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|Air Circulation Inside The House Can Waste Energy and Cause Heat Loss.
3 - Hi, Mr Yonathan I would like to suggest you. The air circulation, such as air leaking into [...]...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 22, 2016 / tiraatira11 - Mar 23, 2016
|Does more knowledge make ideas complex?
3 - This is my alternative for your second paragraph, thanks. Knowledge is clear cut when there are actions to...
Writing Feedbackjustooridoori - Mar 22, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 1, 2016
|TOEFL: When choosing a place to live, what do you consider most important?
3 - Thank you for your time. I have one question... I've chosen "One reason I feel" because this is a...
Writing Feedbackcirora - Mar 22, 2016 / cirora - Mar 23, 2016
|The diagram show how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up to date weather forecasting
2 - Hello Soe Htet Aung, you should create at least 3 sentences for each paragraph. I try to modify your...
Writing FeedbackThe Everest - Mar 22, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|After reading a passage about Chinese 13-5
Writing Feedbackpitehu - Mar 22, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 22, 2016
|The percentage of citizen access to recent technology in Britain throughout eight years.
3 - Hi Wahyu. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me if I...
Writing FeedbackWahyunia_wns - Mar 22, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|Characteristics of wireless channel in communication - is this paragraph well written ?
4 - Hi Suhib, thanks a lot for appreciating our work here on EF, there's nothing more like words of thanks...
Writing Feedbacksuhib - Mar 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 24, 2016
|My favorite author: J.K.Rowling (nowadays, the best writer)
2 - Hey, Varlamow, That's an interesting topic. Did you come up with the idea by yourself? I appreciate authors...
Writing FeedbackVarlamow - Mar 21, 2016 / Chan Dara - Mar 22, 2016
|Nowadays, its is quite common for young people to have a break year before going university. IELTS2
4 - Hy Wenyun, here my comment. check it, i may wrong. thanks Nowadays, its is --> improper using of...
Writing Feedbackwenyun - Mar 21, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Better to be a home student using a computer or study in the traditional way - attending schools?
Writing Feedbackdiemthuy - Mar 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 22, 2016
|To understand all the matter connected with the scientific research and to avoid some damage
Writing Feedbacksiti hamsyah - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|There are some certain things in this world which we simply should not try to understand
Writing Feedbackgiligrp - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|Scientific research and experiments are nessesary to deeply understand the inventions
3 - Hi Amirul, as I comprehend your essay, I must say that you started strong, however, the last paragraph needs...
Writing FeedbackAmirulmumin - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|News: the truth should be objective rather than subjective
6 - hi, aviniwirastri. here my comments. keep writing so that news should be presented as objective as possible...
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 20, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 26, 2016
|The reasons for choosing certain courses and how they should be paid - Ielts
2 - interesting in subject you need to put interest as a noun/subject. whereas 40 % of them answeredanswering for...
Writing FeedbackThe Everest - Mar 20, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 20, 2016
|"Aloha!" your on this island ! ( I want help about the Descriptive essay about Hawaii. )
Writing Feedbacklo0olo0o24 - Mar 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|Apparent differences between populations in Yemen and Italy - IELTS Task 1
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Mar 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 22, 2016
|IELTS Taks 2 _ Are sport facilities less useful to maintain public health?
2 - Hello wulanbila16 I applied a few corrections to the text that is sounds much better: Nowadays, more...
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Mar 19, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 19, 2016
|The comparison of overseas students who graduated from universities in Canada.
2 - Hi Diqon, In my opinion you need to improve a little the structure of your essay. I don't know...
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Mar 19, 2016 / Anerena - Mar 21, 2016
|Should children, when they'll grow up, do same kind of jobs like their parents? - I have some doubts
6 - Hay,,,, I will try to give you some suggestions on the introduction part, please check your answer and the...
Writing FeedbackOathbinder - Mar 18, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 26, 2016
|Scientific research today attempts to go too far. (ielts task 2)
5 - People try to answer every question that the universe hasin the universe But my point of view is...
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 18, 2016 / The Everest - Mar 21, 2016
|Help in trouble, warm advice - Extended family statement. Toefl writing
5 - Hi, Kssuy6. These my comments which i focused only on your two first paragraphs. keep writing. Nowadays, most...
Writing Feedbackkssuy6 - Mar 17, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 31, 2016
|The alteration of America's Appearance in 1948 and 2010
6 - Let me give some suggestions: 1. Before you submit you essay, make sure that you have enough words...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 17, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
|Living in a large city has certain advantages over living in a small town. Urbanization role
NEW - We cannot simply deny the immensely important role of the urbanization in raising our living standards. Consequentially, there are...
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|Simply raise the price of petrol can not fulfil the long-term goal to reduce traffic and pollution
8 - Hi Chelsea, first of all, your positive mantra towards the remarks on your essay will get you somewhere someday,...
Writing Feedbackchelsea17 - Mar 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|To broadcast celebrities news or informations about some ordinary people?
NEW - The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers....
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|In the university, students get the knowledge in two ways, practical and theory. Purpose of study
2 - I will try you some suggestions on the introduction part. 1. Please, check clearly the question : what,...
Writing Feedbackgiligrp - Mar 17, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 26, 2016
|The main goal of universities: to link students for their own value or prepare them for a future job
2 - hi Siti, the problem I find with your essay is choosing the wrong words. Secondly, I understand the prompt...
Writing Feedbacksiti hamsyah - Mar 17, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 17, 2016
|The main purpose of universities is to give info and skill to fullfill requirement for work-force
2 - hi, amirulmukminin. as you can see there are many corrections i made for your essay. keep writing. to fullfill...
Writing FeedbackAmirulmumin - Mar 16, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 26, 2016
|Transfer Essay: Page "87" of your autobiography: "I am a pencil"
2 - Hi Ttina, Your story is very touching. You also have strong writing skills, and you are able to...
Writing Feedbackttina - Mar 16, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 17, 2016
|TOEFL for immigration purpose - to be or not to be independent?
Writing Feedbackkjiajing92 - Mar 16, 2016 / ttina - Mar 16, 2016
|The main objective of university education
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 16, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 18, 2016
|The usage of energy in USA started from 1980 to 2030 - The energy outlook
2 - The graph illustrates from energy [...] pattern over the period as a whole. A breakdown of proportion of...
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 15, 2016 / irhame - Mar 16, 2016
|The figure of four different features were mostly interested in 2003 and 2013
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - Comparison of Energy Production
3 - Hi, Desty. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me, if I...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|'three kinds of treatments applied' - The process of recycling the rain water.
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - The Demographic Growth in US State of Oregon
3 - Hi, Adrian. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me if I...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 15, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|The three products Consumption in China during 1985 to 2010 - fishes are the most popular
4 - Hy lita, i didn't find any big mistakes on your essay, i just give a suggestion and some correction....
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 15, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Task 1- Process of reuse rainwater - recycling method
2 - Hi Desty, I would like to share my insights on your analysis by enhancing the sentences if needed. ...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Recommendation letter from my professor to the University of Edinburgh on continuing master degree
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Contrast people of your age with those of your parents' generation; beliefs, values, goals... etc.
5 - I agree with Meyani and besides that, the 4th paragrath ('Finally' one) seems too short. It feels like you...
Writing Feedbackbottles - Mar 15, 2016 / chelsea17 - Mar 19, 2016
|My discovery of my love, Astronomy - for Stanford summer on intellectual vitality. critique required
3 - I would love more feedback guys? Justin like really meant like as I didn't have lots passion for astronomy...
Writing FeedbackRitvik123 - Mar 15, 2016 / Ritvik123 - Mar 17, 2016
|Some say, government funding help fluorish arts; others that it threatens it's integrity - GRE issue
3 - Hello Ban I suggest you to make some variations in your writing by putting compound and complex senteces in...
Writing FeedbackBan123 - Mar 15, 2016 / Desty22 - Mar 15, 2016
|Debates on punishment to children - Ielts academic writing task
4 - Hello kuanchinchin, Let me give you some opinions on your essay. 1). Your first paragraph is too...
Writing Feedbackkuanchinchin - Mar 15, 2016 / bottles - Mar 17, 2016
|The percentage of the movies played and the theater visitors in both UK and Australia
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 14, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
|Task 1- The Develoment in Eastminster from 1999 to 2009
2 - Hi Lita, after reading and understanding your analysis, I must say uou did quiet a good job, the analysis...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|The international food such as fast food is more enjoyed by majority of people than local culinary
NEW - In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on...
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|The alteration of town centre over three hundreds of year - writing ielts task 1
2 - Hi Hani, I would like to share my insights with a focus on the last paragraph of the analysis....
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|Nowadays, children have less pressure than the past age and more of the life-advancing opportunities
2 - Hello angga93 You should consider applying a few stylistic corrections to the text. They are as follows: in...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 14, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 15, 2016
|[Task 1] - Map - The developments of Stokeford, a Riverside Town, in Almost a Decade
3 - Hello Adrian, i found that your writing has an interesting point of view, the lost of farmland. However, it...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 14, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|I believe that modern cuisine brings the extinction of traditional meal.
2 - Hello Nisa, I have some advice related to your introduction and conclusion. First of all, in introduction, you did...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 14, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016
|Task 2 - Children Get More Pressure in This Era
2 - Hello Inastia. Your writing is good. I want to check your writing. Please correct me, if I have mistakes...
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 14, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 14, 2016
|People do not have to bother to cook complex meals because of their unhealthy fast foods
3 - Hallo Miss Nida, I have read your good essay, let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 14, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 14, 2016
|Healthy lifestyle is possible for people
2 - Over time, a healthy lifestyle has [...] could be possible to realize it. Hello, i have some suggestion...
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 14, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016
|Negative Effect of Fast Food Domination
5 - Fast food can affect traditional foods' sustainability as it ... my alternative second paragraph is: society tend to prefer...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016 / Diandin16 - Apr 8, 2016
|'hindrance for national identity'; International fast food replaces traditional foods
NEW - In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on...
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|Task 1- Comparison kind of movies watched in UK and US
4 - The bar chart illustrates the number of film films watched in England and Australia in 2001, categorized by US,...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 14, 2016 / Lita27 - Mar 14, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 The data of consumer disbursing on several different items in European Countries
3 - hy RIZKA, here my comment. check it, i may wrong. thanks The table provides the data of consumer...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 14, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Task 1- How to Recycle Your Old Newspaper to a Valuable New Paper
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 14, 2016
|Original writing (ą 25 minutes): Bulgarian expatriates' education levels
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