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|The table shows the the demand for bananas and coffee in 5 countries over a 6 year period
Writing FeedbackKaterina0686 - Jul 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 28, 2016
|Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment.Why is this happening ,and what
8 - Hi, Rudi Thanks for your suggestion on my essay, I really appreciate it, So, Here my some corrections: ...
Writing Feedbackrodiwo - Jul 27, 2016 / Risty01 - Jul 30, 2016
|IELTS: People do unhealthy activities. Why and give solutions.
3 - Hi Keely, it is really nice to see that finally the moderator in this forum release your account from...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 29, 2016
|IELTS Task2: Children are forced to study even their leisure time. Is that a good practice?
5 - Hi. Here is my opinion Pressure is a noun. You should say:may parents put pressure on their children to...
Writing FeedbackFreeman_ps1983 - Jul 27, 2016 / huynhngocminh99 - Jul 31, 2016
|In many countries of the world few people earn extremely high salary
8 - Furthermore, we should ensure that money doesn't does not lie in hands of ... In academic writing...
Writing Feedbacksinchana - Jul 27, 2016 / Iforsa - Sep 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2.Q.INCREASE AIR TICKET PRICE TO REDUCE AIR TRAFFIC
4 - The salad days of third millennium has seen Although there are few arguments in favour , I am of...
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 26, 2016 / eddies - Jul 28, 2016
|First trial of IELTS writing test sample (Task 1) before the real IELTS
6 - You got a point there, Ivy. My biggest obstacle is to transfer the concept from my mind into the...
Writing Feedbackabstracism - Jul 26, 2016 / abstracism - Jul 29, 2016
|IELTS: SHOULD PARENTS HELP CHILDREN WITH THEIR HOMEWORK OR NOT?
Writing FeedbackDaniel1998 - Jul 26, 2016 / Daniel1998 - Jul 28, 2016
|Everyone should receive education on a field which is totally interested, without any gender barrier
3 - Hi View, well, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope you find this website to be helpful as...
Writing FeedbackWeevil - Jul 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 26, 2016
|Immigrants from rural to urban areas: Effects and Solutions.
3 - Hi Nguyen, I would like to try to assess you based on IELTS writing band descriptor of task 2....
Writing Feedbackgiangnt248 - Jul 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 28, 2016
|Essay about work/life balance IELTS TASK 2
4 - Hai timea I think you didn't spend enough time to analyze and understand the question. The question clearly asks...
Writing FeedbackTimeaL - Jul 25, 2016 / jobymonpj - Jul 26, 2016
|COLLEGEAPP: Assume that 're in a position of leadership in your country and write an academic Essay
3 - Hi Mark, I can see that you have the most comprehensive feedback here from one of our EF contributors...
Writing Feedbackmarkcho0106 - Jul 25, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 25, 2016
|The protection for endangered animal species and your opinions.
7 - Hi Nguyen, thank you for appreciating our work here on EF and you can be rest assured that we...
Writing Feedbackgiangnt248 - Jul 25, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 28, 2016
|Do you agree with the saying: "Traveling broadens your minds" ?
4 - No Worries at all Ho and thank you for appreciating our work here on EF, rest assured that we...
Writing Feedbackthphuong1911 - Jul 25, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 26, 2016
|The Internet provides us many valuable things but also cause some problems; IELTS task
4 - Hi Yingying, welcome to EF! :) To avoid confusion, I reckon that for the next practice you need...
Writing Feedbackmessityy - Jul 24, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 3, 2016
|Fresh tea leaves picking is the first step of manufacturing black tea; IELTS diagram
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 essay practice - Population Distribution in two different countries, two different year
4 - Both forecast and forecasted are correct. I think it is more appropriate to use either elderly people or simply...
Writing Feedbackfatmajanna - Jul 24, 2016 / Daniel1998 - Jul 24, 2016
|IELTS Academic Writing task 2 - The Person Who Should Teach Children
Writing FeedbackRadhiyahFahra - Jul 23, 2016 / Laraib - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS: VIOLENCE SHOWN ON TV AND IN THE CINEMA MIGHT EXPLAIN YOUNG PEOPLE'S VIOLENT BEHAVIOUR
4 - ... this unpleasant phenomenon ought to be taken so that to reduce the amount of violence faced by our...
Writing FeedbackDaniel1998 - Jul 23, 2016 / giangnt248 - Jul 24, 2016
|[ielts Task 2] Increasing global demand of oil and gas, should continue explore?
2 - Hi yon959, your essay is very well for both skeleton and supporting ideas. However, I have some minor comments...
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jul 23, 2016 / Freeman_ps1983 - Jul 23, 2016
|IELTS; To read or not to read: That is a question - can we learn that way about a foreign country?
2 - but this approach is really suitable for everyone : However is this the best way for... yet for someone...
Writing FeedbackVictoria1015 - Jul 23, 2016 / madmoiselle - Jul 24, 2016
|GRE Argument:"WWAC radio station..."
2 - ... likely to choose the Internet rather than the radio station to meet their needs. ... radio station which...
Writing Feedbacksunshinelyb - Jul 23, 2016 / Victoria1015 - Jul 23, 2016
|It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm the friendship. Do you agree?
3 - Hi, Payal, I think you did not directly answer the question properly (maybe I am wrong). The question...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 22, 2016 / yon959 - Jul 23, 2016
|IELTS: WHETHER TRAVELLING AND WORKING ABROAD ARE THE ONLY REASONS TO LEARN A FOREIGN LANGUAGE OR NOT
2 - Hi, Here is my feedback: Consequently, it significantly increases their chances of getting a well-paying----. well paid and...
Writing FeedbackDaniel1998 - Jul 22, 2016 / payal1982 - Jul 22, 2016
|First hand smokers must not be allowed to smoke in public places. I agree with that statement
NEW - Smoking should be banned in public places The people, who smoke, are increasing/growing day by day through the...
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|ielts- should we provide children in rural communities with more schools or computers
7 - hai on the contrary with the view of many commented above, I think you have written a fairly good...
Writing Feedbackhuynhngocminh99 - Jul 22, 2016 / jobymonpj - Jul 28, 2016
|Is the improvement of schools the most important factor in creating a progressed, thriving country?
4 - Hi Hector, no worries at all, we are happy that you acknowledge our efforts here on EF, we do...
Writing Feedbacksinahector - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|People should speak a global language in a global word
4 - I mean you should show your idea in the first paragraph so the reader could easily get your points...
Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - Jul 20, 2016 / nguyendinhtuong - Jul 20, 2016
|More enhancements in security system due to the recent upsurge in the number of offences
6 - Hi Minh, thank you for acknowledging our insights here on EF. We do strive to provide you with the...
Writing Feedbackhuynhngocminh99 - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|IELTS: individuals are more and more dependent or independent.
4 - These days, there has been much debate about whether individuals are ... ... dependent at work or some critical...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 20, 2016 / messityy - Jul 27, 2016
|The percentage of average food budget family for eating in restaurant is depicted in the pie charts
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 20, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 20, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - More and more measures to improve the security in the urban area
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 20, 2016 / kantyjang - Jul 20, 2016
|Why money are very important factor in today's world?
5 - Hi Alvius, indeed, you need to practice more in order to create a good essay. Now, it will not...
Writing FeedbackAlviusTinambunan - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 2, 2016
|IELTS: The qualities of life of people in big cities are worse. Give causes and measures.
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 25, 2016
|pursue a career, new experiences, knowledge; attending a college or university can fulfill all of it
4 - Hi Payal ! Is this an ielts essay? If it is,I think the first pagragraph must be an introduction....
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 19, 2016 / huynhngocminh99 - Jul 20, 2016
|Educated means succcesful? Uneducated persons have behaviors that educated people should be learned.
2 - Hi rodrigo, - ... need in the world to attend to secondary school - ... uneducated persons have...
Writing Feedbackrodrigoarmua - Jul 19, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 27, 2016
|Government spending on the internet - is it the most appropriate use of money? IELTS task 2
7 - All around the world, extraordinary sums of money ... Hello this is my introduction Such some regions...
Writing Feedbackhuynhngocminh99 - Jul 19, 2016 / adip - Aug 11, 2016
|IELTS: Is it the only effective way to reduce crime that increasing the number of police officers?
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 19, 2016 / Lansium - Jul 19, 2016
|The diagrams illustrate the growth of Salmon, one of the species of big fish. IELTS Task 1 practice
7 - Hello mister, thank you for the feedback that you give to me before, I also want to give some...
Writing Feedbackakbartaufiq25 - Jul 19, 2016 / grintdevereaux30 - Jul 31, 2016
|At universities and colleges, sports and social activities vs. Classes and libraries
Writing FeedbackSoniasa - Jul 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 19, 2016
|GRE Argument Essay : Accepting government funding for Grandview Symphony
6 - hii, here is my correction for your essay ;) before establishing the neccesitynecessity profile guest musciancsmusician s to...
Writing Feedbackcod3r - Jul 18, 2016 / bbcheesecake14 - Aug 19, 2016
|To better myself and progress in life... Essay about the story of my life.
3 - Hi Juan, thank you for sharing the story of your life in this essay. It is indeed an inspiration...
Writing FeedbackJuanSebastianR - Jul 18, 2016 / fatmajanna - Jul 19, 2016
|Students learn better when they are not threatened with possible failure. Do you agree or disagree.
3 - Some students might get better off with learning when they realize about... Not every individual in the universe...
Writing Feedbackessen - Jul 18, 2016 / kantyjang - Jul 19, 2016
|This is a religious meditation. It talks about our received graces.
5 - No worries at all Nguyen, I hope the remarks were helpful and even more so, useful in your revision....
Writing Feedbacknguyenvannam - Jul 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 19, 2016
|IELTS 2 - Modern Technology influence on access to important data
5 - Hello Fatma, I am very happy to see your essay because your essay is well structured and the flow...
Writing Feedbackfatmajanna - Jul 18, 2016 / mahdinurianto25 - Aug 3, 2016
|IELTS: mathematics and philosophy are too difficult, so they should be made optional by students.
5 - I think it's better to spend equal room for argument in both sides. You could contribute more on supporting...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 18, 2016 / nguyendinhtuong - Jul 19, 2016
|In about 140 words write a paragraph about the importance of doing exercises
4 - Hi Quyen, indeed, WELCOME the the team, it's always good to welcome yet another member of the team and...
Writing Feedbacklethibichquyen - Jul 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 18, 2016
|Writing Practice: USA Summer Camp job application (Need Correction)
3 - Hi Wilson, please find find additional help below; - I'm a College student in college from Taiwan, -...
Writing FeedbackWilson_Chen - Jul 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 18, 2016
|The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
Writing Feedbackmuathuthattuyet - Jul 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 19, 2016
|Discuss The Effects of Unplanned Urban Expansion
4 - hii, here is my correction ;) grownig >> growing umempoyment >> unemployment accommadation >> accommodation however, absoulutely...
Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - Jul 17, 2016 / bbcheesecake14 - Aug 19, 2016
|Governments spend a lot money on improving Internet access. Why? Is it the most appropriate use?
7 - Hi An. You presented your ideas in a very clearly way. I really like the way you arrange your...
Writing Feedbackannguyen - Jul 17, 2016 / huynhngocminh99 - Jul 20, 2016
|IELTS task2: Global warming and deforestation? Which has more devastating impact on our world?
2 - Phonepasong, I can see that you have gained a lot of improvements relating to the flow of ideas and...
Writing FeedbackPhonepasong - Jul 17, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 17, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - The diagram reveals how to use an automatic photo booth
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 20, 2016
|Daily tasks without meeting people face to face - effects it may have on individuals and the society
2 - Hello There are a few stylistic/grammar adjustments that can be applied to your text. They are as follows:...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 17, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Jul 17, 2016
|You have received a gift of money. What would you buy from these options?
4 - Hi Payal, thank you for acknowledging our feedback. While you're at your revision, mind the following; - the...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 20, 2016
|What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? (wheat)
5 - Hi Payal, it's absolutely great to hear that you are practicing everyday in order to improve your writing. Indeed,...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 18, 2016
|Topic: Leading countries must contain a majority of elderly people. Do you agree with?
2 - Hello Your text does make certain sense but it could use being improved stylistically. The suggested adjustments are...
Writing Feedbackfazilcansizoglu - Jul 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Jul 15, 2016
|IELTS: In many countries, there are 24 -hour TV programs. Is it a positive or negative development?
2 - Keely, I would like to suggest you to write based on IELTS writing band descriptors of Task 2. It...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 15, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 15, 2016
|Human activity have posed a serious threat to the environment.
4 - Thanks so much ichanpants89. You have motivated me to write more as I am learning a lot. I will...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 14, 2016 / payal1982 - Jul 15, 2016
|Pros and cons of taking year off and traveling as a backpacker or working in a small company; IELTS2
6 - Thanks everyone's wonderful help and advice! Sure I will write more and hope to recive your comments and...
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jul 14, 2016 / yon959 - Jul 17, 2016
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