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|IELTS Task 2, Do the students pay the tuition fee by themselves, agree or disagree ?
5 - Hi vangiespen, I highly appreciate your time and helps. I will get in deeper those issues. Many...
Writing Feedbackwatanabe - Jan 5, 2016 / watanabe - Jan 9, 2016
|TOEFL ESSAY: Children should have fun playing but rivarly also benefits them.
3 - Jin, there is one point for discussion that you failed to consider while you were developing this essay. There...
Writing FeedbackOlivia33 - Jan 4, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 5, 2016
|The continuous increase of divorce rate concerns many - what are the reasons of this trend?
2 - According to a research done by World Health Organization in 2013, the divorce rate in the world is 2...
Writing Feedbackthiet sun - Jan 4, 2016 / Ishaqur - Jan 4, 2016
|The recognized greatness of a political leader is coming from his ability to take up the challenges
2 - The essay is very generic. There are no concrete examples and nothing which you have related to. Your essay...
Writing Feedbackfadh93 - Jan 4, 2016 / sidchilling - Jan 4, 2016
|TOEFL: Y/N Professional athletes who receive high salaries are fully entitled to all money they get.
3 - Thanks a lot.:) @thiet sun Sometimes I just find it hard to use words or colocations correctly in my...
Writing FeedbackOlivia33 - Jan 3, 2016 / Olivia33 - Jan 4, 2016
|Write a paragraph about the measures of protecting endanger animals
4 - Another thing:so sorry for not hitting a space bar,which made you find it unconvinient to read my essay...
Writing FeedbackThanhthu - Jan 3, 2016 / Thanhthu - Jan 3, 2016
|IELTS: By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder.
3 - thank you much mate. What could be possible band score of this particular essay in real ielts ?...
Writing Feedbackjoezan - Jan 1, 2016 / joezan - Jan 1, 2016
|Essay about HOW TO CHANGE A BAD HABIT? -
2 - I would avoid talking in second person throughout the essay. It may be effective in the beginning to draw...
Writing Feedbacklongguyen - Dec 31, 2015 / ch017 - Dec 31, 2015
|Pollution and decreasing its effects on people and how to increase it
2 - You have to underline Pollution and Climate Change in order to explain in your introduction. REDUNDANCY...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 31, 2015 / akhfan - Jan 1, 2016
|Statement of Purpose : King Abdullah University of Science & Technology
NEW - Dear reader, I am really pleased if you give me some advice of my Statement of Purpose, since dead...
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|WRITING IELTS-TASK 2 The benefits and drawbacks of the education development
2 - Hi Asmaniatur Here are my suggestions: Nowadays, many student complete their study and get the graduation from...
Writing FeedbackAsmaniatur - Dec 31, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Dec 31, 2015
|IELTS essay about community service for high schoolers. It shouldn't be mandatory - only voluntary.
NEW - Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs . To what...
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|Should science be impersonal? I want to improve my writing skill.
NEW - I am practicing my English writing as a non-native speaker. This is my first post so far. Thank a...
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|The Broken Girl - Gothic horror English coursework (GCSE)
2 - screamed in agony. The girl all this time, she is being pulled needless to her screams they continue --...
Writing FeedbackBatuli jalo - Dec 28, 2015 / mcooley - Dec 29, 2015
|Technique of using ICT for young learner
3 - thanks...
Writing FeedbackFia0910 - Dec 28, 2015 / Fia0910 - Dec 31, 2015
|People are concerned how the government distributes a budget for various activities.
NEW - Government should spend more money on education than on recreation and sports Nowadays, an increasing number of people...
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|List the required readings from courses during the school year - grammar check
4 - Luisa, you are thinking about the statement of instruction in a generalized manner. Thought of in standard form, you...
Writing Feedbackmarialuisadcl - Dec 27, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2015
|Time To Give Back - Peace Corps Motivation Statement Essay
Writing Feedbackcleo71 - Dec 26, 2015 / nic123 - Dec 27, 2015
|Technology has many disadvantages as well as advantages.
2 - Due to THE ongoing industrialization and ONGOING technological advancementS , humans are enjoying more luxuries than ever before. There...
Writing Feedbackprince18 - Dec 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 26, 2015
|Economy decreases poverty or increases enviromental damages
NEW - Some people think that economic growth is the only way to stop world's poverty and hunger, while others say...
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|TOEFL Independent essay- owning smart phones by young children
4 - Hey @Nournour, Below you may find some suggestions regarding your essay. Hope this helps. Smart phonesisare one...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Dec 25, 2015 / brayan1996 - Jan 15, 2016
|Starting early education for young children or letting them to play?
Writing Feedbackrezamonadi - Dec 25, 2015 / NourNour - Dec 25, 2015
|Causes and reasons of vanishing languages - it can destroy some valuable information about societies
NEW - Some languages spoken by very few people are losing their importance and may become extinct completely. Is it a...
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|Why college or university? To acquire a new knowledge and prepare for a future career - IELTS
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Dec 24, 2015 / NourNour - Dec 25, 2015
|Small community environment prevents loneliness and social isolation
4 - Le, your opening statement does not function in the manner that it is supposed to within the essay. The...
Writing Feedbackbaongoc - Dec 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2016
|IELTS Essay - Building a statue/ monument to honor a famous person. Who would you choose? Ho Chi Min
2 - Hi Vuthithuhienb1 Here are my suggestions. I tried my best to help you, also I saw many spelling...
Writing Feedbackvuthithuhienb1 - Dec 24, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Dec 24, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Why do we need music?
5 - You inverted your discussion of the essay. While A premium amount of discussion should have been reserved for...
Writing FeedbackHidro13 - Dec 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2016
|City gridlock, lack of foods - overpopulation caused immense problems, what are the solutions?
2 - Hi there I think that your introduction and the conclusion shouldn't be detailed, it should be general. like...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Dec 23, 2015 / Hidro13 - Dec 24, 2015
|IELTS task 2 exam - best way to learn: "learning by doing" or through books and from teachers?
2 - You need at least three sentences in a paragraph. If you write less than the sentences required, then...
Writing Feedbackalamedaboy - Dec 23, 2015 / eddies - Dec 23, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 1: The average monthly temperature and sunshine in Landon, New York and Sydney
NEW - =)The graph and table show the average monthly temperature and the average number of hours of sunshine per year...
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|The effects of medical care in human life
2 - Healthy is a precious capital in human life. Did you mean to say Health? humankinds are living longer....
Writing FeedbackEjepe - Dec 23, 2015 / KatieJoy - Dec 23, 2015
|Descriptive essay : Singapore during Japanese Occupation
Writing FeedbackSamuelsam123 - Dec 23, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Dec 23, 2015
|Comparisons regarding the number of heat level per month and annual hours of sunshine; IELTS 1
2 - According to the data particularly in the line chart, the advance cities as Sydney records the greatest temperature in...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Dec 23, 2015 / shuto - Dec 23, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2-Medical care improvement for living longer
2 - ... is to make people are livinglive longer and to increase of human-life expectancy. Some people claim about advantages...
Writing FeedbackInkanLukie - Dec 23, 2015 / shuto - Dec 23, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 - the presence of senior citizens in a community is beneficial; life expectancy essay
NEW - One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing....
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|'the rapid growth of population is always a bad news' - IELTS TASK 2 THE INCREASE LIFE EXPECTANCY
Writing Feedbacklinanovirawati - Dec 23, 2015 / Ejepe - Dec 23, 2015
|Handwriting errors, undermined writing skills - these are effects of using computers and smartphones
2 - I suggest you to upload the question of this writing task 2, so we can see whether it answers...
Writing Feedbackrasam11 - Dec 22, 2015 / somasalims - Dec 23, 2015
|Pocket money helps children for managing their future financial skills
2 - More attention should be paid to teach children become an responsible adult. One of the best ways is...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 22, 2015 / eddies - Dec 22, 2015
|TOEFL Independent Task (1/185) - Why do you think people attend college or university?
2 - Some consider attending university as a best way to gain professional knowledge. Some think entering ... SomeOthers think going...
Writing Feedbackliuzhengxian - Dec 22, 2015 / Olivia33 - Jan 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 "Learning to Manage Money is One of the Key Aspects of Adult Life"
2 - I will explain further those means in this essay. (I think it would be better if you just mention...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Dec 21, 2015 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 6, 2016
|Advantage and Disadvantage Essay - Being an Only Child
3 - In the past, there were families with a dozen or so children. However, ın the modern world, having an...
Writing FeedbackFurkan - Dec 21, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 23, 2015
|LAZINESS (it talk about laziness. It is my thinking, my first paragraph post on here.
3 - Suong, don't just write aimlessly. I know that you are trying to develop your English writing skills but writing...
Writing Feedbacksuonghoang - Dec 20, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 23, 2015
|My Perception about ONLINE SHOP - Good or Bad?
2 - there THERE is no doubt that THE internet is ONE of the greatest humankind inventions of the last century....
Writing FeedbackCulas18 - Dec 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2015
|kasfulanwar7 - I want to tell about sport, just my opinion
2 - As we know, sportS is ARE physical activity IES that aimS to maintain or improve A PERSON'S physical ability...
Writing FeedbackKasfulanwar7 - Dec 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2015
|The Most Favorite Leader in Indonesia by Grahyta
3 - Grayta, try to make the essay more informative. As Michael said, it would be nice to learn about why...
Writing FeedbackGrahyta24 - Dec 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 23, 2015
|Toefl essay: Advice from a supervisor is more valuable than some hint from a co-worker
4 - Hello, ellaak, thank you for taking your time reading my essay and tidying up the introduction. Hello, vangiespen. I...
Writing Feedbackkichan - Dec 19, 2015 / kichan - Dec 19, 2015
|[IELST TASK 1] visitors to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999
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|The children should be allowed to have smart phones along with maintaining some restrictions - TOEFL
2 - Rajeeb, you cannot discuss this essay by staying in the middle or taking the "up to a certain degree"...
Writing FeedbackTechRinser - Dec 19, 2015 / Holt - Mar 20, 2017
|Harmful effects on natural sources and how to minimize them
2 - ...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 19, 2015 / bonboncase - Dec 19, 2015
|Because of mobile phones and computers people are losing the ability to communicate face to face
Writing Feedbackthunang - Dec 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2015
|IELTS: The Table and The Bar - forms of transportation used for journeys in some countries
Writing Feedbackainirere - Dec 18, 2015 / Furkan - Dec 21, 2015
|Global warming has an impact on world stability. How to reduce carbon footprint?
2 - Furkan, I wish that you had provided us with the actual prompt you are trying to answer along with...
Writing FeedbackFurkan - Dec 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 18, 2015
|IELTS-TASK2 internet contains information however sometimes this information is inaccurate or wrong
3 - vangiespen your comments is precious to me and I appreciate your effort to show me my errors, so...
Writing Feedbackrasam11 - Dec 18, 2015 / rasam11 - Dec 18, 2015
|[IELST TASK 1] The average number of hours per week that men and women spend doing houseworks
NEW - The bar chart shows the average number of hours per week that men and women spend doing activities around...
Writing FeedbackCruella - Dec 18, 2015 / — -
|The skills that we can improve from Facebook
Writing FeedbackFia0910 - Dec 17, 2015 / Fia0910 - Dec 19, 2015
|Percentage of Yemen and Italy population - IELTS 1 writing that I did for 1.5 hours
5 - The pie charts given compare the percentage of YemenI and Italy ITALIAN population based on the ages in 2000...
Writing FeedbackMaulinaDChem - Dec 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 18, 2015
|A varieties of clothes change people - correct my essay for TOEFL practice
2 - Some people from past until now spend BELIEVE THAT IT IS IMPORTANT TO SPEND A high amount of money...
Writing FeedbackBayan - Dec 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 17, 2015
|Luis Riel led two rebellions against his government, killing many in the process - guilty of treason
Writing Feedbackaria12345678 - Dec 16, 2015 / aria12345678 - Dec 17, 2015
|SPORT FOR CHILDREN INSTEAD OF COMPUTER GAMES
2 - Anna, this is a personal opinion essay. Therefore, you have to present your personal opinion in the introductory statement...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 16, 2015
|Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today's society.
4 - You write good. Yet, you need to improve the way you write the introduction, especially the thesis. As...
Writing Feedbackjaysmile4 - Dec 16, 2015 / eddies - Dec 17, 2015
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