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|Knowledge from teachers, not from internet or TV? IELTS essay - Learning Resources
3 - I think you conclusion paragraph could use some revision. From your last sentence, it looks like the goal of...
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 23, 2015 / dquinlan11 - Mar 4, 2015
|HOW COLOUR CAN EFFECT PEOPLE'S FEELING
3 - Colour is basic substances which can be possibly fast caught by eyes. For this reason, some experts have a...
Writing FeedbackPutri - Feb 23, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 27, 2015
|Universities' aims should provide more opportunities for students to study their own shake
3 - There are some ways to polish your flow sentences; using personal pronoun, synonyms, cohesive devices; but you have...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Feb 23, 2015 / tiaDS - Feb 23, 2015
|Study once specialist subject or a series of subjects in universitiy
6 - More attention should be paid on how universities provide a subject in their curriculum. Ordinary people think that college...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Feb 23, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 27, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: work for the same organization all their working life
2 - Hi, you addressed the topic well, but you have quite a few errors in your sentence structures and word...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 22, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 22, 2015
|I wish to still attend classes together with my friends; to ease the pressure and burden of studying
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|Money is a loyal servant or a cruel master; it depends on the way that you use and consider it.
Writing Feedbacktuanbmt987 - Feb 22, 2015 / hunhann - Feb 26, 2015
|Drawing from the themes of a prompt - Hope
2 - Hi LeighV! Your essay raises a number of thoughts and question for me, which I hope (ha!) you...
Writing FeedbackLeighV - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 22, 2015
|'I just want to let you know that I moved to a new house' - Letter to a friend - IELTS
4 - Hi Trina! I hope you are doing well. (See how I used your sentence there? :) I'm EF_Season and...
Writing Feedbacktrina - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 24, 2015
|Essay about investment on art and culture - IELTS task 2
5 - thanks very much, guys i took all your notes in consideration and i will work more on them. Hope...
Writing Feedbackgondam7 - Feb 21, 2015 / gondam7 - Feb 21, 2015
|Growing numbers of people send their offspring to study in other countries - it has its detractors
2 - Really good essay! You do a good job of drawing on your experience (especially with the example of your...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Alyssa - Feb 21, 2015
|World's population has peaked at a geometric rate in this day and age. IELTS WRITING TASK II
4 - You can mention some statistical data like- India population is going to increase by 40% by 2050 and the...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 21, 2015 / vidhyamouli - Mar 4, 2015
|What is the worst job in the world ?
2 - Hi huongkhoi1708! Your essay leaves me with a number of questions and leaves me wondering if, perhaps, you might...
Writing Feedbackhuongkhoi1708 - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|Almost all things and thoughts have both benefits and drawbacks - attractions visitors
3 - Hi Bob brother! The first question I have is about your thesis. You write, "this attitude will be...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: increasing number of people are suffering from health problems
3 - Thank you so much. It really helps me. I think I should rewrite this essay. Thanks for your suggestion....
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 21, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 21, 2015
|Growing up in a big city can have lots of benefits, such as schools, experiences; City vs Rural area
3 - Hi Vns9x! First, I'd suggest going through your essay to find spelling errors. One example is "An urban...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 20, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|The rush exchange information is monopolized by media nowadays
3 - Hi Akhfan, Allow me to give comments and suggestion for your writing. Overall, your writing is good whereas I...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Feb 20, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 21, 2015
|Thus far today, the world has been just like a small country with hyper
6 - What about your first paragraph truly leads you into the idea of "teamwork?" Might there be a different way...
Writing Feedbackhungnguyen278 - Feb 20, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|Parents vital role in controlling their children attitude about food preferences and lifestyles
3 - Obesity is nowconsidered( has been and now are two different words that describe time, I would suggest sticking to...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Feb 20, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Feb 20, 2015
|Although studying hard is important, doing physical activity is as important as studying.
3 - Hi vns9x.. You're right.. I forgot to count my words, though. But, both my first body and second...
Writing FeedbackBambusaMX - Feb 20, 2015 / BambusaMX - Feb 20, 2015
|IELTS task 1: Unpaid works and people who squander time on them!
2 - This is very good! Your analysis is very clear. I've just recommended a few changes in the wording, to...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 20, 2015 / EF_Alyssa - Feb 20, 2015
|The improvement of the world's population every year becomes the most significant concern.
3 - Hi AinunAlfatih, I would like to give you some suggestions and comments, GRAMMATICAL ERRORS "of"...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Feb 20, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 21, 2015
|There are many different type of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional
2 - Hi there, let me share some points In the present[,] [we can hear] vari[ous] [type] of music can...
Writing FeedbackRsu141 - Feb 20, 2015 / masktaz - Feb 20, 2015
|IELTS task 2: Government alone cannot defeat the climate change!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 19, 2015 / trina - Feb 22, 2015
|TELL ME ABOUT YOUR FAVORITE TV PROGRAMME ?
5 - HI huongkoi1708! Since EF_Alyssa already helped you with the grammar and syntax, I thought I might touch on...
Writing Feedbackhuongkhoi1708 - Feb 19, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|There are some huge gaps between male and female regarding teaching - IELTS
4 - I don't worry about the body of your paragraph. however, in the introduction, you need to tell about what...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 19, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 2, 2015
|Create proper environment, which would help children foster the sense of competition and cooperation
2 - having considered the respective benefits of them, I believe both of them are essential for our children's future,as they...
Writing Feedbackbeyondmtk - Feb 19, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 19, 2015
|Choosing the custom of the place you live, and your own custom, has always been a polemical topic.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 19, 2015 / masktaz - Feb 19, 2015
|The swift expansion, emergence of industries and businesses, made urban areas become more cramped
4 - I would respectfully disagree with Vns9x - to me the essay is asking for your opinion, what else would...
Writing Feedbackanhminh3105 - Feb 19, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 27, 2015
|Why do you think people are drawn to take drugs. Opinion essay
2 - Utilising any kind of drugs an issue, which frequently generates a great deal of heated debate. this essay will...
Writing Feedbackturgutkhanova - Feb 18, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 19, 2015
|IELTS: ASDA supermarket and its reasons! Close to home, good reputation, 24-hour shopping, etc.
2 - Overall, this is well-written. However, I notice a minor problem The figure for Parking facilities seems to...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 18, 2015 / eddies - Feb 19, 2015
|Medical treatments, fast communication, great transportation - technology make our lives easier
2 - Your introduction seems to be bizarre. 1. You need to rephrase the prompt in the beginning and list your...
Writing Feedbackkoshima - Feb 18, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 18, 2015
|Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution and airport construction.
3 - In addition, The first part this sounds weird maybe community would be a better word choice offers that government...
Writing Feedbackmiloman - Feb 18, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 19, 2015
|Some individuals consider to eat outdoors while others choose home dishes. Which is better?
4 - I will continue where Vns9x left off. Also, in your intro, eating is not really a hobby, although maybe...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Feb 18, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 18, 2015
|IELTS: multinational companies are supporting our life, in lieu of ruining it.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 18, 2015 / tantadedanaan - Feb 18, 2015
|Everything has two sides and Gasoline cars are not an exception.
3 - Hi there! 1. When you write an introductory statement especially with this type of question, it is important...
Writing Feedbackwaliedf - Feb 18, 2015 / tantadedanaan - Feb 18, 2015
|Education and its statistics. Breakdown information of the entrance in different Technology Colleges
2 - Much of this report sounded odd to me, as you were talking about numbers and "certificate", "diploma", and "bachelor"...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 17, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 18, 2015
|World population growth will be at the highest point in the near future; IELTS
3 - The topic is timely and you have a good bit of information to get started. Rather than beginning the...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 17, 2015 / EF_Stacey - Feb 19, 2015
|Managing money from the early age - saving money makes prestige for children. IELTS
2 - My father always says to me that spend your money for lousier activities. Though, words cannot express my gratitude...
Writing Feedbacksmakmp - Feb 16, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 16, 2015
|Both artists and scientists have immensely underpinned our society, since they first emerged. IELTS
2 - Hi, I thought your essay was pretty clear and had some good content, but maybe you are trying a...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 16, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 18, 2015
|Do you prefer to start working on a presentation you'll have next month or postpone it to last days?
2 - with several lectures during their school days. I am not sure whether lectures exist in the school. deal with...
Writing FeedbackMinooo - Feb 16, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 16, 2015
|Female and male and their ages; which group watch TV more? IELTS task 1
2 - Hi there! Your introduction was great, but I think you should start it with the word "The" like...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 16, 2015 / tantadedanaan - Feb 17, 2015
|People should travel inside their country first - for easy deal with the locals and familiarity gain
Writing Feedbacktarak23 - Feb 16, 2015 / tarak23 - Feb 17, 2015
|Playing games is fun only when you win. (No. The game always gives you incredible things in life.)
2 - Playing game is a way to take away stresses , exercise, and improve your skill. However, some people agree...
Writing Feedbackdhanialfan - Feb 15, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 16, 2015
|Space Exploration versus basic human needs. Which is more important?
2 - You did not really develop your reasons very fully. I think adding some specific examples would be a good...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Feb 15, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 15, 2015
|Television and its powerful influences; can simultaneously benefit and ruin our cultural development
3 - "Television has always been thea tool, whichthat can easily influence many societiessociety . It is perfectly understandablereasonable, consideringsince most...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 15, 2015 / wonderland - Feb 15, 2015
|Why museums are visited by tourists more than locals?
2 - This essay, therefore, is in identifying the main causes of the latter issue and finding ways to motivate local...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 14, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 15, 2015
|The birth of computer and its fast paced development could influence our lives in different ways.
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 14, 2015 / tantadedanaan - Feb 15, 2015
|Japan was the leader when it comes annual income and life expectancy - IELTS table
2 - Hello, a few grammar suggestions have been made below. IfWhen analyzed, thehistorical data suggests that Japan was the...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 14, 2015 / EF_Sheri - Feb 17, 2015
|The benefits of living in the contemporary world! We used to squander hours on preparing our foods.
2 - "Foods used to be an issue for people, since our people did not knowbecause they were unaware of how...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 14, 2015 / wonderland - Feb 15, 2015
|Obesity in modern society - people are lacking a healthy diet and getting fatter. IELTS
2 - Buddy, you will definitely be able to exceed your band 5 in writing. Anyways, here are some suggestions for...
Writing Feedbackmymai14493 - Feb 14, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 14, 2015
|Each year the university managers allocate the budget among different activities at the school
3 - Hello Thanks for reading my essay. 1. Do you have any suggestion to rephrase this "in this way...
Writing Feedbackvahid11 - Feb 14, 2015 / vahid11 - Feb 14, 2015
|The global issues about taking job or traveling than go to university directly IELTS TASK 2
2 - that makes a sense ( i have no clues whether this beginning will work, but i would recommend you...
Writing FeedbackBrian Trinanda - Feb 14, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 14, 2015
|Number of companies that are selling their products worldwide is increasing - globalization effects
2 - Secondly, High quality products will be available at cheaper price. Secondly,high quality products.... Correct me if i am wrong....
Writing Feedbacktushartawanee - Feb 13, 2015 / Sherlockzz - Feb 14, 2015
|Manufactured products reached a peak just under 45 mln, whilst others deteriorated dramatically
2 - Your essay needs some works. 1. Your introduction should not contain any specific information such as Manufactured products 23-34...
Writing FeedbackMukhammad Ali - Feb 13, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 14, 2015
|IELTS: The first diagram exhibits the way the structure produces its electricity
2 - The first diagramexhibits the way the structure produces its electricity is by having a wave as the source...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 13, 2015 / vahid11 - Feb 14, 2015
|Worst criminals in our society. Murderers and their destiny! IELTS task 2
2 - Hi, Vns9x, I didn't think this one was that convincing. I don't think murderers are more likely to escape...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 13, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 14, 2015
|As the day goes by, the increasing of crime rate has never been stopped
2 - Along with this new condition, gradually Police can be a good figure for the society, be a hero for...
Writing FeedbackBrian Trinanda - Feb 13, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 13, 2015
|Happiness period varies from person to person and from society to society (Teenage vs Adulthood)
2 - This essay will discuss both ages and then it will form an opinion based on those points. This sentence...
Writing Feedbackizhar - Feb 13, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 13, 2015
|Human expression; art-based subjects should be compulsory in the curriculum - IELTS TASK 2
2 - Hi, I thought your essay was pretty good and I think your structure could be effective. But you need...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 13, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 13, 2015
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