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|These days the health of children have become an immense problem to deal with
2 - Furthermore, school also have big responsibility to tackle that problem by giving additional insight for their pupils, and providing...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 14, 2015 / SHanafi - Nov 14, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: Information regarding recruitment of English teachers and French teachers in Ontario
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 14, 2015 / nsahmad - Nov 15, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The rate of recruiting teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007
NEW - The rate of recruiting teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007 is displayed in the bar chart, and is...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 14, 2015 / — -
|IELTS-TASK2 : RECRUITMENT OF TEACHERS IN ONTARIO BETWEEN 2001 AND 2007
2 - The line graph highlights PRESENTS THE PERCENTAGE OF GRADUATES WHO APPLY FOR JOBS AS TEACHERS OF ENGLISH AND FRENCH...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 14, 2015 / eddies - Nov 14, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: English and French Teachers Who Apply to Teach Regularly in Ontario
2 - Initially, teachers of both languages had approximately a 70% success rate in finding jobs. As per...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 14, 2015 / eddies - Nov 14, 2015
|Older leaders or young directors? IELTS TASK 2
NEW - TOPIC: Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally elder people.Some people think younger leader would be better. Do...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Nov 13, 2015 / — -
|Unhealthy lifestyle among people, particularly young generation
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 13, 2015 / eddies - Nov 13, 2015
|Football World Cup and similar international sports are gathering masses of people and sports lovers
2 - Football World Cup and similar international ... Here is my edit; Sports events bring world peace. As...
Writing Feedbacki_shaikh - Nov 13, 2015 / eddies - Nov 13, 2015
|Tourists can bring demerits to the visited country. Yet, tourism business can contribute financially
2 - In this case, you are being asked 2 QUESTIONS but unfortunately your thesis statement did not successfully answer...
Writing Feedbackiban - Nov 13, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 13, 2015
|The populations of India and China from 2000 to 2050.
3 - prediction of population growth in fifty years later ... - this particular part sounds extremely strange. -- a forecast...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 13, 2015 / krempetkov - Dec 5, 2016
|New breed of millet to combat vitamin A deficiency -GRE argument essay
NEW - An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus,...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|Decision based on emotions leads to poor decision making.
NEW - Time taken exact 30 minutes. Thank you in advance for feedback on every correction/suggestion. People who make decisions...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|Who uses the internet in Australia and what the reasons they use it.
NEW - People who use the internet and the reasons why they use it are explained in the bar chart and...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2 : certain talents as sport and music for people, both view
NEW - In general believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and other...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|IELTS-TASK1 : UNHEALTY LIFESTYLE OF CHILDREN
3 - Based on the prompt, you are being asked 'to what extent do you agree with the statement saying that...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 12, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 13, 2015
|Ielts task 1 : UK telephone calls divided into three categories, 1995 - 2002.
NEW - Answer. An explanation regarding the total number of minutes (in billions) of the total calls in the UK...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|ielts task 1 - different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia
2 - comment : make sure your tenses in your introduction. I try to give suggestion overall. Overall,...
Writing Feedbackiban - Nov 12, 2015 / nsahmad - Nov 12, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: Children are more dependent on junk foods rather than eating healthy food.
2 - 1. You must add information about the government in your introduction, since there is a description about the...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 12, 2015 / Pramudita - Nov 12, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: A Number Of Young People Are Unhealthful To Undergo Their Way that They Live
2 - Prompt: Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle. Both school and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 12, 2015 / sntinn - Nov 13, 2015
|IELTS task 2 - Parents and Schools are responsible for children's unhealty lifestyle
2 - 1. Well, when I read this hook and compare it to the question, it seems that this sentence tends...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 12, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 13, 2015
|Increase in number of accidents in Balmer Island - GRE argument essay
NEW - Every honest feedback is appreciated. Thank you in advance. The following appeared in a letter to the editor...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|Nowadays, a large number of young people have the way of living which is unhealthy.
4 - Apart from this, government could also encourage children to have a healthy life. It is vital to design...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 12, 2015 / eddies - Nov 13, 2015
|Ielts task 2: international trade, positive or negative development?
2 - Ahmad, when you are asked in an IELTS essay to give an opinion, please make sure that you use...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 12, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 12, 2015
|Competition among older and younger generation for job vacancy
2 - Annahatef, you did not really understand the prompt properly so you were not able to discuss the essay in...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 11, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 11, 2015
|One must study the major cities to understand a particular society.
2 - Sakshi, your essay shows that even though you wrote the essay under time constraint, you have managed to develop...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 11, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 11, 2015
|The proportion alter in the rate of overseas university students in several regions in Canada
NEW - Task 1 - The percentage change in the number of Canada's international students The bar chart reveals the...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Nov 11, 2015 / — -
|TOEFL ESSAY: New devices vs well-adopted devices - which do you prefer?
10 - WOW！Thanks for reminding me what i may not be aware of, TJLuschen! Your advice really helped me a...
Writing Feedbackakiraaa - Nov 11, 2015 / akiraaa - Nov 16, 2015
|Out of country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to prevention
3 - In this globalization era, many people argue that charge of country's health should be spent for treatment regarding health...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Nov 11, 2015 / eddies - Nov 13, 2015
|A comparison of different areas where some schools in UK spent their yearly budget from 1981 to 2001
2 - Overall, most of the school budgetS were spend SPENT to pay the teacher's salary in each year. In any...
Writing Feedbackiban - Nov 11, 2015 / eddies - Nov 11, 2015
|[IELTS Task 2] Working Parents: Discussing Effects on Additional Income and Parents' Absence
2 - Hi Kandrika, I will give few suggestions about your essay. In my opinion, it is a good essay. you...
Writing Feedbackfadh93 - Nov 11, 2015 / INA - Nov 11, 2015
|A comparison of the proportion change in the overseas students' number in 8 Canadian provinces
2 - 1. Irham, I know that you are trying to paraphrase the words from the question. However, not all...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Nov 11, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 11, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 : the proportion of changes in students graduated from universities in Canadian
Writing Feedbackhasdymath - Nov 11, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 11, 2015
|IELTS TASK I : The percentage change in the number of international students graduating
2 - Hi Abraham. I would like to give some comments on your essay. Your introduction is quite good and...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Nov 10, 2015 / fadh93 - Nov 11, 2015
|The number of overseas pupils graduated from universities in several Canadian provinces from 2001-6
3 - let's me give you little corrections for the first sentence An explanation regarding the percentages of scholar international...
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Nov 10, 2015 / Arundyna - Nov 11, 2015
|Writing Ielts task 2: advantages and disadvantages of nuclear technology
NEW - Hopefully, i can get many beneficial advice in my essay. Thank u :) Quest: Advantages and disadvantages of...
Writing Feedbackiban - Nov 10, 2015 / — -
|Writting Ielts task 1 : the charts show number of student who did not go into full time job.
3 - Hi Ahmad... I closer read your writing. This is good writing, but I will give you few suggestions. I...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 10, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 12, 2015
|The Citizens Obstacle to Change Their Living in A Novel Place in Three Problems
3 - The bar chart presents the citizens obstacles when they change to live abroad in a novel place and there...
Writing Feedbackdaveandrei - Nov 10, 2015 / Arundyna - Nov 11, 2015
|Three big problems which people who live abroad must deal with - according to their age.
2 - You need to include the pict. You know what, it takes some time to understand the report writing with...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 10, 2015 / eddies - Nov 10, 2015
|TASK 1. Problem for people living abroad
4 - Iam sorry for my mistaken. Actually I have tried to enclosure the picture. Evidently, the size does not allowed...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 10, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 10, 2015
|The percentage of inconvenience people who live in other countries, categorized in troubles and ages
2 - Meliana, there are actually 2 major problems with your current report summary which can adversely affect your overall score....
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS-TASK1: Integritation problems according to people's ages who living abroad.
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 10, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 12, 2015
|A company want to build a big factory near your community. Do you agree or disagree? -TOEFL essay -
6 - You are very welcome yousssa, it was my pleasure. Good luck on your test! My final advice is to...
Writing Feedbackyousssa - Nov 10, 2015 / TJLuschen - Nov 12, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The percentage of issues which people have when they stay in a new country
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 10, 2015 / Pramudita - Nov 12, 2015
|The trouble people have when they move to a new region in other countries - Ielts1 essay
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 10, 2015 / Nofrinorman - Nov 10, 2015
|The Changes of Woodwards University's Map from 1985 until now
Writing Feedbackdaveandrei - Nov 10, 2015 / M3L1 - Nov 10, 2015
|Practice Analysis Social worker in domestic violence setting
2 - During completing the analysis, the confidence of services users that has been maintained and respected. All of identity...
Writing FeedbackJeremy Newcastl - Nov 10, 2015 / anggicaroot - Nov 25, 2015
|Equal responsibility of parents - what's your opinion? IELTS TASK 2
3 - i found some mistakes of your. ... fatherhood has to be responsible as same ... ... therefore...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Nov 10, 2015 / Diqon - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS task 2 : harmful junk food and education, discuss both views and give opinion.
2 - Experts believe that junk food consumption highly is bad for our body. Few people argue that education can be...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 10, 2015 / SHanafi - Nov 10, 2015
|A child's best interest
2 - Cristina, your essay has a very enlightening topic involved in its discussion. You have presented more than enough food...
Writing Feedbackxxcristina09 - Nov 9, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 11, 2015
|'anxious faces staring into a computer screen' - major, UC transfer application Personal Statement
Writing FeedbackAkrious7 - Nov 9, 2015 / Akrious7 - Nov 10, 2015
|Being rich gives you the opportunity to give back. Yes or no?
4 - I agree with TJLuschen, the essay didn't really respond to the prompt. If you added more and bulked it...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 9, 2015 / chickenpiemary - Nov 11, 2015
|IELTS task 1- People who get arrested in during five years
NEW - The two diagrams display the percentages of males and females that put in jail during five years due violations...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 9, 2015 / — -
|IELTS task 1 - the funding and spending activities of USA charity in a year
2 - Better you write the units of measurement in the introductory paragraph. Let me give a try: The pie...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 9, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 10, 2015
|It's just a myth that professors are the major factor to improve the quality of education
2 - Hi Vic, straight to your writing => actually your writing already good, but I have found your LAZY WORD...
Writing Feedbackvic93611 - Nov 9, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 10, 2015
|The pie charts present the amount of charity income and the way it is spent during one year in USA
NEW - TASK 1. Revenue sources and expenditures of USA Charity in One Year. The pie charts present the amount...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 9, 2015 / — -
|IELTS task 2 - Investor are less importance than doctors
2 - This paragraph is too short to be introduction. You need at least three sentences to show what you...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 9, 2015 / eddies - Nov 10, 2015
|The major sources of income of the charity in the United States and their spending in various fields
NEW - IELTS-TASK1: Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in One Year. The pie chart shows the major...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 9, 2015 / — -
|The proportion of men and women caught on breaking the law in a period of five years - IELTS 1
NEW - IELTS-TASK1: Persons Arrested in Five Years ending 1994 The pie chart illustrates the proportion of men and women...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 9, 2015 / — -
|IELTS Task 1: The Arresting Percentage of Societies in Five Years Ending 1994
3 - Fast forward to your preceding IELTS report, I' ve told you that such phrases can be categorized as...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 9, 2015 / eddies - Nov 9, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The number of people detained between 1990 and 1991
2 - It is noticeablenoticed that the percentage of the males detained waswere more than the females ... ... and...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 9, 2015 / broibra - Nov 9, 2015
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