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|Small community environment prevents loneliness and social isolation
4 - Le, your opening statement does not function in the manner that it is supposed to within the essay. The...
Writing Feedbackbaongoc - Dec 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2016
|IELTS Essay - Building a statue/ monument to honor a famous person. Who would you choose? Ho Chi Min
2 - Hi Vuthithuhienb1 Here are my suggestions. I tried my best to help you, also I saw many spelling...
Writing Feedbackvuthithuhienb1 - Dec 24, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Dec 24, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Why do we need music?
5 - You inverted your discussion of the essay. While A premium amount of discussion should have been reserved for...
Writing FeedbackHidro13 - Dec 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2016
|City gridlock, lack of foods - overpopulation caused immense problems, what are the solutions?
2 - Hi there I think that your introduction and the conclusion shouldn't be detailed, it should be general. like...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Dec 23, 2015 / Hidro13 - Dec 24, 2015
|IELTS task 2 exam - best way to learn: "learning by doing" or through books and from teachers?
2 - You need at least three sentences in a paragraph. If you write less than the sentences required, then...
Writing Feedbackalamedaboy - Dec 23, 2015 / eddies - Dec 23, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 1: The average monthly temperature and sunshine in Landon, New York and Sydney
NEW - =)The graph and table show the average monthly temperature and the average number of hours of sunshine per year...
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|The effects of medical care in human life
2 - Healthy is a precious capital in human life. Did you mean to say Health? humankinds are living longer....
Writing FeedbackEjepe - Dec 23, 2015 / KatieJoy - Dec 23, 2015
|Descriptive essay : Singapore during Japanese Occupation
Writing FeedbackSamuelsam123 - Dec 23, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Dec 23, 2015
|Comparisons regarding the number of heat level per month and annual hours of sunshine; IELTS 1
2 - According to the data particularly in the line chart, the advance cities as Sydney records the greatest temperature in...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Dec 23, 2015 / shuto - Dec 23, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2-Medical care improvement for living longer
2 - ... is to make people are livinglive longer and to increase of human-life expectancy. Some people claim about advantages...
Writing FeedbackInkanLukie - Dec 23, 2015 / shuto - Dec 23, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 - the presence of senior citizens in a community is beneficial; life expectancy essay
NEW - One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing....
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|'the rapid growth of population is always a bad news' - IELTS TASK 2 THE INCREASE LIFE EXPECTANCY
Writing Feedbacklinanovirawati - Dec 23, 2015 / Ejepe - Dec 23, 2015
|Handwriting errors, undermined writing skills - these are effects of using computers and smartphones
2 - I suggest you to upload the question of this writing task 2, so we can see whether it answers...
Writing Feedbackrasam11 - Dec 22, 2015 / somasalims - Dec 23, 2015
|Pocket money helps children for managing their future financial skills
2 - More attention should be paid to teach children become an responsible adult. One of the best ways is...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 22, 2015 / eddies - Dec 22, 2015
|TOEFL Independent Task (1/185) - Why do you think people attend college or university?
2 - Some consider attending university as a best way to gain professional knowledge. Some think entering ... SomeOthers think going...
Writing Feedbackliuzhengxian - Dec 22, 2015 / Olivia33 - Jan 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 "Learning to Manage Money is One of the Key Aspects of Adult Life"
2 - I will explain further those means in this essay. (I think it would be better if you just mention...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Dec 21, 2015 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 6, 2016
|Advantage and Disadvantage Essay - Being an Only Child
3 - In the past, there were families with a dozen or so children. However, ın the modern world, having an...
Writing FeedbackFurkan - Dec 21, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 23, 2015
|LAZINESS (it talk about laziness. It is my thinking, my first paragraph post on here.
3 - Suong, don't just write aimlessly. I know that you are trying to develop your English writing skills but writing...
Writing Feedbacksuonghoang - Dec 20, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 23, 2015
|My Perception about ONLINE SHOP - Good or Bad?
2 - there THERE is no doubt that THE internet is ONE of the greatest humankind inventions of the last century....
Writing FeedbackCulas18 - Dec 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2015
|kasfulanwar7 - I want to tell about sport, just my opinion
2 - As we know, sportS is ARE physical activity IES that aimS to maintain or improve A PERSON'S physical ability...
Writing FeedbackKasfulanwar7 - Dec 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2015
|The Most Favorite Leader in Indonesia by Grahyta
3 - Grayta, try to make the essay more informative. As Michael said, it would be nice to learn about why...
Writing FeedbackGrahyta24 - Dec 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 23, 2015
|Toefl essay: Advice from a supervisor is more valuable than some hint from a co-worker
4 - Hello, ellaak, thank you for taking your time reading my essay and tidying up the introduction. Hello, vangiespen. I...
Writing Feedbackkichan - Dec 19, 2015 / kichan - Dec 19, 2015
|[IELST TASK 1] visitors to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999
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|The children should be allowed to have smart phones along with maintaining some restrictions - TOEFL
2 - Rajeeb, you cannot discuss this essay by staying in the middle or taking the "up to a certain degree"...
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|Harmful effects on natural sources and how to minimize them
2 - ...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 19, 2015 / bonboncase - Dec 19, 2015
|Because of mobile phones and computers people are losing the ability to communicate face to face
Writing Feedbackthunang - Dec 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2015
|IELTS: The Table and The Bar - forms of transportation used for journeys in some countries
Writing Feedbackainirere - Dec 18, 2015 / Furkan - Dec 21, 2015
|Global warming has an impact on world stability. How to reduce carbon footprint?
2 - Furkan, I wish that you had provided us with the actual prompt you are trying to answer along with...
Writing FeedbackFurkan - Dec 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 18, 2015
|IELTS-TASK2 internet contains information however sometimes this information is inaccurate or wrong
3 - vangiespen your comments is precious to me and I appreciate your effort to show me my errors, so...
Writing Feedbackrasam11 - Dec 18, 2015 / rasam11 - Dec 18, 2015
|[IELST TASK 1] The average number of hours per week that men and women spend doing houseworks
NEW - The bar chart shows the average number of hours per week that men and women spend doing activities around...
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|The skills that we can improve from Facebook
Writing FeedbackFia0910 - Dec 17, 2015 / Fia0910 - Dec 19, 2015
|Percentage of Yemen and Italy population - IELTS 1 writing that I did for 1.5 hours
5 - The pie charts given compare the percentage of YemenI and Italy ITALIAN population based on the ages in 2000...
Writing FeedbackMaulinaDChem - Dec 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 18, 2015
|A varieties of clothes change people - correct my essay for TOEFL practice
2 - Some people from past until now spend BELIEVE THAT IT IS IMPORTANT TO SPEND A high amount of money...
Writing FeedbackBayan - Dec 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 17, 2015
|Luis Riel led two rebellions against his government, killing many in the process - guilty of treason
Writing Feedbackaria12345678 - Dec 16, 2015 / aria12345678 - Dec 17, 2015
|SPORT FOR CHILDREN INSTEAD OF COMPUTER GAMES
2 - Anna, this is a personal opinion essay. Therefore, you have to present your personal opinion in the introductory statement...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 16, 2015
|Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today's society.
4 - You write good. Yet, you need to improve the way you write the introduction, especially the thesis. As...
Writing Feedbackjaysmile4 - Dec 16, 2015 / eddies - Dec 17, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Government's Subsidy For Education And Healthcare
Writing Feedbackaniani - Dec 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 15, 2015
|ALLOCATING UNIVERSITY DEGREE TO EDUCATION JOB OR GIVING PEOPLE GENERAL KNOWLEDGE ABOUT IT
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 15, 2015 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 8, 2016
|Some persons claim that competition sense among children is important and need to be strenghtened
Writing Feedbackafsarazizi - Dec 15, 2015 / afsarazizi - Dec 15, 2015
|Why people choose to go to a college or university more than the past time?
Writing FeedbackRosaKar - Dec 15, 2015 / RosaKar - Dec 15, 2015
|The growing number of high school leavers choose to obtain their bachelor degree in a foreign school
2 - Hi hollanda, Nice essay. A few suggestion about it. school leavers choose to obtain their bachelor degree...
Writing Feedbackhollanda - Dec 14, 2015 / Guang - Dec 14, 2015
|We can not function without doctors because they are more important than inventors.. A/D?
Writing Feedbackpikul - Dec 14, 2015 / pikul - Dec 14, 2015
|Online sales for retail area of travel, film/music, books, and clothes in New Zealand
NEW - The pie charts give information about kinds of online sales for retail area which consist of travel, film/music, books,...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Dec 14, 2015 / — -
|FOCUSING ONE SUBJECT IN UNIVERSITY OR NOT
2 - Hi annahatef, nice to see you here. Now, let me give some corrections on your passage. Here it goes....
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 13, 2015 / aniani - Dec 13, 2015
|The idea of earning money by working for just a single job is not popular already; Cambridge IELTS-1
3 - You should write the question to make the task clear and easier to correct, is the essay fulfill all...
Writing FeedbackSunitha1213 - Dec 13, 2015 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 8, 2016
|To reduce accidents number the council of Balmer Island should limit renting of mopeds; GRE argument
2 - The main problem that I see in your argument essay is that you have a hard time structuring your...
Writing FeedbackKYR8533 - Dec 13, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 13, 2015
|TOEFL Task - The environmental issue is too complex to be handled by individuals.
4 - ThingsProblems like global warming, air pollution, and energy crisis, these kinds of problems can be barely solved by one'san...
Writing Feedbackbruce5658 - Dec 13, 2015 / Olivia33 - Jan 4, 2016
|International experience and more precious opportunity. Statement of Purpose For Enrollment at KAUST
4 - Hi Ani, I believe that this essay already has all the elements that make it a very good statement...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Dec 13, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 14, 2015
|FEELING UNSAFE AT HOME AND OUT - WRITING IELTS TASK 2 - CAUSES & SOLUTIONS
5 - Thank you so much for your detailed reply Madam. Your feedback is really helpful, it clear many of my...
Writing Feedbackhollanda - Dec 12, 2015 / hollanda - Dec 13, 2015
|Health is indeed wealth! IGCSE ESL - How to Improve for the Exam
Writing FeedbackNada9210 - Dec 12, 2015 / Nada9210 - Dec 12, 2015
|Multi cultural societies - IELTS Writing Task 2 - Agree or Disagree?
Writing Feedbackainirere - Dec 11, 2015 / ainirere - Dec 18, 2015
|The figure give information about smoking habits of the UK population by age. (Writing Task 1 IELTS)
10 - I see. I got new knowledge here, thank you so much vangiespen. I'll look another essays to improve my...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Dec 11, 2015 / ainirere - Dec 18, 2015
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 : The Number of Books Read by Different Genders At Burnay Public LIbrary
Writing Feedbackandrisaputra3 - Dec 11, 2015 / eddies - Dec 11, 2015
|The Function of Tax reflects in two aspects: in a country and individuals.
2 - ...we need strong armyarmies/the military to protect us, and armyarmies and weapons cost a lot... I think in...
Writing Feedbackmayjiang - Dec 11, 2015 / Charlottefang - Dec 11, 2015
|Redreacing the fee of air traveling is it good or not?
2 - Anna, in your essay, you only indicate the restated prompt and a declaration that you will be discussing both...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 11, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: In many countries, traditional dress and costumes are considered effective ways...
2 - Lithfia, do not use the term issue when you are not discussing a topic that has many sides or...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Dec 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 11, 2015
|People are never satisfied with what they have. They always want something different.
4 - Adil, when writing an opinion statement, you cannot say that you support one side in your introduction and then...
Writing Feedbackmushaithir - Dec 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 11, 2015
|How geography played a role in shaping the different "personalities" of Sumerians, Egyptians, and Ch
2 - ... the Mesopotamian area by the Persian Gulf, where the weather was always different. While egyptians had their nation...
Writing Feedbacksantima570 - Dec 10, 2015 / eegii0123 - Dec 10, 2015
|Writing about a successful person, Vincent Van Gogh example
Writing Feedbackalamedaboy - Dec 9, 2015 / alamedaboy - Dec 9, 2015
|We can't live without doctors as well as without inventors, so we must appreciate their efforts.
4 - ... technology and health sector are the most essential fields. The word "essential" is non-gradable. ... so when people...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Dec 9, 2015 / eegii0123 - Dec 10, 2015
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