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|Do you believe that elderly people used to live in a better world? IELTS-task2
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Jan 8, 2015 / ssaallaamm - Jan 9, 2015
|Human being inherently tends to experience different things in their entire life. Changing job
NEW - Hey guys, after a long time I started preparing myself for the IELTS test again. Here is my first...
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|I had to choose between entering the scientific section or the literary section
Writing Feedbackabdulaziz966 - Jan 6, 2015 / naghmeh_ms - Jan 7, 2015
|The internet has caused a considerable discrepancy between modern life and past life.
2 - There are obvious capitalization errors in your paper. You need to learn to proof read your work and use...
Writing Feedbacknaghmeh_ms - Jan 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 6, 2015
|Sixty nine percent of waste materials in Korea is being disposed of by means of recycling
4 - I would say Korea and Sweden do not practice the process of disposing unwanted resources through chemical treatment or...
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jan 5, 2015 / KrithikaK - Jan 5, 2015
|A number of facts as to why computers are considered more of a disadvantage than an advantage.
3 - might want to exceed the 250 word minimum you can do this by elaborating and broadening your scope, incorporating...
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jan 5, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 5, 2015
|Concern about judging criminals with the death penalty
3 - Thanks!...
Writing FeedbackBigger - Jan 5, 2015 / Bigger - Jan 6, 2015
|Mom vs. Mom: The differnce between employed mothers and stay-at-home mothers
2 - The first sentence should have plural nouns: homemakers and caregivers. In fact, 61% of the total people employed......
Writing Feedbackreilmikaylie1 - Jan 5, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2015
|Whenever something becomes too much for me, my mother is there calming me
3 - As a whole, use stronger words and for the grammar and syntax stuff, say your essay out loud and...
Writing Feedbackmema - Jan 5, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 5, 2015
|The two illustrations show Coca-cola Company's percentage of sales in a pie graph
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jan 4, 2015 / Lady Elle - Jan 4, 2015
|Life without changes means life without emotions. Psychologists help is suggested.
3 - Keep in mind the spelling and that mistakes such as "depretion" when i assume you really mean "depression" can...
Writing Feedbacknaghmeh_ms - Jan 4, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 4, 2015
|A person develops different qualities and traits as he grows up from a child into an adult
4 - Thank you vincenm for your candid opinion. How can I improve my intro and conclusion? I learned from a...
Writing Feedbacksyedali1 - Jan 3, 2015 / syedali1 - Jan 4, 2015
|Waste Disposal Method, destroying dangerous waste products - Pie charts
4 - It is not stated which part of Korea is using that particular method of waste disposal, so I think...
Writing Feedbackviolethoang - Jan 2, 2015 / Lady Elle - Jan 5, 2015
|Why do you do what you do? The point of reading is something every already reader knows
Writing Feedbackcastor - Jan 2, 2015 / samkazmi - Jan 3, 2015
|Governments and individuals collective responsibility may be solution for the global warming.
2 - The greenhouse gases are consisted by various gases, but the most typical factor is Carbon Dioxide, which is mostly...
Writing Feedbackyen_vely - Jan 2, 2015 / stretchthelimit - Jan 2, 2015
|Further study is necessary - many young people want to start earning money as soon as possible.
2 - Change words in the essay like "I Think" to something like "I Know" to show that your firm on...
Writing Feedbackwangyu - Jan 1, 2015 / smunoz23 - Jan 1, 2015
|It is clear to be seen that NGOs, social groups and communities are ubiquitous in recent years
Writing Feedbackmanutd9111993 - Jan 1, 2015 / manutd9111993 - Jan 1, 2015
|Changes of the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. IELTS Task 1
3 - Thank you Kevin for your compliment and the problems you pointed out also. I'll try harder next time :)...
Writing Feedbackmanutd9111993 - Jan 1, 2015 / manutd9111993 - Jan 1, 2015
|In the north of Colombia there are a small native people who live on the top of mountains
2 - The sentence has some grammar I suggest using this website called ginger for grammar correction it helped me...
Writing Feedbackjhon81 - Dec 30, 2014 / nada1998 - Dec 31, 2014
|Nationality of natural persons in relation to the succession of States. Country: Indonesia
3 - Thanks, you're right, now that i read it again i realise i should work on a conclusion that creates...
Writing FeedbackCamilabido - Dec 29, 2014 / Camilabido - Dec 30, 2014
|SPECIAL NEEDS KIDS DESERVE BETTER
2 - With the right accommodations they can have equal educational opportunity. (I think it's more accurate to say this instead...
Writing FeedbackLor2062005 - Dec 29, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Jan 1, 2015
|Higher education is the surest ticket to a better career life. What is important in schools?
2 - great job of providing specific examples. A couple grammar issues in the first sentence of the last paragraph. From...
Writing FeedbackJadewan - Dec 28, 2014 / jricha - Dec 28, 2014
|Sugar; The new addiction. A change is needed to help us help ourselves in what we eat.
Writing FeedbackDanV - Dec 27, 2014 / keavdarapper - Dec 27, 2014
|Laser Fungal Therapy Essay for Research Project
2 - Insurances do not cover... It might be clearer to say 'Insurance policies do not.." But that is nitpicking; I...
Writing Feedbackstephspecht - Dec 27, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Jan 1, 2015
|Anti-radiation scarf and poncho stanford intellectual vitality
2 - Well, this is a very interesting take on radiation and how it can affect the mindset of people. This...
Writing Feedbackskwangar - Dec 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 28, 2014
|It is important that children should study hard at school. But playing sport is also necessary.
Writing FeedbackMisstuyet94 - Dec 27, 2014 / kibz95 - Jan 18, 2015
|I've written 3 paragraphs of urban life - an introduction, central paragraph and conclusion
2 - Sahar, these are not 3 paragraphs. A paragraph is composed of 3 sentences minimum with a specific topic discussed...
Writing Feedbackmissytender - Dec 26, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 26, 2014
|There is no future for public transport because travelling by car is so much more convenient.
2 - This is just my opinion, but if you don't have a word limit I would elaborate each paragraph. Also...
Writing FeedbackDieuHuong - Dec 26, 2014 / freedl21 - Dec 26, 2014
|Fame should be a surprise, not a goal.
2 - Im assuming this is suppose to 5 Paragraph essay style? If so, you need to indicate your thesis -...
Writing Feedbacknikkisia - Dec 24, 2014 / Pereirar23 - Dec 24, 2014
|I believe we can have some measure in place to help tackle the environmental woes. IELTS TASK2
Writing FeedbackSummer LIN - Dec 23, 2014 / eddies - Dec 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - Personal saving as a percentage of personal income
Writing Feedbackmidorimido - Dec 23, 2014 / eddies - Dec 24, 2014
|Misconceptions about volunteer work and see their work in the right perspective
Writing Feedbackshtpcks - Dec 23, 2014 / jaark3927 - Dec 23, 2014
|It is clear that the amount of acid rain emissions in the four given sectors declined considerably
Writing Feedbacklinh_bui - Dec 22, 2014 / TheBestK - Dec 23, 2014
|The Starry Night and city life NYU supplement essay
5 - Love the Van Gogh quote. Beautifully written.This is under the wordcount so you can write about 50 words more....
Writing Feedbackmelissae - Dec 21, 2014 / zeeconomist - Dec 29, 2014
|Meat: Mystery and History - Pomona College Supplemental Essay
6 - Thank you for taking my suggestions into consideration. I can see the marked difference in the two essay versions...
Writing FeedbackMaxbradley - Dec 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 22, 2014
|My personal preference is do not have pets at all; it's not good idea to treat them as family member
2 - I did some rewrites, see if this sounds better! great ideas though Pets should be treated like family...
Writing FeedbackBlackS12 - Dec 21, 2014 / Maxbradley - Dec 21, 2014
|It is not easy to describe what happiness is. IELTS essay topic.
3 - Happiness is considered important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important for achieving happiness?...
Writing FeedbackAzeez - Dec 21, 2014 / Azeez - Dec 21, 2014
|[IELTS] Writing Task 1 - The Unemployment Rate in 2 Advanced Countries
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / kamikazexoxo - Jan 8, 2015
|Transporting food by air now provides market opportunities both exporting and importing countries.
3 - Air transport has experienced the fastest growth. For this reason, some people prefer selecting this as the main...
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / eddies - Dec 21, 2014
|Questions 1-6 - openings and finales only
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / SHanafi - Jan 2, 2015
|Children can lead a better life if they gain the ability of both competition and cooperation
3 - Thank you very much, SHanafi. It's so nice of you. I think it's better than before and I'll follow...
Writing Feedbacktcyy - Dec 18, 2014 / tcyy - Dec 21, 2014
|Some views and opinion about learning methods for children - IELTS
Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Dec 18, 2014 / ruwchii - Dec 19, 2014
|IELTS - the number of young people perpetrating a crime has risen significantly.
5 - The sharp increase of juvenile delinquentcy has been happened due to several causes In my view your conclusion...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 18, 2014 / Azeez - Dec 21, 2014
|Dramatical increase of crimes among teenagers - looking for solutions. IELTS
Writing Feedbackayulia - Dec 18, 2014 / PJmustbebetter - Dec 18, 2014
|First impression is an essential appear in workplace - employees should dress smartly - IELTS TASK 2
2 - Appearance enables to influence people and potentially impact of how a business performs effectively. A well-groomed appearance can...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Dec 17, 2014 / Remansou - Dec 17, 2014
|Ielts - Nowadays space exploration gain more attention and money than health and education sectors.
Writing FeedbackMissao - Dec 17, 2014 / moonvlin - Dec 18, 2014
|Replies for different essay questions - Introduction and Conclusion
2 - In my personal view, study in group and self study provide some beneficial advantages for schoolchildren. Let...
Writing Feedbackayulia - Dec 17, 2014 / tiaDS - Dec 18, 2014
|Number of people has increased since 1800 and will increase continuously and then will decrease
5 - 1. Quantity is not appropriate to alter people, use "number" instead. 2. You make a circumstance. If...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Dec 18, 2014
|International student's change in share who graduate from university in different Canadian provinces
2 - Let me try to rewrite this paragraph: The bar chart compares the number of alumni of Canadian University in...
Writing Feedbackimmobulus - Dec 17, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 17, 2014
|Working habits are significantly changed - people can work from home using modern technology
3 - hi somasalim thanks for correction which is covered by your question. I just have realized that I used double...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Dec 17, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 21, 2014
|Six prompts; Introduction and Conclusion only - IELTS Writing Task 2
5 - ALL THINGS CONSIDERED, TO SUM UP, IN SUMMARY, TO SUMMARIZE, IN SHORT, IN A NUTSHELL,TO PUT IT IN A...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 17, 2014 / mkthanh - Dec 18, 2014
|Both - public services and impressive buildings obtain income for a city. IELTS Task 2
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Dec 16, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 17, 2014
|Chocolate bar is made by Theobroma cacao. The first step in making chocolate is grinding. [IELTS]
3 - Let me rewrite this sentence In manufacturing cocoa butter and cocoa powder, the cocoa liquor is pressed...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Dec 16, 2014 / ruwchii - Dec 17, 2014
|[IELTS] Writing Task 1 - The Process of Making Chocolate Bar and its Changes in the Price
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 16, 2014 / ayulia - Dec 16, 2014
|Considerations and factors influence the universities budget allocation to meet students' demand
2 - Try to type as much as possible within thirty minutes, maybe 700 words and avoid using one word twice...
Writing Feedbackkid09321 - Dec 16, 2014 / Zyy242 - Dec 16, 2014
|'it reached a peak of 34.7% in 2011' - National Recycling Rates, 1960 to 2011
2 - There are some missing punctuation such as '.' and ',' There are also incomplete sentences. Try again,...
Writing Feedbackimmobulus - Dec 16, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 16, 2014
|'Overall, there are two type of cocoa after pressed.' - IELTS Writing Task 1 : Chocolate Bar
7 - Separate your intro and overview some issues : plural singular, punctuation and subject-verb agreement. This is a "petite"...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Dec 18, 2014
|The diagram ilustrates how to make chocolates and the pie chart describes the price of chocolate bar
2 - it should be illustrates you should use present participle for the word 'produce' because the sentence...
Writing Feedbackayulia - Dec 15, 2014 / ruwchii - Dec 16, 2014
|Critique about the article "Land, Territory and Identity"
2 - Here is an idea for making the first sentence easier to read: The article named "Land, Territory and Identity"...
Writing FeedbackMahaliyev - Dec 15, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2014
|How chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up - [IELTS Writing Task 1]
3 - Hi PJ Maybe you should replace the percentage (37%,34%,15%,10%,4% ) with other words to avoid repetitions....
Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Dec 15, 2014 / ayulia - Dec 16, 2014
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