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|The cool night breeze whistled softly, blowing lightly through my hair
5 - Hello maddy1579, I'm having a little trouble following what's happening here. From what I can understand, the narrator is...
Writing Feedbackmaddy1579 - Mar 3, 2015 / dquinlan11 - Mar 7, 2015
|Car ownership, public transport and environment protection - Ielts2
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 3, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 3, 2015
|Ageing population worldwide in 2000 and predictions for 2050. IELTS-1
2 - "Overall, the number of elderly people is expected to grow in all parts of the world, with the world...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 3, 2015 / audley - Mar 3, 2015
|Sports unite peoples from different corners of the world. IELTS TASK 2.
2 - Sports unite peoples from different corners of the world. From this persona l perspective, it iscan be said that...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 2, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 2, 2015
|History creates value and shapes our life. For this reason law is available to protect old buildings
NEW - Many old buildings are protected by law because they are part of nation's history. However, some people think old...
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|Electricity transfers from high voltage cables into transformer station - one of several stages
2 - Hi! This diagram illustrates the process of water-produced for electricitygenerating electricity using moving water (I'm afraid you can't say...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 2, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Mar 3, 2015
|IELTS - governments subsidize museums, theaters and other arts, and it concerns many people.
3 - Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 2, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 2, 2015
|I do not agree to follow the same curriculum through all that period of time; GRE essay
7 - Thank you for your comments Anfalia, I will definitely make use of all comments to better my essay....
Writing FeedbackBarrera77 - Mar 1, 2015 / Barrera77 - Mar 5, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 1, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 5, 2015
|New discoveries benefits - for instance students can extend their knowledge from the internet
2 - In the past 100 years there are many useful discoveries, such as computer, mobile phone and many other inventions....
Writing FeedbackRinzo - Mar 1, 2015 / LoveNYU - Mar 1, 2015
|Event to reduce a tension between ASEAN students, which promoted tolerance and reconciliation
3 - thank you very much for your suggestion, however, I hope you can give me an example and underline my...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Mar 1, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 4, 2015
|My question - "What make you obtain your achievement?" - meeting with a famous person
2 - Hi hallohello! I'm EF_Season and I'm here to help you with your essay today! First, you've chosen a great...
Writing Feedbackhallohello - Feb 28, 2015 / EF_Season - Mar 1, 2015
|Exams as a way to measure students' ability
3 - Nowadays cheating on exams is commonplace; therefore it is not uncommon for students who do not do well in...
Writing Feedbackjoyceylyne - Feb 28, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Mar 2, 2015
|IELTS writing task 2: Fixed punishments or the circumstances of an individual crime.
4 - Hi tantadedanaan, These are my suggestions for your writing: Nowadays, one of the major problems around the...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Feb 28, 2015 / mumtazdinar - Mar 1, 2015
|Good friends are as valuable as pearls in life; TOEFL essay
5 - Prompt Strking backward to your prompt.I am afraid that this may not in linearly related. Based...
Writing Feedbackvahid11 - Feb 28, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 3, 2015
|Video surveillance has become common place in many countries to reduce crime
5 - Hi anhminh3105, These are several suggestions for your writing: 1. You stated "true" in the first...
Writing Feedbackanhminh3105 - Feb 27, 2015 / mumtazdinar - Mar 1, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years
2 - They use it frequently for having trips people commuting by car Admittedly, the allowance to pay higher tax...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 27, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Feb 27, 2015
|"Doing it like a girl" - My summary analysis of #likeagirl commercial
3 - Just a suggestion:) The purpose of the commercial is to encourage girls, especially young ones to keep doing what...
Writing Feedbackahmedissa - Feb 26, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Feb 26, 2015
|In every learning environment is at least one boisterous student with some behavioural problems.
2 - Hi, here are my suggestions. Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy...
Writing Feedbackjaclynjaclyn97 - Feb 26, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 27, 2015
|We shouldn't ignore the underlying danger of spending great amount of time practicing sport; TOEFL
3 - Dear Alleb, Thank you soooo much for such patient and careful review for my poor essay! Your suggestions are...
Writing Feedbacklinglinzhang - Feb 26, 2015 / linglinzhang - Feb 26, 2015
|People perceive change in different ways. Is it always for the better or not? Is vital for our lives
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Feb 26, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Feb 27, 2015
|In order to produce a good movie for the audience, the film industry needs to push to their limits
2 - Well, I think that you need to write your prompt completely, so I know what is the purpose of...
Writing Feedbackhuongkhoi1708 - Feb 25, 2015 / eddies - Feb 25, 2015
|Calculator in School? It is more important to build basic arithmetic skills without using this tool.
NEW - Some people believe that electronic should not be allowed in school until after the pupils have mastered mental arithmetic....
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|Getting excellent grade in school or university is one of the ways to achieve bright future.
2 - Hello, my suggestions and edits are below:) Make this your first paragraph... Education and a great life are...
Writing FeedbackIndahSatria - Feb 24, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Feb 24, 2015
|TASK 2 : I argue that the state should pay the course fee at univesities for us
Writing FeedbackZihni92 - Feb 23, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 23, 2015
|Knowledge from teachers, not from internet or TV? IELTS essay - Learning Resources
3 - I think you conclusion paragraph could use some revision. From your last sentence, it looks like the goal of...
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 23, 2015 / dquinlan11 - Mar 4, 2015
|HOW COLOUR CAN EFFECT PEOPLE'S FEELING
3 - Colour is basic substances which can be possibly fast caught by eyes. For this reason, some experts have a...
Writing FeedbackPutri - Feb 23, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 27, 2015
|Universities' aims should provide more opportunities for students to study their own shake
3 - There are some ways to polish your flow sentences; using personal pronoun, synonyms, cohesive devices; but you have...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Feb 23, 2015 / tiaDS - Feb 23, 2015
|Study once specialist subject or a series of subjects in universitiy
6 - More attention should be paid on how universities provide a subject in their curriculum. Ordinary people think that college...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Feb 23, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 27, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: work for the same organization all their working life
2 - Hi, you addressed the topic well, but you have quite a few errors in your sentence structures and word...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 22, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 22, 2015
|I wish to still attend classes together with my friends; to ease the pressure and burden of studying
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Feb 22, 2015 / — -
|Money is a loyal servant or a cruel master; it depends on the way that you use and consider it.
Writing Feedbacktuanbmt987 - Feb 22, 2015 / hunhann - Feb 26, 2015
|Drawing from the themes of a prompt - Hope
2 - Hi LeighV! Your essay raises a number of thoughts and question for me, which I hope (ha!) you...
Writing FeedbackLeighV - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 22, 2015
|'I just want to let you know that I moved to a new house' - Letter to a friend - IELTS
4 - Hi Trina! I hope you are doing well. (See how I used your sentence there? :) I'm EF_Season and...
Writing Feedbacktrina - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 24, 2015
|Essay about investment on art and culture - IELTS task 2
5 - thanks very much, guys i took all your notes in consideration and i will work more on them. Hope...
Writing Feedbackgondam7 - Feb 21, 2015 / gondam7 - Feb 21, 2015
|Growing numbers of people send their offspring to study in other countries - it has its detractors
2 - Really good essay! You do a good job of drawing on your experience (especially with the example of your...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Alyssa - Feb 21, 2015
|World's population has peaked at a geometric rate in this day and age. IELTS WRITING TASK II
4 - You can mention some statistical data like- India population is going to increase by 40% by 2050 and the...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 21, 2015 / vidhyamouli - Mar 4, 2015
|What is the worst job in the world ?
2 - Hi huongkhoi1708! Your essay leaves me with a number of questions and leaves me wondering if, perhaps, you might...
Writing Feedbackhuongkhoi1708 - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|Almost all things and thoughts have both benefits and drawbacks - attractions visitors
3 - Hi Bob brother! The first question I have is about your thesis. You write, "this attitude will be...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Feb 21, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: increasing number of people are suffering from health problems
3 - Thank you so much. It really helps me. I think I should rewrite this essay. Thanks for your suggestion....
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 21, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 21, 2015
|Growing up in a big city can have lots of benefits, such as schools, experiences; City vs Rural area
3 - Hi Vns9x! First, I'd suggest going through your essay to find spelling errors. One example is "An urban...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 20, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|The rush exchange information is monopolized by media nowadays
3 - Hi Akhfan, Allow me to give comments and suggestion for your writing. Overall, your writing is good whereas I...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Feb 20, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 21, 2015
|Thus far today, the world has been just like a small country with hyper
6 - What about your first paragraph truly leads you into the idea of "teamwork?" Might there be a different way...
Writing Feedbackhungnguyen278 - Feb 20, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|Parents vital role in controlling their children attitude about food preferences and lifestyles
3 - Obesity is nowconsidered( has been and now are two different words that describe time, I would suggest sticking to...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Feb 20, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Feb 20, 2015
|Although studying hard is important, doing physical activity is as important as studying.
3 - Hi vns9x.. You're right.. I forgot to count my words, though. But, both my first body and second...
Writing FeedbackBambusaMX - Feb 20, 2015 / BambusaMX - Feb 20, 2015
|IELTS task 1: Unpaid works and people who squander time on them!
2 - This is very good! Your analysis is very clear. I've just recommended a few changes in the wording, to...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 20, 2015 / EF_Alyssa - Feb 20, 2015
|The improvement of the world's population every year becomes the most significant concern.
3 - Hi AinunAlfatih, I would like to give you some suggestions and comments, GRAMMATICAL ERRORS "of"...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Feb 20, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 21, 2015
|There are many different type of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional
2 - Hi there, let me share some points In the present[,] [we can hear] vari[ous] [type] of music can...
Writing FeedbackRsu141 - Feb 20, 2015 / masktaz - Feb 20, 2015
|IELTS task 2: Government alone cannot defeat the climate change!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 19, 2015 / trina - Feb 22, 2015
|TELL ME ABOUT YOUR FAVORITE TV PROGRAMME ?
5 - HI huongkoi1708! Since EF_Alyssa already helped you with the grammar and syntax, I thought I might touch on...
Writing Feedbackhuongkhoi1708 - Feb 19, 2015 / EF_Season - Feb 21, 2015
|There are some huge gaps between male and female regarding teaching - IELTS
4 - I don't worry about the body of your paragraph. however, in the introduction, you need to tell about what...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 19, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 2, 2015
|Create proper environment, which would help children foster the sense of competition and cooperation
2 - having considered the respective benefits of them, I believe both of them are essential for our children's future,as they...
Writing Feedbackbeyondmtk - Feb 19, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 19, 2015
|Choosing the custom of the place you live, and your own custom, has always been a polemical topic.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 19, 2015 / masktaz - Feb 19, 2015
|The swift expansion, emergence of industries and businesses, made urban areas become more cramped
4 - I would respectfully disagree with Vns9x - to me the essay is asking for your opinion, what else would...
Writing Feedbackanhminh3105 - Feb 19, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 27, 2015
|Why do you think people are drawn to take drugs. Opinion essay
2 - Utilising any kind of drugs an issue, which frequently generates a great deal of heated debate. this essay will...
Writing Feedbackturgutkhanova - Feb 18, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 19, 2015
|IELTS: ASDA supermarket and its reasons! Close to home, good reputation, 24-hour shopping, etc.
2 - Overall, this is well-written. However, I notice a minor problem The figure for Parking facilities seems to...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 18, 2015 / eddies - Feb 19, 2015
|Medical treatments, fast communication, great transportation - technology make our lives easier
2 - Your introduction seems to be bizarre. 1. You need to rephrase the prompt in the beginning and list your...
Writing Feedbackkoshima - Feb 18, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 18, 2015
|Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution and airport construction.
3 - In addition, The first part this sounds weird maybe community would be a better word choice offers that government...
Writing Feedbackmiloman - Feb 18, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 19, 2015
|Some individuals consider to eat outdoors while others choose home dishes. Which is better?
4 - I will continue where Vns9x left off. Also, in your intro, eating is not really a hobby, although maybe...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Feb 18, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 18, 2015
|IELTS: multinational companies are supporting our life, in lieu of ruining it.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 18, 2015 / tantadedanaan - Feb 18, 2015
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