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|Tourists in England who visited four different attractions in Brighton - IElTS
4 - Introduction should has the information about the type of graph, the data, the unit of measurement, and periods of...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Feb 6, 2015
|Reasons for finding talented people
2 - Hi Mumtazdinar, These are several suggestions for your writing, I hope these can help you. skilled...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Feb 2, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 3, 2015
|Freedom of speech tends to have tremendous detrimental effects on a mammoth number of people
2 - your essay is very good, nonetheless, It will be better if you make your sentences shorter...and I found out...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / thiet sun - Feb 3, 2015
|IELTS - I think that journalists are too concentrated on exposing celebrities' lives
NEW - Q: The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or...
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|Today's media information is a heated issue that is faced by human beings around of the world.
2 - The prompt is missing something! but anyways, i found some of your mistakes, here we goes. s around of...
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|'we have a penchant for copying their habits' - Parents are the best teachers!
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|IELTS-Writing task 2: Celebrity show engages viewers
4 - Media are (a) source of actual information. TheIn fact, they notice profoundly(this is inappropriate verb, so I delete it)...
Writing Feedbackdyah - Feb 2, 2015 / eddies - Feb 3, 2015
|Learning foreign language from the earliest grades - Javanese example
3 - Hai su_ja, I think when you use adverb clause showing your reason, you better put "because" in the middle...
Writing Feedbacksu_ja27 - Feb 2, 2015 / Liliy - Feb 8, 2015
|Does modern technology make us freer or busier? It is a phenomenon that people bring work home.
2 - To conclude, even though technologies can squander your time in aforementioned ways, notwithstanding they make a significant impact on...
Writing FeedbackLinhpt - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 2, 2015
|Learning a new language at any age is an anormously rewarding experience in many ways
Writing FeedbackFaisal_Aceh - Feb 1, 2015 / eddies - Feb 2, 2015
|Too early learning other countries' language would lead children confusing and wasting time
3 - Let me try to rewrite this introduction. More attention should be paid on education for young learners...
Writing Feedbackcakradonya - Feb 1, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 6, 2015
|The development of the Internet consists of many positive impacts.
Writing Feedbackthiet sun - Feb 1, 2015 / thiet sun - Feb 3, 2015
|The map illustrates 2 possible spots for building a new school. IELTs task 1
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 1, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 2, 2015
|Movements to stop and prevent global warming have been getting tractions in the past few decades.
3 - Hey, thanks for commenting. The thing is, I don't have the complete prompt either. This is just what someone...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / motoja - Feb 1, 2015
|Latin or Greek - should we teach dead languages?
2 - Something is missing in your prompt such as asking for your opinion and examples, but anyways here are some...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 1, 2015
|Learning a foreign language will encourage the curiosity of children
5 - The first-grade children have to learn a language outside their own country. I personally believe that this situation has...
Writing FeedbackImaduddinnst - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 12, 2015
|We have to balance between learning second language and other subjects.
2 - Hi Frt247 , I would like to give several comments and suggestions for your writing. GRAMMAR ISSUES ...
Writing Feedbackfrt427 - Feb 1, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 1, 2015
|PTE Essay: A Computer can perform simple but repetitive tasks much faster than a human can
2 - The issues are well argued. However, I think the ideas should be in different paragraph to be clearer, i.e...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / Linhpt - Feb 1, 2015
|British who are from 65 and older between 1985 and 2035 - IELTS task 1
3 - Let me try to rewrite this. The bar chart gives information regarding how many population aged 65...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 31, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 2, 2015
|The only remedy for this problem, is to set up a more powerful law. Smoking and its aftermaths!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 31, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 1, 2015
|While there are benefits of studying, there are good reasons why doing a job is worth a try.
3 - Thank you! Shon Do, it is really helpful. Eventhough i always get high marks at my literature (My mother...
Writing Feedbackkatherina - Jan 31, 2015 / katherina - Feb 1, 2015
|Foreign language should be mastered by children since the earliest level of their education.
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Jan 31, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 20, 2015
|I would argue that globalization influences people to learn foreign language, English especially
5 - I like the way you write the introduction. However, such intro needs more improvements as to form a...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Jan 31, 2015 / eddies - Feb 2, 2015
|A toddler have the cognitive capacity to learn approximately 20 new words each month.
4 - it will effect on children are notcompletely understand their mother tongue. from my perspective you can change the...
Writing Feedbacktphy - Jan 31, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Feb 9, 2015
|There are some reasons why children learn better and faster than adults.
2 - A children(A children? It must be "A child", right?) should study a foreign language in school starting in the...
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|Children are dependent on computer entertainment. Should they spend more time on outdoor activities
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 30, 2015 / rhino - Feb 2, 2015
|The data suggest that, as time goes by, more individuals prefer games software and DVDs over CDs.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 30, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 31, 2015
|Foreign Language Foster Student's Abilities
3 - I think you better use first language than mother language. Moreover, it is possible to use mother tongue too....
Writing Feedbackymahanani - Jan 30, 2015 / tphy - Feb 8, 2015
|Drug is the thing that has always been prohibited in this world - Drugs and teenagers essay
NEW - People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are expertimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and...
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|Parents claim that although advertisement provides information, children are misled by these adverts
3 - o conclude after discussing both the views , I feel that parents argument has got strong points and are...
Writing Feedbackvijaypj - Jan 30, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 30, 2015
|A/D: Children will have less financial problems if they are given a certain amount of money weekly
NEW - Topic: Some people think that giving their children a certain amount of money every week will help them have...
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|Coca Cola's sales numbers - Task 1 IELTs (pie)
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 29, 2015 / myngoc311 - Jan 29, 2015
|Group or on your own! Safety is a huge issue.
2 - English is not my first language,so what i can offer are just my humble thoughts. You have made...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 29, 2015 / moleman - Jan 29, 2015
|IELTS: in-home work and in-home study, a development positive or negative?
3 - Many many thanks to you for your detaied and meticulous revision. It is quite a contribution. If it could...
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|Advertisement motivates us to imitate others rather than being unique according to our interest
Writing Feedbackvijaypj - Jan 29, 2015 / vijaypj - Jan 29, 2015
|Stunning and nail-biting special effects in today's television.
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|I completely disagree with the idea of making new regulations in school.
Writing Feedbackkatherina - Jan 28, 2015 / TJLuschen - Jan 28, 2015
|Snitching people! They are inclined to move to another country especially to the rich one.
NEW - More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like...
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|Study blindfoldedly without analyzing the assumptions made in it will certainly bring one's downfall
2 - this is not a nice approach of questioning a work. The data are not "trustable", "legitimate" or "valid"...
Writing Feedbackthelearner - Jan 28, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 28, 2015
|Agree or disagree: Students need one year of break after finishing high school
4 - Luisa, I became really really confused with this line of your comment. In different IELTS writing books I...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 28, 2015 / ah_zafari - Feb 2, 2015
|University degrees are very essential in job market and to pursue master education
3 - From the decades, the education is considered as important thing in the life . the education has been considered...
Writing Feedbackdeepachiniwal - Jan 27, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 28, 2015
|Smoking law that was inflicted on Quebec, use examples in relation to Jeremy Bentham
2 - Hi Geoff, Kindly find my help below; Many people were satisfied(;- DELETE PUNCTUATION) however, there were many...
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|The current energy sources that we use, contaminate our environment, as well as the mankind.
4 - just electricity? I suggest to change electricity to "energy" as a more general term. electricity...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 27, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015
|The creation of a government is definitely for solving the problems (welfare) of the society
2 - The creation of a government is definitely for solving the problems(welfare) of the society, and problems here does not...
Writing Feedbackthelearner - Jan 27, 2015 / confusee123 - Jan 27, 2015
|Media should be allowed to publish information about the private life: Discuss two different views
2 - Okay, first up, you were being asked to only discuss 2 opinions in this essay, the pro and the...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2015
|Piano, my source of motivation - Umich/ Extracurricular CommonApp Essay
2 - Yes, you should make applause italics in the middle of the paragraph. It signifies that the action is not...
Writing Feedbackf3bruar7z - Jan 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2015
|Essay on being unique - Everybody is unique in their own way.
4 - this essay has alot of great ideas just try avoiding the part where you say because although it shows...
Writing Feedbackrone - Jan 26, 2015 / omarsamahy - Jan 27, 2015
|ielts: Are we becoming more independent ?
Writing Feedbackamirafahmy - Jan 26, 2015 / amirafahmy - Jan 28, 2015
|Ielts: People watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this?
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015
|Weddings in Vietnam and America - two different ways to celebrate it
2 - Lin, I am not sure where you got your ideas about how the American wedding is celebrated but there...
Writing Feedbacklinhchi - Jan 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2015
|Experiences will aid you in various ways, but are no more sufficient for this contemporary world
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 26, 2015 / swathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
|Ielts - "successful in an egalitarian society or Capitalistic"
2 - First, the essay contains only 248 words, less than 250. Be careful, no matter how well you can write,...
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|IELTS - Paying for clothes, haircuts and beauty products - just to enhance own appearence?
Writing FeedbackShankargouda - Jan 25, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|Women should stay at home and raise children: Do you agree or disagree
4 - OK Luisa, I rewrote the essay, can you please have look at this version? For centuries the patriarchy...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 25, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|English usage is increasing day by day, therefore various local languages are becoming extinct IELTS
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 25, 2015 / myngoc311 - Jan 25, 2015
|Animals vs human needs; we should know how to protect the animals and suppress our avarice
2 - It has always been aquite contentious sincethere is an abundance of people who consider that , it ...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 25, 2015 / swathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
|Modern technology has more negative effects than positive ones: Agree or disagree?
5 - Thank you very much Luisa. I'm happy this time the argument was not lacking any part of the prompt....
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 25, 2015
|Internet, automobiles, aeronautical and medical advancements - 21st Century Scientific Changes
Writing Feedbacksambhavsh - Jan 24, 2015 / SHanafi - Jan 30, 2015
|While studying some students take weekend or evening jobs to help with expenses. Share your opinion.
3 - Thank you for guiding me .. It was a big mistake and I even didn't notice!! Will correct soon...
Writing FeedbackPayaldx - Jan 24, 2015 / Payaldx - Jan 24, 2015
|Online Shopping increase in our daily life
2 - Faraz, kindly review your essay for capitalization errors and problems. The country is called the United States and is...
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