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|Teaching a foreign language at primary school is better than secondary school. Discuss pros and cons
3 - Try to use words that are more academic by nature. These are words that do not create a casual...
Writing FeedbackKenvin Do - May 4, 2019 / Maria - May 4, 2019
|Parents' responsibility in children caring_ Argumentative essay
4 - @puppy1111 @Maria Thank you so much for giving constructive feedback. I will try my utmost :) :) :)...
Writing FeedbackVan_Anh_Meo - May 4, 2019 / Van_Anh_Meo - May 6, 2019
|Short essay on immigration (IELTS task 2)
4 - Are you trying to write an IELTS essay task 2? This essay is good. However, it seems that you...
Writing Feedbacklouisepham - May 3, 2019 / eddies - May 5, 2019
|WRITING PART: PROFITS OF READING BOOKS
2 - Grammar and composition would both need to be worked on. Try to also use formal/academic language to establish an...
Writing FeedbackHarryPii - May 3, 2019 / Maria - May 3, 2019
|The shopping sales on the Internet in four different sectors in Canada
4 - Maximize your space for essay writing through omitting the usage of words that are unnecessary. Evade repetitive lines that...
Writing Feedbacktonyynguyen97 - May 3, 2019 / Maria - May 3, 2019
|Statistics of underground station passengers in London during the period from 6am to 10pm.
Writing FeedbackChristinaduong - May 3, 2019 / Christinaduong - May 6, 2019
|METHODS Section: Factors that Influence the Destination Choice of International Students
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - May 2, 2019 / TriceLiu - May 2, 2019
|Meiko's fifth treasure story
2 - Your grasp of language is to be appreciated. Aside from this, however, I would recommend that you try to...
Writing FeedbackAnnaphan90 - May 2, 2019 / Maria - May 2, 2019
|Obesity solutions - More children in developed countries are becoming overweight
Writing Feedbackavinashksh - May 1, 2019 / avinashksh - May 2, 2019
|Nowadays, we all have the opportunity to learn things by ourselves using several sources.
4 - @TriceLiu thank you so much for your advice. I'll make treasure of them @Maria you pointed out my...
Writing Feedbackalessandra_dac - May 1, 2019 / alessandra_dac - May 2, 2019
|TASK 1 _ The level of satisfaction with the healthcare system in four countries in different years.
Writing FeedbackBaotram - May 1, 2019 / Baotram - May 2, 2019
|Ielts-Writing-Task2-divorce rates skyrocketing recently
Writing Feedbacktonyleekakit - May 1, 2019 / tonyleekakit - May 9, 2019
|The inconvenient that a computer bring to us
2 - Watch out for the forms of the words you are using, especially if you are using multi-purpose ones that...
Writing Feedbackhaiorss - Apr 30, 2019 / Maria - Apr 30, 2019
|Right vs wrong for children - IELTS Writing
Writing Feedbackwidyakusu - Apr 30, 2019 / widyakusu - May 2, 2019
|TASK 1- PEOPLE ATE FIVE NO-MEAT PORTIONS PER DAY
2 - One humble suggestion from me: This bar graphic doesn't indicate clearly each percentage of these three groups in...
Writing Feedbacknhulong2201 - Apr 30, 2019 / hhching126 - Apr 30, 2019
|Money and social status as a factor for a career choice
3 - Many thanks for correcting my essay again! Your comment is definitely helpful for me, but I have a little...
Writing FeedbackWendy15 - Apr 28, 2019 / Wendy15 - Apr 28, 2019
|The immigrants should whether form their community or adopt the new local culture
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Apr 27, 2019 / Linh Dieu - Apr 28, 2019
|Today some people have to work away from their family. What are the advantages and disadvantages?
4 - Dear Maria, thank you very much for your helpful comments. I have read them very carefully. Best regards, Hoa...
Writing Feedbackdohoa - Apr 27, 2019 / dohoa - May 11, 2019
|Write a paragraph about your accomlishment you have had
3 - @Honglinh1996 Given that you are only given a paragraph, I would opt that you try to be straightforward and...
Writing FeedbackHonglinh1996 - Apr 27, 2019 / Maria - Apr 27, 2019
|ELECTRICITY IS ONE OF THE MOST IMPORTANT DISCOVERIES
3 - @Krystal318 Technicalities-wise, I would recommend that you try to use more appropriate (ie. words whose meanings are more in...
Writing FeedbackKrystal318 - Apr 26, 2019 / Maria - Apr 27, 2019
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Education from school or parents?
4 - @trinhmaicoi Try to not be repetitive when you're constructing your essay. When you find yourself repeating the same...
Writing Feedbacktrinhmaicoi - Apr 25, 2019 / Maria - Apr 26, 2019
|IELTS 12 Test 8 Task1: Electricity is produced by geothermal energy
3 - Thanks Eddy! Actually there were in total four paragraphs and I accidentally made the first on in...
Writing Feedbackhhching126 - Apr 25, 2019 / hhching126 - Apr 29, 2019
|All School Subjects or Subjects of Interest - Ielts Task 2 Essay
4 - Thank you so much for your valuable advice, it's really helpful, I'll try to fix my essay. Thanks...
Writing FeedbackErica Atlas - Apr 25, 2019 / Erica Atlas - Apr 28, 2019
|Abolishing public transit fares to cut chronic traffic congestion
3 - @nguyenphuonganh Like what I tell most people, try to be more concise with your language. When you're constructing sentences,...
Writing Feedbacknguyenphuonganh - Apr 25, 2019 / Maria - Apr 26, 2019
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|The frequency of people in the USA consumed in fast food eateries - Ielts cambridge 12 task 1 test 5
4 - Firstly, I would suggest switching up your usage of verbs/words to have more appropriate content. Let's take a...
Writing Feedbackmamemai - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|Space exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year. -Ielts Task 2 Essay
4 - I recommend that you try to be more concise with your language, especially because you are dealing with word...
Writing Feedbackshaminder42 - Apr 24, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|The significance of the music: traditional and international - IELTS 2
3 - I think you should change other ways to express the sentence That's the significant of music. . It's somehow...
Writing FeedbackEdmund19990717 - Apr 23, 2019 / trvaanh - Apr 24, 2019
|Specialization in one sport at an early age
2 - You can improve your essay through incorporating more substantiated content in its entirety. Try to evade laziness when it...
Writing FeedbackTra My - Apr 23, 2019 / Maria - Apr 23, 2019
|IELTS AC 12 Test 7 - the perceptions of high speed rail in a country
Writing Feedbackhhching126 - Apr 23, 2019 / Maria - Apr 23, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1 Line Graph - number of consumers who spent money on a books in some European Countries
3 - I really appreciate your useful advice😄 I will try to modify it to improve my writing skills😄...
Writing FeedbackHanhan0109 - Apr 23, 2019 / Hanhan0109 - Apr 26, 2019
|Should state and local authorities offer tertiary education to all students with no charge?
Writing Feedbackktran88 - Apr 22, 2019 / ktran88 - Apr 22, 2019
|If you had the power to change anything in your country, what would you most like to change and why?
4 - @gviiivayh Thank you a lot for your advice. i always feel that i add too much unnecessary information in...
Writing FeedbackKrystal318 - Apr 22, 2019 / Krystal318 - Apr 23, 2019
|Space Exploration and Humankind Existence - IELTS TASK 2
5 - There should always be a balance when it comes to constructing your sentences. While I generally advise people to...
Writing FeedbackLincoln1608 - Apr 20, 2019 / Maria - Apr 24, 2019
|Hard Work vs Luck - what determines people's success?
5 - Hello Your opening and ending paragraph are quite the same. You both used "play an important role". I suggest...
Writing Feedbacktoannguyenduc - Apr 19, 2019 / Krystal318 - Apr 26, 2019
|IELTS2 - It's students, not teachers, choice to learn the material. Who's of control over studying?
3 - Thanks a lot for your comments, I didn't think I would get such a great and in-depth response to...
Writing FeedbackPracticeEssay445 - Apr 18, 2019 / PracticeEssay445 - Apr 22, 2019
|TOEIC- What are the advantages and disdvantages of teenagers having jobs?
3 - @joanne1203 I suggest rephrasing your first paragraph to answer more directly to the question. The phrasing of the question...
Writing Feedbackjoanne1203 - Apr 18, 2019 / Maria - Apr 18, 2019
|Writing task 2- Should the media limit bad news?
4 - @Maria thank you so much for your detailed comments. i'm trying to keep not creating complicated sentences... you also...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Apr 18, 2019 / Hammy - Apr 20, 2019
|IELTS: What are the factors and strategies of a worldwide issue: fresh water limitation?
3 - @ZeldaDoan In terms of content, I can see how you have substantiated your key points fluidly. The readers would...
Writing FeedbackZeldaDoan - Apr 18, 2019 / Maria - Apr 18, 2019
|IELTS- effects advertisement on consumer goods sale
3 - @Jipsa Jadwani The content of your essay deviates a little bit from what is being asked for in the...
Writing FeedbackJipsa Jadwani - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 18, 2019
|Improving people's health by cleaning the environment. TOEFL writing
4 - In my opinion is more common there are some factories producing polluted water ..., if people drink contaminated water,...
Writing Feedbackzlb20187515 - Apr 17, 2019 / traviekingston96 - Apr 20, 2019
|Why sports are important to people? TOIEC Writing
2 - Divide your composition into separate paragraphs to follow the general rules and conventions of writing. I recommend that...
Writing Feedbackjoanne1203 - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|Respecting teachers today vs in the past
2 - I like your composition. The simplicity of your language wonderfully plays out; it enables the readers to have a...
Writing Feedbackadl - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF EATING OUT
3 - Hi Margaret, I found that you missed some article, including "a", "an" and "the". offer a great view,...
Writing FeedbackMargaret 2019 - Apr 17, 2019 / joanne1203 - Apr 18, 2019
|In many countries day by day rubbish (garbage) is increasing. Why is it happening? What can be done?
3 - My advices- 1. Your introduction part is little deviated from the topic...your opening sentence is focusing on overpopulation. It...
Writing Feedbackmaipthao12345 - Apr 17, 2019 / Jipsa Jadwani - Apr 19, 2019
|IELTS 1 - The given maps illustrates how campus of Woodwards University changed from 1985 to today
2 - I would omit lines that you do not necessarily need. Let's take your first sentence as an example. In...
Writing FeedbackBatu - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|Task 2 IELTS. Topic: LAW. Should defendant's criminal record be available in legal cases?
2 - I would suggest changing the formatting of your sentences at times. This can enhance the flow and the structure...
Writing Feedbackicebear24 - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Modern communication vs Writing letters
2 - I appreciate the structure and content of your essay. I do have a couple of recommendations that can better...
Writing FeedbackThuan Tran - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|IELTS - many youngsters choose to shop as one of their favorite leisure activities
2 - You should create a more balanced argumentation format for your essay's structure. Notice how roughly two-thirds of your essay...
Writing Feedbackwriting7 - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 16, 2019
|I was ghosted by a girl and I just let it go
2 - Are you writing this for a creative writing class? You should always ensure that your language is articulated smoothly....
Writing Feedbackbenny812 - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 16, 2019
|ielts: Fair earnings - sports professionals can earn a lot of money
3 - I think it would have been better if you had explained clearly for the topic sentence. Your second point...
Writing Feedbackcorda - Apr 15, 2019 / trvaanh - Apr 24, 2019
|Timing for choosing a job
Writing Feedbackyoona_crocodiles - Apr 15, 2019 / yoona_crocodiles - Apr 16, 2019
|Topic: Young people read few books. What are the reasons for this problem and what can be done it?
2 - I would firstly recommend that you watch out for your usage of the definitive article the. There were instances...
Writing Feedbackdhue1998 - Apr 15, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|IELTS 2: Whether children should be taught to distinguish right and wrong.
3 - Hey! I pretty much like your essay and the way you organize the ideas is good. However, if this...
Writing Feedbacktammy23 - Apr 15, 2019 / icebear24 - Apr 17, 2019
|The dilemma of whether to earn a living or continute studies
3 - @kwang_ha You should be more clear with your language. From the get-go, it was quite unclear which position you...
Writing Feedbackkwang_ha - Apr 14, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|Employment of youngsters would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole
2 - Are you working with a maximum word count? This can significantly change my perception of the entirety of the...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Apr 13, 2019 / Maria - Apr 13, 2019
|Whether it's necessary that children should learn to manage their money at young age
3 - @yuanyinan Are you working with a specific word count? If you are, then I suggest that you try to...
Writing Feedbackyuanyinan - Apr 13, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|IELTS 2 - Working and traveling abroad as the main factors to learn an different language?
NEW - Importance of Language Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order...
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|Advertisements are misleading for children or they provide knowledge?
NEW - adverts impact on children Some people think that advertisements are misleading for children while others claim that they...
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|IELTS is sharing information always beneficial?
2 - Hello leeyunwei I think this is a great essay as it hardly contains any grammatical errors and your ideas...
Writing Feedbackleeyunwei - Apr 12, 2019 / coke - Apr 12, 2019
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