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|Bill Gates tried to elaborate several problems that humanity is faced all over the world
2 - Hello @fadhilmd25, I would like to give some suggestion for your writing. Here my advice: 1. .......
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 15, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 15, 2016
|INTERNET: The Drawback and Vantage
2 - Hello Your text is quite readable, but you could use adjusting/rewriting some of the sentences as follows: ...
Writing FeedbackJnur - Sep 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 15, 2016
|There are several ways of transport with different CO2 emissions (measured in kilograms). IELTS
2 - Hello Ryan31, firstly, I think you spent more word at writing task 1. you wrote approximatel 262 that...
Writing Feedbackryan31 - Sep 15, 2016 / PHA2016 - Sep 15, 2016
|The least popular transportation chosen by the workers is cycling or walking
4 - Hi Kiki. These are my thoughts about your writing. In this moment, I only focus on content of your...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 15, 2016
|Summary of Article, the title is "A Musician Creates an Americana Soundtrack for the Colorado River"
2 - hello almajid, it was an interesting topic and also i really appreciate with your efforts to do this essay....
Writing FeedbackALMAJID06 - Sep 15, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 15, 2016
|The bar chart shows amount of carbon dioxide emissions from different forms of transportation
4 - Hello mem77, here i left comment for you (The) table gives ==> (you can change with describes,...
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 15, 2016 / Fira28 - Sep 19, 2016
|The proportion of energy which is produced in one decade, within 1995-2005
2 - The pie charts show the proportion of different types of energy being produced in 1 decade(over a ten-year...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 15, 2016 / gigiqarib - Sep 15, 2016
|TIME FOR KNOWING BEFORE TRAVELING.
2 - hello vkwssh, it was a very interesting essay and i really appreciate with your efforts. but i have some...
Writing FeedbackVK WSSH - Sep 15, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 15, 2016
|It Cannot Be Denied, There are the Pros and Cons of Using Internet for People Appearing in This Life
3 - i give some correction for you.. The Internet is has completely fulfilled individuals ... do business and other activities...
Writing FeedbackAsma Raj - Sep 15, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 15, 2016
|Animal Rights : a contradictive perspectives about The Rule
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 15, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 16, 2016
|Most Americans Think Burgers Are Healthy
3 - It is my suggestion: ... Americans who had ordered a tasty burgertasty burgers instead of healthful ... As...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 15, 2016 / swr10 - Sep 16, 2016
|Nowadays, people assume that muscles are the main factor which determine athlete performance
5 - hy nice summarys, there are few suggestion for you Until up recently Right now, people (...) athlete performances...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 15, 2016 / BAMS14 - Sep 15, 2016
|To winning a match, race or competition, an athlete uses not only his muscles but also extreme focus
Writing FeedbackAlamsyah Ismail - Sep 15, 2016 / Fatirtalent - Sep 23, 2016
|Bill Gates' presentation about diseases, education and technology evolution
4 - ... number of children died who (have not been 5years) before ages 5 Caused (the cause) of malaria...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 15, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 15, 2016
|The Old Issues : Gender and Education as Opposite of Globalisation Era.
3 - Yo! here are some feedbacks i got for your essay 1)The the discrimination is an irrelevant in...
Writing FeedbackFirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 15, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 16, 2016
|This Article Highlight Related The Effect Of Global Warming
5 - hello mr.agung, nice to see your essay and also i really appreciate with your efforts to do this essay....
Writing Feedbackagungdanprakoso - Sep 15, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 16, 2016
|Technology as A Supplement in Education
4 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections ... more attractive for students so it will...
Writing Feedbackabdasyari93 - Sep 15, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 16, 2016
|The stress is the body's way of responding to any kind of demand or threat
4 - Hai deanarin i have some advice to you What is the meaning of stress? "The definition of stress...
Writing Feedbackdeanarin - Sep 15, 2016 / Alamsyah Ismail - Sep 15, 2016
|Education Is the Key to Breaking the Cycle of Violence - Summary article
3 - Hello It'll be better if you restructure some of your sentences as suggested below: "School should [...]...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 15, 2016
|As we attempt to focus, the whole other areas has less brightness and we tolerate the blur
2 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections When we carefully noticed that as we attempttried...
Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 15, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 15, 2016
|The table shows percentage of travellers per form of transport and average age of a traveller.
4 - hello andika08. here i left my suggestion for you. The table shows ==> (you can paraphrase the word...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 15, 2016 / Att98 - Sep 28, 2016
|When people focus on one particular object, they automatically do not notice anything else
2 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections When people focus on one particular object, they...
Writing Feedbackfaizahadina - Sep 15, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 15, 2016
|The ability to stay focused positively relates to the quality of athlete's performance
2 - Hello Your text will sound better if you rewrite some of the sentences as suggested below: Athlete's...
Writing Feedbackmawahi bussalam - Sep 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 15, 2016
|Do a weekday vegetarian for a better life (TED Summary)
2 - =our meat diet behavior has caused many problems. Eating hamburger routinely [need to mention how many times...
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Sep 15, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 15, 2016
|Athlete is not only about muscles but also visual abilities
2 - hai lalsky I have some suggestions for you please check your wordstoo many use not only, but also ......
Writing FeedbackLALSKI - Sep 15, 2016 / ryan31 - Sep 15, 2016
|White Gulls Dependent On Ice Are Disappearing From The Arctic
4 - Hi Andika Let me give you some advice... Life in the world is not(isnt) just humans (but) there...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 15, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 15, 2016
|"Reasons for study" four out of five people under 26 take part in courses because of job opportunity
3 - Hallo Windvalley, There are a little corrective, ...majority of young people study because of careerthey want to have...
Writing FeedbackWindvalley - Sep 15, 2016 / David54 - Sep 15, 2016
|Too much, too young should schooling start at age
Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 15, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 16, 2016
|Write a paragraph ( 40 - 50 words ) telling your feeling about a traffic accident happened
3 - Hi! I have some advice for you: Avoid the repetition of "I" and add some conjunctions to make...
Writing Feedbackledungmi - Sep 15, 2016 / kiki23 - Sep 15, 2016
|Poverty Among Seniors has dropped - Summary Article from Times
4 - hai classmate I have several suggestions for you there are too many percent maybe you can use it in...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 15, 2016 / ryan31 - Sep 15, 2016
|Imposing restrictions on the acceptable amount of trash may reduce the amount of waste
3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections ... restrictions on the acceptable amount of trash...
Writing Feedbackgigiqarib - Sep 15, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 15, 2016
|Logging effects: habittat loss, environment pollution, and climate change
7 - hi Miss Qara ==>Impacts of logging industry makecause the effect untold harmharm untold effect to the environment includes...
Writing FeedbackQaranew - Sep 15, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016
|Summary: What's wrong with our food system?
4 - Hallo bung ilham, actually your summary essay is good, but i have some advice to you ... been...
Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Sep 14, 2016 / Alamsyah Ismail - Sep 15, 2016
|Many birds migrating very long distances to breed and feed their youngsters
3 - Hi, BAMS14 As a read your summary, here I give you some suggestions. 1. "Many bird migrationregularly...
Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Sep 14, 2016 / dils - Sep 15, 2016
|There is no reason to show some special attitude toward people based on their age
3 - hello, I would like donate my thought about your work. the first, I concern that your grammar...
Writing FeedbackDmitryB - Sep 14, 2016 / arisandy14 - Sep 15, 2016
|Your health depends on where you live - from the TED summary
3 - At the beginning of the talks, = talk , Bill Davenhall, (...) Services Expert [need comma. an additional...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 14, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 15, 2016
|A great deal of the birds carry out the migration in every year
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Sep 14, 2016 / Qaranewlagi52 - Sep 19, 2016
|Men are more likely to sign up for the fitness membership, than women - according to the bar chart
3 - Hi Aris.. These are my thoughts to finalize your writing. I hope these can help you to improve your...
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Sep 14, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 15, 2016
|Student books: international visitors to New Zealand: reason for visit
Writing FeedbackMita22 - Sep 14, 2016 / BAMS14 - Sep 14, 2016
|After Africa's Sahara Desert, the next great desert is Taklimakan Desert
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 14, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 15, 2016
|Why you should experience a home stay in Thailand?
3 - Hi Almajid, we're on the same boat, I mean I'm still learning to compose better writing as well. So...
Writing FeedbackALMAJID14 - Sep 14, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 15, 2016
|Summarize TED video : Al Gore, New Thinking On The Climate Crisis
2 - hallo :) overall your writing has been good but there is a little error sentence. On that video,...
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 14, 2016 / ALMAJID14 - Sep 14, 2016
|Summary from Article Are Potatoes That Bad for You? ( Elizabeth Narins)
NEW - The main thing why potato has considerably bad reputation it has high glycemic index such as the pace of...
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|An increasing temperature on the planet can have domino-falling effects for the future of Earth
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Sep 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 14, 2016
|The incredible trips of Bird Migration
4 - Hi Mr. Patta. These are my suggestions for your summary. According to A passage, migration is commonly movement...
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Sep 14, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 15, 2016
|A global mobilization is required in order to tackle the Climate Crisis issue
2 - Hello Most of the sentences must be rewritten to sound better (and to make more sense). One of...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 14, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 14, 2016
|How many people became a fitness center members some years ago?
2 - Hi Shandy, below are my thoughts on your analysis. - women becomingbecame members of the fitness -...
Writing Feedbackarisandy14 - Sep 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 14, 2016
|Several holiday makers in New Zealand prefer to do such activities like walking, sightseeing, etc.
3 - Hi ALMAJID14, please find a few suggestions below in order to enhance your essay. "The bar chart illustrates...
Writing FeedbackALMAJID14 - Sep 14, 2016 / DmitryB - Sep 14, 2016
|Taklimakan Desert - dominated by sand dunes and extreme conditions and free from vegetation
2 - hay, Dioba. after reading your work, i have some advice that is perhaps useful for you. In the first...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Sep 14, 2016 / arisandy14 - Sep 14, 2016
|Birds generally travel to higher latitudes of the Northern Hemisphere to breed during a warm seasons
2 - Hi Rizaldo, please find a few suggestions below in order to enhance your essay. - but the renowned...
Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 14, 2016
|Fitness membership calculation in 30 years by gender
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 14, 2016 / Qaranewlagi52 - Sep 19, 2016
|Most Violent Crimes Are Wrongly Linked to Mental Illness - Summary article
3 - Many news talks[singular/plural issue] about person who has mental health problem wasthat responsible tofor committing violence. However, the...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 14, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 14, 2016
|Taklimakan desert occupy about 337.600 square km of northwestern China
3 - Hello Brother Let me give you some advices But some plant form has developed unique mechanism >> but...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 14, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Oct 7, 2016
|Multiple outdoor and indoor activities - The purpose of all tourists visiting New Zealand
2 - Kiki, There are a little correction, ... purposes of all tourists visiting New Zealand and is measured in...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 14, 2016 / David54 - Sep 14, 2016
|Police and Crime Prevention, a perspective opinion
2 - I found this essay easy to understand. here is my suggestion: in their cities[.]because the job of polices...
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 14, 2016 / rizaldohabibie - Sep 14, 2016
|Summary Article: The Stress-Free Guide to Making Healthy Eating Choices
2 - Hello It'll make your text sounding more professional if you apply the following adjustments to it: ...
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 14, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 14, 2016
|HOW TO TALK TO KIDS ABOUT THEIR WEIGHT (Summary)
2 - hi swr10 here are my suggestions keep writing! ==>Dr Shandra recommendsrecomendedthatto the parents have to help kids get...
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Sep 14, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 14, 2016
|Al Gore - how the behavior of people can effect the climate crisis?
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 14, 2016
|Birds abilities to navigate through very long distance has fascinating observers for centuries
2 - hi yonathan, here are my suggestions keep writing ! ==>from cold to warmer place ==>bird migration areis...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 14, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 14, 2016
|The most longest migration in our galaxy is observed among birds.
2 - aloha, let me give you my thoughts: What the indomitable animal in this world?(I think it is not...
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