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|Have you ever had the feeling of leaving your own country behind for an exciting adventure overseas?
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 24, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015
|TOEFL: The famous adage 'No pain, no gain' is by far the most logical expression I have ever heard.
4 - Yes, it is not only a deviation from the topic but it is also out of place. Your relationship...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|Students need to learn practical skills: Agree or disagree?
8 - Honestly, the essay is fine. The only problem like I previously mentioned, is that you use examples that require...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|Making noise as much as you can!! Discuss two viewpoints :)
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2015
|Children don't think too much while acting. They have all freedom to do anything what they want.
Writing Feedbackrohitkhadse - Jan 23, 2015 / rohitkhadse - Jan 25, 2015
|A cornerstone for a person to get successful in life is planning. TOEFL activities Essay
3 - Sorry to inform you but this essay needs lots of works. Glaringly, you could have introduced your ideas in...
Writing Feedbackblackcat - Jan 23, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 24, 2015
|TOEFL: The best way to relax and reduce stress is by spending some time alone.
4 - Kim, while your second paragraph does present a negative light of the way group relaxation may not be the...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2015
|TOEFL: People always debate on whether or not children should follow their parents' career paths.
6 - Albeit, it is quite a salient and interesting essay to read. Notwithstanding, i want to point out some of...
Writing Feedbacksimonexi - Jan 23, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 24, 2015
|Every single man and woman has the freedom to believe what they wish to believe. TOEFL
5 - Your diction was impressive! Your word choice was on point at all times. At the beginning of the...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 22, 2015 / abgalpal101 - Jan 22, 2015
|"Dad, I am hungry!!" | "Hi hungry, I am dad!" - Change Leads to Growth
2 - The language and grammar that you use in this essay is casual yet respectful. It is reflectively written and...
Writing Feedbackoctober12 - Jan 22, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 22, 2015
|SAT: "If you tell the truth, you don't have to remember anything"
2 - I believe you meant to say "harmless" in the last sentence of the third paragraph when you said harmful....
Writing FeedbackBurki - Jan 22, 2015 / AndrewB - Jan 23, 2015
|Trying to devise an optimal way to teach has always been one of the priorities in pedagogic research
NEW - The best way to teach-whether as an educator, employer, or parent-is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones....
Writing Feedbackethenian - Jan 22, 2015 / — -
|TOEFL: Is it better to watch serious movies that are designed to make you think than just to watch?
5 - I agree... The time for a TOEFL writing in cruel... a full 4-5 paragraph essay in 30 minutes... It...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 22, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
|Essay writing; Parents should send children to school or not to be good members of society .
Writing FeedbackPedram - Jan 21, 2015 / SHanafi - Jan 29, 2015
|TOEFL: Today, life is easier and cozier than it was then out grandparents were young.
2 - The Idea that today is easier than the past is interesting. First I would explain what you mean by...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 21, 2015 / yoman316 - Jan 21, 2015
|As I study math finance-essay for SEAMS-UGM Conference 2015 quarter
2 - Hi dianessay. I am an economic graduate, and I hope my adivce would be helpful. Government bonds is...
Writing Feedbackdianessay - Jan 21, 2015 / ethenian - Jan 21, 2015
|A/D It is important for families to regularly eat their meals together.
6 - Burki, Really? That's all you are going to offer? I just saw your comment on Ah_Zafari thread. You're not...
Writing Feedbackdreamcomestrue - Jan 21, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
|Special Schools for Special Kids. Peer Review for English 102 - Guidelines included
NEW - I am looking for a peer review of my research essay fro English 102. Bellow are a few guidelines...
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|TOEFL: environment issues are far too difficult for ordinary people to comprehend
3 - Thanks again Ahmad, I am in your debt. I understand what you are trying to say. I panicked when...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 20, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 21, 2015
|National curriculum has been introduced into many countries for a long time
2 - I COULDN'T FIGURE OUT HOW TO USE BOLD OR COLORING TO CORRECT A FEW ERRORS. THEY ARE WRITTEN IN...
Writing Feedbackethenian - Jan 20, 2015 / amandamayet - Jan 21, 2015
|Since its invention television has been loved widely across the whole world and addicted many people
Writing Feedbacklionontheshore - Jan 20, 2015 / lionontheshore - Jan 20, 2015
|Humans are the most clever and talented creature across the world
2 - Humans are veryclever and talented . One thing that separates humans from from other living beings is their ability...
Writing Feedbacknaghmeh_ms - Jan 20, 2015 / Enchantress07 - Jan 20, 2015
|Most people have watched a comedy show on TV with their families at least once in their lives; TOEFL
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 20, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 20, 2015
|Countless student at universities causes comptetion. Do you agree or disagree? Is it a good or bad?
10 - I guess my TOEFL experience is way different from that of the IELTS. Thanks for letting me know about...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2015
|Lately, many high school students try to search for a job instead of going to universities; TOEFL
5 - Yes, I do see your point... Perhaps something like calculating taxes or bills would be plausible....
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 19, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 20, 2015
|Spending money on appearance: right or wrong? Discuss both sides
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 19, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 20, 2015
|I started my first job as a Graduate Engineer Trainee; SOP - Applying for Master's
3 - Your essay is quite strong and certainly presents the 4 major information requirements that led you to consider enrolling...
Writing Feedbackvella88 - Jan 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 19, 2015
|TOEFL: Television advertising directed toward children under the age of five should not be allowed.
6 - Hmm. I understand what you are trying to say... And don't worry about not replying, I understand your situation....
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 18, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
|Staying well-informed in this time and age is simple, but which information is true and which is not
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 18, 2015
|Spend money on computers or teachers' wages? discuss both viewpoints
6 - Excellent work! You not only considered both sides of the issue, but you also successfully argued both sides in...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 19, 2015
|Should the government spend money on outer space projects?
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 18, 2015
|In my view staying with the family for a longer time is better.
Writing Feedbackrohitkhadse - Jan 17, 2015 / rohitkhadse - Jan 18, 2015
|Should we wait for destiny to pave way for us or is it better to work hard instead?
2 - The comparison here is between destiny and working hard playing a role in the future or a person. There...
Writing FeedbackAreeba96 - Jan 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2015
|"Motivation will almost always beat mere talent."
Writing FeedbackBurki - Jan 17, 2015 / Burki - Jan 17, 2015
|I believe that there is no job or major or expert which is regarded as the best in society
2 - You have an incomplete introductory statement. Remember, you need to present the topic thesis, possible opinions, and your opinion...
Writing Feedbacknaghmeh_ms - Jan 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2015
|The best way to console the person is by patting him on a shoulder or silently hugging him
Writing FeedbackAcioncion - Jan 17, 2015 / Acioncion - Jan 17, 2015
|Socialization process. Who influences you more? Peers or parents and teachers?
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 16, 2015 / Acioncion - Jan 17, 2015
|Rational leader or mindless lunatic? Hero or a traitor? Louis Riel essay
2 - Interesting paper! There are few run-on words (no space in between) and issues with dates (e.g. October 22nd...
Writing FeedbackCesauto - Jan 16, 2015 / EF_Sheri - Jan 16, 2015
|What ways do you suggest to make ads effective? What are their good and bad effects on the society?
11 - In advertising, the term "effective ad" means both improved marketing and consumer reception. The better they market the product,...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2015
|Using animals as a tools. Animals' right regulation has generated a great deal of discussions.
3 - Dear EF_Sheri, Thank you very much for your correction. how about my flow sentence and my idea? because...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Jan 16, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Jan 20, 2015
|Telecommuting suits only to devoted workers, who know how to manage their time and personal life.
3 - Thank you for amazing suggestions, I appreciate. I am going to check it carefully following your advice....
Writing FeedbackAcioncion - Jan 16, 2015 / Acioncion - Jan 16, 2015
|Information war in my motherland, Ukraine. Small essay about mass media (302 words)
6 - OK I copied an example from the book "practical writing with reading" below: Do you realize that newly born...
Writing FeedbackAcioncion - Jan 15, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 17, 2015
|How do you show your appreciation to your family and friends-agree or disagree
4 - When a topic asks you to agree or disagree, you don't have to necessarily choose a specific side, provided...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 14, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2015
|A large portion of country's budget should be diverted to health and preventive measures.
2 - Alleb, when you write an introductory statement, make sure to present the prompt in the first sentence by rephrasing...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Jan 13, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2015
|Some countries follow religious laws in its way of punishment such as Saudi Arabia and Iran.
Writing Feedbackfatine - Jan 13, 2015 / fatine - Jan 15, 2015
|IELTS : children consciousness about caring people; course about voluntary social service in school
2 - Some basics 1. Your writing's layout, put a space between your paragraphs. 2. Write the complete prompt including the...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 13, 2015 / SHanafi - Jan 17, 2015
|GRE: Teaching should be both a pull and push, where praise is given when the student does right
Writing Feedbacksumdysan - Jan 12, 2015 / smilex0 - Jan 13, 2015
|Computer technology is the present world. It's shaping our futures at rates unprecedented in history
2 - As a result, its profound effects on our education system ... it is profound By all means, answer to...
Writing FeedbackSundus - Jan 11, 2015 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 13, 2015
|The apple campany's slogan: "Think Different" has become a motto of the new generation.
3 - @stretchthelimit Thank you for your evaluation. I just feel that 25 minutes is so short for an SAT essay...
Writing FeedbackCharlesD - Jan 10, 2015 / CharlesD - Jan 13, 2015
|What age group do you prefer to spend your time with? Your own age group or other ones?
2 - One of the significant influences that play a pivotal roles in a person's socialization process of a person ...
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Jan 10, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2015
|I desire a farm house and natural atmosphere - "upside and downside of living in countryside"
Writing Feedbackfrazier - Jan 10, 2015 / frazier - Jan 10, 2015
|Does a country want its students to be mentally and physically ill? Sports and social activities.
2 - Since we know what prompt you are answering, you don't need to restate it. "...opinion by three...
Writing Feedbackfaezehch - Jan 9, 2015 / anonymous2014 - Jan 9, 2015
|Have you ever play 'Rock paper scissors' with your relatives when you were little?
Writing FeedbackLulu_827 - Jan 8, 2015 / Lulu_827 - Jan 20, 2015
|TOEFL ESSAY -WHAT CHANGE WILL 21ST CENTURAY BRING?
2 - The essay as a whole is fairly impressive but try changing the beginning of the second sentence. Instead of...
Writing FeedbackTrinity - Jan 8, 2015 / digvijaymore - Jan 9, 2015
|[IELTS Writing task 1] US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone
Writing Feedbackkamikazexoxo - Jan 8, 2015 / Trinity - Jan 8, 2015
|There have always been scandals in history from ancient to modern society. Are scandals useful?
2 - A very good essay might need some improving in the first para From then on very flawless kudos!...
Writing Feedbacktico82 - Jan 8, 2015 / huzefaa - Jan 9, 2015
|Do you believe that elderly people used to live in a better world? IELTS-task2
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Jan 8, 2015 / ssaallaamm - Jan 9, 2015
|Human being inherently tends to experience different things in their entire life. Changing job
NEW - Hey guys, after a long time I started preparing myself for the IELTS test again. Here is my first...
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|I had to choose between entering the scientific section or the literary section
Writing Feedbackabdulaziz966 - Jan 6, 2015 / naghmeh_ms - Jan 7, 2015
|The internet has caused a considerable discrepancy between modern life and past life.
2 - There are obvious capitalization errors in your paper. You need to learn to proof read your work and use...
Writing Feedbacknaghmeh_ms - Jan 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 6, 2015
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