / Holt - Mar 4, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - ANIMAL ADOPTIONS
3 - Thanks a lot Ms Rose. I'm very grateful when receiving your feedback. I will be more careful and try...
Writing Feedbackthaole181 - Mar 3, 2019 / thaole181 - Mar 5, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: LEFT WALLET WITH A FRIEND DURING HOLIDAY.
2 - Dear Harman8484, Please don't use "i". You should use capital letter "I" in stead. As far asI remember the...
Writing FeedbackHarman8484 - Mar 3, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 6, 2019
|IELTS: no government restrictions for creative artists and their work
3 - Asit, you have written 347 words. You dedicate all of your time to writing the task, and no time...
Writing Feedbackasitit490 - Mar 3, 2019 / Holt - Mar 4, 2019
|Social media (Advantages and Disadvantages)
3 - Zoheb, nice name, just a quick observation. On the third paragraph, second sentence, you doubled the "our". Doubling words...
Writing FeedbackYopi - Mar 3, 2019 / buckmore - Mar 6, 2019
|IELTS writing task 1. How to build your own water clock.
3 - Ngo, you must remember that the Task 1 essay requires a total of 4 paragraphs, not 4. You have...
Writing Feedbackngothanhnam2211 - Mar 2, 2019 / Holt - Mar 3, 2019
|The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offense?
Writing FeedbackChrissmccandless - Mar 2, 2019 / Chrissmccandless - Mar 4, 2019
|Nowadays children are more undisciplined because their parents are more busy with their career.
3 - Knobs, your opening paraphrase is confusing. It does not make sense. Although you provided a proper extent response to...
Writing FeedbackHAOss - Mar 2, 2019 / Holt - Mar 3, 2019
|Ielts task 2: many people try to look younger than their age, causes and opinion
3 - Osha, try to use descriptive adjectives instead of general reference adjectives to help heighten the clarity of your work....
Writing FeedbackOsha - Mar 1, 2019 / Holt - Mar 3, 2019
|Write traffic jams and housing problem (IELTS)
3 - Seethal, while the examiner will accept US spelling for certain words, you are still taking a British English based...
Writing Feedbackseethal - Mar 1, 2019 / Holt - Mar 3, 2019
|Some people believe that a rising petrol price is the best way to deal with traffic and pollution.
2 - Please try to write a minimum of three sentences for your opening paraphrase and summary conclusion paragraphs. The 3...
Writing FeedbackLarissa Linh - Feb 28, 2019 / Holt - Mar 1, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2 - Advertisements - drawbacks and benefits
3 - Truc, this is not a comparison essay. This is a single opinion essay whose response is based upon one...
Writing FeedbackTrcQynh - Feb 28, 2019 / Holt - Mar 1, 2019
|Writing task 1 about the line graph regarding household savings (Ielts)
Writing Feedbackmrbi1408 - Feb 28, 2019 / mrbi1408 - Mar 1, 2019
|Write a short paragraph about the problems associated with an increase in the usage of car.
2 - Hi Quang. Since you did not specify whether this paragraph should be written UK or US English, I decided...
Writing FeedbackKenss - Feb 28, 2019 / Holt - Mar 1, 2019
|Coins and paper money will soon be replaced by credit and back cards
NEW - IELTS TASK 2: COins and paper money will soon be replaced by credit and back cards. DO you agree...
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|A training for future employment is more significant than the provision of broad-based education
2 - It is better to put some examples in the body paragraphs The the first sentence of the second...
Writing Feedbackswaysbothways - Feb 27, 2019 / robinm147 - Feb 28, 2019
|Ielts task 2: people sleep less than before, causes and effects
5 - In the second paragraph, you started off with a discussion regarding how social media keeps people awake. Then, without...
Writing FeedbackOsha - Feb 27, 2019 / Holt - Mar 2, 2019
|The chart shows the average class size class in 6 countries
3 - Hello! I like the fact that you have an introduction paragraph before you jump into the bar graph details,...
Writing Feedbackbaoan - Feb 27, 2019 / DoctorWho - Feb 27, 2019
|Topic: Life in the city. "150-200 words"
Writing FeedbackNieo - Feb 26, 2019 / Nieo - Feb 27, 2019
|Space exploration - is it necessary to continue this costly project?
3 - Sheetal, it does not seem like you are writing a research paper here. It feels like you are responding...
Writing Feedbackdrzee - Feb 25, 2019 / Holt - Feb 26, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2: MEN AND WOMEN'S JOBS ACCORDING TO THEIR QUALITIES
3 - Try to avoid presenting over-used expressions such as "more and more" in the presentation. These memorized phrases tend to...
Writing Feedbackchimmy88 - Feb 24, 2019 / Holt - Feb 25, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: IS ART AN USEFUL SUBJECT TO STUDY?
3 - @october24 I think you forgot that there are English words that are pronounced the same, but are spelled differently...
Writing Feedbackoctober24 - Feb 24, 2019 / Holt - Feb 25, 2019
|Writing task 1 : adults' study and how the costs of courses should be shared
Writing FeedbackHammy - Feb 24, 2019 / Hammy - Feb 25, 2019
|IELTS - Fixed punishments nevertheless of circumstances?
Writing Feedbackngokhoa99 - Feb 24, 2019 / ngokhoa99 - Feb 25, 2019
|Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life
3 - Consider using more descriptive adjectives in your essay instead of simple words such as "a long period of time"....
Writing Feedbackrobinm147 - Feb 24, 2019 / Holt - Feb 25, 2019
|Due to the internet invention, the world is getting smaller by connecting people - task 2
Writing FeedbackSushine510 - Feb 24, 2019 / Holt - Feb 25, 2019
|Is it more beneficial to play sport in team than in individual? ielts writting task 2
4 - thanks a lot Holt for pointing out my mistakes. i appreciate and will improve my skills in writing...
Writing Feedbacknhuxuan - Feb 24, 2019 / nhuxuan - Feb 25, 2019
|IELTS: Advantages and Disadvantages of Student Gap Year - teenagers dillema
3 - Sunil, you have to practice timed writing of these essays. There is absolutely no way you can write over...
Writing Feedbacksunilgrowwer1 - Feb 23, 2019 / Holt - Feb 24, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2. The topic is about talent in art.
2 - Ngo, try to avoid writing run-on sentences. A run-on sentence is identified as a very long sentence that has...
Writing Feedbackngothanhnam2211 - Feb 23, 2019 / Holt - Feb 24, 2019
|Recidivism - Ielts writing: Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the 1st punishment
2 - Tranh, this essay cannot be reviewed properly for two reasons. The first, is that you have not provided the...
Writing Feedbacktranthaiha - Feb 22, 2019 / Holt - Feb 23, 2019
|Topic: Veganism is becoming popular to its numerous benefits. To what extent do you agree?
3 - Nguyen, the essay will get an automatic failing score for not having been written using the minimum 250 word...
Writing FeedbackTrucLynn123 - Feb 22, 2019 / Holt - Feb 23, 2019
|Writing task 2: the necessary of music - traditional music and international music
3 - thank you so much, i can't believe that i receive a detailed comments as yours thank you, thank you.......
Writing FeedbackHammy - Feb 22, 2019 / Hammy - Feb 24, 2019
|Consumer devices in the UK IELTS task 1 : The table chart
3 - Ngoc, the whole essay shows that you do not understand how to use connecting words to create an understandable...
Writing Feedbackngocdn - Feb 22, 2019 / Holt - Feb 23, 2019
|IELTS Essay: Sharing the Information (the most significant for human) - Writing Task 2
Writing Feedbackckraysun - Feb 21, 2019 / ckraysun - Feb 22, 2019
|IELTS writing essay: Should we legalize the right to die?
3 - Nguyen, unless you provide the complete prompt when you post your essay, it will be difficult to do a...
Writing FeedbackthuyEDHANU - Feb 21, 2019 / Holt - Feb 22, 2019
|IELTS ESSAY: Failure is proof that the desire wasn't strong enough
3 - Great esaay Hangtan! I just have a few things to add: - Try to vary your sentence structures more....
Writing Feedbackhangtan - Feb 20, 2019 / ngokhoa99 - Feb 21, 2019
|Sustainable development - government should spend money on railways rather than roads
Writing Feedbackhanh244 - Feb 20, 2019 / Holt - Feb 20, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2: Using punishment as a way to deal with challenging behaviour in children...
Writing FeedbackBee426 - Feb 19, 2019 / Holt - Feb 20, 2019
|Language: Scientists say that in the future humanity will speak the same language.
2 - Tran, you cannot say "thousand of decade ago". A decade is equal to 10 years, which is a singular...
Writing FeedbackDung Tran - Feb 18, 2019 / Holt - Feb 19, 2019
|The percentage of tourists to England who visited attractions in Brighton.
2 - The percentage of people visiting to Pavilion and Pier. because you made mistake with the subject of proportion ...
Writing Feedbacknguyenhieu209 - Feb 18, 2019 / Dung Tran - Feb 18, 2019
|Poor people and people from rural areas and universal education
2 - Lien, please remember to time yourself during the pencil practice test. Always allot at least 10 minutes of editing...
Writing Feedbacklynn1901 - Feb 18, 2019 / Holt - Feb 19, 2019
|Do you agree or disagree with this statement? "Watching TV is a waste of time for children".
Writing Feedbackanphuonglinh155 - Feb 18, 2019 / Holt - Feb 19, 2019
|Parents, who choose private education for their kids, allowed to not pay state education taxes?
3 - Thank you!...
Writing Feedbackngokhoa99 - Feb 17, 2019 / ngokhoa99 - Feb 18, 2019
|IELTS:In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water...
2 - Hi, I think your skill in English is apparent, but I don't think you focused enough on the prompt...
Writing Feedbacksinhaprerna1112 - Feb 17, 2019 / TJLuschen - Feb 18, 2019
|Some People think that watching Sports is wastage of time during leisure time
6 - Hello Nazim The MS Word autocorrect function is of great assistance to spot your mistakes. Personally, I use Grammarly...
Writing Feedbackna57zim - Feb 16, 2019 / coke - Feb 18, 2019
|People living in large cities face many problems in their everytime life.
4 - You are welcome. Please remember that "advice" is non-countable singular, so it should be "Thank you so much for...
Writing Feedbacktamnguyenx - Feb 16, 2019 / TJLuschen - Feb 17, 2019
|IELTS; The advertising has been widespread in the world. A complete restriction necessary?
2 - Tran, good job on the direct response to the extent essay. Further applause is required because you knew well...
Writing FeedbackDung Tran - Feb 16, 2019 / Holt - Feb 16, 2019
|Psychology and health - they both are intricately connected
3 - Steph, there is a bigger and far greater problem in your essay than just the simple structure and missing...
Writing Feedbackmushimushi - Feb 16, 2019 / Holt - Feb 16, 2019
|Advantages and disadvantages when comparing pubic transport with private cars.
6 - @TJLuschen Thanks for your detailed correction. This is actually the second I wrote this sort of "quotation essay", as...
Writing Feedbackgviiivayh - Feb 15, 2019 / gviiivayh - Feb 15, 2019
|IELTS - The controversial law that protects the person who is being accused of a crime.
3 - Thanks TJLuschen! I really agree with your comments. As for the last body paragraph, I probably got distracted and...
Writing Feedbackngokhoa99 - Feb 14, 2019 / ngokhoa99 - Feb 15, 2019
|The older generation tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think, behave
2 - Zichen, you should not wrote more than 300 words for this essay. You do not have enough time to...
Writing Feedbackbobbyw - Feb 13, 2019 / Holt - Feb 13, 2019
|Internet and food - has it improved the way people live?
3 - M'hammed , I am sorry but I cannot continue to review this essay based on the 4 scoring bands....
Writing FeedbackMedKabbaj - Feb 12, 2019 / Holt - Feb 13, 2019
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