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|West Park Secondary School map. The building experienced a significant change from 1950 to 2010.
2 - Ilmi_03..., it is good to see you again here with a very good report writing. However, some changes are...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|Facts about celebrities are always interesting to follow, and the lives of ordinary people?
2 - Hi ashelarisa, let me you a hand, this is my suggestions for you. I hope it will develop your...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016 / ZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016
|Environmental issues are caused by human's activities. Task 2 (practice): "improving environment"
3 - Environmental issues are caused by human's activities. As a consequence, every person (i think it is better to change...
Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Aug 30, 2016 / aidafitria18 - Aug 31, 2016
|Citizens obligation and business cooperation - "Only large companies can improve environment"
2 - Hi Erpin92 The firms could maintain the employees' life ... Therefore, the waste of factory could not flow...
Writing FeedbackErpin92 - Aug 30, 2016 / hirani03 - Aug 30, 2016
|The Design of a Wave-Energy Machine and Its Best Location
3 - There are two diagrams about the design of ... => you are supposed to use a paraphrase in introduction...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 30, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016
|The mass media has been more interesting to show well known people's way of life
2 - hi! i catch some grammatical errors. hope you can follow through ... to report people who live usuallynormally...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 30, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2 ( Full essay regarding environment in type of agree or disagree)
2 - Hi Fazlur..^^ I have read your writing, I think you haven't given the task response with the question...
Writing FeedbackFazlur27 - Aug 30, 2016 / hailun11 - Aug 30, 2016
|It is certain that the clear water resource became a rarity in the several countries.
Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 30, 2016 / ZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016
|Reducing emission production, processing waste, planting the number of plants - all for environment
2 - Hello there^^ There are differentdifferences of perspectives that (...) and businesses be able to develop the surrounding, meanwhile...
Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 30, 2016 / hailun11 - Aug 30, 2016
|On Women's Equality Day, More Tech Companies Promise Change
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016
|Summary Article How to Eat More Vegetables And Less Meat in Three Weeks
6 - Hi Farida, Your essay gives us precious message for stay healthy with nutritious meals. However, I found dome mistakes....
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 14, 2016
|"Big can more" - possible ways to better the environement.
NEW - Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only large companies and businesses can make a difference. To what...
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|Big companies could improve environment rather than people because they have big impact on society.
3 - Hi, Heru22 Check the amendment below. However, there are a number of reasons why not only ... ......
Writing FeedbackHeru22 - Aug 30, 2016 / Naoki28 - Aug 30, 2016
|Large companies and individuals are no difference in maintaining the environment
4 - hi... Environmental damage is alarm. Some people said that is pressing issue can only be solved by...
Writing FeedbackNaoki28 - Aug 30, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016
|The machine for generating electricity consist of two main parts : steel tower and a computer room
3 - Atikah, it is a nice thread. I can easily follow the process of this machine. However, there are some...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 30, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016
|IELTS Essay Writing Test 3 About Agree and Disagree
3 - Hello Aida, two thumbs for your efforts in attempts to achieve a high score on IELTS. I have read...
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Aug 30, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 30, 2016
|The environment improvement depends only on large companies since individuals can't do much alone
4 - Hello Maulida! Nice to see you in essay forum! Here a little feedback for you. The improvement of...
Writing Feedbackmaulida07 - Aug 30, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016
|Individuals are too limited to make a difference in the environmental development
2 - Hi Ilham, I find in reading your essay. It's a well-written essay; the flow of your ideas is good...
Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Aug 30, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 30, 2016
|It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people su
Writing FeedbackTerminal23 - Aug 30, 2016 / Maya29 - Aug 30, 2016
|A wind turbine works by wind power, producing electricity efficiently when located on a high surface
NEW - The diagram illustrates about how to produce electricity by a wind turbine and the best place for wind turbines...
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|Writing IELTS task 1 : the components of a wind turbine and where it can be placed
2 - Hi there...., including the original prompt of this diagram is a must, as to know that you are being...
Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|A wind turbine consist of tower, generator, wind sensor, and blades controlled by a computer.
5 - A wind turbine consistS of A tower, A generator, A wind sensor, and blades ... The best locations for...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016 / RAY93 - Aug 31, 2016
|These days, many entertainment news report celebrities activities and their private lives.
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 Wind Turbine Design and The Optimum Location
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016 / aidafitria18 - Aug 30, 2016
|Radio, television, and Internet shows over and over gossips stories and entertainment news
2 - hi,, dinar Radio, television, and the internet go overgives stories about gossips ... As a result, many...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 30, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016
|How a wind turbine will be built and where it is located
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016 / RAY93 - Aug 31, 2016
|Should the media report ordinary people lives more than celebrities' lives? IELTS WRITING TASK 1
2 - Hello, Eka. It's nice to read your essay. To enhance your writing better, you may consider my contributions as...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Aug 30, 2016
|Writing Task 2 "Some kind of paid work work children in many countries"
4 - hi ziad, i would like to focus on your introduction paragraph ... involve their children forin some...
Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Sep 2, 2016
|BOARDING SCHOOL FOR CHILDREN - good option for the contemporary parents who doesn't have enough time
Writing Feedbackionksm - Aug 30, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016
|The number of participants in education and science program in 1980 and 1990 based on a survey.
Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016
|A phenomenon of social networking is rapidly increase in 21st century. SUMMARY TASK 7
2 - Hai occa. I have some interesting feedback for you ... social networking is rapidly increaseincreasing in 21st century....
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 30, 2016 / Aris05 - Aug 30, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 & Task 2 : Participation Levels in Science and Education
3 - tyar32, you are not allowed to post two writings in one thread. Stop doing this, otherwise, your account will...
Writing Feedbacktyar32 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|It's not necessary to earn money by children when they are still on parents care
5 - Hi, thank you for feedback! But anyway, 'thing' phrase sometimes becomes too informal for academic essay, that's why...
Writing Feedbackdaya93 - Aug 30, 2016 / daya93 - Aug 31, 2016
|SUmmary TEDtalk: the first 21 days of a bee's life
3 - Hi Fadhilah.. I'd like to give you some suggestion.. ... insufficient because there are some trouble on it....
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 30, 2016
|Introducing young people to the work routines - IELTS Writing Task 2
2 - More children today get involved in working activities This results in children learning an effective way...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|How I turned a deadly plant into a thriving business
2 - This summary is extracted from the video of Achenyo Idachaba published in TEDtalk.com with how I turned a...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|The percentage of first-year teachers with regular teaching jobs by year of graduation in Ontario
4 - Miss Dhyla, please you avoid repetition in your writing. Besides that, it is essential that make you sure what...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 30, 2016
|Crimes in Newport city between 2003 and 2012. The burglary had the highest number among incidents.
5 - Beauty17, you have to include the picture of the graph every time you post your report writing here. This...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|The chart shows the alteration of kinds of crime that happened in Newport city center (2003-2012)
3 - Firkno05, you are not allowed to post two writings in one column. You have to write them separately and...
Writing Feedbackfikni05 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|Students have more opportunities to study in other countries, but they may struggle with problems
3 - i agree with Mr. Eddie that you should make your background fact more relevant to the topic given by...
Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 29, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016
|French-language teachers were recruied more often from 2001 to 2007, in contrast to English tutors
3 - a good paragraph consists of at least three sentences. Let me give a try for the intro: A comparison...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|The variety of essay exercises - IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - CONCLUSION and EXAMPLE
2 - This sounds redundant. It will not help you that much when it comes to IELTS essay. I suggest...
Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Degree Study Abroad
Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : ABOUT ABROAD STUDY
3 - Students in past were more likely to study in their own countries. More students today prefer...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|For three decades, Internet has provided spectacular influence to the communication system
2 - Hi.. I'd like to give you some suggestion.. For three decades, the Internet has been provided spectacular influence...
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 29, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 29, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task (Practice) Topic: Study Abroad
2 - thousand students write this template sentence in their essay. Therefore, you will gain more scores in this part....
Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|Students have today more chances to study abroad, than it was before - practice on IELTS
3 - Hi Azmi, this time I would only focus on your introduction. As the prompt asks you to explain the...
Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Aug 29, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Aug 30, 2016
|Summary: Dyslexic Designers Just Think Different-Maybe Even Better
3 - hi i'd like to give some suggestions regarding to your summary. happy writing! ... expect that this exhibit...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 29, 2016
|The changing rates of crime in the inner city from 2003 - 2012
2 - Robbery had a an fluctuate pattern whole the year ... Conversely, car theft was leadsled than the others from...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 29, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 29, 2016
|Stepping to IELTS Writing: Conclusion, Body, and Example
2 - Hi Yusuf, Instead of seeing/checking the content, I would like to focus on giving feedback related to technical...
Writing FeedbackYusuf05 - Aug 29, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 29, 2016
|TASK 1: Sugesstion to friend about a place to visit
2 - Hi ! here are my several suggestion, hope it will help you, regards ... and exploring new places...
Writing Feedbackxeroxlife - Aug 29, 2016 / jomul01 - Aug 29, 2016
|Participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries
2 - Hi Ilmi! levels of population in developing and developed countries = you can change the passage by :...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 29, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 30, 2016
|The spread of the internet issue - IELTS TASK 4: FULLY-DEVELOPED EXAMPLES
4 - Hi Hary, let me you a hand, this is my correction For instance, moremany sites which contain unsure...
Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 29, 2016 / ZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016
|People prefer live today in some urban areas and communicate less with local residents.
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Aug 29, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016
|Some years ago citizens, who lived in the rural area, knew well another people's in the neighborhood
Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 29, 2016
|GLOBAL OUTSOURCING and low labor cost - SUMMARY TASK 6
2 - Hi. Please, you review my suggestions previously. In this summary, you made the same mistakes grammatically, especially use of...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 29, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 29, 2016
|The Percentage of The New Teachers in The Usual Teaching Jobs
4 - hi... according to teacher graduation year.... ...that English-language teachers and French-Language teachers on(that English and French-language teacher... avoid...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 29, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016
|Highly-invented-sophisticated technology have most important impact on living standards of mankind
Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Aug 29, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 13, 2016
|In the bygone era, most people in the world stayed in rural area, had good relations with neighbors
Writing FeedbackTerminal23 - Aug 29, 2016 / rian31 - Aug 29, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: the percentage of fresh graduate educators being required to teach two foreign
3 - ...fresh graduate educators beingrequiredrecruited to teach two foreign ... there was an slight upward trend of ... ...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 29, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016
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