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|Music is a fundamental issue recently, since it offers enjoyment for a thousand people. IELTS 2
5 - Music is a fundamental issue recently, since it offers ... Traditional music is the main valuable for people,...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Feb 1, 2016 / Linda91 - Feb 3, 2016
|DISCUSSION ABOUT INTERNET BASED COURSE AND ATTENDING LECTURE IN UNIVERSITY
2 - _______influenced many aspect of human life (human's life)______ : possessive for human = human's _______specifically (at) education field_______...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Feb 1, 2016 / angga93 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 : IS JOB INTERVIEW THE BEST METHOD OF HIRING NEW WORKER?
2 - Dear dynaranjani, I personally find that your basic writing elements are quite good. However, after reading for the first...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016 / sntinn - Feb 1, 2016
|Most employers interview candidates before hiring them
2 - Sharfina, watch out for those tricky capitalization problems. Only proper nouns should be capitalized so the word Job doesn't...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: HIRING NEW EMPLOYEES - is the interview process necessary?
2 - ... to find out a suitable employees... plural noun ...important while deciding new workers. i think it is better...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Feb 1, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS2: Inventors vs Doctors - both professions have the same significant role in people's lives.
2 - Dwi, you can strengthen your opening statement by giving the reader an overview of the reasons that you will...
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|Doctors and inventors should collaborate in many aspects to bring community better life and future
4 - ...Some people think that inventors have biga significant role in community, (...) that doctors have biggermore significant role in...
Writing FeedbackLinda91 - Feb 1, 2016 / sir99 - Feb 1, 2016
|Violence and crime increase among teenagers as a consequence of playing violent games?
Writing Feedbackthaolf - Feb 1, 2016 / thaolf - Feb 1, 2016
|PROPORTION OF FOSSIL FUELS CONSUMPTION IN THE US AND THE UK
2 - Your understanding of the chart is quite evident. As always, there are just certain confusing times in your essay...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|The pattern of hybrid cars sale (2006-2008) was dominated by USA, while Japan controlled year 2009.
5 - You have successfully covered the intro. Yet, this report needs a slight improvement on the overview. It is...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Feb 1, 2016 / eddies - Feb 3, 2016
|With the exception in 2009, The US had the highest sale number of hybrid transportation
4 - Overall, it can obviously be seen that with the exception in OF 2009, which was the highest number...
Writing Feedbackputri22 - Feb 1, 2016 / aflah15 - Feb 1, 2016
|The source shows the sale of hybrid vehicles in the world from 2006 to 2009
4 - Adie, while your discussion is concise and can be appreciated for its distinct length and information style, you were...
Writing FeedbackADIE08 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|Some people argue that the great device to communicate people should be internet
3 - Siti, I have a question for you. Why are you discussing the ability of the internet to keep people...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|The number of hybrid cars sale in Japan stood at 50.000 in 2006 then increased sharply to 340.000
4 - Hi, dcho. Let me give you some suggestions, Consider to paraphrase the question to put in your...
Writing Feedbackdcho23 - Feb 1, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS - 20 minutes task - the sale of hybrid vehicles in global
2 - You should try to compare more about the figures since it extremely important for the high score.. The...
Writing FeedbackLinda91 - Feb 1, 2016 / pikul - Feb 1, 2016
|The year of 2009 saw a dramatic increase in Japan's sale of hybrid vehicles
3 - Halo @wulan nice to read your writing it good, but i will give some suggestion in order to discuss...
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Feb 1, 2016 / Arundyna - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS 2 - Positives Versus Negatives of Computer Games for Children
2 - ...but they will have a negative sideeffect in their social lives... They have several targets in games in...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Feb 1, 2016 / wulanbila16 - Feb 1, 2016
|TASK 1: The USA and The UK Expenditure of Petrol
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 1, 2016 / wulanbila16 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 whether internet is the best means to search information or not
NEW - It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it...
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|IELTS TASK 1 : rates of petrol consumption as per incomes characteristics in the US and the UK
4 - Many thanks for the corrections of my writing. I still have to practise a lot, especially in where to...
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Feb 1, 2016 / ichatea07 - Feb 1, 2016
|(TOEFL) Is it more important to learn facts from factual experiences?
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 1, 2016 / sntinn - Feb 1, 2016
|Colour as a powerful weapon against people's uninfluenced shopping decisions - IELTS TASK 2
4 - #Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufacturers (manufacture) and retail companies (company) when...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Feb 1, 2016 / Linda91 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS2: INTERNET - EXCELLENT MEANS OF COMMUNICATION but not be the best place to find information.
2 - Most people are standing on their ownthoughts saying internet is a good way to communicate Internet can be...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 1, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 1, 2016
|Manufacturers and retail companies use colour as an effective way to attract the number of customers
2 - HI Fina..i am going to give you another form of introduction In order to attract more customers, an...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 1, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Feb 1, 2016
|Colour in Ads. Manufacturers and retail companies know how to make people purchase their products.
2 - Hi Dynaranjani!! Personally, I find your essay quite attractive. However, I am a little bit confused by the study...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016 / Mardy17 - Feb 1, 2016
|Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel
3 - #Colour in workplace is less important. It does not completely (complete) influencing performance of worker. #For example, In...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 1, 2016 / Linda91 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - DOES COLOUR AFFECT ON PRODUCTIVITY AND PEOPLE'S HEALTH?
3 - First of all , nice job on the arguements the first argument is particularly strong. However, you might need...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Jan 31, 2016 / Samuelsam123 - Feb 1, 2016
|The Percentage of Visitors in Several Australian Destinations
2 - Hey Fariz10, I found many grammar mistakes and incorrect sentence structure in your writing. I suggest don't use complicate...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 31, 2016 / Ethanchen1998 - Jan 31, 2016
|Decisions should not be influenced by emotions - proper logic and reasoning behind it is necessary
2 - Hey Keerhana, I have found some simple grammar mistakes. In your writing, you made statements and conclusions too quickly,...
Writing Feedbackhelloworld2016 - Jan 31, 2016 / Ethanchen1998 - Jan 31, 2016
|(TOEFL) Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
2 - Comments: I think your grammar is almost perfect. My major concern is about your writing style. I find that...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Jan 30, 2016 / sntinn - Jan 31, 2016
|Number of people aged 65 and more amids USA, Sweden, and Japan for over a century.
Writing Feedbackridzkiekky - Jan 30, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 31, 2016
|Super Screen movies adverts - GRE on 3rd Feb, Suggest improvements and rate(?/6) the argument essay.
2 - ...is the reason behind low footfall for IN the previous year. In my opinion, better if this two...
Writing Feedbackarunv - Jan 30, 2016 / dynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016
|1992 survey: television was popular in the evenings while radio were listened in the morning
Writing FeedbackKirsty - Jan 30, 2016 / Kirsty - Feb 1, 2016
|Worldwide sales of video games in dollars - IELTS Writing Task 1 Practice on 2016-01-18
2 - Hi! There are a few misspellings in this paper such as platform and handheld but I am going to...
Writing Feedbackweirdquark - Jan 30, 2016 / puykcyt - Jan 30, 2016
|Compare And Contrast Study English in Dominic Place and Abroad
3 - Hey, well done. But, if you are preparing GRE,TOEFL you should increase your words per sentence since its a...
Writing Feedbacknguyenvannam - Jan 30, 2016 / AAORA - Jan 30, 2016
|The frantic beat of a broken heart
4 - Hi! This is an introductory paragraph for a short story I am currently doing. I am thankful for the...
Writing FeedbackMajesticInnogen - Jan 30, 2016 / MajesticInnogen - Jan 31, 2016
|'obsolete ways of thinking and acting' - Progress should be the aim of any great society.
Writing FeedbackAAORA - Jan 30, 2016 / sntinn - Jan 30, 2016
|( TPO 5 ) things they like to do ? things they should do ?
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Jan 30, 2016 / Saharnaz - Jan 31, 2016
|task 1 - The Percentage of Places Visited by Different People in Australia
4 - Hi Wahyu, In my opinion, the first and second paragraphs have delivered the point of the chart, but there...
Writing Feedbackwahyutri13 - Jan 30, 2016 / fariz10 - Jan 31, 2016
|Modern communication gives great tools to connect people but it's less personal than direct relation
4 - Dear Wahyu, I appreciate your fruitful advice. Certainly, I regret the example of advantages is weak although some...
Writing FeedbackOSM - Jan 29, 2016 / OSM - Feb 8, 2016
|People should be more independent from modern technologies to protect their ability to think
3 - Hello ajulyav Given task requires to what extent do you agree or disagree. It means that you should...
Writing Feedbackajulyav - Jan 29, 2016 / irhame - Jan 30, 2016
|The Percentage of Varies Residents in Australia who Visit Some Places
2 - The bar chart describes a THE percentage of varies VARIOUS citizenS in Australia who came WENT to some places....
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 29, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 29, 2016
|Harshness on Television Delivers Some detrimental Impacts for Children
2 - There is an inclining level of harshness that has been seen on television. There is a view that...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 29, 2016 / sharfina - Feb 1, 2016
|TV programs, which contain extreme force action, hold negative effects on children's interaction
Writing Feedbackwahyutri13 - Jan 29, 2016 / mennaemad - Jan 29, 2016
|Changes in the proportion of different people who visit Zoo, Library, Theatre, and Cinema
2 - Hello, i quite understand the structure of your essay , and i clearly see that it is highly build...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Jan 29, 2016 / mennaemad - Jan 29, 2016
|'teen brawls, raping, and deviant behaviour' -Violance On Television And Children's Behaviour
2 - In this advance ADVANCED technology era, television is ... I strongly agree that it is affected to the...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 29, 2016 / amrillahmk31 - Jan 29, 2016
|The influence of violence scenes in television for children and their behavior
2 - Hi Miftah, You have several advance words on your essay, However, I see that your conclusion is not...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Jan 29, 2016 / fariz10 - Jan 29, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: YOUNG PEOPLE SHOULD TAKE A JOB BETWEEN SCHOOL AND UNIVERSITY
4 - uncommon chunking word. quote=Riiskacha03]Having a job after graduate from school will help them their mature and...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 29, 2016 / tiaDS - Jan 30, 2016
|There is no excuse for authorities to restrict the unpaid public rights-education and healthcare.
2 - Sholihin, first things first. Your opening statement is confused, does not use the correct word descriptors for your essay...
Writing Feedbacksholihin84 - Jan 29, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 29, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : THE INFLUENCE OF SOPHISTICATED MEDIA on people in a relationship
3 - (Try to use hook in beginning of your sentence, so people will be more interest) It is generally assumed...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 29, 2016 / Saputra Putra - Jan 31, 2016
|People are extremely straightforward in creating a close relationship and maintain it in a good way
3 - Muhammad, when you give an example such as Eid Mubarak and Christmas, in support of the discussion that implies...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 29, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 31, 2016
|Lecture points and statement about cars; Integrated Writing Task & Independent Writing Task of TPO 4
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|The happiness of people with "married" status is clearly greater than another in the all age group
2 - ... in particular the blissfulness of PEOPLE who have married ... ... people with married status is clearly greater...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 29, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Jan 29, 2016
|Recently, some people prefer to build new job field instead of involving themselves in a company
2 - Hi Awe!! I would like to highlight the thesis statement on your writing. ... Even though there are...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 29, 2016 / Mardy17 - Jan 29, 2016
|Electronic media, through their services, can create a great relation between people
2 - advanced technology takes a significant part in human's life, since it encourages people harmful for their reciprocal lives, since...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 29, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 29, 2016
|Media needs to air a program reporting ordinary people which has more value for everyone
2 - media have a pivotal role for inhabitants → in ordinary people which (who) have more valuable lesson...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 29, 2016 / Crystal812 - Jan 29, 2016
|Writing Task 2: Most successful inventions do not rely on complicated technology.
Writing Feedbackswara86 - Jan 28, 2016 / Crystal812 - Jan 29, 2016
|Prejudice of Personality by Experience : Can We?
3 - ... clothes which are worn by inhabitants PEOPLE represent their true colors CHARACTERS... This essay will discuss...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 28, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 29, 2016
|Many people prefer to open their own job field rather than enroll to a corporation or organisation
2 - Although this may brings a de merit, as wepeople need longer time to earn money(...)starting a business has some...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 28, 2016 / nuni11 - Jan 28, 2016
|Becoming familiar with a foreign language at primary school gives more advantages for children
3 - Nowadays (this word is already used in many writing, just try to be different), as children are part of...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 28, 2016 / Saputra Putra - Jan 31, 2016
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