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|Human activities on land and in the sea cause extinction of many animal species
2 - The A variety of for the settlement purposes the forests provide the spaces and resources lose their places the...
Writing Feedbackulfaidrus - Nov 16, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Nov 16, 2018
|Writing task 2 ielts. Teenage crime issue. 'Why an how' essay.
5 - Hi sillyman2000 Here are my opinions about your essay 1/ There are a lot of spelling mistake in...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Nov 16, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Nov 24, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Problems and Solutions Small Business
2 - Opinion: I think that you do not say everything in your introduction. State that there are problems and...
Writing Feedbackulfaidrus - Nov 16, 2018 / jalp - Dec 1, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Two-Part Question Food
2 - consuming a particular food There seems a growing mindset the higher its quality will be ... ( I am...
Writing Feedbackulfaidrus - Nov 16, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Nov 16, 2018
|An IELTS task 2 essay on noise control
Writing FeedbackTunanut - Nov 16, 2018 / Tunanut - Nov 17, 2018
|Why urban areas has led to overpopulation and which are possible solutions for these problems.
4 - Shazia, please review the rules on writing using the subject - verb agreement as this seems to be an...
Writing Feedbackshazia786 - Nov 16, 2018 / Holt - Nov 17, 2018
|IELTS essasy Task 2 Young adults seem to prefer to spend their leisure time on shopping
5 - Nguyen, an essay, such as a such direct question essay or combination public pov and personal opinion requires a...
Writing FeedbackTirelessLearner - Nov 16, 2018 / Holt - Nov 17, 2018
|Colour can affect how people feel. How true is this statement?
4 - Thanks for your advice, @Tunanut @Holt. I am really appreciate your comment about my writing. I have known my...
Writing FeedbackKen Adams - Nov 15, 2018 / Ken Adams - Nov 16, 2018
|An IELTS Task 2 about Young vs Old leaders
Writing FeedbackTunanut - Nov 15, 2018 / Tunanut - Nov 16, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task1_NOx emissions by vehicle type in London in 2020(%)
2 - Huang, with only 1 word written over the minimum word requirement for this essay, I cannot say that you...
Writing Feedbacksttp30526 - Nov 15, 2018 / Holt - Nov 16, 2018
|It is true that consumers could purchase goods at lower cost these days
3 - Ngyuen, this is a single opinion essay. It is not a comparison essay discussion. A comparison essay discussion always...
Writing FeedbackHang1234 - Nov 14, 2018 / Holt - Nov 16, 2018
|Memoir - writing sample (first day at school)
3 - Barbara, when you write a memoir, it is normally a hindshight look at a previous experience or set of...
Writing Feedbackbabi130294 - Nov 14, 2018 / Holt - Nov 15, 2018
|Wealthy nations can afford to support the poor nations, in time they may be those giving the aid
NEW - generosity between nations Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of...
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|Deforestation is happening in many parts of the world, what can be done to solve this problem?
3 - Nguyen, please remember that there is a 3 sentence minimum requirement for each paragraph written in a Task 2...
Writing Feedbackntplan - Nov 14, 2018 / Holt - Nov 15, 2018
|An essay of IELTS task 2 about the reasons and effects of cosmetics
4 - @Holt @adhananj Thank you a lot. I will review and rewrite it in the most effective way as you...
Writing Feedbackthemetalfinger - Nov 14, 2018 / themetalfinger - Nov 17, 2018
|Argumentative essay on Child's obesity
NEW - I need feedback on this essay. Please state 3 strengths and 3 weaknesses If you don't mind. Our...
Writing FeedbackClipari76 - Nov 14, 2018 / — -
|Describe and interpret the data about energy usage in Australia
2 - Firstly, I don't see any chart attached so I cannot examine how exactly you describe those charts. But I...
Writing Feedbacknguyen thi lien - Nov 13, 2018 / themetalfinger - Nov 14, 2018
|Choosing to live in a horizontal or vertical city has been a headache dilemma to city dwellers
2 - Nguyen, I will not continue to review your essay based on the grammatical mistakes, sentence structure errors, or even...
Writing FeedbackHanh Nguyen - Nov 12, 2018 / Holt - Nov 13, 2018
|IELTS TASK1 - Crimes committed in two countries
3 - I think you should combine the first two graphs together. In addition, the sentence "Besides, the amount of car...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Nov 12, 2018 / Nkh0401 - Nov 14, 2018
|[IELTS Task 2] The animals are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea.
Writing FeedbackD12345 - Nov 12, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|Improving my writing skill to adapt to IELTs - both working parents
5 - @ronia85516 @ronia85516 Thank you for your advices @Holt Thank you for your curteous advice, i will try my...
Writing FeedbackNkh0401 - Nov 11, 2018 / Nkh0401 - Nov 13, 2018
|【IELTS TASK2】Social and practical problems caused by non-native speaker in foreign country
3 - Dingyu, , this is a single opinion measured response essay. That means, the "extent" part of the question requires...
Writing Feedbackblingemily - Nov 11, 2018 / Holt - Nov 12, 2018
|Environmental issues have always been a controversy among the world. Who should take a charge of it?
3 - Ronia, aside from the missing ownership reference for the first reasoning paragraph, I would have to say that you...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Nov 11, 2018 / Holt - Nov 12, 2018
|[IELTS TASK 2] THE VALUE OF A 'GROWTH MINDSET'
2 - Hello! I think the topic is well discussed, you provided related examples to illustrate the problem and solution in...
Writing FeedbackD41112266 - Nov 11, 2018 / ronia85516 - Nov 11, 2018
|The disappearance of bicycles because of advancements of technology
2 - Hello! I think you should write more about the solutions to this problem, the problem of bicycle was well...
Writing FeedbackBumblebeeong - Nov 10, 2018 / ronia85516 - Nov 11, 2018
|Great number of heated discussions over the issues of smoking prohibition in public areas
2 - I guess this is an agree and disagree questions and this is my suggestions: 1. in the first paragraph,...
Writing Feedbackhero8991 - Nov 10, 2018 / D41112266 - Nov 10, 2018
|Giving money to street beggars is a right thing to do or not ? State your opinion
2 - The essay should be longer to be more convincing and there a couple of grammatical errors you should correct....
Writing Feedbackmeme444 - Nov 10, 2018 / Geo73 - Nov 10, 2018
|A reflection essay - Making Media and Contemporary Approaches courses
2 - Generally the essay is well written but there are a couple of errors you could correct. 1. I now...
Writing Feedbacklilypedd - Nov 10, 2018 / Geo73 - Nov 10, 2018
|Should we replace public parks with houses and business area?
NEW - the role of public parks to human life Public parks have been considered as an indispensable aspect every...
Writing Feedbackbhminhanh - Nov 9, 2018 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2: TEENAGERS SHOULD HAVE A PART-TIME JOB OR NOT ?
Writing FeedbackDang Khoa - Nov 9, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Nov 10, 2018
|Analyse an argument: Cutting down on water expenses. Lowering water pressure in showers
Writing FeedbackE Hoppy - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 9, 2018
|IELTS Task2: Scientist believe that by studying behaviour of 3 years old children, we can predict..
2 - You saw the word "extent" in the prompt instructions an immediately jumped to the conclusion that this is an...
Writing Feedbackbachyangha - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 9, 2018
|Topic: Why do you choose English as a major? Write a paragraph of about 150 words.
3 - Dang, it would be better for your discussion if you opt to discuss your reason for choosing English as...
Writing FeedbackKhanh102 - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 9, 2018
|The reasons why some persons don't feel safe either at home or outside.
4 - Phuong, since you only wrote the opening paraphrase, I cannot say that you did a good job at it....
Writing FeedbackPhuong Peachie - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 17, 2018
|How I Want My Dream Farm To Be
2 - The first few sentences of your presentation are a bit confusing. Not everyone would dream of living on a...
Writing Feedbackneodent168 - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 9, 2018
|With the increasing of the crime rate, there are some people that are afraid to leave their house
2 - In my opinion, u have used a variety of vocabulary which is really good. However, in the third paragraph,...
Writing FeedbackIris2 - Nov 8, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Nov 10, 2018
|People's access to proper health care should not depend upon their level of income.
Writing FeedbackHuongGiangNguyen - Nov 8, 2018 / HuongGiangNguyen - Nov 10, 2018
|Celebrities' glamour and wealth may lead to negative example for young people
2 - Allen, there are two problems with this essay, The first, is your response to the prompt requirement. The second,...
Writing Feedbackallen2018021 - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 9, 2018
|How much a specific United Kingdom school spent annually percentage-wise in three different years
3 - Kim, this is one of the better analyzed pie charts that I have seen presented at this forum. Your...
Writing Feedbackkia3113 - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 12, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Is it a good thing for young people to hold the important positions in the government?
2 - @cv47522 when you are asked to discuss 2 points of view plus a personal opinion, you are tasked to...
Writing Feedbackcv47522 - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 9, 2018
|How can people in your country be encouraged to live healthier lives?
2 - Dear Bich, "In the era of globalization.... Therefore...(I cannot see the link between 2 sentences) However, it is...
Writing Feedbacklhnbich - Nov 7, 2018 / HuongGiangNguyen - Nov 8, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: E-LEARNING - tendency for people to study online
Writing FeedbackHuongGiangNguyen - Nov 7, 2018 / HuongGiangNguyen - Nov 8, 2018
|The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001.
3 - Le, the presentation you are using can be really confusing to the reader because you are comparing the information...
Writing FeedbackLinhLe32 - Nov 7, 2018 / Holt - Nov 8, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Discussion about the influences of robots
2 - Hello there ronia, At first, paragraph, when you are talking about the danger of Robots in short, If...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Nov 7, 2018 / Yikes - Nov 7, 2018
|Differences between human workers and robot workers
3 - Thanks a lot Your mean is that I need to use employer's instead of employers' , right? btw, Can...
Writing Feedbackdynastylee0929 - Nov 6, 2018 / dynastylee0929 - Nov 7, 2018
|Intrinsic and extrinsic motivation (one para)
2 - ... which is not totally true. I wouldn't use redundant words such as "totally". I would also add a...
Writing Feedbackdynastylee0929 - Nov 6, 2018 / Fizzik - Nov 16, 2018
|Water in Agricultural use - Writing task 1 - pie chart
3 - Tran, while the analytical information of the essay is acceptable, your summary overview is not. The requirements of the...
Writing Feedbacktranhien - Nov 6, 2018 / Holt - Nov 7, 2018
|There are many types of sports, all of which bring benefits to the players
2 - Nguyen, this is a 3 reasoning essay presentation. Your prompt paraphrase and succeeding discussion changed it to a singular...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthantam - Nov 6, 2018 / Holt - Nov 7, 2018
|College students have jobs while they are in school. Is this a good idea? I think so.
2 - @emdinh Finance is the first ... Financial situation is the one of main reasons that a college students have...
Writing Feedbackemdinh - Nov 6, 2018 / Altaa - Nov 7, 2018
|Task 2 : There is a growing demand for new cars and it causes many problems
2 - This phenomenon might ... I would like to change this sentence into "This phenomenon is producing some problems...
Writing Feedbackayyubjbr - Nov 6, 2018 / Altaa - Nov 7, 2018
|Small businesses are forced to close, unable to compete with multinational company
2 - Hi, I think you did address the topic, but your essay was not very convincing and seemed quite unorganized...
Writing FeedbackFazaFarkhani - Nov 6, 2018 / TJLuschen - Nov 9, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2:There is a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming global problem.
2 - Nadim, while your grammar is not as fluent as it should be, owing to grammatical errors, the essay itself...
Writing Feedbacknadimnurnajmi - Nov 6, 2018 / Holt - Nov 7, 2018
|Only good students should have the right to enter colleges
Writing Feedbackamerjoon - Nov 5, 2018 / Yikes - Nov 7, 2018
|Within 150-200 words, write a paragraph about the advantages of living in the city.
2 - Hi Chu. While your writing is rather cumbersome, you are wrong about it being incoherent. Your presentation makes sense....
Writing Feedbackchgiang04 - Nov 5, 2018 / Holt - Nov 6, 2018
|Writing task 1 : pie charts- players of electronic games in South Korea
4 - @Holt @ayyubjbr thanks a lot i recognised i had some problems in arranging sentences and putting commas i'll try...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Nov 5, 2018 / Hammy - Nov 7, 2018
|Maternity leave - women need to rest a period of time after the child-birth process
2 - Good attempt. You need to work on the sentence framing and grammar as there are a lot of ambiguous...
Writing FeedbackDbsen - Nov 5, 2018 / adhananj - Nov 5, 2018
|IELTS TASK1 - Population changes in three countries
4 - @Hammy @Holt Thanks a lot for your suggestions. I will try to be cautious about my tense using and...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Nov 5, 2018 / ronia85516 - Nov 12, 2018
|The imprisonment over a period of 50 years in five different areas - diagram analysis
3 - Asih, you have written a total of 156 words. That is evidence that your essay is not complete, does...
Writing FeedbackAsih Mustikasari - Nov 4, 2018 / Holt - Nov 6, 2018
|Paying taxes between private school and state education system
3 - @queanh0101 Maybe, you consider why there is any comment for your essay for a long time I have followed...
Writing Feedbackqueanh0101 - Nov 4, 2018 / Hammy - Nov 9, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Should people look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched place?
3 - Stella, your essay does not properly respond to the original discussion prompt that was provided. You are actually discussing...
Writing FeedbackStella Zhang - Nov 4, 2018 / Holt - Nov 6, 2018
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