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|Both parents and schools hold the roles for children healthy lifestyle
2 - Prompt: Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both of schools and parents are responsible for solving this...
Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Jan 28, 2016 / sntinn - Jan 28, 2016
|The cause of unhealthy lifestyle among youth generation
2 - ... parents and teachers are to help HELPING their children's lifestyle. ... for instance, teachers are more likely to...
Writing Feedbackdesgit33 - Jan 28, 2016 / amrillahmk31 - Jan 28, 2016
|Children Should Begin To Learn Foreign Language At Primary School Rather than Secondary School
2 - In contemporary era, learning foreign language is an update trend for young children. As such, some convince learning...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Jan 28, 2016 / irhame - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: SOME ORGANISATIONS BELIEVE THAT THEIR EMPLOYEES SHOULD DRESS SMARTLY
2 - On the other side others believe that their worker WORKERS "it applies to all" have ... ... determine someone's...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 28, 2016 / amrillahmk31 - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - MASS MEDIA SHOULD PAY MORE ATTENTION TO ORDINARY PEOPLE
4 - Your paragraph in support of your point of view regarding the media attention being showered on celebrities explains your...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 28, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 28, 2016
|[IELTS TASK WRITING] The Comparison of Economic and Social Indicators of Four States
3 - You did not format the report summary properly. When you write yout thesis statement, you must provide a description...
Writing Feedbacksholihin84 - Jan 28, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 28, 2016
|'level of blissfulness' - IELTS TASK 1 : HAPPINESS RATING CHARTS
3 - ... information about the blissfulness HAPPINESS level of individuals who have ARE EITHER married and OR still single, ...group,...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 28, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 28, 2016
|Topic: Rewards & Productivity (Integrated Writing) Need guidance. My test is 2 weeks away from today
3 - Umm, my essay is for TOEFL ibt test, Writing Section Question 1- Integrated Writing I really don't think that...
Writing Feedbackcyrussth - Jan 28, 2016 / cyrussth - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: The advantages and disadvantages of taking a job between school and university
6 - Working for a while provides a large opportunity for young people you cannot use for a while here,...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 28, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 having a job prior entering to university has many benefits
5 - ...getting valuable experiences regarding with working atmosphere(...)the payment during working is unsuitable with theirof work is less than their...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 27, 2016 / nuni11 - Jan 29, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 : CAREER RELATIONSHIP AMONG WORKERS - officers' responses
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 27, 2016 / ichatea07 - Jan 28, 2016
|The obligation of official training for children, to become proper parents, is not working.
3 - While the essay you present is based on logic, you have not considered one very important piece of information...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 27, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|Some claims that planting the idea of competition in children's life is an obligation
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 27, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 28, 2016
|By undergoing two different types of experience, children know how to be a better person
2 - Hi there! Overall, this is a great essay with clear direction and well-expressed ideas. There are some mistakes however,...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Jan 27, 2016 / puykcyt - Jan 27, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - School Should Provide Formal Training For Students To Be Good Parents
4 - I like the intersting idea in your passage. However, there may be a few grammer mistakes. itmay beappears...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Jan 27, 2016 / Crystal812 - Jan 28, 2016
|There is nothing more important than your satisfaction from work
NEW - TOPIC: Some people say that job satisfaction is more important than money when it comes to selecting a career....
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|Receiving the formal education at young age can benefit young population
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Jan 27, 2016 / AAORA - Jan 30, 2016
|Competition will alter the survive skills, which are absolutely important in human life. IELTS
3 - Hi Pey, I see that your introductory paragraph did not have any stance. Clear stance in the beginning is...
Writing FeedbackPey28 - Jan 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jan 27, 2016
|Being children means learning every aspect of life. The competition and cooperation is no exception.
3 - Muhamad, I have a sense that you did not totally respond to the prompt in this essay that you...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Jan 27, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|The cause of increasing violent crime among youth generation
2 - Desy, you have argued this prompt in a highly informative manner. Your approach to the discussion is by far,...
Writing Feedbackdesgit33 - Jan 27, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|The Merits and Drawbacks of Take Break Before Continuing University For Young People
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 27, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|Tolerance and sympathy are more crutial than a truth.
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Jan 27, 2016 / wahyutri13 - Feb 8, 2016
|Children's sense of rivalry should be stimulated
NEW - Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who taught...
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|The air circulation in an accommodation, which affect room temperature and energy spent
4 - The diagram explainS about the air circulation in an accommodation HOUSE, which affectS THE room temperature and energy...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 27, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|The given diagram illustrates the ins and outs of air circulation in a house - prodigality of energy
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 27, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 27, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - THE IMPORTANCE OF TAKING A JOB AFTER GRADUATED IN HIGH SCHOOL
4 - I will give you a hand.. Actually you do not define clearly the young people that you discuss in...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 27, 2016 / aflah15 - Jan 29, 2016
|Own business has more benefits for inhabitants as people can determine their own effort
3 - 1st paragraph ... be bankrupt and lack of fund they need to start a business... 2nd paragraph ......
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 27, 2016 / Wanderson120 - Jan 27, 2016
|IELTS Task 1: The air circulation system in the 2-floor house
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 26, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|Archaeology essay for my cousework
2 - Archaeological studies can objectively reveal and explain the stages of culture in a particular region Trowulan and contiguity and...
Writing Feedbackmasyhudi - Jan 26, 2016 / CollegeMe - Jan 27, 2016
|Essay about encouraged young people to work or travel between studies
4 - Thank you for your explanation and example. I will try to make that point in the future essay....
Writing Feedbackwiwin90 - Jan 26, 2016 / wiwin90 - Jan 27, 2016
|GRE - two different views from the extintion of blompus
2 - the extintion of blompus, an large, (do not use comma here) carnivorous land mammal. because first humans was not...
Writing FeedbackAlbertino - Jan 26, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 27, 2016
|A lot of cultures worldwide obligate married women to stay at home to look after the children
3 - the discussion presented mentions you having three reasons... Firstly, a working wife will give the family more financial security...
Writing Feedbackdavid2708 - Jan 26, 2016 / pao123 - Jan 27, 2016
|Some people think that advertising enhances the sales of a product that are unnecessarily needed.
2 - Reem, there are number of problems with your essay that have mostly to do with the way that you...
Writing Feedbacklolly pop - Jan 26, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2016
|Two Ways to Fill The Irrigation Channel-The Diagrams
2 - ... two ways to fill the AN irrigation channel. At first glance, the SWING BASKET methods of filling...
Writing FeedbackFebri91 - Jan 26, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 : Entrepreneur or worker? What are the benefits and the drawbacks of it?
3 - Hi ichatea07, Let me correct your writing. In today's world, economical needs hashave been people's priority to survive...
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 26, 2016 / Febri91 - Jan 26, 2016
|I believe that the knowledge that I have acquired from my experiences is more important - TOEFL
4 - sSo, we are not looking at any problem in logical thinking, reasoning, or sentence development. What we do have...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 26, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2016
|Genetic modification is now being used to improve trees - TOEFL TPO21
5 - hi, vangiespen Thanks for alert me that i can't keep using semicolons to separate sentences. I thought it...
Writing FeedbackAYCC - Jan 26, 2016 / AYCC - Jan 26, 2016
|The bar charts present the rating of happiness level of residents aged 18 to over 65
2 - ... the married people is found ARE happier than the unmarried,.. ...in the 30-49 and 65 and over...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 26, 2016 / aflah15 - Jan 26, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - the happiness rate of American based on their marriage status
3 - HI Aflah let me give you another form in your introduction. The bar charts illustrate the SURVEY OF...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 26, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Jan 26, 2016
|Media Broadcast Too Much of Popular People : Agree or Disagree
2 - Sri, your essay has a confusing opening statement, the thesis is hard to decipher, and the whole essay in...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 26, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2016
|IELTS: an effect of possessing children and level of happiness
2 - Please do not use the term "Possess" when describing people who have children. Parents do not own children because...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 26, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2016
|THE WIND TURBINE - the structure and process of generating electricity - IELTS TASK 1
2 - ...it can be seen that a turbine IS structured by some essential equipment.. ...adjust the rotation of blades which...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 26, 2016 / aflah15 - Jan 26, 2016
|IELTS TASK1 proportion of happiness pace for married and unmarried American-inhabitants
3 - ... of THE proportion of happiness pace for married and unmarried American-inhabitants COUPLES ... children towards the...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 26, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2016
|Career Center Website Exploration
3 - No but it just require 2 pages, but no max limit. Also, that job position literally called "Career center",...
Writing Feedbackiceunicorna - Jan 26, 2016 / iceunicorna - Jan 26, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1: process of a wind turbine and its locations
2 - ... that are categorised CATEGORIZED into ... It is noticable NOTICEABLE that a... three fibreglass FIBERGLASS...
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|I am inclined to oppose constructing a factory in my near community - TOEFL independent essay
2 - Nour, 300 is the maximum word count. You don't have to deliver exactly 300 words in every essay. Just...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|As it is commonly understood, people behave towards each other differently depending on situation.
Writing Feedbackmehdi_gh7022 - Jan 25, 2016 / mehdi_gh7022 - Jan 26, 2016
|In contemporary society, obesity has become a modern epidemic
3 - This is my first time to post writing on the website and unexpectedly got a valuable feedback. I am...
Writing Feedbackkay25 - Jan 25, 2016 / kay25 - Jan 26, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - A Sense of Competition Should be Encouraged to Children
2 - Muhamad, why did you only provide your introduction and your conclusion? How were you able to come up with...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|The parts of the technology for producing electricity from the wind and where it should be installed
2 - ... According to the diagram, a wind turbine consistS of a tall and strong steel tower, ... a wind...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 25, 2016 / Mardy17 - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: The advantages of having own business outweigh the disadvantages
2 - Siti, you did some pretty good work on this essay. The vocabulary you used shows a higher level of...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : EMPLOYEE OR EMPLOYER - being an owner of some personal business is worth to consider
2 - Hey Mardy17, I found this sentence a bit awkward. Otherwise, everything else is pretty solid. For illustrate, when...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 25, 2016 / Ethanchen1998 - Jan 25, 2016
|Should the development of alternative sources of energy be continued ? Support your view
3 - Thank you very much, Louisa...I really appreciate your comments on my essay. I am glad that the content is...
Writing Feedbackdavid2708 - Jan 25, 2016 / david2708 - Jan 25, 2016
|'build up close relation to others' - The Effect of Electronic Media on Personal Relationship
4 - Sri, your thesis statement and personal opinion have totally changed the discussion that the actual prompt wished you to...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - ENERGY WASTED DUE TO THE HEAT LOSS IN TWO-STOREY HOUSE
2 - ... about air circulation which causes energy wasted due toBECAUSE/SINCE/AS the heat loss in THE two-storey house. Hi Awe,...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 25, 2016 / Mardy17 - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 : Leaking in and out of air inside a house
NEW - The figure displays air circulation either it comes in or comes out of a 2-floor house through various holes...
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 25, 2016 / — -
|TASK 2 - A discussion about Sense of Competition and Sense of Cooperation
2 - Mochtar, you are short by one paragraph / opinion in this essay. You presented a qualified introduction, then presented...
Writing Feedbackichanpants89 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK1 a wind turbine used to generate electricity
3 - Muhammad, if the first sentence in this essay is your opening statement that you have not followed the proper...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|A good neighbor must be respectful and thoughtful - TOEFL independent essay
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 24, 2016 / Hiddengrace - Jan 24, 2016
|Ielts task 2 essay: the responsibility of rich countries for helping the poorer nations
2 - Long, keep in mind that in the format of an academic essay, the opening paragraph must always include your...
Writing Feedbacktkb1311173 - Jan 24, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2016
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