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|IELTS TASK 1: process of a wind turbine and its locations
2 - ... that are categorised CATEGORIZED into ... It is noticable NOTICEABLE that a... three fibreglass FIBERGLASS...
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|I am inclined to oppose constructing a factory in my near community - TOEFL independent essay
2 - Nour, 300 is the maximum word count. You don't have to deliver exactly 300 words in every essay. Just...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|As it is commonly understood, people behave towards each other differently depending on situation.
Writing Feedbackmehdi_gh7022 - Jan 25, 2016 / mehdi_gh7022 - Jan 26, 2016
|In contemporary society, obesity has become a modern epidemic
3 - This is my first time to post writing on the website and unexpectedly got a valuable feedback. I am...
Writing Feedbackkay25 - Jan 25, 2016 / kay25 - Jan 26, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - A Sense of Competition Should be Encouraged to Children
2 - Muhamad, why did you only provide your introduction and your conclusion? How were you able to come up with...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|The parts of the technology for producing electricity from the wind and where it should be installed
2 - ... According to the diagram, a wind turbine consistS of a tall and strong steel tower, ... a wind...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 25, 2016 / Mardy17 - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: The advantages of having own business outweigh the disadvantages
2 - Siti, you did some pretty good work on this essay. The vocabulary you used shows a higher level of...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : EMPLOYEE OR EMPLOYER - being an owner of some personal business is worth to consider
2 - Hey Mardy17, I found this sentence a bit awkward. Otherwise, everything else is pretty solid. For illustrate, when...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 25, 2016 / Ethanchen1998 - Jan 25, 2016
|Should the development of alternative sources of energy be continued ? Support your view
3 - Thank you very much, Louisa...I really appreciate your comments on my essay. I am glad that the content is...
Writing Feedbackdavid2708 - Jan 25, 2016 / david2708 - Jan 25, 2016
|'build up close relation to others' - The Effect of Electronic Media on Personal Relationship
4 - Sri, your thesis statement and personal opinion have totally changed the discussion that the actual prompt wished you to...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - ENERGY WASTED DUE TO THE HEAT LOSS IN TWO-STOREY HOUSE
2 - ... about air circulation which causes energy wasted due toBECAUSE/SINCE/AS the heat loss in THE two-storey house. Hi Awe,...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 25, 2016 / Mardy17 - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 : Leaking in and out of air inside a house
NEW - The figure displays air circulation either it comes in or comes out of a 2-floor house through various holes...
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|TASK 2 - A discussion about Sense of Competition and Sense of Cooperation
2 - Mochtar, you are short by one paragraph / opinion in this essay. You presented a qualified introduction, then presented...
Writing Feedbackichanpants89 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK1 a wind turbine used to generate electricity
3 - Muhammad, if the first sentence in this essay is your opening statement that you have not followed the proper...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 25, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2016
|A good neighbor must be respectful and thoughtful - TOEFL independent essay
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 24, 2016 / Hiddengrace - Jan 24, 2016
|Ielts task 2 essay: the responsibility of rich countries for helping the poorer nations
2 - Long, keep in mind that in the format of an academic essay, the opening paragraph must always include your...
Writing Feedbacktkb1311173 - Jan 24, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2016
|Predominant reasons for wildlife population alteration (Writing task 1)
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Jan 24, 2016 / niirmala - Feb 2, 2016
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Smoking should be illegal.
5 - I hope that in a few years people will understand that smoking has many more bad sides than good....
Writing Feedbackgenteel gander - Jan 23, 2016 / iceunicorna - Jan 24, 2016
|A big city is better for children to grow up- TOEFL independent essay
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 23, 2016 / NourNour - Jan 23, 2016
|I have always believed that hard work is the key to success - TOEFL independent essay
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 23, 2016 / NourNour - Jan 24, 2016
|Greed and Unsafe of Global Economic
Writing Feedbacksholihin84 - Jan 23, 2016 / sholihin84 - Jan 26, 2016
|Link of the world: iPhone from birth to death Nowadays, with the development of industry and technol
2 - What exactly is the central topic of this research paper? What are you trying to discuss and present to...
Writing Feedbackiceunicorna - Jan 23, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2016
|Journal on The Ice Master as Bob Bartlett
3 - Samuel, while the essay is well written and you are most welcoming of all instructive criticism, I am not...
Writing FeedbackSamuelsam123 - Jan 23, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2016
|The percentage of human impact on plants and animals is seven times as much as some natural events
2 - here, you have to describe the accurate key points. As there is time duration, you should use language...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Jan 22, 2016 / tiaDS - Jan 23, 2016
|In order to work in a productive atmosphere, co-workers must have some specific characteristics.
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 22, 2016 / NourNour - Jan 23, 2016
|The proportion of population in a particular area, totaling a 16 year-period
2 - I have spotted some errors as you have problem with subject-verb agreement. long sentence and I...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Jan 22, 2016 / tiaDS - Jan 23, 2016
|The number of species extinctions in tropical forests shows an upward trend
3 - The writing style is improving. The language use is slowly becoming more complex and your thought patterns are much...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2016
|Many people watch television and movies on a daily basis. This can affect their behavior. How?
2 - The discussion is strong. Your word choice is improving, although I would like to see more complex word usage...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2016
|Small society was the most favorite place for living but now inhabitants move to the vast cities
2 - Time being changes the people'S habits. Although A small society had CAN become the most... prior times THE PAST,...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2016
|The replacement of traditional foods with junk eating from other countries brings a negative impact
5 - Le, your introduction needs to deliver the 3 sentence minimum requirement in order to be considered a complete and...
Writing Feedbacklethaophuong287 - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: ELECTRONIC MEDIA IS A THREAT TO HUMAN PERSONAL RELATIONSHIP
2 - toTo begin, those who contradict ... theThe reason of this is that electronic gadgets, that allowenabling people to...
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 22, 2016 / sir99 - Jan 22, 2016
|Air Circulation System and Heat Depletion Process in The House
2 - The grammar problems in the essay are a bit hard to ignore in this essay. However, I fully expect...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 22, 2016
|The level of graduates from 2001 to 2007 who are recruited as regular educators in Ontario; IELTS 1
2 - ...French-language teachers, graduates in 2001 stood at 70% in the starting period , likewise, the teachers of English subject...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 22, 2016 / nuni11 - Jan 22, 2016
|Technology devices brings merits toward the users, particularly on their personal relationships
2 - Make sure that you use the correct words to describe certain aspects of the essay. For example, use the...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 information about how heat is released and energy is used
2 - According to the data, the place where the wind AIR is blowing COMING into consists of various forms. ......
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 22, 2016 / annahatef - Jan 23, 2016
|Generating electricity from wind turbine - IELTS
2 - So far the only problem of your essay has to do with sentence structure. There are problems with your...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 22, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - A TECHNOLOGY FOR PRODUCING ELECTRICITY FROM WIND - provided in the diagram
2 - ... illustrates a technology for... more energy from wind ELECTRICITY IN THE PROCESS. In general, getting more electricity via...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 22, 2016
|The well behaved and educated parents are the best teachers for their children. TOEFL independent
2 - Nour, you can only agree or disagree to a certain extent with an opinion in the prompt of the...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|The level of exercise and absenteeism in a giant company in 2012 - bar and table chart
2 - Pay attention to your plural and singular word usage. Make use of connector words whenever necessary. Your essay would...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|Cinema attendance between 1990 and 2010 in the United Kingdom
NEW - A breakdown of the figure for cinema attendance between 1990 and 2010 in the UK is showed in line...
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|Traditional music is more important than other and it should be preserved as an asset.
5 - Hi Zohaib, i think you should make a plan clearly before you start writing. here they are some suggestions...
Writing Feedbackzohaib - Jan 21, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 3, 2016
|Female Unemployment Rates In Each Country Of The United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014
2 - This is good. Yet, I prefer using "showed" rather than "was". Here is The figure showed some fluctuations...
Writing Feedbackyus72 - Jan 21, 2016 / eddies - Jan 21, 2016
|A description of the number of visitor utilizing three main airports in New York City
2 - ... number of visitorS utilizing THE three main airports ... period OF 1995 to 2000 , calculated by THE...
Writing Feedbackyus72 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|The percentage of unemployment rates among women in several countries of the United Kingdom
3 - There were very minimal errors in this essay. The mistakes you made were not enough to make a direct...
Writing FeedbackFauzi17 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|The number of travellers visited New York City through three main US airports
3 - There are definite spelling problems in your essay. Always pay attention to the red line / spelling error indicator...
Writing FeedbackFauzi17 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|Women unemployment percentage in four countries of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014 (IELTS 1)
2 - Hy Niam01. Actually, you have to attach the image of the bar chart that you have explained. Well, I...
Writing FeedbackNiam01 - Jan 21, 2016 / Mardy17 - Jan 22, 2016
|Housing, food, health care, education, transportation and other needs in a country
2 - Good work on presenting the facts of the pie charts. Remember, you have to double check the kind of...
Writing FeedbackFauzi17 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|Travelers using three major airports in New York City (writing task 1)
2 - You have a very good grasp of the bar chart and you have an obvious semi-advanced grasp of how...
Writing FeedbackNiam01 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|A Breakdown of Household Consumption
2 - @desgit33 let me give feedback your writing A breakdown of the proportion of the average of household consumptionspending...
Writing Feedbackdesgit33 - Jan 21, 2016 / Niam01 - Jan 21, 2016
|The press should report the residents life who have some inspired story, not some celebrities rumors
5 - These days there are too much news of how artists life their days ---------->Nowadays, there many news about...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 21, 2016 / NourNour - Jan 25, 2016
|The average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010
2 - @yus72, let me give you suggestion A description of the proportion of the familylocal country expense in region...
Writing Feedbackyus72 - Jan 21, 2016 / Niam01 - Jan 21, 2016
|A description of the percentage of local spending by a houshold in 1950 and sixty years later
2 - hi niam01, i just give some suggestions for you. Overall, it is evident that, in 1950, housing saw...
Writing FeedbackNiam01 - Jan 21, 2016 / Fauzi17 - Jan 21, 2016
|IELTS 2: Some people believe that to effort the healthy lifestyle in advanced era is extremely hard
3 - Dini, you need to make sure that you always present the correct paragraph format to the reader. This means,...
Writing Feedbackpertiwi02 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|A Comparison of Household Expenditures between 1950 and 2010 - the pie charts
3 - However, in sixty years later, housing expenditure FOR HOUSING decreased dramatically to ... In contras BY CONTRAST, food...
Writing FeedbackFebri91 - Jan 21, 2016 / Niam01 - Jan 21, 2016
|Different household spending during 60 years
4 - Hi Bunglon, let me give you some suggestion!! :) ..there were significant changeCHANGES in the percentage.. ..expenditure decreased...
Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Jan 21, 2016 / awe_28 - Feb 20, 2016
|A breakdown of the average expenditures for household in six decades (from 195- to 2010)
2 - hai sir99, i just give some suggestion for you. ... expenditures for household in six decades (from 195-...
Writing Feedbacksir99 - Jan 21, 2016 / Fauzi17 - Jan 21, 2016
|The pie chart compares the amount of average consumption of family in one country from 1950 to 2010.
2 - ... of A family in one country ... AS compared by percentage. ... percentage of consumption MONEY SPENT ON...
Writing FeedbackSyahrul08 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 : IS ENTERTAINER'S-LIFE-RELATED INFORMATION MEANINGFUL FOR US?
2 - Annisa, your introductory paragraph is unclear. You have not successfully restated the prompt thesis and your outline of the...
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - THE PROPORTION OF SEVERAL ISSUE FACED BY PEOPLE GOING ABROAD
Writing Feedbackandika06 - Jan 21, 2016 / Syahrul08 - Jan 21, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - THE COMPARISON OF INTERNAL AND EXTERNAL COMMUNICATION ABILITIES
3 - Hi, Bro! It is my correction. Please pay attention. Good job and keep spirit. ... the figure shows...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 21, 2016 / sir99 - Jan 21, 2016
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