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|Health services should accessible for every person.
3 - Hey there, overall you have a good essay. However if I were you, I'd probably start my argumentative essay...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 15, 2015 / Spredde - Jun 15, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Internet excellence for communicating people and finding information
7 - Hello Adhisti, let me continue your body paragraph with regard to the Internet communication. Admittedly, a particular...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jun 14, 2015 / aseprudi - Jul 1, 2015
|Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. The essay of TOEFL.
Writing FeedbackImladris - Jun 14, 2015 / Imladris - Jun 15, 2015
|What people do with their rubbish and how a town tries to keep the area clean and attractive?
3 - Well not in the whole paragraph, just the first line. The words are not connected that well which later...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 14, 2015 / sally_922 - Jun 16, 2015
|Public transport for health keeping, pollution reducing and environment protection.
3 - Keep in mind where u use fullstop point becuase there is lot which are wrongly used. Next,use some complex...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 14, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 16, 2015
|IS EATING NO MEAT AND FISH REALLY SO BENEFICIAL?
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 14, 2015 / alif - Jun 30, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 : THE BENEFIT OF THE INTERNET FOR COMMUNICATION AND LITERATURE
3 - Asep, As far as I am concern, we have to paraphrase the words and stucture in IELTS writing. However,...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 13, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 15, 2015
|The main problems associated with phenomenon of common Internet usage
3 - Hallo Minh, I would render you some suggestion for this essay: Inaccurate information and hackers are the...
Writing FeedbackMinh Yen - Jun 13, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|Maintaining body health and saving the world as a whole with eating no meat or fish
2 - - More and more people now neglect to consume meat or fish. They argue that this benefits for either...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 13, 2015
|Distance between family members is extremely increasing nowadays.
Writing Feedbackmarned - Jun 13, 2015 / marned - Jun 21, 2015
|IELTS: PEOPLE OBEY TO INTAKE VARIOUS GRASS-FED ANIMALS IN ORDER TO OFFER BENEFIT TO ENVIRONMENT
3 - Thank you for giving me some suggestion. I would try to re-write my article in terms of your advise....
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 13, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|Some people think that it is good to keep pets at home
4 - Hallo Makrine, I would render you some suggestion : Inhabitants convince is renders beneficial effect in order...
Writing FeedbackMakrine - Jun 12, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|My idol - a man born without arms or legs
Writing Feedbackthanhgiang - Jun 11, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 12, 2015
|Task 1. Global sales of top mobile phones
3 - Hi, Bob.. I have some suggestions for your writing. The bar chart compares the number of mobile...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Jun 11, 2015 / Adhisti - Jun 13, 2015
|Is it better for students to work on their assignments together or alone?
Writing Feedbacknellymo - Jun 11, 2015 / nellymo - Jun 11, 2015
|How much time for themselves will have people in the future? Will they be busier than we are today?
3 - - Some people believe that peoplethey ( we omit the "people" as you have used it already, avoid redundancy...
Writing Feedbackjyh2013 - Jun 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|The table below gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006
2 - making speeches or presentation is(are) communication skills that is(are) not really influencing in people's job over the period....
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Jun 10, 2015 / juanmarman - Jun 10, 2015
|Measuring quality of a nation. What is the best determinant of a wise, respectable society?
3 - Hi @hariban Para 3 : - check your spelling suchsimilay(maybe "similar") - themselvesthem . Para 4 :...
Writing FeedbackHarinban - Jun 9, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Jun 10, 2015
|Making handmade stuffs is my hobby - every girl should be clever with her hands
Writing Feedbackvinvin - Jun 9, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 23, 2015
|In addition to the money from retirement, people should get more governmental support
Writing Feedbackshawnxk - Jun 9, 2015 / shawnxk - Jun 12, 2015
|Future World - Process Description Paper; Abstract
2 - Hi, diz. I'll work on the first paragraph for you: For our final project, my group has decided...
Writing Feedbackdiz013 - Jun 9, 2015 / ChristineB - Jun 9, 2015
|Pretty, attractive girl with great voice - we spend a lot of time together. Best friend paragraph.
Writing Feedbacklinhdemon - Jun 9, 2015 / linhdemon - Jun 10, 2015
|Public transportation makes that less exhausts are ejected from motorbikes and cars into the air
Writing Feedbacktangthidiepanh - Jun 9, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 9, 2015
|Living in A Media-Rich Society; media should contribute more for humanity in the future
3 - I have provided some changes for you to consider. Everything is well organized, but there are some slight changes...
Writing FeedbackTrias - Jun 9, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 9, 2015
|Government spendings during an economic crisis - Health caring and supporting unemployed is crucial
Writing Feedbackjohnterry886 - Jun 8, 2015 / xuandieu - Jun 8, 2015
|About gender roles in society - chances for a job among men and women; who have more opportunities?
3 - Hi @katty_nhung, kindly find my suggestion on your first paragraph below. Feminism has changed virtually every aspects in...
Writing Feedbackkatty_nhung - Jun 8, 2015 / Trias - Jun 9, 2015
|Automobiles, bicycles, airplanes - which transport form has changed people's lives the most?
Writing Feedbackxuandieu - Jun 8, 2015 / xuandieu - Jun 8, 2015
|Celebrities get invited to international aid events.
3 - Hi @Jaggi7921, kindly find my feedback below: Pay attention to your spelling and sentence structure. Moreover, you...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 8, 2015 / Trias - Jun 9, 2015
|Assignment: Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority?
3 - I wanted to provide you with as much detail as possible to make your essay better. Everything seems to...
Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Jun 8, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 8, 2015
|Can an ideal job can be acquired with accomplishing study in university? IELTS
3 - Your intro >> Plenty of people think that ideal job can be acquired with accomplishing study in university...
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 8, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 8, 2015
|PEOPLE GET A JOB - it's a necessity in everyone's life
4 - aseprudi- let me express my idea regarding the first para Obtaining a recognisable job is a main aim...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 8, 2015 / Ridma - Jun 9, 2015
|The famous people should also contribute to the social causes in our country.
5 - Thank you for your feedback lcturn87. It was of great help. I will make the suggested changes in my...
Writing Feedbackshetty13 - Jun 8, 2015 / shetty13 - Jun 8, 2015
|Higher Education for Work and Perspectives - IELTS
Writing FeedbackTrias - Jun 8, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 8, 2015
|IELTS WT 2 - A university degree gain higher chance to get a well-paid job than school graduates
3 - The thing that u much needed is reduce the explanation. In the second paragraph the second example is too...
Writing FeedbackHettymsk - Jun 8, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 8, 2015
|Good and bad impact of having a lot of TV channels
Writing FeedbackRidma - Jun 8, 2015 / Ridma - Jun 9, 2015
|Chinese New Year- describe one of the special custom of your country
4 - This is well written, and gives the reader a clear picture. However, I think you should condense some...
Writing Feedbackseth - Jun 7, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jul 7, 2015
|Air leaks and heat loss in houses
3 - You use 'which' after a comma. Change 'which' to 'that' for a direct emphasis. //entire of air into...
Writing Feedbackfaarasyad - Jun 7, 2015 / vincenm - Jun 7, 2015
|CCTV and Body Scanners to improve humans safety and keep them from frauds
3 - I have suggested more changes to help you with meaning for your essay. I hope these changes will make...
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 7, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 7, 2015
|TECHNOLOGICAL TOOLS - sophisticated technology in order to prevent crimes among societies
2 - - In the mean time,(It is very unlikely that you start your essay with "In the meantime", due to...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 9, 2015
|Decisions makers should not based their choice on emotions
3 - Hello, I saw quite a few grammatical errors, so I hope that my feedback can be helpful to you!...
Writing Feedbacks61001234 - Jun 6, 2015 / BlueBabey - Jun 8, 2015
|Reducing the walking distance.
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 5, 2015 / alif - Jun 8, 2015
|People are not satisfied with their lives any more - #TOEFL my reasoning logic and language usage?
3 - - When people are doing their burdensomecomplicated jobs, they also suffer from financial pressure. - This makeresults to...
Writing FeedbackYihuan - Jun 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 6, 2015
|The idea of free universities - what is your opinion? The quality is even more important question.
5 - almost universities-> most universities in this relationship-> in this mutual relationship they need to make money to fund scholarship...
Writing Feedbackchuoi9 - Jun 5, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|Competition improve students achievements - show research in Indonesia
4 - hi muhammad, you essay is excellent. but i have suggestion for your introduction. you need to explain...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Jun 4, 2015 / alif - Jun 7, 2015
|Freedom to work and live anywhere.
6 - Recently the freedom to work and live anywhere has become the main trend due to the development of communication...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 4, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 4, 2015
|How much do drivers spend on petrol?
2 - - The line graph provides information regarding the amount of petrol spent people spent in two different countries and...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things.
3 - I don't think you should end your essay with one line. The conclusion should be at least three to...
Writing Feedbacknguyenhaai - Jun 3, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 5, 2015
|The increase of advance technology over the years is resonating around us, students.
5 - Firstly,introduction is too long,you need to write it in 40-50 words. Secondly,u add one of the idea in the...
Writing Feedbacklovejapanjapan - Jun 3, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 4, 2015
|Equal Parents Responsibility to raise their children
Writing Feedbackbisho - Jun 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 2, 2015
|The process of technology has contributed to the medical equipment and treatment; people live longer
3 - - FirstlyFirst , as the process of technology has contributed... - Moreover, current technology allows human beings' (...
Writing Feedbackpys - Jun 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 2, 2015
|Do You Think The Advantages of Medical Care Development Outshine Its Disadvantages?
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Jun 2, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 4, 2015
|The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours
NEW - The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per...
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|Advanced medical treatment brings longer life of human expectancy
3 - Hi Iqbal. I read your essay, and in terms of grammar and syntax, justivy has taken care of that....
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 2, 2015 / lightfox - Jun 2, 2015
|The Curse Of a Tree (deforestation)
2 - Salawieh, Your essay is written well, a little bit lengthy though, I'm not sure if you were aiming...
Writing Feedbacksalawieh - Jun 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|Trends in childrens early formal education
3 - First of all, no one can avoid that early ages isare golden ages to knowgather more knowledge. Please constrain...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 1, 2015 / Riyasat - Jun 1, 2015
|Should Formal Education be Given for Children in The Age of Four or Seven Year Old?
3 - you have some tense and grammar problems. For example "Brain development is arguably become maximal at the young...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Jun 1, 2015 / Riyasat - Jun 1, 2015
|IELTS. Scientific research. Companies or government?
Writing FeedbackMarceline - Jun 1, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Jun 2, 2015
|The frozen fish pies - details about the manufacturing presented in the diagrams.
2 - your vocabulary is good. however, i see some grammar mistakes,like "According to the diagrams,it is reveals that there are...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Jun 1, 2015 / Marceline - Jun 1, 2015
|The two diagrams provide a breakdown of producing frozen fish pies
3 - - Overall, what stands out from the diagrams revealsreveal that microwaveable container contains four mixed ingredients. - Afterwards,...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - Jun 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 1, 2015
|ADAPTING OTHER CULTURES IN THE FLAT WORLD TIME
5 - Firstly, it is necessary to distinguish what are the good or bad values of each culture are. ...
Writing Feedbacknguyenvannam - Jun 1, 2015 / niesaysi - Jun 2, 2015
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