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|Worldwide Mobile Phone Sales ( % share of market)
2 - In 2005, the biggest proportion of hand-phone market was Nokia, representing at 32.5%.A lthough it was popular, byin 2006,...
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Sep 30, 2015 / irhame - Sep 30, 2015
|Global Mobile Phone Sales in a 2-year period
2 - The chart illustrates the global market share of mobile phone cell phone sales in a 2-year period for manufactures...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Sep 30, 2015 / hasbi - Sep 30, 2015
|Violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18
NEW - Question : Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists...
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|Market share of the well-known mobile phone brands between 2005 and 2006
3 - Hi...bayuwibowo.. your overview is very good, but, you must consider about comparison or thesis statements about the data. and...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 30, 2015 / hasbi - Sep 30, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - High crime rate in youngster is parents and teachers responsibility
2 - ok bayu, let me give some suggestions on your passage I definitely agree with that psychologist statement it...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 30, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 30, 2015
|TED talk regarding nuclear power - the nuclear fusion reactor is built.
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Sep 30, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 30, 2015
|Basic factor of the violent crime increase among teens is less learning from parents and teachers
3 - hello irhame.. let me try to rewrite your introduction In this day and age, the huge violent crime...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Sep 30, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 30, 2015
|The chart gives information about the proportion of rail transport in four different states in 2007
Writing FeedbackSuhel92 - Sep 29, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 30, 2015
|What is the life in a media-rich society?
3 - Some changes in para 1 - It is firmly ARGUED that media reliance affects daily basis. - The influx...
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Sep 29, 2015 / eddies - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - Big Influence of media-rich society
5 - hello bayu,,let me try to give some suggestion on your passage. based on your question, you need to describe...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 29, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 30, 2015
|The table about Rail transport in five different countries
2 - Hello carrot.. let me try to helps you although my tips not always right.. Overall, it can be...
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Sep 29, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 29, 2015
|Selecting an employees based on age - how this development is seen?
NEW - Topic- in some countries it is illegal for company to reject job applicants for their age. Is this a...
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|TOEFL: Should students have longer vacations than before?
2 - Shang, one of the elements that is tested in the TOEFL test is your ability to comprehend the essay...
Writing FeedbackClare - Sep 29, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 29, 2015
|The TEDTalk summary regarding education. Writing flows and checking grammar.
2 - Asep, while you really presented a good summary, the grammar issues really abound. The sentences are not formed properly...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Sep 29, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 29, 2015
|Write a story that happens in a mysterious place.
4 - When i open my eyes, i see nothing. Everything was a pitch black. I stretch my arm across. Grabbing...
Writing FeedbackSamuelsam123 - Sep 29, 2015 / anggicaroot - Sep 29, 2015
|People in America vs Asian and European dwellers - Rail transport table usage in four countries
3 - Thank you @Vangiespen for your valuable inputs I am sorry, if i still creates a lot of grammar...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 29, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Oct 1, 2015
|The table chart describes the use of trail, categorized by how many people use it
6 - That is a nice question. Both words mean to describe the distance traveled. If you look up the meaning...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 29, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 29, 2015
|In this era, the media have held the prominent thing in almost all aspects
4 - For both of your advantages and disadvantages , you should provide more points and supporting evidence to support your...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 28, 2015 / CPlayer - Oct 3, 2015
|TASK II : difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives
5 - Hallo Abraham, I am so sorry, the phrase of "In conclusion" is same as "the aforementioned evidence"...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 28, 2015 / aseprudi - Sep 30, 2015
|Observation of rail transport in 4 developed countries in 2007
2 - hello,, i'll try give some suggestions on your passage. After that, UK folks more likely to bring more goods...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Sep 28, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 28, 2015
|In this essay, I would argue that media has positive and negative impact for people's live.
2 - Media is the biggest essential thing for human [...]let me try to rewrite you introduction As media is considered...
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Sep 28, 2015 / Diqon - Sep 28, 2015
|Rail transport in four countries (UK, US, Japan and Italy) in 2007
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Sep 28, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 28, 2015
|We won't go far away from media influence - advantage and disadvantage living in full-media society
Writing Feedbackirhame - Sep 28, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 28, 2015
|Essay on George Hewes from the American Revolution
2 - For George Hewes, who was forced into the occupation of being a shoemaker, life did not treat him well....
Writing Feedbackalexarae713 - Sep 28, 2015 / LaneH - Sep 29, 2015
|Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued -IELTS
3 - Hi vangiespen Thank you for your notes In my opinion it is right that actors put their lives online...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Sep 28, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Sep 29, 2015
|The inclination between social activities and studying at school
NEW - For future career success, relating well to other people is more important than studying hard at school. I...
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|Living in a big city - means more robbers and criminals around
7 - dear friends.l wrote first time essay l know l have a lot mistakes and l try correct my mistake...
Writing FeedbackARCHTECT - Sep 28, 2015 / ARCHTECT - Sep 29, 2015
|Buying things online is very convenient. Simple trade brings some demerits though.
5 - -Particularly, in shopping which they prefer to buy what they need such uslike clothes, groceries even air ticket via...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 27, 2015 / anggicaroot - Sep 28, 2015
|TASK II : own business instead of working for a company or organisation
3 - Aditya, your essay is a grammatical nightmare but a reader can somewhat understand what the point you are trying...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 27, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 28, 2015
|Task 2 IELTS - Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly.
4 - hi I would like to rewrite this paragraph First, getting dressed in the working appearance has not to be...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 27, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Sep 28, 2015
|Many awesome inventions in many aspects has been increased technology, education and transportation
2 - Nawaporn, I like the essence of your essay. It shows that you completely understood the prompt and, while limited...
Writing FeedbackRainy_Fon - Sep 27, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 27, 2015
|I decided to start college straight out of high school. Great parenting of both - my mom and dad.
NEW - My mom and dad are both great parents with similar ways of parenting but also very different. Do you...
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|Talking about myself - environment, culture, or family history helped to shape my identity
5 - Catherine, I have a different take on your essay than Lakisha. My opinion is that you do not really...
Writing Feedbackcpham7780 - Sep 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 26, 2015
|Today people are not polite to each other, but why to blame; the world if full of fierce competition
2 - Shang, you wrote a pretty good essay. However, the prompt that you responded to in your essay does not...
Writing FeedbackClare - Sep 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 26, 2015
|Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art.
4 - however due to recent economic downfall and recession,is many countries think this type of lavish spending can an should...
Writing Feedbackmarydan84 - Sep 26, 2015 / echo5016 - Sep 26, 2015
|Professionalism of an organisation requires the introduction of an proper dress code
4 - Please take note of the corrections that I made previously which you omitted or chose to ignore in your...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 25, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 25, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: The best way to solve the environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel.
2 - Isabelle you should applaud yourself for a well developed essay. While I will be the first to critique that...
Writing Feedbackdb723 - Sep 25, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 25, 2015
|Education is a critical element to prosperity of any nation. Justify.
3 - Thanks for the prompt feedback. I have certainly noted the points highlighted by you and will put them in...
Writing Feedbackamicalrahul - Sep 25, 2015 / amicalrahul - Sep 25, 2015
|The question: does the adverts have a major impact on people's favor as well as their lifestyle?
Writing Feedbackhoahongdo94 - Sep 25, 2015 / hoahongdo94 - Oct 18, 2015
|The graph shows the number of West Indians and Indians and Pakistanis Immigrating to the UK
2 - Hiep, your overview seems a bit short. Most overviews, regardless of which essay test you are preparing for, contain...
Writing Feedbackbillyabbot - Sep 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 25, 2015
|"A Walk". Creative writing personal essay on a storm (descriptive) i need help making it longer
3 - I would like to help you with your essay. I would like to give you three suggestions or approaches...
Writing FeedbackMcMetal - Sep 24, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 25, 2015
|Cbest - At some point in our lives, all of us have focused some sort of rejection or defeat
Writing Feedbackpbhutiani - Sep 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 24, 2015
|Space exploration requires vast sums of money. Justifiable?
2 - Rahul, your essay should be along the lines of a compare and contrast essay because the prompt asks you...
Writing Feedbackamicalrahul - Sep 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 24, 2015
|There is nothing that technology can't reach - it make children less creative (toefl writing)
4 - Hi, Two guys above showed your mistakes that I totally agree. I think your vocabulary and grammar is...
Writing Feedbackbeat_toefl - Sep 24, 2015 / billyabbot - Sep 24, 2015
|Books or computers for learning? Most students who use technology are more engaged with their study
Writing FeedbackIsabellaRes - Sep 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 23, 2015
|Salary imbalance between entertainment profession and profession like doctor and teacher.
3 - Protocol, I do not think you are very familiar with the salary that celebrities like actors, and professionals like...
Writing Feedbackprotocol78 - Sep 22, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 23, 2015
|The appropriate punishment of children to teach right and wrong
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Sep 22, 2015 / JIDA - Oct 5, 2015
|A summarize from TED Talk from Bill Gates who reveals how to improve teaching quality
2 - When it comes to an opening sentence, it is always good to start with a short sentence. This is...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Sep 22, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|Summary from TED's video. Writing flows and grammar.
2 - Everyone should learn to gain self-confident. Since it is believed that self-confidence brings more happiness, self-confident people are...
Writing Feedbackalif - Sep 22, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|The clothes indicate what kind of persons we are - IELTS TASK 2
4 - Hallo Abraham, I will offer you some suggestion regarding your essay, particularly on the first body. This part...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 21, 2015 / aseprudi - Sep 22, 2015
|Should same-sex marriage be legalized? Argumentative essay
2 - There is an imbalance in the way that you argued this essay Hung. When you write an argumentative essay,...
Writing FeedbackHungHung - Sep 21, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 21, 2015
|Age limits of people to drive are an essential step in reducing traffic accidents.
Writing Feedbackanky_bhatt - Sep 21, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 21, 2015
|The personal and work-related challenges that young people face today - TOEFL Writing
2 - Taichi, you need to review your essay for content again. Once someone reads your essay it becomes pretty obvious...
Writing FeedbackTaichi - Sep 21, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 21, 2015
|Task 2 - The clothes people wear are the most indication of what they are like
6 - Guys above said very well. I think your essay need be focused on grammar and, expression such as Main...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 21, 2015 / billyabbot - Sep 24, 2015
|The programs as a charity or helping neighbourhood have a lot of advantages for students
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Sep 21, 2015 / db723 - Oct 1, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - Clothes are the most important indication of your identity
6 - The popularity of fashion always changes. As such, some people are bound to keep up to date with...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 21, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|Discuss time when your ETHNIC background (or ASPECT OF YOUR IDENTITY) SIGNIFICANTLY affected ur life
Writing Feedbackagonzalez16 - Sep 20, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 20, 2015
|The US always supported others who lost everything in natural disasters or to help build democracy
Writing Feedbackpbhutiani - Sep 20, 2015 / pbhutiani - Sep 21, 2015
|Task 1 IELTS - the results of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationships
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 20, 2015 / eddies - Sep 20, 2015
|The pros and cons of working remotely
3 - although this kind of work is on the rise... You need to describe the advantages. and disadvantages in...
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