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|self-employment vs. employment - own business seems to be increasingly popular among individuals
4 - Your essay is very good, with detailed examples that support your argument, but I agree with akiraaa. You are...
Writing Feedbacksaba_beatrice - Oct 30, 2015 / TJLuschen - Nov 2, 2015
|Barney & Friends episodes and their effect on children watching - I just need to check my grammar
2 - Hi i rephrased a few lines to just improve grammar and polish your well- thought out essay. If you...
Writing FeedbackKMG - Oct 29, 2015 / FARZ1 - Oct 31, 2015
|Many people use distance learning programs to study at home
3 - It is always good to include your prompt, so this can be our guideline. The influx of cutting-edge...
Writing FeedbackChaiko2015 - Oct 29, 2015 / eddies - Oct 30, 2015
|Essay media effects - people follow some behaviors and manners by what they watch
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Oct 29, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 31, 2015
|Author's argument on non-Palean woven baskets does not seems to make a cogent case. GRE argument
3 - Hi, yes this seems much more convincing, plus I think it is better organized, with each paragraph having a...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 29, 2015 / TJLuschen - Nov 2, 2015
|In any field-business, politics, education, government, rulers should concede after 5 years in power
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 28, 2015 / FARZ1 - Oct 31, 2015
|TOEFL essay: should universities provide their students with a wide range of courses?
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Oct 28, 2015 / theninjacrab - Oct 28, 2015
|'Nowadays, students study a gamut of subjects in different fields'. TOEFL - Writing question
2 - Chadni, in your opening statement, don't say that you believe students should not make student study many subjects in...
Writing Feedbackchandnimaishery - Oct 28, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 28, 2015
|GOAL OF POLITICS - Idealism vs finding common ground and reaching reasonable consensus.
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 28, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 31, 2015
|Do you agree that women should be given equal chance to participate in the military?
Writing FeedbackOctocaesar - Oct 27, 2015 / fadh93 - Oct 31, 2015
|Companies should allocate a certain percentage of job positions to women. Do you agree?
4 - Thank you. Yes, I think you are right. I have a difficulty getting an acceptable conclusion due to...
Writing FeedbackOctocaesar - Oct 27, 2015 / Octocaesar - Nov 1, 2015
|Teenagers who commit major crimes should be received adult punishment.
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Oct 27, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|GRE Issue Essay from the Manhattan 5lb practice booklet for GRE study.
2 - The interesting of these two candidates is that they both also have equally balanced experience levels. Its only when...
Writing Feedbackanthonyzampolin - Oct 27, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 28, 2015
|People should read or watch news presented by people whose views are different from your own?
2 - My point of view is not professional, but I would like to outline what I have inferred about essays...
Writing Feedbackhypersis - Oct 27, 2015 / fa1therr - Oct 27, 2015
|[IELTS] The causes of increasing average weight and measures to solve them.
3 - I think sometime people have chronic diseases such as heart disease,diabetes and hypertension. Some of them cannot exercise regularly...
Writing Feedbackmarcosi2718 - Oct 27, 2015 / rozhnaz - Oct 27, 2015
|Essay - Education(ESL STUDENT) - should kids have a school curriculum for being a good parent?
2 - Thomas, your essay is uses quite a lot of words. However, not all of those words were necessary in...
Writing Feedbackmaltekun - Oct 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 27, 2015
|In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight.
2 - Those children that are under the effect ofare affected by genetic causes (delete comma)haveeat healthy food and exercise regularly,...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Oct 26, 2015 / cassitylys - Oct 26, 2015
|Teachers should pay more attention on how to improve their teaching ability and not play politics
3 - Thank you for your comments on my grammers and vocabularies! Some small mistakes will ruin a good essay!...
Writing FeedbackRainbows - Oct 26, 2015 / Rainbows - Oct 26, 2015
|Is money the most important aspects of job?
2 - Hi, let me try to give you some suggestion for this writing. Before answering to the question, ...
Writing Feedbackzanbaq - Oct 26, 2015 / broibra - Nov 19, 2015
|GRE practice essay on 'Restriction of waste disposal to check environmental problems'
NEW - Hi , help me with the issue topics for the analytical writing section of the GRE . Please feel...
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|Quality Analyst and Metrology Supervisor - Scholarship essay for Chevening
2 - Hi Leonardo. Here are some corrections that I suggest: -I worked as an intern at Metrology Department...
Writing FeedbackLeonardoMelo31 - Oct 25, 2015 / thedeepazure - Oct 25, 2015
|Discuss both of perspectives about do talents come from parents or not?
4 - Hi Luthfia dewi, let me try to give you some suggestions. first, pay more attention to give an...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Oct 25, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|RHETORICAL ANALYSIS ESSAY: "Entropic Homogeneity Isn't Why No One Hits .400 Any More"
2 - I AM CAPTIVATED BY YOUR INTRODUCTION- THESIS. Throughout 20th century, it had changed a lot, and therefore, contains plenty...
Writing Feedbackturkmen4ik - Oct 25, 2015 / Mensa418 - Oct 27, 2015
|Human intervention vs machines
3 - Let me work for your intro and conclusion, since these two points need slight improvements. :D Intro: It...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Oct 24, 2015 / eddies - Oct 25, 2015
|Money is a measure of success- Agree or disagree?
4 - Thank you @eddies and @katevb. This feedback is specific and valuable. I need more coaching advice in presenting the...
Writing Feedbacksingr7 - Oct 24, 2015 / singr7 - Oct 25, 2015
|Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media rich society
3 - Media is a two-sided sword. double-edged The other mistakes were caught by singr7. I like your approach and...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Oct 24, 2015 / Earthyrain - Oct 24, 2015
|【TOEFL】Do students learn more effectively in team work?
Writing Feedbackzaza2932 - Oct 23, 2015 / zaza2932 - Oct 25, 2015
|"Should we always suspect people's ulterior motives?" SAT essay prompt
2 - your first essay is good and informative as you did use evidence to support your idea. But be aware...
Writing Feedbackkiemvinh - Oct 23, 2015 / lacusclyne - Oct 23, 2015
|The capacity to accept criticism from others, though harsh vituperation, has a great role in a team
Writing Feedbackhypersis - Oct 22, 2015 / hypersis - Oct 24, 2015
|"Bali Island" - the famous place in Indonesia. Descriptive or Expository Essay?
Writing Feedbacksharahma - Oct 22, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 6, 2015
|Disadvantages of watching TV - not only personal scale
5 - I am also preparing for TOEFL and GRE and i learned that these exams look more for open mindedness...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Oct 21, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 26, 2015
|Why students are allowed to choose the courses they like?
Writing Feedbackpcy1127 - Oct 21, 2015 / lacusclyne - Oct 21, 2015
|When a country develops its technology, is it pointless to keep old ways of life alive?
2 - "Modern life of 21st century has seen constant integration ..."-> modern life of the 21st century has constantly bore...
Writing Feedbackatifghr - Oct 21, 2015 / lacusclyne - Oct 21, 2015
|The scientists should be responsible but also appreciated by the prominence of their discoveries
Writing Feedbackhypersis - Oct 21, 2015 / hypersis - Oct 21, 2015
|TOEFL Writing--final grade determined by numerous assignments or few assignments?
2 - It is quietquite necessary to point out that developing The stress of students can be significantly release sever What...
Writing FeedbackDousiyu - Oct 20, 2015 / lenchiben - Oct 21, 2015
|TOEFL Writing--whether parents should exchange their ideas about education methods with teachers
Writing FeedbackDousiyu - Oct 20, 2015 / broibra - Nov 17, 2015
|The famous people should be prepared to be a celebrity - and it's not always a pleasure.
7 - hi SparkDark, I think you could add more details about your part of the advantage part. Otherwise it...
Writing FeedbackSparkDark - Oct 19, 2015 / akiraaa - Nov 15, 2015
|ESSAY HELP FOR ENGLISH 101 - a curiosity project for every week
4 - Ali, the assignment is simply asking you for two things; - write something that you know you want...
Writing FeedbackAL95 - Oct 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 23, 2015
|Essay on the climate change - check my introduction
4 - Jasur, you need to better develop the grammar in your introduction if you wish to make it more effective...
Writing FeedbackJasS - Oct 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 21, 2015
|GRE Argument Essay: Adjust the shower-heads
3 - Thank you for your inspiring comments @zhangweilong! I like your point that the water cost might not be large!...
Writing FeedbackTakeiteasy - Oct 18, 2015 / Takeiteasy - Oct 18, 2015
|Various elderly problems in USA - how to improve the current situation?
7 - Honestly? I still see the same problems that I corrected in my previous response. I am not sure if...
Writing FeedbackAshlyToo - Oct 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 18, 2015
|GRE Issue Essay: To obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws.
4 - i think you should not take china for an example because it is a principle that we are advised...
Writing FeedbackTakeiteasy - Oct 18, 2015 / hoahongdo94 - Nov 4, 2015
|Essay on "Whether tobacco should be prohibited or not" for review
9 - Hi Rohit, in answer to your question, my belief / opinion is that you should have chosen a clear...
Writing Feedbackiamecstatic - Oct 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 18, 2015
|Essay choosing career and its imporatance
4 - In conclusion, I would like to emphasize on the fact for young generation that having a clear description of...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Oct 17, 2015 / annahatef - Oct 18, 2015
|'specific atmosphere that the school creates' - BOSTON UNIVERSITY
3 - Katiyoun, I don't think that this is a very effective statement. The reasons that you look to attend Boston...
Writing FeedbackKoit - Oct 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 17, 2015
|'I'm Algerian Computer Engineering student' Essay on myself for business communication skills course
2 - My major is computer engineering and currently, I am an freshman student. I hope to achieve the necessary...
Writing FeedbackMRami - Oct 16, 2015 / hypersis - Oct 16, 2015
|GRE Analitical Writing. Issue task: "Reliance on technology to solve problems".
7 - @vangiespen Thanks for the suggestions. Anyway, I do not think that writing again and again simple sentences can help...
Writing Feedbacklz177 - Oct 16, 2015 / lz177 - Oct 18, 2015
|On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item and you have no travel insurance - letter
2 - Pradeep, you need to apply yourself better when it comes to developing your letters. You should be able to...
Writing Feedbackpdeep37 - Oct 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: Road problem near by my house.
3 - I am really happy to see your comments and suggestion, looking forward to see more. Because of your comments...
Writing Feedbackpdeep37 - Oct 16, 2015 / pdeep37 - Oct 16, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: imported food trend. Why is this? Is it positive or negative?
2 - Isabelle, this is a good essay. Your ideas on the matter are quite clear and presents an understanding of...
Writing Feedbackdb723 - Oct 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|Your school has enough funds to buy computers and books as well. Which one do you suggest?
4 - I like with the way you provide your idea. However, based on the key success of IELTS, for writing...
Writing Feedbackkphani_ra - Oct 16, 2015 / Ray_keren - Oct 16, 2015
|'he is tall, has short dark hair and dark eyes' - descriptive paragraph about my best friend
3 - Ayoub, I'll show you a sample of how to write this essay properly while also correcting the bad grammar...
Writing Feedbackayoups - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 15, 2015
|GRE Issue Essay: The Best Way for a Society to Prepare Its Young People for Leadership
3 - Thanks a lot, @vangiespen. I've always found your comments inspiring and constructive. I agree with you that my essay...
Writing FeedbackTakeiteasy - Oct 15, 2015 / Takeiteasy - Oct 15, 2015
|Name a world leader you think is important. It is a part of Toefl IBT exam.
Writing FeedbackMohannadElshawy - Oct 15, 2015 / MohannadElshawy - Oct 15, 2015
|People should be judged by employers accordind to their skills, not gender
3 - Yobin already pointed out the major problem of your essay, that of the lacking reference to your occupation in...
Writing Feedbackdoomgirl - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|Teaching science at the primary school - importance, consequences and controversy
5 - Anna, this is a better developed essay than the first. However, there are still grammatical errors that need to...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|Should the high school students be strongly involved in a free community services or not?
3 - As far as thesis statements go, this one takes the cake for being the longest single sentence of them...
Writing Feedbackat_first_it_was - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|Seizing opportunities in life is usually tantamount to risk taking
2 - Hi your essay is good but I have some notes Life is full of challenges and offers successful people...
Writing Feedbackhypersis - Oct 15, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Oct 15, 2015
|Should troublesome students be keeped together or educated separately ?
3 - Last but not least, in our society, good and bad people coexist. There exist 2 groups of people ,...
Writing Feedbackcookie234 - Oct 15, 2015 / akiraaa - Oct 15, 2015
|Task 1: describe the towerwind and how it works
2 - Nyuyen, you need to improve your reporting skills. Your report overview in your first statement is sorely lacking in...
Writing FeedbackThuyua - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 15, 2015
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