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|IELTS 1 - The Process of reusing the rainwater for household - diagram
2 - Hi, Inastia. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me, if I...
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 23, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|According to the diagram, air leaks into the house through several indoor-outdoor connections
2 - The diagram reveals how air circulation in a house--> how air circulate the heat is lost from a roomthan...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 23, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 23, 2016
|The picture gives information about the process of retention and reuse of rainwater.
2 - hi astri, let me paraphrase your introduction. Overall, it can be seen that the process involves four major...
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Mar 23, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Mar 23, 2016
|The changes which have occurred in West Park Secondary School,
2 - Hi miss Nida, I have read your good writing, but, let me give my opinion about your writing :)...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 23, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 23, 2016
|The Alterations Occured on West Side of Junior High School
4 - The most noticeable change(s) was the replacement of green ... Between 1980 and 2010, car park had been...
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 23, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Mar 26, 2016
|There are some different steps to treat the rainwater to produce the quality of water
2 - -rainwater isbeing reused for - are some different steps - to use it for several aimspurposes ....
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|The diagram presents the several processes for rainwater recycling
2 - The diagram presents information regarding the rainwater treatment process. After being treated, water can be used...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 23, 2016 / MisterWandering - Mar 23, 2016
|The development of West Park secondary school since its contraction in 1950
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Mar 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|Reuse of rainwater through several treatments
2 - The diagram informs the recycling system of rain water to be hygienehygienic, needs adjective water used domestically in people...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 23, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 23, 2016
|Method of losing heat and wasting energy by transferring air
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|Water Cycle Base on The Location Where It is Dropped
2 - Hi Yonathan, I would like to help modify your essay, to start, your overall analysis is good, however, it...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS task 1: Water treatment for household use
NEW - The diagram shows how rainwater is reused. ... The diagram illustrates the process of water treatment for household...
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|IELTS task 1: New buildings arrangement - West Park Secondary School maps
2 - 30 years interval Overall, the school area had been expanded immensely. The area of the school block had...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 22, 2016 / The Everest - Mar 23, 2016
|West Park Secondary School construction during 3 decades
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 22, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Land usage differences over the time of period in the West Park Secondary School
2 - The changingchanges of West Park Secondary School area between 1950 and 2010 is shown by the maps and it...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 22, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Several ways of heat loss and energy waste in a house due to the airflow in building - IELTS
2 - Dear angga93,I hope you find the suggestion below helpful. If I make any mistake, please correct me and thanks....
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 22, 2016 / iDella - Mar 23, 2016
|The air flows out and into the house thus causing inefficient consuming energy on heater operating
2 - - The diagram informsillustrates the ways - of air flowing -thusthat caused - inefficient consumingconsumption of energy on -...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|The Diagram of Precipitation Flows
NEW - The diagram illustrates regarding to reuse of precipitation which are maintaining to hold in two different places. Although it...
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|The changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School (IELTS TASK 1)
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 22, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 23, 2016
|Air Circulation Inside The House Can Waste Energy and Cause Heat Loss.
3 - Hi, Mr Yonathan I would like to suggest you. The air circulation, such as air leaking into [...]...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 22, 2016 / tiraatira11 - Mar 23, 2016
|Does more knowledge make ideas complex?
3 - This is my alternative for your second paragraph, thanks. Knowledge is clear cut when there are actions to...
Writing Feedbackjustooridoori - Mar 22, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 1, 2016
|TOEFL: When choosing a place to live, what do you consider most important?
3 - Thank you for your time. I have one question... I've chosen "One reason I feel" because this is a...
Writing Feedbackcirora - Mar 22, 2016 / cirora - Mar 23, 2016
|The diagram show how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up to date weather forecasting
2 - Hello Soe Htet Aung, you should create at least 3 sentences for each paragraph. I try to modify your...
Writing FeedbackThe Everest - Mar 22, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|After reading a passage about Chinese 13-5
Writing Feedbackpitehu - Mar 22, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 22, 2016
|The percentage of citizen access to recent technology in Britain throughout eight years.
3 - Hi Wahyu. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me if I...
Writing FeedbackWahyunia_wns - Mar 22, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|Characteristics of wireless channel in communication - is this paragraph well written ?
4 - Hi Suhib, thanks a lot for appreciating our work here on EF, there's nothing more like words of thanks...
Writing Feedbacksuhib - Mar 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 24, 2016
|My favorite author: J.K.Rowling (nowadays, the best writer)
2 - Hey, Varlamow, That's an interesting topic. Did you come up with the idea by yourself? I appreciate authors...
Writing FeedbackVarlamow - Mar 21, 2016 / Chan Dara - Mar 22, 2016
|Nowadays, its is quite common for young people to have a break year before going university. IELTS2
4 - Hy Wenyun, here my comment. check it, i may wrong. thanks Nowadays, its is --> improper using of...
Writing Feedbackwenyun - Mar 21, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Better to be a home student using a computer or study in the traditional way - attending schools?
Writing Feedbackdiemthuy - Mar 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 22, 2016
|To understand all the matter connected with the scientific research and to avoid some damage
Writing Feedbacksiti hamsyah - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|There are some certain things in this world which we simply should not try to understand
Writing Feedbackgiligrp - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|Scientific research and experiments are nessesary to deeply understand the inventions
3 - Hi Amirul, as I comprehend your essay, I must say that you started strong, however, the last paragraph needs...
Writing FeedbackAmirulmumin - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|News: the truth should be objective rather than subjective
6 - hi, aviniwirastri. here my comments. keep writing so that news should be presented as objective as possible...
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 20, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 26, 2016
|The reasons for choosing certain courses and how they should be paid - Ielts
2 - interesting in subject you need to put interest as a noun/subject. whereas 40 % of them answeredanswering for...
Writing FeedbackThe Everest - Mar 20, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 20, 2016
|"Aloha!" your on this island ! ( I want help about the Descriptive essay about Hawaii. )
Writing Feedbacklo0olo0o24 - Mar 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|Apparent differences between populations in Yemen and Italy - IELTS Task 1
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Mar 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 22, 2016
|IELTS Taks 2 _ Are sport facilities less useful to maintain public health?
2 - Hello wulanbila16 I applied a few corrections to the text that is sounds much better: Nowadays, more...
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Mar 19, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 19, 2016
|The comparison of overseas students who graduated from universities in Canada.
2 - Hi Diqon, In my opinion you need to improve a little the structure of your essay. I don't know...
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Mar 19, 2016 / Anerena - Mar 21, 2016
|Should children, when they'll grow up, do same kind of jobs like their parents? - I have some doubts
6 - Hay,,,, I will try to give you some suggestions on the introduction part, please check your answer and the...
Writing FeedbackOathbinder - Mar 18, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 26, 2016
|Scientific research today attempts to go too far. (ielts task 2)
5 - People try to answer every question that the universe hasin the universe But my point of view is...
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 18, 2016 / The Everest - Mar 21, 2016
|Help in trouble, warm advice - Extended family statement. Toefl writing
5 - Hi, Kssuy6. These my comments which i focused only on your two first paragraphs. keep writing. Nowadays, most...
Writing Feedbackkssuy6 - Mar 17, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 31, 2016
|The alteration of America's Appearance in 1948 and 2010
6 - Let me give some suggestions: 1. Before you submit you essay, make sure that you have enough words...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 17, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
|Living in a large city has certain advantages over living in a small town. Urbanization role
NEW - We cannot simply deny the immensely important role of the urbanization in raising our living standards. Consequentially, there are...
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|Simply raise the price of petrol can not fulfil the long-term goal to reduce traffic and pollution
8 - Hi Chelsea, first of all, your positive mantra towards the remarks on your essay will get you somewhere someday,...
Writing Feedbackchelsea17 - Mar 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|To broadcast celebrities news or informations about some ordinary people?
NEW - The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers....
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|In the university, students get the knowledge in two ways, practical and theory. Purpose of study
2 - I will try you some suggestions on the introduction part. 1. Please, check clearly the question : what,...
Writing Feedbackgiligrp - Mar 17, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 26, 2016
|The main goal of universities: to link students for their own value or prepare them for a future job
2 - hi Siti, the problem I find with your essay is choosing the wrong words. Secondly, I understand the prompt...
Writing Feedbacksiti hamsyah - Mar 17, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 17, 2016
|The main purpose of universities is to give info and skill to fullfill requirement for work-force
2 - hi, amirulmukminin. as you can see there are many corrections i made for your essay. keep writing. to fullfill...
Writing FeedbackAmirulmumin - Mar 16, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 26, 2016
|Transfer Essay: Page "87" of your autobiography: "I am a pencil"
2 - Hi Ttina, Your story is very touching. You also have strong writing skills, and you are able to...
Writing Feedbackttina - Mar 16, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 17, 2016
|TOEFL for immigration purpose - to be or not to be independent?
Writing Feedbackkjiajing92 - Mar 16, 2016 / ttina - Mar 16, 2016
|The main objective of university education
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 16, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 18, 2016
|The usage of energy in USA started from 1980 to 2030 - The energy outlook
2 - The graph illustrates from energy [...] pattern over the period as a whole. A breakdown of proportion of...
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 15, 2016 / irhame - Mar 16, 2016
|The figure of four different features were mostly interested in 2003 and 2013
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - Comparison of Energy Production
3 - Hi, Desty. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me, if I...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|'three kinds of treatments applied' - The process of recycling the rain water.
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - The Demographic Growth in US State of Oregon
3 - Hi, Adrian. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me if I...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 15, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|The three products Consumption in China during 1985 to 2010 - fishes are the most popular
4 - Hy lita, i didn't find any big mistakes on your essay, i just give a suggestion and some correction....
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 15, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Task 1- Process of reuse rainwater - recycling method
2 - Hi Desty, I would like to share my insights on your analysis by enhancing the sentences if needed. ...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Recommendation letter from my professor to the University of Edinburgh on continuing master degree
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Contrast people of your age with those of your parents' generation; beliefs, values, goals... etc.
5 - I agree with Meyani and besides that, the 4th paragrath ('Finally' one) seems too short. It feels like you...
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