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|The diagram depicts the phases of erosion of a headland
3 - Hello Ainun, let me give you some overview for you introductory paragraph. (1) overview; you need not...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - May 7, 2015 / Anfalia - May 7, 2015
|Specified design and proper location of the wind turbines make the electrical system more efficient
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 7, 2015 / siddiqumar - May 7, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : Tourist's arrival in Nepal in March 2008
2 - Hi Mr. Alif, I have some suggestions for your writing. Good luck ! The pie chart illustrates the...
Writing Feedbackalif - May 7, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - May 7, 2015
|Communication skills within internal and external companies over a 10-year period; IELTS Task 1
2 - How valid is the survey overall, is it trustworthy? It may be worth it to add some information about...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - May 7, 2015 / Dhaliwal - May 9, 2015
|Financial contributing to the state education system by the private schools students
3 - Hi guys, I think your intro need to rework. Please, attention to task again. your introduction is not...
Writing Feedbackzoha - May 7, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 7, 2015
|Recruitment of English-language teachers in Ontario fell significantly in the 2006 and 2007
NEW - The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007. summarize the...
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|Which Communication Skills are Essential in Your Job?
2 - Try to write the introduction separate from overview. Let me try to write introductory paragraph: The table...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 7, 2015 / tiaDS - May 7, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: The invention of mobile phones brings direct and indirect effects.
3 - Hello zoha, thanks for your advise. If you cold, I expect that you can give me the example for...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - May 7, 2015 / tiaDS - May 7, 2015
|Are both schools and parents responsible for children's unhealthy lifestyle?
2 - Your ideas are good, but the use of wrong collocations makes the flow of the essay very hard. Reading...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 7, 2015 / vidya200675 - May 7, 2015
|Information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 to 2007 - the graph.
2 - The line graph gives information with regard to the percentage of teacher's recruitment according to year of graduation...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 6, 2015 / siddiqumar - May 7, 2015
|The Pros and Cons of Our University Life!
NEW - Our University Life! People who have passed their entrance examination have to face a lot of new aspects...
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|Weed, the blessing and the curse.
4 - Hi @ernymorphy Contrary to some large scale publications before, there isit is evidence that there can be long...
Writing Feedbackernymorphy - May 6, 2015 / thutyedaniel - May 7, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: Most people lives in small vilage
4 - Hi @rianristyanti With the movement of lifestyle, family life in the village is not the same experience as...
Writing Feedbackrianristyanti - May 6, 2015 / thutyedaniel - May 7, 2015
|Write a paragraph of 140 words about the sport you like most
3 - I think your short essay, is well written, for a first attempt. Just a couple of suggestions: It...
Writing Feedbacktangthidiepanh - May 5, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 9, 2015
|Analise the three of the following as media for communicating information
4 - Thanks for spotting these errors and for the positive comment on my essay. I hope I'll do well with...
Writing Feedbackcldales - May 5, 2015 / cldales - May 5, 2015
|Termination of languages is worse that many people think - it needs more attention to save them
Writing FeedbackAli55 - May 4, 2015 / thutyedaniel - May 7, 2015
|Writing Task 1-Extinction of Plant and animal species and its threats
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - May 4, 2015 / tiaDS - May 6, 2015
|Before an exam, do you think it is better to prepare for a long time or only for a few days?
3 - Finally, a long preparation would help us increase our knowledge, which is one of the most important goal in...
Writing Feedbacktomkienvn - May 4, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 5, 2015
|Extinction of some languages can cause serious problems
2 - You need to give some real life examples of how the extinction of specific languages have affected cultures throughout...
Writing Feedbacksara2016 - May 4, 2015 / thequeenbey - May 4, 2015
|I saw an adorable girl smiled at me. God.. she was Pimchanok Luevisadpaibul, Nam. Narrative writing.
Writing FeedbackKomank Sukarma - May 4, 2015 / lcturn87 - May 4, 2015
|The people will eventually lose interest in going to Cinema. Agree or disagree?
Writing FeedbackRaj44 - May 4, 2015 / Raj44 - May 4, 2015
|We lived in a world with hundreds of countries with different languages. Some of these can disappear
4 - Thank you for your actionable pieces of advice. I just started to write and I know I have lots...
Writing Feedbackrtech - May 4, 2015 / rtech - May 4, 2015
|Natural Monopoly and Its Provision
3 - I think you have gotten the wrong idea. Thailand natural monopoly is government owned or State-owned enterprises, which mean...
Writing FeedbackPann - May 4, 2015 / Pann - May 6, 2015
|Excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects writing and reading skills
5 - Hi Vidya, It is my pleasure to help. Most of the time, reading through good textbooks that you...
Writing Feedbackvidya200675 - May 4, 2015 / Pann - May 6, 2015
|Students in developed countries spend their leisure time for working or travelling
2 - Before entering university, pupils in some states usually spend their leisure time for working in part-time job or travelling...
Writing Feedbackirhame - May 3, 2015 / Pann - May 4, 2015
|Some people suggest the non-essential use of aircraft like international travel should discourage
Writing Feedbackyeungwww - May 3, 2015 / yeungwww - May 4, 2015
|Essay on why the development of nuclear power should be halted"
Writing FeedbackRybarczyk - May 3, 2015 / justivy03 - May 3, 2015
|Universities concept about gender equality among their students.
4 - Therefore Universities are unable to set the gender equality in every subject, even it creates lots of advancement in...
Writing Feedbackhsustudent89 - May 2, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 7, 2015
|How to make English lessons more successful? The teacher point of view.
8 - I think that you should explain to your teacher that you received help with your English grammar and punctuation...
Writing Feedbackalmani - May 2, 2015 / ChristineB - May 8, 2015
|My development from childhood was a narrow & curvy course...
2 - I helped you with this essay by looking at each paragraph. Follow along in each paragraph as I suggest...
Writing Feedbackdombo88 - May 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - May 1, 2015
|University as an exclusive place for those who marked as an outstanding student
Writing Feedbackarizkis - May 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - May 1, 2015
|It is believed by most of people that work is the main part of their adult life
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - May 1, 2015 / Adhisti - May 3, 2015
|How much the number of older people in Sweden, USA and Japan is growing? Graph.
3 - I'm unsure if you have to mention that the line graph represents those 65 and over. There are a...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - May 4, 2015
|Water Consumption in Agricultural, Domestic, and Industrial Sector
3 - Thankyou Mr. Farhan for your corrections. I'm sorry for that wrong picture, I will be more carefull next time....
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 1, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - May 2, 2015
|Exerting consumers' interest to purchase over products by advertisements
2 - With regard to selected marketing of companies, advertisement helps companies to reach their targets in selling more the number...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 1, 2015 / Adhisti - May 1, 2015
|Should teenagers work or travel for a year between finishing and starting university studies?
2 - Your essay is a well-written one. So, I going to point out only some small mistakes. First of...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 1, 2015 / Vns9x - May 1, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : The village of Stokerford (Map)
2 - I hope you can make these changes to explain the diagram better. 1st paragraph: Change replace to replacement....
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - May 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - May 1, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Animal testing becomes public debate
2 - Therefore, I strongly believe that both arguments have different perspectives in terms of animal testing. You don't really...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - May 1, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 3, 2015
|A memory of an old man
3 - Hello Lakia. I am not writing for any academic evaluation. I've found there's something in writing "correctly" that...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - May 1, 2015 / Rajiv - May 1, 2015
|TOEFL: A/G It is better to do work by machine than by hand.
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Apr 30, 2015 / ah_zafari - May 2, 2015
|Increasing wider horizons by working or travelling before learning at university
NEW - Good preparation before starting university studies is considered as an important activity for students. As such, lots of countries...
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|Young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year. Agree or Disagree?
3 - Therefore, I personally believe that this approach would give significant impacts for students. Your intro needs a stronger...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 30, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 14, 2015
|Is It Worth for Sport Players to Earn Great Deal More Money than People in Other Profession?
3 - Hello Stacy. I had a pleasant time reading your essay. Thank you for you efforts~ Your essay is very...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 30, 2015 / kibz95 - Apr 30, 2015
|People in a host country should accept the diverse customs and behavior of the visitors
Writing Feedbackcldales - Apr 30, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Apr 30, 2015
|University students should be mandated to classes - it improves their grades and disciplines them
NEW - Thank you in advance, I hope you have a pleasant time reading this and by all means, say anything...
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|The percentage of reasons for study and employer support based on different ages of people
NEW - The charts give information regarding the reasons for study according to age of students and the number of employer...
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|The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - Apr 30, 2015 / Firda Umairoh - Apr 30, 2015
|Is talent gotten since a person was born?
2 - Hello Amir, Your arguments, examples, and your personal opinions are quite lacking in this essay. I understand there is...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 29, 2015 / kibz95 - Apr 30, 2015
|IELTS: Overweight and Diminish healthy caused by Overworking and Financial support.What is solution?
NEW - In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing....
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|Parents have best recognition about their children, they teach without connivance the basic things
3 - Parents teach their children without any connivance .Anyone knows that parents are the best supporter of their children. They...
Writing FeedbackGunner13 - Apr 29, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 29, 2015
|The view of a high payouts received by sports professionals and its perception by the society
NEW - Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think...
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|The fixed punishment won't be as effective as a shock therapy to prevent a criminal actions
NEW - Topic: Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that...
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|The responsibility of sharing wealth in rich countries
2 - The first reason justifying for my standpoint is the huge benefit offerd to recipient countries. CORRECTED: The first...
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Apr 29, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 3, 2015
|Fixed punishment is becoming debatable issue over recent years
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 29, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 29, 2015
|What should be taken into account when deciding on the punishment?
NEW - Hello Fellas, In this essay, I am dealing with Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammar. Please...
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|The proportion of boy and girl students at schools
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 28, 2015 / vmtct - Apr 28, 2015
|This illustrates how much of goods were distributed in the UK from 1974 to 2004
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 28, 2015 / eddies - Apr 28, 2015
|The high school students should work because it provides priceless experiences in work and life
3 - Hello Chirstine, Thank you for your post, being a contributor, I'm sure you are quite busy reading and editing...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Apr 28, 2015 / kibz95 - Apr 30, 2015
|Essay University of Les Roches Hotel management School, Characteristics of an efficient Manager.
3 - You ended your essay with a quote in lieu of a paragraph, and you have only two paragraphs in...
Writing Feedbacksylvia2626 - Apr 28, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 28, 2015
|Food We Consume on a daily basis
NEW - Food We Consume One fast food hamburger contains meat from up to one hundred different cows. Knowing this...
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