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|Help proofread on a section of my Toefl essay "teachers should attend courses every 5 years."
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Jun 6, 2016 / natasha_139 - Jun 12, 2016
|Teenagers know what is best for them
2 - Cara, welcome to the EssayForum team! I hope you can find our feedback is fruitful towards your development in...
Writing FeedbackCARApck - Jun 5, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 5, 2016
|The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised - a lot of species come under threat.
NEW - The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised as increasing numbers of species come under threat. What can...
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|Increased the average human life span is the main reason of population aging.
3 - Thank you Ichan, yes unfortunately it takes about 50 minutes which is not appropriate for toefl exam...
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - Jun 5, 2016 / Nahid87 - Jun 5, 2016
|Only governments and large companies can make a difference; Task 2
2 - Lily, I can see that you have similar problems with your previous essay, and I would like to help...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Jun 5, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 6, 2016
|Direct communication is better than indirect communication such as letters, emails, and phone calls
3 - Lily, I would like to try to help you by assessing your essay based on 4 scoring criteria that...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Jun 5, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 6, 2016
|NARRATIVE essay: A MISTAKE THAT TAUGHT ME AN IMPORTANT LESSON
Writing Feedbackhanzy48 - Jun 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 5, 2016
|When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is point
3 - Is it an essay for IELTS of TOEFL? Please, edit your post and add this information. Also, include the...
Writing FeedbackAzamat98 - Jun 4, 2016 / rods2292 - Jun 4, 2016
|A comparison of people's sense towards crime and actual likelihood to be a victim - IELTS1
4 - Meireza, aside from others' feedback, I would like to suggest you that instead of separating "A comparison of ........................
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Jun 4, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 5, 2016
|GRE prompt ( argument ): Sufficient evidences for a small scale business loan ?
2 - ... the jazz music club cannot expect that much numbersmanyof jazz music fans, since an indigenous music club mostly...
Writing FeedbackROBINPHILIP - Jun 3, 2016 / lylreaganmac - Jun 3, 2016
|A leader should be a good speechmaker to convince people and a good listener of different opinions
Writing Feedbackmean_n90 - Jun 2, 2016 / hanzy48 - Jun 5, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - minimalize car usage, why and how?
5 - #CONCLUSION whats app Meirama your essay is good, i have a suggestion to your conclusion paragraph : you can...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - Jun 2, 2016 / wahyu - Jun 14, 2016
|I agree with the statement that art and music should be learned in school
5 - This can be a very good paradigm of writing! However, you could fortify it even further, in case, you...
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - Jun 2, 2016 / Azamat98 - Jun 4, 2016
|Imagination is a more valuable asset than experience (GRE topic)
8 - No worries at all Sang, i hope you do follow through with the corrections We suggested here on EF....
Writing Feedbackdudtkd85 - Jun 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2016
|EFFECT OF VIOLENCE ON TELEVISON TO CHILDRENS - IELTS 2
3 - Hi Meireza, here's additional assistance form my end. - The advancement of - technology ea ffects -...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Jun 1, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 2, 2016
|The United States became the most frequent winner of the hot-dog eating contest within two years
5 - Dear beauty17, The bar graph provides information about Nathan's hot dog eating contest which is conducted in Brooklyn's Coney...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Jun 1, 2016 / SHanafi - Jun 2, 2016
|Should drug addicts be jailed or rehabilitated? discuss both views and give your opinion
2 - hola levictore19, welcome to EssayForum team! :) This is a remarkable place to share all about essay writing, especially...
Writing Feedbacklevictoire19 - Jun 1, 2016 / Fadli_14 - Jun 1, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (PROBLEM OF FAST FOOD FOR CHILDREN AND HOW TO COPE THAT PROBLEM)
2 - Helo @rasedasda24 welcome to essay forum! For the first time i will remind you about the rule in this...
Writing Feedbackrasedasda24 - Jun 1, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 1, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Estimated percentage of car trips by purpose and gender of drivers, 2005
6 - Hi Irvin, Here are some corrections: -This is a breakdown of the figure for the number -that W...
Writing FeedbackIrvinhi - Jun 1, 2016 / MaximKlopunov99 - Jun 23, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 ; Children play computer games become pros and cons
2 - Furqanda, if you wish to know your prediction score for this essay, I would be really glad to assess...
Writing FeedbackBtihbk11 - Jun 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 1, 2016
|Four countries: US, Japan, Mexico and Germany scored big in the Hot Dog Eating Contest
4 - Hallo fadli, welcome to essay forum! It is nice to read your writing task 1. Especially your grammatical...
Writing FeedbackFadli_14 - May 31, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 1, 2016
|Whereas rehabilitation can heal druggies from the narcotic adiction, jail will give deterrent effect
4 - My introduction: Narcotics is treacherous. There are myriad number of people who used deadening drugs. Majority people say yes...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - May 31, 2016 / Irvinhi - Jun 1, 2016
|Some businesses find that when new employees join them after finishing their education, they lack...
Writing FeedbackNovi - May 31, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 1, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) Many people depend on their cars for everyday domestic, social and working
4 - Since automobile company provide sophisticated technology and also goodModern or Preliminary its a choice that i suggest -designedis it...
Writing FeedbackNovi - May 31, 2016 / Btihbk11 - Jun 1, 2016
|It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood.
3 - hello nahid, this is my suggestions to you. Living near the movie theater is my preferable to me...
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - May 31, 2016 / Meirama91 - May 31, 2016
|In my opinion foreign visitors should be given the choice to follow the local customs or behaviours
4 - hello theodore ! here some correction for you Tourism has become significantly vital to the variouscountries' economy ...
Writing FeedbackTheodore - May 31, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 2, 2016
|The advantages of living in a large city - a lot of opportunities and potential to develop
3 - Hi Huynh, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family. I hope you find this website valuable as...
Writing Feedbackngocloan - May 31, 2016 / justivy03 - May 31, 2016
|Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher.
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - May 30, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 1, 2016
|Toefl - Do you believe that online courses should replace classroom learning?
2 - without missing your job and studying in yourthe free time. but I believe that the possibility of interaction and...
Writing FeedbackMikermn - May 30, 2016 / jrojas21 - May 30, 2016
|Improved medical care. With many recent major breakthroughs in medication, humans are now accessible
4 - Hey nhanmi! There are some corrections as follows: With many recent major breakthroughs in medications , humans are...
Writing Feedbacknhanmi - May 30, 2016 / Nahid87 - May 31, 2016
|Is it right or wrong for children to engage in paid work to get a salary at the early age? Task 2
2 - Natt, in a real test, you need to play safe because there are many considerations that you should think...
Writing Feedbackabzabzabz - May 30, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 30, 2016
|Abstract for a Journal "STUDY ON PRUNING HEIGHTS ON GROWTH, DEVELOPMENT AND BIOMASS YIELD OF MORINGA
3 - Hi Tran, as much as I loved the uniformity of your essay, I had a hard time understanding the...
Writing Feedbacktkhoan1993 - May 30, 2016 / justivy03 - May 31, 2016
|TOEFL independent essay: Would you maintain your customs if moving to another country?
Writing FeedbackMikermn - May 30, 2016 / hamed54321 - May 30, 2016
|TOEFL independent writing:A Leader should have strong opinions and should not change his/her opinion
2 - Hi Huang, welcome to EssayForum :) I hope you can find this website is fruitful towards your development in...
Writing Feedbacknoalawyer - May 29, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 30, 2016
|You need to travel from your home to a place 40 miles away. Compare different kind of transportation
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - May 29, 2016 / tkhoan1993 - May 30, 2016
|It is the visitors' responsibilities to learn how to behave properly when they visit other countries
4 - Thank you so much for correcting my essay. I've found this website is very helpful and your comments are...
Writing Feedbackabzabzabz - May 29, 2016 / abzabzabz - May 30, 2016
|Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to have their friends around.
3 - I think, it is depending(depends) on everyone's attitude towards life. ... important role in our lives and consider (considered?)...
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - May 28, 2016 / Mikermn - May 30, 2016
|TASK1-The table below compares the average number of vehicles using three roads.
2 - Mersad, this essay 'flow of ideas' was okay, the information that you delivered was understandable. The introduction paragraph was...
Writing Feedbackmersad - May 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 28, 2016
|All over the world, children and adults are facing an increasing problem with excess weight.
3 - Hi Komoliddin, welcome to the EssayForum team :) This is the right place to develop your writing skills, especially...
Writing FeedbackKoma - May 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 30, 2016
|All students should have equal chance to register at the university.
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - May 27, 2016 / justivy03 - May 30, 2016
|IELTS 2. We have become depended upon bad news and the mass media are aware of this.
2 - Glad to read your essay again, Maxim! None of the strengths of your previous writing are lost in this...
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - May 27, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - May 27, 2016
|Children should be allowed to do paid work or not
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - May 27, 2016 / rozhnaz - May 27, 2016
|What is the most important thing in a relation?
3 - Hi Hamed, frankly you are good at writing, but you need more practice. Bear in mind the practice makes...
Writing Feedbackhamed54321 - May 27, 2016 / mersad - May 28, 2016
|If the world was ruled by female leaders, it would have been peaceful. Is it true?
3 - Subi, I can see that you got a very-comprehensive feedback from one of EssayForum contributors. I hope you can...
Writing FeedbackSDan - May 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 26, 2016
|Debate Essay Morality and Legalality of Abortion Paper
3 - I agree to every thought of yours. Abortion should not be permitted unless its unavoidable. Killing fetus is a...
Writing Feedbackabhay4556 - May 26, 2016 / cleokmoore - May 27, 2016
|Unhealthy lifestyle has been an increasing trend. Who should guide kids in the right direction?
Writing FeedbackSDan - May 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 27, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 (PRACTICE) - THE DANGERS OF CHEMICAL COMPOUND USAGE
4 - Nurul, I would like to try to assess you based on IELTS writing task 2 public band descriptors. ...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - May 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 27, 2016
|Some people believe that food adverts should be banned.Do you agree or disagree?
3 - Indeed, welcome to the big family of EssayForum, Zehra! You are very lucky to join us because we provide...
Writing Feedbackzombibezelye - May 26, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - May 26, 2016
|Inventors and doctors, both are important to our society and both are play their role wisely.
7 - Hy, Ram. It is a great chance to give some suggestions for your essay. Inventors are not as important...
Writing Feedbackppdev - May 26, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 26, 2016
|A COMPARISON THE EFFECT OF DOMESTIC PREPARED AND IMPORTED HERBAL MEDICAL PRODUCTS IN FEED ON EGG PR
Writing Feedbacktkhoan1993 - May 26, 2016 / tkhoan1993 - May 30, 2016
|The usage of chemical materials in food-making and maintenance has become a debatable issue.
3 - Hi Patric, aside from the corrections above that focused on your grammar, I would like to add that your...
Writing Feedbackpatricrioo - May 26, 2016 / justivy03 - May 26, 2016
|The teenager's decision for having a paid work is not a poor decison at all. IELTS TASK 2
3 - Hi Patric, here are my thoughts on your concerns. 1. In discussion and give opinion type, do we...
Writing Feedbackpatricrioo - May 25, 2016 / justivy03 - May 26, 2016
|Factors of unemployment and steps to solve it
6 - Hey, your essay is quite refreshing. You certainly have alot of ideas and creativity. I found some minor mistakes...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - May 25, 2016 / SDan - May 26, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 ; GLOBAL WARMING one of extremely serious problem
NEW - Our world encounters global warming as one of extremely serious problem. Global warming is a consequence of several factors....
Writing FeedbackBtihbk11 - May 25, 2016 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2 (PRACTICE) - UNEMPLOYEMENT CAUSE AND HOW TO SOLVE IT?
5 - Some aspects, such as migrations and global crisis, have givencritical vital contributions to rise up the number of ......
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - May 25, 2016 / patricrioo - May 31, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - Some support development in agriculture, such as farming industry
2 - Hi Rere, as much as I applaud you in noting the suggested approach on your essay, I would also...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - May 25, 2016 / justivy03 - May 25, 2016
|IELTS 2 - An increase the production of consumer goods results in the damage
2 - Hi Rere, here are some additional insights and corrections to your essay. -The highly increase ( increase is...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - May 25, 2016 / justivy03 - May 25, 2016
|The range of visitors who travelled Brighton attractions in England between 1980 and 2010.
3 - Lily, I notice that you still need to elaborate this essay further, since it only has 154 words. This...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - May 25, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 25, 2016
|"Choosing between a house and a business" - TOEFL Essay
4 - ... house show us the responsibility of us withfor our family. A house creates a stablesafe place for your...
Writing Feedbackwaterforce1205 - May 24, 2016 / madmoiselle - May 25, 2016
|World has changed speedily from manual era to digital era because of computers
3 - It was hard wayuneasy to recall all past data, someonepeople must the computer has made make workingmore efficiently ....
Writing FeedbackUvyL26 - May 24, 2016 / madmoiselle - May 25, 2016
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