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|IELTS TASK 1 : The diagram describes a circulation of air leaking into and out in a house
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 17, 2015 / broerjuang - Sep 17, 2015
|Young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible
NEW - Indepence comes with a lot of responsibility .People look towards elders or more experienced people while making important decisions...
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|The figure describes how the air leaks can circulate into the house and goes out
2 - - Although this is good., some flaws interrupt the flow of sentences. Here is the edit. The figure describes...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 16, 2015 / eddies - Sep 16, 2015
|Some have argued that imagination is not as important as perspiration. CBEST writing
3 - Sara, Thank you very much for your corrections. English is my second language, and I really appreciate what you...
Writing FeedbackJuliah - Sep 16, 2015 / Juliah - Sep 18, 2015
|How the air circulates in a house and waste of energy due to heat losses - IELTS diagram
3 - The diagram illustrates how air circulates in a house and it cause waste of energy due to heat losses...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 16, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|Wind turbines - the figure describes how the elictricity is made and best place to locate generators
3 - The diagrams compare how the wind turbines are constructed and placed in different areas. What stand out from the...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 16, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|The generator turbine is using the wind power to produce electricity in the three distinct locations
3 - The two diagrams compare how design of a wind turbine is constructed and where the location of a...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 16, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|The diagrams describe how a turbine can produce electricity from renewable energy
2 - As discussed in the previous post, I strongly suggest developing a 2-sentence overview. The overview presenting the general trend...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 16, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|If I could, my first change in the hometown would be the promotion of education system; TOEFL ESSAY
2 - hello,, I'm Irfan Ardian, before i wanna say wish you luck for your test. here i'll try give some...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Sep 16, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 16, 2015
|IELTS TASK II : The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationship
2 - Hi Abraham, I think you need to improve your understanding of the words. Psychologists .... commitments, uniquenesses,...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 16, 2015 / broerjuang - Sep 16, 2015
|My childhood experience helped me become a better human. CBEST 'Experience' Essay
NEW - Many childhood experiences leave lifelong impressions on people. Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience...
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|Parents should control their children to avoid severity of developing technology. IELTS
3 - There are therefore have several reasons why I believe not just demerit, but merit factors as well For...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 15, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 16, 2015
|'numerous plus points' - Undesirable consequences of an electronic media? (IELTS Task II)
Writing Feedbackbroerjuang - Sep 15, 2015 / eddies - Sep 17, 2015
|Negative effect of electronic media on personal relationship - ielts task 2
3 - All parts in the world are electronically connected. As such, it is commonly seen that some people living...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 15, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|Task 1 - two sorts of communication skills between 1997 and 2006
2 - 1. It is always good to write a 2-sentence overview. 2. the amount of knowledge of particular products or...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 14, 2015 / eddies - Sep 15, 2015
|Rate, point out mistakes or suggest Improvement on my GRE Argument Task about Palea village
2 - I would like to give you some suggestions. The first sentence in your response has a missing word...
Writing FeedbackRiyasat - Sep 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 14, 2015
|The number of spoken words and vocabulary size among children aged 1-4 and 1-3 years old
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 14, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 15, 2015
|These days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology
5 - I guess this is your thesis statement These arguments will illustrate the point of view which will show some...
Writing Feedbackieltstaker - Sep 14, 2015 / broerjuang - Sep 15, 2015
|IELTS - the selected communication competency needed in a working area from 1997 to 2006
3 - Initially, the proportion of people saying that the skill in listening carefully to colleagues was essential was noted...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 14, 2015 / eddies - Sep 15, 2015
|Good job requires great communication skills - The Survey
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 14, 2015 / eddies - Sep 15, 2015
|The correlation between family talks and a different number of the vocabulary used by children
3 - The two line graphs show the comparison between verbal words and the amount of vocabularies in use for...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 14, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|SAT Essay: Do closed doors make us creative?
2 - I would like to help you with your thesis and some feedback. In your introductory paragraph, you could add...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 14, 2015
|Graph: language acquisition in child (IELTS Writing Task 1)
Writing Feedbackbroerjuang - Sep 14, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 21, 2015
|Task 1 - Total words spoken to child compare with Children's total Vocabulary size
4 - Let me help you polish the first paragraph. The two line graphs show the relationship in the numbers of...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 14, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|The caparison of water consumption between Brazil and Congo. IELTS
3 - From the graph, it can be found that the water use in agriculture, industrial use and domestic use and...
Writing Feedbacksummer_366 - Sep 14, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 14, 2015
|Everybody has the right to question the widely accepted wisdom.
3 - - I think your introduction could ease into the topic a little less abruptly; perhaps using an introductory sentence...
Writing Feedbacksumeetbathiya - Sep 14, 2015 / szhang25 - Sep 14, 2015
|Children face up unhealthy lifestyle - youngers tend to do severe modus vivendi
5 - Here is my edits. Please consider some changes; Children today are not as healthy as in the past....
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 13, 2015 / eddies - Sep 22, 2015
|"It is much more comfortable to cry in a Rolls Royce than on a bicycle" money vs happiness
3 - People can earn a lot of money through corruption and other illegal deeds , but that does not make...
Writing FeedbackUnnati_99 - Sep 13, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 14, 2015
|The environmentally devastated planet will not revive without our thoughtful actions.
3 - hello zzzz0070 This is good essay, only small mistake on grammar. To addresstackle these problems, I believe...
Writing Feedbackzzzz0070 - Sep 13, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 17, 2015
|Should we protect old buildings or not?
3 - I think you have written very well on the question of old houses and their uses. However, a couple...
Writing Feedbackpolina_sol - Sep 13, 2015 / EF_Carol - Sep 13, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - In the modern world very difficult to have a healthy lifestyle
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 13, 2015 / eddies - Sep 13, 2015
|The proportion of Britanian's audiences who watch TV and listen Radio per day
2 - I can help you with your summary. 1st paragraph: There are some missing words. Here is a suggestion: "The...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 13, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 13, 2015
|Characterist and physical description
3 - I can help you some errors. 1st paragraph: You should add "the" before perfect. When you discuss the...
Writing FeedbackAnnieprincess - Sep 13, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 13, 2015
|Friendship bond by school tradition
Writing FeedbackAhmadMohdRazali - Sep 13, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 13, 2015
|Who should be responsible for the health of our children? IELTS TASK 2
3 - this is a well-writen. you have some small mistakes. i think you should make this more simple These...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 12, 2015 / nguyenthiet1993 - Sep 15, 2015
|The capacity of reading and writing is more necessary nowadays than it was before
Writing Feedbackthanhlong - Sep 12, 2015 / thanhlong - Sep 13, 2015
|SAT Essay: Every day we live under some circumstances of choice - we rely on our own decisions
3 - I don't have much to say considering the requirements of a SAT essay, I think you'll have a 10...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 12, 2015 / thuuyen - Sep 12, 2015
|These days, in this technology era, it is easier than before to maintain a healthy lifestyle
4 - - I suggest shortening the first paragraph. Here is my sample; Modern lifestyles lead a sedentary life. As such,...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 11, 2015 / eddies - Sep 12, 2015
|Academic writing task 2 - The influence of modern world to a healthy lifestyle
3 - People in the pace of modern life are unlikely to have unhealthy lifestyles. While it is true, since...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 11, 2015 / eddies - Sep 23, 2015
|Parents should cook healthy food for their kids and constantly monitor their behavior.
4 - Thank you Mr Eddy, i am trying to rewrite my introduction : Unhealthy lifestyle is becoming a common...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 11, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 13, 2015
|Advantages of the music in secondary school - brain development and obtaining some necessary skills
3 - Hello Hayaalqasem. Thank you for your suggestion. But it is the saying of Calahan as I mentioned the previous...
Writing Feedbackthanhlong - Sep 11, 2015 / thanhlong - Sep 12, 2015
|Secondary education has been dominated among Bulgarians who wanted to live abroad in 2000s
4 - The bar graph compares the proportion of people with three different education backgrounds, who planned to leave Bulgaria....
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 11, 2015 / eddies - Sep 23, 2015
|The proportion of Bulgarian residents who chosen to live abroad at the level of 8 percent - IELTS
4 - Hello Mr Irfan With regards 100% Bulgarians i assume this is unnecessary data for your paragraph. The proportion...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 10, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 11, 2015
|books and experience essay - reflections on the importance of knowledge sources
4 - This is my opinion. Your ideas are quite good. Nevertheless, it has some mistakes. _BesideBesides , getting experience is...
Writing FeedbackDrew K - Sep 10, 2015 / thanhlong - Sep 11, 2015
|Culture shock (two years in Delhi, India)
Writing Feedbacksalonijain - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|Bulgarians showed not much intention to travel or stay abroad during 2001-2006
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 11, 2015
|Is it better to hire outside consultants or just inquire of own people? Analysis of the issue.
Writing Feedbackmskd96 - Sep 10, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 13, 2015
|The Average Cost of Housing in rural, suburban and urban areas - chart
2 - I advise you to use synonyms instead of repeating yourself. through 10 years = in span of 10 years...
Writing Feedbackhm407 - Sep 10, 2015 / vika1234 - Sep 10, 2015
|Learn subjects useful VS learn subjects that we like.
2 - I can help you with your essay. In the introduction you should have more information to begin your essay....
Writing FeedbackANNA_ff - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|The Chart of Bulgaria people who wants to go abroad - IELTS TASK 1
2 - Hello, I can help you with your summary. Since this chart shows years in the past, your verbs...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|The bar chart compares the percentage of Bulgarians categorized three sorts of education backgrounds
3 - As I have the information you mean, I upload the correct picture here. Furthermore, my suggestion is that...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015 / shintacandrade - Sep 11, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 - The Chart of Emigration Intentions in Bulgaria
2 - inhabitants who do not have any planning to go abroad is the highest percentage among all. Be carefull...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015
|The willingness of Bulgarians to move oversea based on their educational level (IELTS Task I)
3 - This need more improvement on the overview. It is always good to write a 2-sentence overview. Here is the...
Writing Feedbackbroerjuang - Sep 10, 2015 / eddies - Sep 10, 2015
|TOEFL Independent TASK_Family or Friends teach people more important lessons
Writing Feedbackfhmashayekhi - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|Early technological developments VS recent technological developments -- task 2 IELTS
Writing Feedbackwruiwr86 - Sep 9, 2015 / wruiwr86 - Sep 11, 2015
|School uniforms, agree or disagree? They 'save us alot of time in the morning'.
2 - I can help you with your essay. I think you should begin your essay by discussing that there are...
Writing FeedbackL33n4 - Sep 9, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 9, 2015
|Just laws and unjust laws : GRE Issue task
2 - we should backward strictly seek a reflection on how just and unjust law can be determined We should look...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Sep 8, 2015 / collegebound28 - Sep 9, 2015
|Parent should give smartphone to their school kids.
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Sep 8, 2015 / profes - Sep 9, 2015
|Human Trafficking - An Underlying Issue in Today's Society
2 - Human trafficking is a modern form of slavery involving the illegal trade of people for exploitation or commercial gain....
Writing FeedbackXYZ1356 - Sep 8, 2015 / rozha - Sep 9, 2015
|spending on health education and preventative measures (prevention is better than cure)
NEW - In wealthy countries,the focus of clinical care is changing from cure to prevention,to anticipate future diseases in currently healthy...
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