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|Parents should care about their children's education - challenging point
4 - Hi Vahid, I like your question as well as essay. Parents should care about their children. not only...
Writing Feedbackvahid5570 - Aug 18, 2015 / ednashirley - Aug 19, 2015
|"Can acting in one's own self interest make the world a better place?" SAT Essay
2 - I would like to help you with your essay. When I read the introduction, I thought there were few...
Writing FeedbackSunset7 - Aug 17, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 17, 2015
|People should not get their knowledge from unlimited resources to gain necessary information
NEW - Human being is a living memory of history, the focus of all the wealth of knowledge, abilities, and wisdom...
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|SAT Essay: Are creativity and originality necessary for success?
3 - Of course, we need both creativity as well as originality while doing every work. Essay is good, but...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 17, 2015 / ednashirley - Aug 19, 2015
|TOEFL:The longer one lives with parents, the better the one will be.
2 - As the opening sentence, this phrase is too long. Therefore, it is always good to write no more...
Writing Feedbackeegii012 - Aug 17, 2015 / eddies - Aug 17, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are heroes those who speak up when others lack the courage?
3 - I think your essay has a strong intro and conclusion. You seem to answer the question well! when...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 23, 2015
|Without parents assistance children can easily be affected by bad habits, lifestyle and cultures
6 - This essay is well done. You have an intro conclusion and three body paragraphs. final tests, However... ...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 31, 2015
|Books are more significant than experience, but we can't live apart from it.
4 - Your essay is well written, but could benefit from some development. the most important source... Your intro...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 15, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 19, 2015
|Do you like reading?
Writing FeedbackNgoc Mai - Aug 14, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 14, 2015
|Southland's exports in a 25-year period from 2000 to 2025
2 - I think you should either write and introduction before you introduce the chart or move the big paragraph to...
Writing Feedbackjamie_cao - Aug 14, 2015 / lili_eritrean - Aug 14, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are all heroes eventually forgotten?
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 13, 2015 / masktaz - Aug 15, 2015
|There's much social concern what are positive and negative economic results of globalization
2 - hi Haongle ACB be attention to grammer note 1: What positive and negative economic results of globalization are has...
Writing FeedbackhoangleACB - Aug 12, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Aug 15, 2015
|People spend their whole life to pursue happiness
3 - Hi, here are a few of my suggestions: I really like your introduction; with a few grammar corrections...
Writing FeedbackMalihong - Aug 12, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 13, 2015
|Modern lifestyle has made it harder for people to live a healthy, active lifestyle. Causes&Solutions
2 - 1st Para: - This lifestyle significantly effects affects their health (affect is a verb, and effect is Noun) makes...
Writing Feedbackshiravin - Aug 12, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 12, 2015
|Fewer Cars, Healthier environment
2 - "In today's world, using cars are the most essential objects for commuting, especially in metropolitan areas."...
Writing Feedbackgoleh_sorkh - Aug 11, 2015 / Candidate - Aug 11, 2015
|Outline of the importance of confidence - feeling of trust in one's ability, quality and judgement
Writing Feedbackminhthuphung - Aug 11, 2015 / Yamigi - Aug 11, 2015
|Topic: Think about the sources of nutritional information. Which sources do you trust the most? Why?
2 - Hi chibichan, Let me give some suggestions, First of all, when you write paragraph, the first thing...
Writing Feedbackchibichan - Aug 11, 2015 / BLisa - Aug 11, 2015
|higher sale for retail stores, more jobs, great profit from internet market - Black Friday effects
2 - Hi gwang62, Here in my suggestion, Black Friday play an essential role in economy improvement since...
Writing Feedbackgwang61 - Aug 10, 2015 / BLisa - Aug 11, 2015
|IELTS Letter: Request some changes to the hotel reservation for a business meeting
Writing Feedbacksasithasan - Aug 10, 2015 / BLisa - Aug 10, 2015
|Students prefer living in campus housing rather than living in off campus. Toefl essay
4 - I don't give suggestions about content and grammar, but There are 2 notes that I want to let you...
Writing FeedbackkenIQB - Aug 10, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 12, 2015
|Can all people justifiably break laws that they think are unjust? GRE
Writing Feedbacksix2 - Aug 10, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 11, 2015
|The prediction about the number of cars in use in twenty years from now
4 - Agree and Disagree? You should choose one (clear and consistent throughout the essay) for example, if you agree,...
Writing FeedbackEsmeralda - Aug 10, 2015 / BLisa - Aug 10, 2015
|Life is never just about your talent it is also about all that you experienced; GRE
2 - Hi jojony1, Overall, your grammar is quite good. I've some suggestions for you. In my view, You...
Writing Feedbackjojony1 - Aug 9, 2015 / BLisa - Aug 10, 2015
|If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable. GRE.
2 - Hello. I'll help you with your style. Try not to start sentences with "however." Here's an alternative...
Writing Feedbackjojony1 - Aug 9, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 12, 2015
|The ability to achieve social harmony should be a major goal in every school. GRE.
Writing Feedbackjojony1 - Aug 9, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 10, 2015
|SAT Essay: Is adversity necessary to discover who we are?
3 - i like your conclusion advice i would give is adding that depth into your body how adversity is hard...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 9, 2015 / jojony1 - Aug 9, 2015
|It is unfair for local people to pay the same amount of money on tourist attraction with foreigners.
Writing Feedbacksanoop - Aug 9, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 9, 2015
|Prefer changes or doing the same thing (academic essay for IELTS exam)
NEW - some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change.others however think that change is...
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|Shopkeepers vs skateboarders issue - response letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
2 - Hello. I think you need to rephrase your essay a little in order to better answer the question prompt....
Writing Feedbackshsamyam - Aug 8, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 9, 2015
|Food; some parts of the world are suffering from lack of it, other complain about its quality
3 - Hi Samilijah. I would recommend only using an exclamation mark when you really want to make an important point....
Writing FeedbackSamilijah - Aug 8, 2015 / lea - Aug 8, 2015
|Differences of Life between in the city and in the countryside
6 - Hi! Here are some of my suggestions: "The first salient difference is thatthe lifestyle." Your second body paragraph's...
Writing FeedbackRon Weasley - Aug 7, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 9, 2015
|Patterns of woven baskets found in the immediate village of Palea - argument writing for Toefl
2 - Hello, I would like to help you with your writing. 1st paragraph: You begin by summarizing what you...
Writing Feedbackshwetanana - Aug 7, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 7, 2015
|'there are more than just salary to have a better life' - Hard Work vs. Enjoyable Profession
Writing FeedbackBayu - Aug 7, 2015 / eddies - Aug 7, 2015
|Having an enjoyable job or good salary to a better life? IELTS Task 2
3 - People have different opinions to define a better life. For some others, they argue that working with good...
Writing Feedbackginong - Aug 7, 2015 / eddies - Aug 7, 2015
|Exotic people's tendency to doing individual sports rather than a team sports - TOEFL
2 - This intro is good. Still, sentences are too long and contain bulky ideas. When it comes to introduction, your...
Writing Feedbackzeperte - Aug 7, 2015 / eddies - Aug 9, 2015
|'team exercise' - Team sports or individual sports, which one do you prefer?
NEW - Hi every body...I would appreciate it if you can help me with this writing task and tell me what...
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|A gap year might bring both benefits and severe detrimental effect to students - IELTS essay
3 - The highlight sentence shows a generic phrase. This is not good for your performance when it comes to...
Writing FeedbackBao Tran - Aug 6, 2015 / eddies - Aug 7, 2015
|A/D? Students should spend more time learning on their own than learning in a classroom environment.
Writing FeedbackJac - Aug 6, 2015 / jojony1 - Aug 9, 2015
|The rate of using internet between urban/suburban regions tended to increase rapidly over time.
3 - - ..the rate of using internet between two regions tended to increase.. - After that, the rate has more...
Writing FeedbackRon Weasley - Aug 6, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|'Influence: How and Why People Agree to Things' - SAT April 2006
3 - Remember that this is practice. I'm unsure about the grading. If I used a grading system with the highest...
Writing FeedbackDawn01 - Aug 6, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 6, 2015
|"Memories help us maintain a grip on reality"; I need this to relate back to the death of a salesman
Writing Feedbackintelligent_c - Aug 6, 2015 / shwetanana - Aug 7, 2015
|Technology is very helpful in solving one's problem but one can become too dependent upon using it
3 - Thanks....
Writing Feedbackshwetanana - Aug 5, 2015 / shwetanana - Aug 6, 2015
|Schools have possibilities to support the fight against obesity
Writing Feedbackmayhar - Aug 5, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Aug 6, 2015
|Food Magazine Article; Describing the difficulties of feeding a growing world population.
Writing FeedbackSamilijah - Aug 5, 2015 / Samilijah - Aug 7, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 : MAP, West park secondary school construction
2 - Hello, I can help you with any needed changes to your essay. 1st paragraph: The school's name should...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Aug 5, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 5, 2015
|Sometimes you should disregard many important things like physical exercises to achieve career goals
2 - - ....giving damage to your health. ( You should put a stop here, and then begin a result question)....
Writing Feedbacksavaskaptan - Aug 5, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 5, 2015
|"one big traffic jam" - Traffic congestion drives an immense problem.
2 - For intro, simply paraphrase the prompt. Here is; The significant rise in the ownerships of private motor vehicles over...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Aug 5, 2015 / eddies - Aug 5, 2015
|A breakdown of the process of water cycle. IELTS Task 1
4 - Hello, let me give the feedback for your improvement. - Please, you can use other sentence conectors such...
Writing Feedbackveaenia - Aug 4, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Aug 31, 2015
|"Do people have to be highly competitive in order to succeed?"SAT Essay CB Study-Guide 2004-2005
Writing FeedbackDawn01 - Aug 4, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 5, 2015
|Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark - TOEFL WRITING
2 - Allow me to give you some suggestions ^.^ - but others, in contrast , believe that paying mone...
Writing Feedbackjavad27 - Aug 4, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 5, 2015
|SAT Essay: Should we weigh opinions equally or put more weight on informed opinions?
3 - - The upshot is scores of Americans rushing - ...started once the excitements fades. - The Ignorance from this...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|Topic: When you have to solve a creative problem, do you rely more on craft or inspiration? Why?
3 - Some of my suggestions: "MeanwhileHowever , a creative problem is always solved in a creative way." "The...
Writing Feedbackgreenw4y - Aug 4, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 4, 2015
|Children learn language more easily if they start early in life.
Writing Feedbackhang98 - Aug 4, 2015 / hang98 - Aug 4, 2015
|Valuation of relations in today's world.
3 - The first sentence is a good opener, but the second clause does not work: "What we struggle for, is...
Writing FeedbackEMANN - Aug 4, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 4, 2015
|Bar Chart which provide an usage of railway among different countries
Writing FeedbackRon Weasley - Aug 4, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 7, 2015
|IELTS task 1: The population of fishers and exported fish in the world
4 - - In 1970 , the highest number of world fishermen was living in Asia witnessed rose significantly , from...
Writing Feedbackveaenia - Aug 3, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Aug 31, 2015
|Write a story about two children who leave their old home and start a new life in a new one.
3 - - ...fearing that the worst hadhas yet to come. - 'We are going travellingto travel ! ' -... Adam...
Writing FeedbackSamilijah - Aug 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are rewards harmful motivators?
3 - - In the fast-paced age of the milleniummillennium ( be careful with spelling, turn on spell checker) generation,... -...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|Choose a job basing on salary or other factors needs to be considered?
Writing Feedbackhangha - Aug 3, 2015 / hangha - Aug 4, 2015
|"Is it more courageous to show vulnerability than it is to show strength?" SAT January 2015
2 - I think you could add some points on people showing their own weakness and improve them . This Link...
Writing FeedbackDawn01 - Aug 3, 2015 / Samilijah - Aug 3, 2015
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