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|Chinese New Year- describe one of the special custom of your country
4 - This is well written, and gives the reader a clear picture. However, I think you should condense some...
Writing Feedbackseth - Jun 7, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jul 7, 2015
|Air leaks and heat loss in houses
3 - You use 'which' after a comma. Change 'which' to 'that' for a direct emphasis. //entire of air into...
Writing Feedbackfaarasyad - Jun 7, 2015 / vincenm - Jun 7, 2015
|CCTV and Body Scanners to improve humans safety and keep them from frauds
3 - I have suggested more changes to help you with meaning for your essay. I hope these changes will make...
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 7, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 7, 2015
|TECHNOLOGICAL TOOLS - sophisticated technology in order to prevent crimes among societies
2 - - In the mean time,(It is very unlikely that you start your essay with "In the meantime", due to...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 9, 2015
|Decisions makers should not based their choice on emotions
3 - Hello, I saw quite a few grammatical errors, so I hope that my feedback can be helpful to you!...
Writing Feedbacks61001234 - Jun 6, 2015 / BlueBabey - Jun 8, 2015
|Reducing the walking distance.
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 5, 2015 / alif - Jun 8, 2015
|People are not satisfied with their lives any more - #TOEFL my reasoning logic and language usage?
3 - - When people are doing their burdensomecomplicated jobs, they also suffer from financial pressure. - This makeresults to...
Writing FeedbackYihuan - Jun 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 6, 2015
|The idea of free universities - what is your opinion? The quality is even more important question.
5 - almost universities-> most universities in this relationship-> in this mutual relationship they need to make money to fund scholarship...
Writing Feedbackchuoi9 - Jun 5, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|Competition improve students achievements - show research in Indonesia
4 - hi muhammad, you essay is excellent. but i have suggestion for your introduction. you need to explain...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Jun 4, 2015 / alif - Jun 7, 2015
|Freedom to work and live anywhere.
6 - Recently the freedom to work and live anywhere has become the main trend due to the development of communication...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 4, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 4, 2015
|How much do drivers spend on petrol?
2 - - The line graph provides information regarding the amount of petrol spent people spent in two different countries and...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things.
3 - I don't think you should end your essay with one line. The conclusion should be at least three to...
Writing Feedbacknguyenhaai - Jun 3, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 5, 2015
|The increase of advance technology over the years is resonating around us, students.
5 - Firstly,introduction is too long,you need to write it in 40-50 words. Secondly,u add one of the idea in the...
Writing Feedbacklovejapanjapan - Jun 3, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 4, 2015
|Equal Parents Responsibility to raise their children
Writing Feedbackbisho - Jun 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 2, 2015
|The process of technology has contributed to the medical equipment and treatment; people live longer
3 - - FirstlyFirst , as the process of technology has contributed... - Moreover, current technology allows human beings' (...
Writing Feedbackpys - Jun 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 2, 2015
|Do You Think The Advantages of Medical Care Development Outshine Its Disadvantages?
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Jun 2, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 4, 2015
|The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours
NEW - The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Jun 2, 2015 / — -
|Advanced medical treatment brings longer life of human expectancy
3 - Hi Iqbal. I read your essay, and in terms of grammar and syntax, justivy has taken care of that....
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 2, 2015 / lightfox - Jun 2, 2015
|The Curse Of a Tree (deforestation)
2 - Salawieh, Your essay is written well, a little bit lengthy though, I'm not sure if you were aiming...
Writing Feedbacksalawieh - Jun 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|Trends in childrens early formal education
3 - First of all, no one can avoid that early ages isare golden ages to knowgather more knowledge. Please constrain...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 1, 2015 / Riyasat - Jun 1, 2015
|Should Formal Education be Given for Children in The Age of Four or Seven Year Old?
3 - you have some tense and grammar problems. For example "Brain development is arguably become maximal at the young...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Jun 1, 2015 / Riyasat - Jun 1, 2015
|IELTS. Scientific research. Companies or government?
Writing FeedbackMarceline - Jun 1, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Jun 2, 2015
|The frozen fish pies - details about the manufacturing presented in the diagrams.
2 - your vocabulary is good. however, i see some grammar mistakes,like "According to the diagrams,it is reveals that there are...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Jun 1, 2015 / Marceline - Jun 1, 2015
|The two diagrams provide a breakdown of producing frozen fish pies
3 - - Overall, what stands out from the diagrams revealsreveal that microwaveable container contains four mixed ingredients. - Afterwards,...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - Jun 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 1, 2015
|ADAPTING OTHER CULTURES IN THE FLAT WORLD TIME
5 - Firstly, it is necessary to distinguish what are the good or bad values of each culture are. ...
Writing Feedbacknguyenvannam - Jun 1, 2015 / niesaysi - Jun 2, 2015
|Do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate?
4 - Internet have been generalized in global village. Just my humble opinion, I found this sentence boring and you should...
Writing Feedbackkiwisuk - Jun 1, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 3, 2015
|Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them; GRE
3 - - In sumIn conclusion , I agree that society should provide talented children who lacks support and resources with...
Writing FeedbackDong Bradley - May 31, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|Choice between competition and cooperation in the student's learning.
2 - Needs work. Grammar issues abound, but I'll suggest a more clear and coherent messaging. #1 Students learn in...
Writing FeedbackHana_Nguyen - May 31, 2015 / Mustafa1991 - Jun 1, 2015
|Radio is the best way to get news, while others believe that TV is better for this purpose
6 - I think you should rewrite the introduction since this is not so interesting and no hook for me to...
Writing Feedbackhumashamsi - May 31, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 4, 2015
|Important topics in the transgender community
2 - I reviewed your 2nd paragraph. Unisex bathrooms are (is) an option that can be used; but these bathrooms are...
Writing FeedbackBraileyStahl - May 31, 2015 / Marceline - Jun 1, 2015
|Differences between Buses and Subways
3 - Hi @inicons93 Let me try to correct your writing Transportation has progressed in leaps and bounds...
Writing Feedbackinicons93 - May 30, 2015 / thutyedaniel - May 31, 2015
|Information crime rates in Newport city center in 2003 and 2010
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 30, 2015 / eddies - May 30, 2015
|Charity organizations should offer help to everyone in need.
3 - A very incitefull essay. You really did a good job analyzing the two sides of the issue.0which would further...
Writing FeedbackMarceline - May 30, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 8, 2015
|Compare/Contrast Essay - Similarities and differences between Me and my Brother
5 - Congratulations Bluebabey!!! There's no greater joy for an editor like myself than to know that I was able...
Writing FeedbackBlueBabey - May 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
|Now students have opportunities to enroll a foreign universities - enter into global competition
2 - -....to study in their own nationcountry since this made them easy towill help them achieve a high score. ...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 30, 2015 / justivy03 - May 30, 2015
|Hang it up - technological devices considered as learning tools may cause major distraction in class
Writing Feedbackchakikaki - May 30, 2015 / chakikaki - May 31, 2015
|In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country.
2 - - As such, people today seem to choose continuing their studies in abroad because of... - However, in...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|When choosing a career, financial gain should be the most important consideration.
Writing Feedbackenzymhemmung - May 30, 2015 / enzymhemmung - May 30, 2015
|Past feminist movements have boosted gender equality in the society also including universities
Writing FeedbackXexon - May 30, 2015 / Xexon - May 30, 2015
|Love and money. Which one do you think is more important in life? Explain your choice.
Writing FeedbackHana_Nguyen - May 29, 2015 / Hana_Nguyen - May 30, 2015
|American Politics Essay--Republican Rand Paul
Writing FeedbackTsukushino - May 29, 2015 / Tsukushino - May 29, 2015
|Colour is a great instrument which influence more and more consumers
3 - Hopefully, you have had some time to make some changes. I am going to be providing some more feedback....
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - May 30, 2015
|Information technology changes the way how people work today
2 - - In most cases, this change leads plenty of individuals to finish their works in workplace from their home...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|Seeking perfect work for one or different communities
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 29, 2015 / alif - Jun 7, 2015
|Wealthier modern artist than others lead government to solve the gap of both
3 - - On theAs a whole, the majority of individuals who have career in the art industry are likely easily...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 6, 2015
|Staying or Moving? A viable solution to escape from boredoms and low productivity.
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 29, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 29, 2015
|Do the benefits of workplace mobility are bigger than the demerits of those possibilities?
2 - - For instance, people seem to do their works at home because they think that it is more efficient...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 6, 2015
|The Benefits of Information Technology for Working Outshine Its Disadvantages
3 - I think your introduction need to rewrite. Please, pay attention to your question and make introduction which is...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 29, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 29, 2015
|Percentage of British people giving money to a charity.
2 - - At first glance, it is evident that the biggest contribution to charity saware people aged 36-50 in 1990....
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure
3 - Your introduction here seems going around in the circle. Please you can read more your intro. How the meaning...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 29, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 29, 2015
|Age discrimination occurs when a decision is made on the basis of a person's age.
Writing FeedbackHelp4essaY - May 28, 2015 / Help4essaY - May 29, 2015
|A Noticeable Changing in Stokeford Town Between 1930 and 2010
2 - A few points; Para 1: As two maps have been showed concern about the proposed changes in one area,...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 28, 2015 / eddies - May 28, 2015
|Information about changes in the developement of the Stokeford village during 80 years (1930-2010)
2 - Hello Mr. Iqbal, here I give some corrections on your writing. Meanwhile, in a particular location some building...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 28, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - May 28, 2015
|The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity.
3 - let me try to rewrite my essay based on your useful advice. These days, overpopulation is indeed a...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 28, 2015 / siddiqumar - May 31, 2015
|What other rewards for good work, apart from salary, are effective in encouraging further good work?
2 - Your essay is organized well, with an intro, two examples, then a conclusion. I think you should add another...
Writing FeedbackIraj33 - May 28, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 28, 2015
|Question: some people think that it is best for extended families to live together
2 - Although I was raisedgrown up in an extended family I know the advantages and disadvantages of extended family ,...
Writing FeedbackIraj33 - May 28, 2015 / siddiqumar - May 28, 2015
|Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufacturers and retail companies.
2 - - It is believed that colour is an effective way to attract thea number of customers. - Interestingly,...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|Two types of employees: long-serving employees and job-hoppers. Both have merits and demerits.
NEW - Q. Some companies prefer to hire employees who have stayed in one company for a long time. Others, on...
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|Not every child needs to learn about music, art and drama - these are sheer hobbies, not subjects
Writing FeedbackJake Do - May 27, 2015 / Jake Do - May 29, 2015
|How to minimize the levels of stress in high school students?
3 - Lets talk about your conclusion! Take apart your concluding sentence, and then write a sentence, about each idea. ...
Writing FeedbackKibaco15 - May 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 18, 2015
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