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|The child labour ielts essay - working at a young age should never be encouraged
3 - Haibg, I have some suggestions for you.. There are some mistakes that have you made like grammatical errors...
Writing Feedbackhaibg - Apr 16, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 17, 2015
|Issue with sponsoring problematic scientific researches
NEW - Hello, please help to evaluate my essay. If possible, please grade it on the 6 point scale. Thank you...
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|Life cycle of the silkworms - how to produce the silk cloth from their cocoons?
2 - Your essay has plethora of grammatical errors, which make the essay difficult to be fathomed. I suggest that you...
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015 / dunguyen - Apr 16, 2015
|The host country should welcome cultural differences but people have to follow the local behavior
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015 / sblack - Apr 16, 2015
|Parents have an important role to choose their children profession but kids are more independent now
NEW - You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. Write about the following topic:...
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|Outers influence native culture - foreigners may face difficulties to pick local customs up.
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 16, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015
|Is foreign language important for children? When to start teaching them?
2 - Hello Mr. Irham, I have some correction. Hope it will help you :) ... an obligation for whole...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 16, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - Apr 16, 2015
|The figure of household internet access in different areas in a European country
2 - Please note the following: regarding = on European country = just state the country it can clearly be seen...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 16, 2015 / cldales - Apr 16, 2015
|The Proportion of Degrees Granted Over Two Decades
7 - Hi Stacy,,I have a bit suggestion for you :) However,in 2000, saw a slight increase2000 saw a slight...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 16, 2015 / Adhisti - Apr 18, 2015
|I believe that host country must welcome an other behavior of foreign visitors.
NEW - Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that...
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|It is important for host country to keep their culture identical (IELTS TASK 2)
NEW - I need some corrections in my essay here... Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow...
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|Should students as young as fourteen be allowed to hold jobs?
2 - Hi phana .. I am tremendously enthusiastic about your writing, but let me give you some suggestion here ...
Writing Feedbackphanna - Apr 16, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 16, 2015
|'computer science is higher than other majors over the period' - National University fields degrees
2 - The pie chartsI see, there are three pie charts illustrates the information about the degrees granted ... Medicine and...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 16, 2015
|Pie charts on the degrees granted at National University; computer science is the highest proportion
3 - Hi Irham..I have some suggestions for you.. Three pie charts compare levels of granted in several different subjects among...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 16, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 16, 2015
|The budget of staying averages in two different towns as compared to the national cost-of-living
4 - Please include the picture of the graph, as it helps us understand what the graph is about. I have...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 16, 2015 / eddies - Apr 16, 2015
|The chart below shows the cost-of-living averages in two different cities
2 - ... Health care, and Clothing are higher than other activities (sector) with the percentage at ... Then, The percentage...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 16, 2015
|The improvement of technology, transportation, communication and infrastucture in the last 100 years
4 - You could write a good essay but take note of the following things: 1. Proofread. Always read your...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 16, 2015 / Anushka - Apr 16, 2015
|Degrees granted of some subject in the National University during 1990 and 2010
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 16, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015
|The United States is continuously facing illegal immigration problems - Argumentative Essay
NEW - I had to write an argumentative paper and I chose to write about immigration. I need help developing my...
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|Cost of Living Average in Riverdale and in Cape Alicia
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 15, 2015 / eddies - Apr 16, 2015
|Sat - Should we hold on to the old when innovations are available, or should we simply move forward?
2 - CORRECTIONS; - Some see printed books as dusty remnants from the preelectronic (PRE ELECTRONIC) age. - Since the dawn...
Writing Feedbackamytsai - Apr 15, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 16, 2015
|Writing task 2 : Encouraging young people to work or travel
3 - Begin your essay with the topic sentence. Then collect ideas about how this helps young people (adavantages) and write...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 15, 2015 / jomi - Apr 16, 2015
|Should fresh graduates continue their study to the next level?
2 - Critics to thisthe idea of postbaccalaureate program claim that young people who start their career soon after graduation may...
Writing FeedbackImaduddinnst - Apr 15, 2015 / lightfox - Apr 15, 2015
|Scholar-leavers tend to be less focus on their subject - work or travel for a year between studying?
3 - In addition, traveling can improve students' language skills. As an obvious example, students who travel to foreign country can...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 15, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015
|Once people could breath in a fresh air, their life was greater than todays convenience life.
3 - Hello Stacy, I have marked some points. Here are they; Para 1: the common benefit that we found on...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 15, 2015 / eddies - Apr 15, 2015
|The youngsters should use their opportunities to travel or work wisely - it might help to find a job
3 - I suggest stating young people throughout the essay since this is the essay question. However, you may use youngster...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 15, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 15, 2015
|The bar chart gives information regarding to the percentage of reason
2 - Farhan, your analysis is good, its detailed, just be mindful of your word usage, grammar and sentence construction such...
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 15, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 15, 2015
|IELTS TASK: Continue further education, or work?
Writing Feedbackasrhkmtn - Apr 15, 2015 / eddies - Apr 15, 2015
|Writing task 2 : Advertising leads people to purchase unnecessary products
4 - The aforementioned evidence reveals that although some advertising may become useful valuevaluable for people, people should be selective finding...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 14, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 15, 2015
|IELTS essay; as long as we want to live in a free society, the freedom of speech should be respected
7 - Sorry for the spelling error, I was typing too fast. You wrote that the government should "restrict" the right...
Writing Feedbackmonikan19 - Apr 14, 2015 / sblack - Apr 20, 2015
|Combine studying with playing in education children is necessary
Writing Feedbacktamnguyen - Apr 14, 2015 / EF_Carol - Apr 15, 2015
|The Influences of High sales to the advertisement and people attracting (IELTS Task 2)
2 - First of all, I would say that a prompt in IELTS plays an important role in leading readers' understanding....
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 14, 2015 / eddies - Apr 14, 2015
|The table provides the information which city is more expensive: Riverdale or Cape Alicia
4 - You didn't discuss a 7% percent figure in healthcare in the city of Riverdale. You only state the 7%...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 14, 2015
|With regard to the average of living cost in two different cities
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 14, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015
|You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. Write about the following
3 - To sum up, it seems that people lived in these days is better than one hundred years ago<------repetition (you...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 14, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 15, 2015
|Being better life by advanced technology (IELTS Task 2)
2 - With regarding to live in the past, almost people used limited facilities. For example, if young people in wanted...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 14, 2015 / mohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015
|Advertising is known as the predominant factor which influence the high sales of popular stuff
3 - Change the word stuff to goods in this essay. This will help the reader to understand that you are...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 14, 2015
|Life now is better than it was 100 years ago though people in the past were able to enjoy their time
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015
|People's lives are the result of the choices they make - examples in people and in the literature.
Writing Feedbackamytsai - Apr 14, 2015 / tamnguyen - Apr 17, 2015
|Traditional cultures of countries will be lost as technology develops (agree/disagree)
2 - No one would deny that the advancement of technology havehas immensely changed the way of people's lives, including traditional...
Writing Feedbackeunkokoko - Apr 14, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 14, 2015
|Nowadays nothing is private: our culture has become too confessional and self-expressive.
Writing FeedbackAnushka - Apr 14, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Apr 16, 2015
|People are difficult to permit their children to travel or doing work - IELTS
2 - I think that your intro need to rework, Teenagers are supported to travel to other countries before entering...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Apr 14, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Apr 16, 2015
|Living in a comfortable apartment is always a good choice and the same applies to univerity students
3 - Actually i don't know that students can decide if they would like to live in a dormitory or an...
Writing FeedbackRafiq24 - Apr 13, 2015 / Rafiq24 - Apr 14, 2015
|IELTS Task - showing that learning a foreign language already at primary school is more beneficial
NEW - Topic: Some experts believe that is better for children to begin learning foreign language at primary school rather than...
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|The advertisement gives influence toward the increasing number of popular consumers of the goods
3 - Without a doubt, people now live in a consumer culture(repetition) . They are influenced quickly to buy some needs(if...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Apr 13, 2015 / ah_zafari - Apr 13, 2015
|There is alot of things which worries me and the scholarschip would be a key to my "golden gate"
Writing Feedbackthuyhien1801 - Apr 12, 2015 / Adhisti - Apr 13, 2015
|Maroon and Grey - "two page descriptive essay of a place without using I"
2 - 1st paragraph: Do you have to use the words maroon and grey in this essay? Place a comma between...
Writing Feedbackjricha - Apr 12, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 12, 2015
|The producing and developing of phones have some positive and negative features
3 - thank you so much for your feedback and yes ı had misspelled the "i".. actually, ı was going to...
Writing Feedbacktomurcuk - Apr 12, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 13, 2015
|The amount of water use in 3 sector, and 2 different countries.
2 - some suggestions for your writing : In order to make a good introduction, you should begin with one...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015
|How might the advantages of studying in another country outweigh the disadvantages?
3 - I think you cannot even write "However' in the first paragraph, since there is no contrast opinion. With this...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 13, 2015
|The number of kilometers of route and passengers per year of railway system in six different cities
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 12, 2015
|Ten-year summary on the amount of online sales for the New Zealand's retail sectors
3 - Stacy, a closer look at the slight improvement on the overview and the first topic sentence I have made....
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 16, 2015
|Should people invent a new language?
2 - *Having united language areis an important element for universal language... *such as people must pay a course and...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 12, 2015
|Knowledge about some country lifestyle and culture helps to learn a language of this area
2 - Hallo Ms. Thuty..I have some suggesstions for you.. Here we go.. In order to learn a language well,...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 12, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015
|Writing Task 2 - some university students should only study one specialist subject
3 - Answer: Over recent years specialist subject at university is becoming debatable issue in higher education ministry. Some people...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 12, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|Information about the number of entries on a two new music websites
2 - The line graph gives information about the number of visitor of two new music websites include Music Choice and...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 13, 2015
|Balanced proportion of male and female in further education should not be applied.
2 - 1st paragraph: Make term plural in the first sentence. Explain what you mean by same proportion in gender. Are...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 12, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 12, 2015
|Expenditure and amount of consumption on fast food in Britain during twenty years (the last century)
2 - Paragraph 1 corrections: The charts illustrate the expenditure on fast food by earning level group in pence per...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015 / cldales - Apr 12, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1: Causes of Worldwide land degradation (Pie Chart and Table)
4 - Thanks Mr.eddies.. that's nice corrections for me to improve my writing skills. I should be grateful if you would...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 13, 2015
|Two charts, one result in the survey of adult education; Writing task 1
3 - The two of the charts below present for publishing a survey youngster education with the first chart (you need...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 12, 2015 / Anfalia - Apr 12, 2015
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