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Writing FeedbackProverbs31 - Oct 8, 2015 / preota - Oct 9, 2015
|The ways to achieve an knowledge. Visiting is Always Better Than Watching
4 - I have read your comments, Mister. Thanks a lot for you due to taking time to proofread and give...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 8, 2015 / mujahid_fadli - Oct 10, 2015
|Studying at a small university helps promote the interaction among students and learning efficiency
3 - Hi Long! Why are you taking note of the word count? Were you writing with a word limitation? Was...
Writing Feedbackryanta - Oct 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|TOEFL Writing Independent Task: Should children be required to perform household tasks?
Writing Feedbackryanta - Oct 8, 2015 / smartyp - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Loneliness or Better Sense of Community
3 - Muflih, you are contradicting yourself in your statements. In your introduction, you indicate that you believe that people living...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Do You Feel Lonely When You Live In An Apartment?
5 - Hello aniani, I'm Luthfia. Actually, I like your idea, it is simple but acceptable. First of all, I suggest...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 8, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Oct 11, 2015
|Both schools and parents should be responsible for solving eating problems of children.
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Oct 8, 2015 / Diqon - Oct 8, 2015
|Gaining the proper education is very prominent particularly when looking for a good job
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 8, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 11, 2015
|Essay about the daily activities of my mother
2 - Lina, the way you write in such a careless manner will definitely affect your grade. The first rule of...
Writing Feedbacklinbud - Oct 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|Apology Letter - missed attendance at the birthday celebration (Ielts Task 1)
3 - Thanks vangiespen, I will try to incorporate your ideas in next letter. Your ideas really help me a lot...
Writing Feedbackpdeep37 - Oct 8, 2015 / pdeep37 - Oct 8, 2015
|The Internet mania; a dependency, needs, or destruction
Writing FeedbackEjepe - Oct 8, 2015 / JIDA - Oct 8, 2015
|How to be happy? I strongly believe that there are many factors to be cheerful.
2 - Hi Pramudita. Nice essay, you have made it very well. All the ideas you explain very clearly and you...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 8, 2015 / Clark Kent - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS task 2 - University education can ensure to get a decent job
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Oct 8, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 8, 2015
|Using an automatic photo booth
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 8, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Watch or Visit The Different Cultures In The World.
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 7, 2015 / pdeep37 - Oct 8, 2015
|About photo booths: they allow to produce two kinds of picture, large format image and passport size
3 - This is a very good report Irham. You managed to clearly state the process of taking a photo in...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : For Learning About Another Country, Just Watching or Visiting it?
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 7, 2015 / faarasyad - Oct 7, 2015
|Tech and Brain power. Technology deteriorate human way of thinking - GRE issue Task
2 - Sekar, while I did manage to finally follow your flow of thought, I think that you could have used...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|Have a great job is the only key to get happiness. Do you agree? - Writing IELTS Task 2
2 - Everyone defines happiness differently. For some others, doing what they love can be a hub to achieve truly...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 7, 2015 / eddies - Oct 7, 2015
|What would it take for you to consider your life succesful?
2 - Anna, I can understand why you would like to remain so vague about your ideal life and accomplishments over...
Writing Feedbackannabanana1016 - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2015
|Why We Happy? A proper job brings joy and excitement in human life
2 - Hi Mujahid :-) For starters, let me tell you that the way you restated the prompt was quite good....
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2015
|TASK I : the percentage of the employment by occupation
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2015
|What makes people happy? Good relationship with family and friends. TASK 2 essay
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 7, 2015 / — -
|The most crucial creation in the last 30 years - the Internet
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 7, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Find Your Good Job And You Will Have Good Feeling.
2 - This essay will discuss both points of views . In my personal opinion, it will be nice if the...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 7, 2015 / Diqon - Oct 7, 2015
|Could humans survive without the internet?
3 - hello pramudita, let me try to give some recommendations on your passage, here i found almost in...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 7, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 7, 2015
|GRE argument task : Budgeting riverside recreational activities in Manson River
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 7, 2015 / liying - Oct 28, 2015
|Simple tip for a life: Follow your passion and you'll be happy.
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 7, 2015 / Pramudita - Oct 10, 2015
|The developments of technology, particularly in e-books, may cause abandonment of the printed media
2 - Irfan, you have presented a unique take on this discussion. Most of the prompts using this normally ask if...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|With the invention of the internet, mankind have been benefited in many aspects of their lives
4 - - Some changes in para 1: Today's life relies too much on the internet. It is argued that the...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 7, 2015 / eddies - Oct 7, 2015
|Fiction-Writing : The story about leaving home for a while
9 - I am not resubmitting this paper. I can't in fact, it was my pre-test paper . Thanks anyways XD...
Writing FeedbackSamuelsam123 - Oct 7, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Oct 9, 2015
|The problem is whether the printed media will disappear because of the e-books?
4 - Thank you very much Mr Eddy and Mr Diqon. i will try these advice for improving my writing......
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 7, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 8, 2015
|In order to succeed, it is better to be like others rather than different from everybody else
2 - Hi, Mr. Andydesmond, I'm glad to see your passage here and I think your passage is easy to understand....
Writing Feedbackandydesmond - Oct 7, 2015 / aniani - Oct 7, 2015
|The common access to the new technology may favour the young people and give them more opportunities
4 - let me to rewrite your first paragraph... Nowadays, the existence of technology and globalization make the youngest...
Writing Feedbackakiraaa - Oct 7, 2015 / JIDA - Oct 8, 2015
|Why People Must Living In Different Zones
3 - Hi Ejepe. Actually you have good ideas about this essay, but unfortunately you did not explain it clearly. You...
Writing FeedbackEjepe - Oct 7, 2015 / Clark Kent - Oct 7, 2015
|Printed media will never disappear; some factors why people fear about existence of written papers
3 - Irfan, I like the new paragraph that you developed. It has a logical explanation for your support of print...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2015
|Should we foster the sense of sacrifice to younger generation as a portion of people have suggested?
5 - Than you @Ochio I have corrected my mistakes!! Thank you @irhame Just one question, isn't Bill Gate who co-founded...
Writing FeedbackKevin623623 - Oct 6, 2015 / Kevin623623 - Oct 7, 2015
|Tim Berners-Lee launched "WordWideWeb". The Powerful tool.
3 - The greatest discovery over the last 30 years was started [...] [...] influential invention for human beings until present....
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 6, 2015 / eddies - Oct 11, 2015
|The necessary need in our daily activities - The Internet Can Change People's Life
NEW - The internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 6, 2015 / — -
|Some dire effects of tourism - I argue that visitors should preserve the environments
NEW - Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 6, 2015 / — -
|IELTS Task 2 : The Internet Has Changed Everything
2 - Hi Muflih, I like the way that you presented your essay. You managed to put across both the good...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2015
|Living in the same place for the rest of your life VS move around. What do you prefer?- IELTS task 2
2 - Everybody tends to live in a comfortable place. As such, some people were keen on living in one...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 6, 2015 / eddies - Oct 7, 2015
|Career preparation, increasing knowledge and exploring new experiences; why people attend university
5 - Tien, the last paragraph before the conclusion has improved tremendously. It really helps to wrap up the essay. The...
Writing FeedbackBNTien - Oct 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Which one is more important, impressive buildings or public facilities?
5 - - This essay partially answers the question, since you did not express your OWN opinion. You need to...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 6, 2015 / eddies - Oct 7, 2015
|The Vantage of Living in Several Dwelling-Place (IELTS Task 2)
2 - In the past, mostly people tend to be one place for living instead of at the present. They choose...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 6, 2015 / Diqon - Oct 6, 2015
|The Priority of Government Financial Budget
NEW - Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be...
Writing FeedbackEjepe - Oct 6, 2015 / — -
|The New Zealand people are quite satisfied with proportion of the shops and restaurants
3 - The table and diagram describe the proportion of survey results that determine the level of costumer satisfaction in a...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Oct 6, 2015 / Abraham22 - Oct 7, 2015
|Shopping's responses of society in the capital city of Auckland
4 - Some changes in para 1 - The table compares how shoppers classified by genders render their values to both...
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 6, 2015 / eddies - Oct 8, 2015
|The question is whether women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force
Writing FeedbackEstu12 - Oct 6, 2015 / Estu12 - Oct 7, 2015
|In the globalisation era, the transportation improvement increased hugely - especially the flights
2 - - As some people know that a wide range of themmost of people prefer to use thisair transportfor travelling...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 6, 2015 / ochio - Oct 6, 2015
|Stay in a particular place is better than move to a different area. IELTS Task 2
2 - hello @ Clark Kent, let me try to give some suggestions on your passage using word "Nowadays" is a...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 6, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 6, 2015
|Task 1 IELTS - Level of satisfying in the shops and restaurants
2 - Furthermore, in the restaurants, the great deal of shoppers is satisfied. This is proved with the rate of male...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 6, 2015 / irhame - Oct 6, 2015
|To be born, live, study, work, and even die in the same place
2 - hi.. jida.. Nowadays, inhabitants frequently move from one place or position to another to other places. On the...
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 6, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 6, 2015
|Do you think flights should be taxed more? The number of air travel rose enormously - IELTS TASK 2
NEW - The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Oct 6, 2015 / — -
|TASK II: flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes
2 - hello, bayu, let me try to give some suggestions on your passage public flight transportation for wide range of...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Oct 6, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 6, 2015
|The satisfactionlevel of costumers according to a new shopping complex in the capital of New Zealand
2 - Hi...Irhamee Overall, it can be seen that the views of visitors are positive about that complex---> what do...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 6, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 6, 2015
|How that enormous increase in flights around the world over recent years affects us?
2 - i really enjoy reading your essay especially your flow sentence and how to use present progressive also present perfect,...
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 6, 2015 / Diqon - Oct 6, 2015
|Moving to a New Place or Just Staying in One Favorite Place? The first option is more exciting.
2 - Hi... aninii... . In my opinion, the benefits are greater than the drawbacks we receive what do you...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 6, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 6, 2015
|TASK 2: Tourism has many demerit effects
3 - Hello Jida, It is very impressive that you can mention such Holy Roman Empire and Imperial Regalia. but,...
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 6, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Oct 6, 2015
|Writing a letter requesting for the accommodation - Ielts Task 1: GT
3 - Thank You vangiespen for your valuable suggestion.. You way of delivering sentence are really impressive. I will try to...
Writing Feedbackpdeep37 - Oct 6, 2015 / pdeep37 - Oct 7, 2015
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