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|I would argue that mankind can learn much about another countries when visiting them directly
2 - Hi Jida.. Nice to see you again here. Let me give some correction on your essay. Here it goes....
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 9, 2015 / aniani - Oct 10, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The vehicles are favored by workers in Houston, Texas
3 - Private car produces the highest amount of carbon dioxide, roughly 0.32 kilograms per person while anotherother car results approximately...
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|IELTS Task 1 : The different ways of collecting water to fulfill the irrigation
2 - Overall, it can be seen that both of thisthese techniques use a different equipment but same aim. The...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 9, 2015 / Pramudita - Oct 9, 2015
|The Advantages of a Computer for Student: social networking, learning media, computer skills
Writing Feedbacksharahma - Oct 9, 2015 / sharahma - Oct 9, 2015
|Comparing two traditional techniques to accumulate water for irrigation.
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|Isolation from the world is not a good idea for any country "Toefl"
Writing Feedbacktaranehrezaee - Oct 9, 2015 / taranehrezaee - Oct 13, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : The most favorite conveyance for employees in Houston, Texas
3 - Muflih, aside from some grammatical errors in this report, it is quite efficient and conveys the contents of the...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 9, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2015
|The graph compares the changes in the number of people using railways transportation in G.Britain
2 - Bayu! You should really be so proud of yourself. This is one of the best reports that you have...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Oct 9, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2015
|The process of Active Study contains both individual and group work.
2 - Heida, while the essay that you wrote is quite direct to the point and instantly answers the prompt, you...
Writing Feedbackheidarvandm - Oct 9, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2015
|The main reasons and several ways to tackle the inequality between developed and developing country
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 9, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 9, 2015
|Dissimilarity between developed and less developed countries
2 - Irham, while you make a compelling argument showing that foreign government intervention is the reason that there is a...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 9, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2015
|Social Bond in The High Rise Apartment
2 - This is certainly a very interesting discussion Muhajid. Your line of reasoning obviously comes from personal experience, first hand...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|People around the world pursue the internet as sophisticated media to do anything such info and data
2 - Diqon, there is still a lot of confusion in your essay. Most of the thoughts remain unclear because of...
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Oct 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|"Culture an Inescapable Thing" - synthesis essay
2 - One way or other culturalcultures will somehow influence a( a what?) , throughout their life, it might cloud their...
Writing FeedbackRedGod - Oct 8, 2015 / irhame - Oct 8, 2015
|Gain a better experience by traveling to another country - IELTS Task 2
2 - A closer look at how I develop my introductory paragraph. TV and films as the best entertainment...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 8, 2015 / eddies - Oct 8, 2015
|Abortion: Help Before and Beyond - Great Awareness
Writing FeedbackProverbs31 - Oct 8, 2015 / preota - Oct 9, 2015
|The ways to achieve an knowledge. Visiting is Always Better Than Watching
4 - I have read your comments, Mister. Thanks a lot for you due to taking time to proofread and give...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 8, 2015 / mujahid_fadli - Oct 10, 2015
|Studying at a small university helps promote the interaction among students and learning efficiency
3 - Hi Long! Why are you taking note of the word count? Were you writing with a word limitation? Was...
Writing Feedbackryanta - Oct 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|TOEFL Writing Independent Task: Should children be required to perform household tasks?
Writing Feedbackryanta - Oct 8, 2015 / smartyp - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Loneliness or Better Sense of Community
3 - Muflih, you are contradicting yourself in your statements. In your introduction, you indicate that you believe that people living...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Do You Feel Lonely When You Live In An Apartment?
5 - Hello aniani, I'm Luthfia. Actually, I like your idea, it is simple but acceptable. First of all, I suggest...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 8, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Oct 11, 2015
|Both schools and parents should be responsible for solving eating problems of children.
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|Gaining the proper education is very prominent particularly when looking for a good job
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 8, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 11, 2015
|Essay about the daily activities of my mother
2 - Lina, the way you write in such a careless manner will definitely affect your grade. The first rule of...
Writing Feedbacklinbud - Oct 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|Apology Letter - missed attendance at the birthday celebration (Ielts Task 1)
3 - Thanks vangiespen, I will try to incorporate your ideas in next letter. Your ideas really help me a lot...
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|The Internet mania; a dependency, needs, or destruction
Writing FeedbackEjepe - Oct 8, 2015 / JIDA - Oct 8, 2015
|How to be happy? I strongly believe that there are many factors to be cheerful.
2 - Hi Pramudita. Nice essay, you have made it very well. All the ideas you explain very clearly and you...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 8, 2015 / Clark Kent - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS task 2 - University education can ensure to get a decent job
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|Using an automatic photo booth
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 8, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Watch or Visit The Different Cultures In The World.
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 7, 2015 / pdeep37 - Oct 8, 2015
|About photo booths: they allow to produce two kinds of picture, large format image and passport size
3 - This is a very good report Irham. You managed to clearly state the process of taking a photo in...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : For Learning About Another Country, Just Watching or Visiting it?
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 7, 2015 / faarasyad - Oct 7, 2015
|Tech and Brain power. Technology deteriorate human way of thinking - GRE issue Task
2 - Sekar, while I did manage to finally follow your flow of thought, I think that you could have used...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2015
|Have a great job is the only key to get happiness. Do you agree? - Writing IELTS Task 2
2 - Everyone defines happiness differently. For some others, doing what they love can be a hub to achieve truly...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 7, 2015 / eddies - Oct 7, 2015
|What would it take for you to consider your life succesful?
2 - Anna, I can understand why you would like to remain so vague about your ideal life and accomplishments over...
Writing Feedbackannabanana1016 - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2015
|Why We Happy? A proper job brings joy and excitement in human life
2 - Hi Mujahid :-) For starters, let me tell you that the way you restated the prompt was quite good....
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2015
|TASK I : the percentage of the employment by occupation
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2015
|What makes people happy? Good relationship with family and friends. TASK 2 essay
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|The most crucial creation in the last 30 years - the Internet
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 7, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Oct 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Find Your Good Job And You Will Have Good Feeling.
2 - This essay will discuss both points of views . In my personal opinion, it will be nice if the...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 7, 2015 / Diqon - Oct 7, 2015
|Could humans survive without the internet?
3 - hello pramudita, let me try to give some recommendations on your passage, here i found almost in...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 7, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 7, 2015
|GRE argument task : Budgeting riverside recreational activities in Manson River
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 7, 2015 / liying - Oct 28, 2015
|Simple tip for a life: Follow your passion and you'll be happy.
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 7, 2015 / Pramudita - Oct 10, 2015
|The developments of technology, particularly in e-books, may cause abandonment of the printed media
2 - Irfan, you have presented a unique take on this discussion. Most of the prompts using this normally ask if...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|With the invention of the internet, mankind have been benefited in many aspects of their lives
4 - - Some changes in para 1: Today's life relies too much on the internet. It is argued that the...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 7, 2015 / eddies - Oct 7, 2015
|Fiction-Writing : The story about leaving home for a while
9 - I am not resubmitting this paper. I can't in fact, it was my pre-test paper . Thanks anyways XD...
Writing FeedbackSamuelsam123 - Oct 7, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Oct 9, 2015
|The problem is whether the printed media will disappear because of the e-books?
4 - Thank you very much Mr Eddy and Mr Diqon. i will try these advice for improving my writing......
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 7, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 8, 2015
|In order to succeed, it is better to be like others rather than different from everybody else
2 - Hi, Mr. Andydesmond, I'm glad to see your passage here and I think your passage is easy to understand....
Writing Feedbackandydesmond - Oct 7, 2015 / aniani - Oct 7, 2015
|The common access to the new technology may favour the young people and give them more opportunities
4 - let me to rewrite your first paragraph... Nowadays, the existence of technology and globalization make the youngest...
Writing Feedbackakiraaa - Oct 7, 2015 / JIDA - Oct 8, 2015
|Why People Must Living In Different Zones
3 - Hi Ejepe. Actually you have good ideas about this essay, but unfortunately you did not explain it clearly. You...
Writing FeedbackEjepe - Oct 7, 2015 / Clark Kent - Oct 7, 2015
|Printed media will never disappear; some factors why people fear about existence of written papers
3 - Irfan, I like the new paragraph that you developed. It has a logical explanation for your support of print...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2015
|Should we foster the sense of sacrifice to younger generation as a portion of people have suggested?
5 - Than you @Ochio I have corrected my mistakes!! Thank you @irhame Just one question, isn't Bill Gate who co-founded...
Writing FeedbackKevin623623 - Oct 6, 2015 / Kevin623623 - Oct 7, 2015
|Tim Berners-Lee launched "WordWideWeb". The Powerful tool.
3 - The greatest discovery over the last 30 years was started [...] [...] influential invention for human beings until present....
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 6, 2015 / eddies - Oct 11, 2015
|The necessary need in our daily activities - The Internet Can Change People's Life
NEW - The internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be...
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|Some dire effects of tourism - I argue that visitors should preserve the environments
NEW - Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is...
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|IELTS Task 2 : The Internet Has Changed Everything
2 - Hi Muflih, I like the way that you presented your essay. You managed to put across both the good...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2015
|Living in the same place for the rest of your life VS move around. What do you prefer?- IELTS task 2
2 - Everybody tends to live in a comfortable place. As such, some people were keen on living in one...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 6, 2015 / eddies - Oct 7, 2015
|Career preparation, increasing knowledge and exploring new experiences; why people attend university
5 - Tien, the last paragraph before the conclusion has improved tremendously. It really helps to wrap up the essay. The...
Writing FeedbackBNTien - Oct 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Which one is more important, impressive buildings or public facilities?
5 - - This essay partially answers the question, since you did not express your OWN opinion. You need to...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 6, 2015 / eddies - Oct 7, 2015
|The Vantage of Living in Several Dwelling-Place (IELTS Task 2)
2 - In the past, mostly people tend to be one place for living instead of at the present. They choose...
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