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|The main goal of universities: to link students for their own value or prepare them for a future job
2 - hi Siti, the problem I find with your essay is choosing the wrong words. Secondly, I understand the prompt...
Writing Feedbacksiti hamsyah - Mar 17, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 17, 2016
|The main purpose of universities is to give info and skill to fullfill requirement for work-force
2 - hi, amirulmukminin. as you can see there are many corrections i made for your essay. keep writing. to fullfill...
Writing FeedbackAmirulmumin - Mar 16, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 26, 2016
|Transfer Essay: Page "87" of your autobiography: "I am a pencil"
2 - Hi Ttina, Your story is very touching. You also have strong writing skills, and you are able to...
Writing Feedbackttina - Mar 16, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 17, 2016
|TOEFL for immigration purpose - to be or not to be independent?
Writing Feedbackkjiajing92 - Mar 16, 2016 / ttina - Mar 16, 2016
|The main objective of university education
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 16, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 18, 2016
|The usage of energy in USA started from 1980 to 2030 - The energy outlook
2 - The graph illustrates from energy [...] pattern over the period as a whole. A breakdown of proportion of...
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 15, 2016 / irhame - Mar 16, 2016
|The figure of four different features were mostly interested in 2003 and 2013
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - Comparison of Energy Production
3 - Hi, Desty. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me, if I...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|'three kinds of treatments applied' - The process of recycling the rain water.
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - The Demographic Growth in US State of Oregon
3 - Hi, Adrian. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me if I...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 15, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|The three products Consumption in China during 1985 to 2010 - fishes are the most popular
4 - Hy lita, i didn't find any big mistakes on your essay, i just give a suggestion and some correction....
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 15, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Task 1- Process of reuse rainwater - recycling method
2 - Hi Desty, I would like to share my insights on your analysis by enhancing the sentences if needed. ...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Recommendation letter from my professor to the University of Edinburgh on continuing master degree
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Contrast people of your age with those of your parents' generation; beliefs, values, goals... etc.
5 - I agree with Meyani and besides that, the 4th paragrath ('Finally' one) seems too short. It feels like you...
Writing Feedbackbottles - Mar 15, 2016 / chelsea17 - Mar 19, 2016
|My discovery of my love, Astronomy - for Stanford summer on intellectual vitality. critique required
3 - I would love more feedback guys? Justin like really meant like as I didn't have lots passion for astronomy...
Writing FeedbackRitvik123 - Mar 15, 2016 / Ritvik123 - Mar 17, 2016
|Some say, government funding help fluorish arts; others that it threatens it's integrity - GRE issue
3 - Hello Ban I suggest you to make some variations in your writing by putting compound and complex senteces in...
Writing FeedbackBan123 - Mar 15, 2016 / Desty22 - Mar 15, 2016
|Debates on punishment to children - Ielts academic writing task
4 - Hello kuanchinchin, Let me give you some opinions on your essay. 1). Your first paragraph is too...
Writing Feedbackkuanchinchin - Mar 15, 2016 / bottles - Mar 17, 2016
|The percentage of the movies played and the theater visitors in both UK and Australia
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 14, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
|Task 1- The Develoment in Eastminster from 1999 to 2009
2 - Hi Lita, after reading and understanding your analysis, I must say uou did quiet a good job, the analysis...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|The international food such as fast food is more enjoyed by majority of people than local culinary
NEW - In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on...
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|The alteration of town centre over three hundreds of year - writing ielts task 1
2 - Hi Hani, I would like to share my insights with a focus on the last paragraph of the analysis....
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|Nowadays, children have less pressure than the past age and more of the life-advancing opportunities
2 - Hello angga93 You should consider applying a few stylistic corrections to the text. They are as follows: in...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 14, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 15, 2016
|[Task 1] - Map - The developments of Stokeford, a Riverside Town, in Almost a Decade
3 - Hello Adrian, i found that your writing has an interesting point of view, the lost of farmland. However, it...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 14, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|I believe that modern cuisine brings the extinction of traditional meal.
2 - Hello Nisa, I have some advice related to your introduction and conclusion. First of all, in introduction, you did...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 14, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016
|Task 2 - Children Get More Pressure in This Era
2 - Hello Inastia. Your writing is good. I want to check your writing. Please correct me, if I have mistakes...
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 14, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 14, 2016
|People do not have to bother to cook complex meals because of their unhealthy fast foods
3 - Hallo Miss Nida, I have read your good essay, let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 14, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 14, 2016
|Healthy lifestyle is possible for people
2 - Over time, a healthy lifestyle has [...] could be possible to realize it. Hello, i have some suggestion...
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 14, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016
|Negative Effect of Fast Food Domination
5 - Fast food can affect traditional foods' sustainability as it ... my alternative second paragraph is: society tend to prefer...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016 / Diandin16 - Apr 8, 2016
|'hindrance for national identity'; International fast food replaces traditional foods
NEW - In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on...
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|Task 1- Comparison kind of movies watched in UK and US
4 - The bar chart illustrates the number of film films watched in England and Australia in 2001, categorized by US,...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 14, 2016 / Lita27 - Mar 14, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 The data of consumer disbursing on several different items in European Countries
3 - hy RIZKA, here my comment. check it, i may wrong. thanks The table provides the data of consumer...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 14, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Task 1- How to Recycle Your Old Newspaper to a Valuable New Paper
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 14, 2016
|Original writing (ą 25 minutes): Bulgarian expatriates' education levels
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 14, 2016 / nelarizka79 - Mar 14, 2016
|The sophisticated processes of making peanut butter
2 - Hello @hanimps97, Here are some feedback: ... butter from harvesting the peanuts to packaging the product into...
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016 / chloeheuy - Oct 22, 2016
|The Production Process of Hydro-Electric Energy
2 - It is important to note that [...] energies are converted into electrical energy. Overall, some steps are taken in...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 13, 2016 / eddies - Mar 13, 2016
|[IELTS Writing Task 1] A comparison of money spent on three common fast foods in the UK in 1990
2 - Hi Lita, first of all, I'd like to share my thoughts on the way your analysis is written, not...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 14, 2016
|The Number of Purchases on Hamburger, Fish & Chips and Pizza in UK, Classified by Income in 1990
2 - The number of purchases on the hamburger, fish & chips and pizza in the UK, classified by income in...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 13, 2016 / Lita27 - Mar 14, 2016
|National Consumer Expenses Proportion in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002
2 - The figure forA comparison of national consumer expenses in five selected countries, categorized by budgeting priority, is presented in...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 13, 2016 / eddies - Mar 13, 2016
|People Costs on Certain Needs in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002
2 - Well, this body paragraph has covered what is being discussed in the overview, but I think you need a...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 13, 2016 / hanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016
|The consumption cost of individuals in several items in five various countries during 2012
2 - Hani, first thing that I notice in your analysis is the use of punctuation marks, instead of using a...
Writing Feedbackhanimeilita97 - Mar 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 14, 2016
|In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computer
3 - Good start! You need to expand your answer and to organize it into at least three paragraphs! ...
Writing Feedbackunibuti - Mar 12, 2016 / EF_Carol - Mar 15, 2016
|It is better for children to grow up in big cities rather than in a countryside - more opportunities
3 - hello abigail, let me comment your essay. In the introduction, I conclude you more explain in the way you...
Writing Feedbackabigail anderson - Mar 12, 2016 / hanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016
|[ielts] Right now, many countries are exploited remote areas for more resources. Adv vs Disadv
3 - hello @themirror Let me give my opinion about your writing be careful with structure in a sentence....
Writing Feedbackthemirror - Mar 11, 2016 / adrian21 - Mar 13, 2016
|Sometimes success is harder to accept than failure. Write a Essay on it
Writing Feedbackmama3 - Mar 10, 2016 / mama3 - Mar 29, 2016
|Governments should review education system, unemployment policy - reasons for crime among teenagers.
3 - Crime among teenagers Courts approach politely to teenagers nowadays ,thus crime rates in the teenagers are increasing dramatically....
Writing Feedbackcemo - Mar 10, 2016 / dina79 - Apr 8, 2016
|TOEFL: The statement talking about the education goal and teaching people how to educate themselves.
Writing Feedbacktim912104a - Mar 10, 2016 / Hanan1999 - Mar 10, 2016
|Travelling is a sweet escape from stressful life - and the best is sharing joy with a loving family
5 - Hi Kimgrey, Here are the corrections I would suggest: Many workers allotted timeMany people allocate time for...
Writing FeedbackKimgrey - Mar 9, 2016 / Ethan M - Mar 14, 2016
|Toefl: people are allowed to join politics
2 - Write "with the passage of time" in place of "as the time passes by" and *since* the last few...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Mar 9, 2016 / Rabia91 - Mar 10, 2016
|Learning an another language offers an insight how people from overseas think and see the world
3 - Interesting writing pal! here is my mark for you. I hope it is helpful. I attempt to paraphrase...
Writing Feedbackthiet sun - Mar 9, 2016 / angga93 - Apr 7, 2016
|The expense on five kinds of entertainment including cinema, video, music, publishing and television
3 - Hello Tran, this is my suggestion for you : The provided bar chart illustrates about the expenses...
Writing Feedbacktrantrungmy1097 - Mar 8, 2016 / hanimeilita97 - Mar 13, 2016
|TOEFL: the statement that teenagers nowadays do not spend enough time in helping their communities.
2 - Hi Menglu. I think you have enough points in elaborating your essay. However, I believe you should change your...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Mar 7, 2016 / Lynn88Mr - Mar 7, 2016
|The dramatic increase in the proportion of older people (65 and over) in three countries.
Writing FeedbackJasper_ngoc - Mar 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 8, 2016
|TOEFL TASK: children prepare for adult life → do a part-time job
2 - Hello Below are some stylistic adjustments that I think you should apply to the text: of people's...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Mar 6, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 6, 2016
|Why do some cultivated people read everything from books to the Internet sites?
Writing Feedbackmroank2010 - Mar 6, 2016 / mroank2010 - Mar 9, 2016
|Cyber bullying has always been an issue in my life
Writing Feedbackkbratcher1 - Mar 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 8, 2016
|"It's not beauty if it can be removed with a wet kleenex." - A humble opinion essay
3 - Hi Doga, I enjoyed reading your essay, I find the argument to be making its point, it's not merely...
Writing Feedbackdogaaslaner - Mar 3, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 4, 2016
|Different people have different opinion about standard for imitation - role models for youngsters
3 - Ksenia, first of all, what I noticed on your essay is that you have your paragraphs in small fragments...
Writing FeedbackMaximama - Mar 3, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 4, 2016
|Most governments allocate a considerable portion of their budget on space exploration.
2 - Considering this is an essay for undergraduate student, it is pretty much shorter than what I had expected. Is...
Writing FeedbackJay2016 - Mar 2, 2016 / Lynn88Mr - Mar 2, 2016
|Contributions of scientists and artists to society - comparison
4 - Hi, you write very well for a 30 minutes essay. I believe you should have a balance points when...
Writing FeedbackJay2016 - Mar 1, 2016 / Lynn88Mr - Mar 2, 2016
|Working as a receptionist at hotel
5 - Hii Hoai Suong.. Let me try to paraphrase some of your sentences. Nowadays, English is the most important...
Writing FeedbackHoai Suong - Mar 1, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 3, 2016
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