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|IELTS Task - showing that learning a foreign language already at primary school is more beneficial
NEW - Topic: Some experts believe that is better for children to begin learning foreign language at primary school rather than...
Writing FeedbackMainakano - Apr 13, 2015 / — -
|The advertisement gives influence toward the increasing number of popular consumers of the goods
3 - Without a doubt, people now live in a consumer culture(repetition) . They are influenced quickly to buy some needs(if...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Apr 13, 2015 / ah_zafari - Apr 13, 2015
|There is alot of things which worries me and the scholarschip would be a key to my "golden gate"
Writing Feedbackthuyhien1801 - Apr 12, 2015 / Adhisti - Apr 13, 2015
|Maroon and Grey - "two page descriptive essay of a place without using I"
2 - 1st paragraph: Do you have to use the words maroon and grey in this essay? Place a comma between...
Writing Feedbackjricha - Apr 12, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 12, 2015
|The producing and developing of phones have some positive and negative features
3 - thank you so much for your feedback and yes ı had misspelled the "i".. actually, ı was going to...
Writing Feedbacktomurcuk - Apr 12, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 13, 2015
|The amount of water use in 3 sector, and 2 different countries.
2 - some suggestions for your writing : In order to make a good introduction, you should begin with one...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015
|How might the advantages of studying in another country outweigh the disadvantages?
3 - I think you cannot even write "However' in the first paragraph, since there is no contrast opinion. With this...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 13, 2015
|The number of kilometers of route and passengers per year of railway system in six different cities
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 12, 2015
|Ten-year summary on the amount of online sales for the New Zealand's retail sectors
3 - Stacy, a closer look at the slight improvement on the overview and the first topic sentence I have made....
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 16, 2015
|Should people invent a new language?
2 - *Having united language areis an important element for universal language... *such as people must pay a course and...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 12, 2015
|Knowledge about some country lifestyle and culture helps to learn a language of this area
2 - Hallo Ms. Thuty..I have some suggesstions for you.. Here we go.. In order to learn a language well,...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 12, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015
|Writing Task 2 - some university students should only study one specialist subject
3 - Answer: Over recent years specialist subject at university is becoming debatable issue in higher education ministry. Some people...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 12, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|Information about the number of entries on a two new music websites
2 - The line graph gives information about the number of visitor of two new music websites include Music Choice and...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 13, 2015
|Balanced proportion of male and female in further education should not be applied.
2 - 1st paragraph: Make term plural in the first sentence. Explain what you mean by same proportion in gender. Are...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 12, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 12, 2015
|Expenditure and amount of consumption on fast food in Britain during twenty years (the last century)
2 - Paragraph 1 corrections: The charts illustrate the expenditure on fast food by earning level group in pence per...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015 / cldales - Apr 12, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1: Causes of Worldwide land degradation (Pie Chart and Table)
4 - Thanks Mr.eddies.. that's nice corrections for me to improve my writing skills. I should be grateful if you would...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 13, 2015
|Two charts, one result in the survey of adult education; Writing task 1
3 - The two of the charts below present for publishing a survey youngster education with the first chart (you need...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 12, 2015 / Anfalia - Apr 12, 2015
|Proportions of travelers to England who visited art gallery, pavilion, pier or festival in Brighton
2 - The line graph illustrateschanges--> double verb the number of travelers to England for visiting four different attractions in Brighton...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 12, 2015
|Subjects and lesson contents are decided by the authorities or central government
NEW - Nowadays, subjects and lesson contents are decided by the authorities or central government. Many people suggest that teachers should...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015 / — -
|Writing Task 2 : Paying attention to children's future should be one priority!
2 - ... done by school as the greatest values for pupils' ? in their development time ... ... can be...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 12, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: General Approaching versus Vocational Systems in Secondary Education
2 - Hi windachan .. actually point to point and flow sentence of your introduction here is too wordiness,...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 12, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 12, 2015
|Many kinds of integration problems for people living abroad (%)
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 11, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2015
|The chart informs the number of Bulgarians moving to different countries based on level of education
5 - Overall, it can be clearly be seen that the number (...) was the highest amongst other level of education,...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 11, 2015 / Anfalia - Apr 12, 2015
|Positive effect of being international student will not outshine the demerits of it (IELTS Task 2)
3 - ... Therefore, I would argue that although students taking study in foreign countries get the negative impacts but the...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 11, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015
|Information device help people to work outside
NEW - Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their work place (eg. At home, when travelling, etc.)...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 11, 2015 / — -
|The amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams - the line graph
4 - The line graph illustrates the consumption of Spreads, including Margarine and Butter from 1981 to 2007. The quantity is...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 11, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 12, 2015
|Overusing of a common language encourages people to invent a new language for communication
3 - Hallo Mohjawahir... I think your writing is a good,but your conclusion is not complete, because you did not...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 11, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015
|IELTS-Writing task 2: Accepting an equal proportion of degree students is looked at by the gender
2 - These days, some people believe that universities have accepted the proportion of student looking at their gender particularly between...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 10, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Apr 10, 2015
|Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
2 - overall, i like your ideas^^.. i just write some corrections here, hope it helps^^ Some universities do not...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 10, 2015 / ririchwang - Apr 11, 2015
|Effects of balanced numbers of male and female students in universities
3 - In recent years, having higher education is becoming a mainly purposeof some people. Many universities are opening wider possibility...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 10, 2015 / sblack - Apr 10, 2015
|Proportional number of gender in education system
2 - Final comments: You only present one argument against gender equality mandates in the classroom, that it will force students...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 10, 2015 / sblack - Apr 10, 2015
|As the media are growing, their influence are becoming more widely
2 - Hi, Kindly find my help below; As the media are(IS) growing, their influence are(IS) becoming (more- DELETE)...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 9, 2015
|IELTS: Should unemployed people be made to work for their benefit payments?
2 - Some suggestion for your writing : 1. First, unemployed people will be productive. They will produce money to...
Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 9, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015
|IELTS-Writing task - work for unemployed individuals outbalances the lack of jobs
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 9, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 10, 2015
|Giving work to unemployed people is a good idea for better life in society.
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 9, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Apr 9, 2015
|Lower crime rate and bigger nation's income are the main benefits of employment non working people.
2 - Hi, Imho .. i am tremendously enthusiastic about your essay here, nevertheless let me give you a few correction...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 9, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 9, 2015
|Cheap Labour - allowing unemployed to work is a good way to help them to pass their poverty line
2 - 1) Strong 1st paragraph. Your position is clear. 2) 2nd paragraph- Make sure you change is to are, because...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 9, 2015
|Remnants of another culture that still linger on.
2 - Hi, your writing has given me knowledge about Indian's culture change.. well, i noticed a little error in articles...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Apr 9, 2015 / ririchwang - Apr 9, 2015
|Should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose for them?
2 - Firstly,The first reason of this point is how types of jobs nowadays are available in Take Agustinus Wibowo, one...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Apr 9, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 9, 2015
|Around the world in 101 days with Semester at Sea!!
NEW - Hello everyone, below is my application essay for Semester at Sea's Spring of 2016 voyage. For those of you...
Writing Feedbackhyphen2013 - Apr 8, 2015 / — -
|Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay
4 - Individual should not refuse to pay tax [...] would lead to collapse of the system. --put the result of...
Writing Feedbackstriker - Apr 8, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 9, 2015
|I like to cook myself - homemade food are healthy, low cost, and it's just my hobby!
2 - Hallo, Ladansh. Your writing essay is good, but i think it is too general. I'll recommend you to write...
Writing Feedbackladansh - Apr 8, 2015 / Firda Umairoh - Apr 9, 2015
|Choosing profession for a young people - IELTS-Writing task 2
NEW - In your opinion, should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose choose for them. Some...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 8, 2015 / — -
|Young people have a right to choose suitable profession due to their own will
3 - Thank you very much for your suggestion, it is very beneficial for me to improve my writing skill...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 8, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 8, 2015
|Young people know best their natural skills and it is better when a future job is selected by them
3 - Thank you Ms. ES_Jasmine. That's all nice corrections for me. It is beneficial to improve my writing skills....
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 8, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 8, 2015
|Children, in accordance with their passion, understand better what jobs are more suitable for them.
2 - A better future for children has proved elusive. As such, young people should be driven to make important...
Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 8, 2015 / eddies - Apr 8, 2015
|In different parts of the world kids are involved in some paid jobs, but it is harmful to them.
Writing Feedbackcldales - Apr 8, 2015 / cldales - Apr 8, 2015
|People should learn other country culture from their own experience, rather than just by watching TV
4 - as to have a high-rated achievement there is no verb there is still sort of things they cannot...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 8, 2015 / irhame - Apr 9, 2015
|Education in a better environment, great medical care and facilities - Pros of living in Big Cities
3 - Hi @member89... correction: make sure your spelling such as Furthuremore (Furthermore), studing (studying), thier (their), liesure (leisure), reccomand...
Writing Feedbackmember89 - Apr 8, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015
|Staying in one place and living in different area.
4 - Basically, people want to live in the most comfortable zone.This beginning is somehow bizarre. Remember the more informative your...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 8, 2015 / Vns9x - Apr 8, 2015
|Should children be educated during their free time?
2 - Hii, Auntum_waltz, I have several discussion and suggestion for your writing, I hope these can help you. ...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Apr 8, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Apr 8, 2015
|In order to avoid confusion of difference behaviour, many companies have developed a guideline
2 - International business activities are where people from different cultural background exchanges goods and services in a timeless world. Here,...
Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 8, 2015 / eddies - Apr 8, 2015
|How to behave in doing business internationally? An example - saying "No" in different cultures.
NEW - Many internationally business ethics discussions going on that believe how to behave in doing business are the central point....
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 8, 2015 / — -
|Ethic and doing business internationally
2 - Japanese business executive rarely says "no", they tend to take a long discussion until their colleagues realize that the...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 8, 2015 / mohjawahir - Apr 8, 2015
|Parents should control children's behaviour at their early stage. To what extent do you agree or not
2 - Hi Wenlai, your essay is brilliant but I found several grammatical errors and some repetition words. I think you...
Writing Feedbackwenlai - Apr 8, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 8, 2015
|Some persons claim, modern buildings ruin cities, others argue that they add interest. Discuss both!
2 - Recently, the development of the cities is valued mostly by its eye-catching architecture. Some people think that high-rise new...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 7, 2015 / ah_zafari - Apr 11, 2015
|Observing children copy the watched parents - IELTS Sample Essay
3 - It should be stressed that parents, not adults, are responsible for their children. Humans are not a herd of...
Writing FeedbackmMaftuna - Apr 7, 2015 / Rich Monte - Apr 7, 2015
|Ielts: mix of both - competition and cooperation should be taught to the student
Writing Feedbackzeref - Apr 7, 2015 / zeref - Apr 7, 2015
|Volkswagen Passat - the car description
NEW - Volkswagen Passat Today, I am going to introduce the new car, that was made in our company Volkswagen....
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|People's lives are more preferable nowadays than a century ago?
4 - Please note that studies related to 'global warming' have recently changed so if you quote a source from 2012...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Apr 7, 2015 / EF_Stacey - Apr 7, 2015
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