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|Export earnings 2015-2016. IELTS writing task 1
3 - I suggest you to search for more model task 1 essays to have a smoother approach in writing. You've...
Writing FeedbackTdtd10 - Jan 24, 2020 / juhuihjijuh - Jan 24, 2020
|Animal products no longer needed?
4 - @wizardA Thank you for your feedback. @Holt Could you please highlight grammar issues in my essay? Thanks for your...
Writing FeedbackHanoian - Jan 23, 2020 / Hanoian - Jan 28, 2020
|Some people believe mental strength is more important for success in sports while others think...
5 - @quynhnhi2801 Your essay sounds cool, however you need to go through your grammar again as they are some errors....
Writing Feedbackquynhnhi2801 - Jan 22, 2020 / ReginaOtu - Jan 27, 2020
|IELTS task 1 - comparing three types of food prices
8 - You should try some advance phrase to boost your LR score. For example, in the ovrall part, instead of...
Writing Feedbackjuhuihjijuh - Jan 21, 2020 / thaolinh - Feb 5, 2020
|Certain talents, for instance for music and sport - acquired or learned?
3 - This is another example of a 5 paragraph essay that became tangential in response because of a misrepresentation of...
Writing FeedbackAmanda92 - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS TASK 1 - the number of live births per thousand of population per year in China and the USA
Writing Feedbackthaihuynh - Jan 20, 2020 / thaihuynh - Jan 22, 2020
|IELTS - Discuss whether employees should be forced to disclosure their private data; job interview
2 - The paraphrasing in the first paragraph is incomplete. You omitted the paraphrase of the original instruction, which made your...
Writing FeedbackRachelrc - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] To accept or try to improve a bad situation?
2 - You have not properly discussed the given topic. Neither did you properly respond to the task requirements. Look at...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS2; We should invest in advanced railway lines for fast trains to facilitate our commuting
Writing FeedbackRwannajjar - Jan 19, 2020 / Ulaai - Jan 20, 2020
|Essay about woven baskets from the prehistoric village of Palea (GRE)
Writing Feedbackchiwchang - Jan 19, 2020 / chiwchang - Jan 20, 2020
|How to Help the Impact of Social Media on Children: Rough Draft
2 - The essay lacks a range of discussion development throughout the presentation. These are not even complete paragraph presentations. It...
Writing Feedbacklauramphillips - Jan 19, 2020 / Holt - Jan 19, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Video games: harmless fun or useful educational tool?
6 - I think you should avoid from using the phrases '' as mentioned above" or "into something'' because i find...
Writing FeedbackNgoc Lam - Jan 18, 2020 / Hung Dang - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Curfew effects on teens
6 - I don't think it is necessary to write like this ... during weekdays as well as weekends. It is...
Writing Feedbackprab0694 - Jan 17, 2020 / trvaanh - Jan 20, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task I: UK Cinema Attendance of different age citizens, from 1990 to 2010
5 - Your vocaulary really makes me amazed. But I suggest that you should harmonize between 2 bodies in terms of...
Writing Feedbackkanzanism - Jan 17, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 31, 2020
|IELTS WT2: Studying other country's cultures
2 - Where is your response to the prompt requirement? I do not see it in the final sentence of your...
Writing FeedbackThanghoang - Jan 17, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|IELTS 2. Children should always follow parents advice till they become more independent and mature
2 - One of the first things that the examiner will check for with your essay is the word count. You...
Writing Feedbackdikyung - Jan 17, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because ...
3 - @Holt Thank you for your comments. I was aiming for a "balanced" view response not "strong " or "partially...
Writing Feedbackparviz - Jan 16, 2020 / parviz - Jan 17, 2020
|Opinion Essay. City or country?
2 - This essay is riddled with grammatical errors. The sentences do not make any sense in most instances due to...
Writing FeedbackMartaJones - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Ielts 1 - The proportion of household expenditures between Japan and Malaysia in the same year 2010
Writing Feedbackhau15122001 - Jan 15, 2020 / hau15122001 - Jan 16, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - UK telephone calls, by category, 1995-2002 - local, international, mobiles
Writing Feedbackbestsp - Jan 15, 2020 / bestsp - Jan 16, 2020
|Task 1: the percentage of water for different purpose - industry, agriculture and domestic
2 - I cannot accurately review your work without the chart / image provided for this task. Please remember to include...
Writing Feedbackkelly33 - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|IELTS task2: man-made activities are making global temperatures higher
3 - Thank you! That is really helpful. I will practice how to paraphrase according to you suggestion!...
Writing FeedbackAnnie97 - Jan 15, 2020 / Annie97 - Jan 17, 2020
|IELTS line graph - task 1 - thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
Writing Feedbackjuhuihjijuh - Jan 14, 2020 / trvaanh - Jan 20, 2020
|TOEFL ESSAY - About restriction for marketing strategies directed at kids (eg. TV's advertising)
2 - It is not a question of whether more regulation is required when it comes to advertising to children, it...
Writing Feedbackkokot - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|The statistics of afforestation on all continents over the world
4 - It will be extremely difficult for you to gain a passing score for this type of presentation. The main...
Writing Feedbackangelaaa - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|The internet provide us with easy connection to other people, however it also isolates us
2 - The complete prompt for this essay indicates that requires a clear degree of dis/agreement with the given topic. As...
Writing FeedbackMsm87 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|ielts task 2; Millions of people doing unhealthy activities which are harmful
3 - The introduction must accurately summarize the content of the prompt in order for it to gain a proper TA...
Writing Feedbackmichellejoy1222 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Even in this new era, millions of people still do not have enough food to eat
Writing Feedbackbehnooshsamavat - Jan 13, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile: Tell us about who you are. (The Idealist)
Writing FeedbackFamai - Jan 13, 2020 / karmalea - Jan 13, 2020
|Teaching child and mental development - IELTS academic writing task 2
2 - First up, do not exaggerate the importance of the discussions being presented. The prompt offered you a simple discussion....
Writing Feedbackminhtrile010 - Jan 12, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Car theft, house burgling and street robbery - statistics in two countries
Writing FeedbackPsycRicky - Jan 12, 2020 / PsycRicky - Jan 13, 2020
|Task1: The diagram below shows the process of milk production
Writing Feedbackhahahazh - Jan 12, 2020 / hahahazh - Jan 12, 2020
|People who have a lot of money are the happiest. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - @Holt Thanks for your feedback. It is very useful. I want to improve my writing skills. If you were...
Writing FeedbackMaria158 - Jan 11, 2020 / Maria158 - Jan 12, 2020
|Essay about pros and cons of moving from home country
2 - Your presentation is riddled with grammatical errors and sentence structure problems. For starters, you seem to have a problem...
Writing Feedbackhtnanh2310 - Jan 11, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1: the number of university graduates in Canada over fifteen years
Writing FeedbackAnnie97 - Jan 11, 2020 / Annie97 - Jan 12, 2020
|@Forest Disaster in Australia
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. It is the first time I try to write something. Honestly, i don't have...
Writing Feedbackgarethhuy - Jan 11, 2020 / garethhuy - Jan 12, 2020
|People consider computers to be the most important breakthrough
3 - Well, you certainly made your opinion clear in the essay, even with the problematic grammar and sentence presentations. You...
Writing Feedbackngoan - Jan 10, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|Goods from Japan and US - HOW TO WRITE A TASK 1 OF IELTS
3 - The introduction paragraph is incomplete. Since this is a summary of the graph information, it should contain a list...
Writing Feedbacktdung512 - Jan 9, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|Some believe homework should be given everyday, others do not in order to success in school. Discuss
Writing Feedbackapprajapati - Jan 8, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people
2 - You created a contradiction in your introduction. In the first sentence, you claim that college education is important. Yet,...
Writing FeedbackRM_3313 - Jan 8, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: THE GROWTH OF ONLINE SHOPPING
Writing FeedbackYuki Nguyen - Jan 7, 2020 / Yuki Nguyen - Jan 14, 2020
|Rules to remember when driving at high speed
2 - There are several misuses of descriptive words in this essay. Instead of "place", the correct term is "position". When...
Writing FeedbackJadeNguyen - Jan 7, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|The number of Ashdown Museum visitors before and after refurbishment for a one year period each
2 - This essay is short by 2 words to meet the minimum word requirement. You will be scored down with...
Writing Feedbackminnuee - Jan 6, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|Aging populations in countries - WRITING TASK 1 Ielts
5 - I suggest that you should pharaphrase a few words like percentage, proportion <=> figure, then <=> over the following...
Writing Feedbackanhthythy - Jan 5, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 30, 2020
|Overpopulation in urban areas has led to some serious problems. Identify some problems and solutions
3 - Your presentation is good but the ideas are little developed. It would be better if you learn to use...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Ngoc Huon - Jan 5, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Topic: instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a to coexist, Agree or Disagree
2 - Your thesis paragraph, also known as paragraph one, tends to be confusing to read due to the problematic sentence...
Writing Feedbackluctuantu1990 - Jan 3, 2020 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|Developed countries should provide technical aids rather than financial aid to developing countries
2 - Right off the bat I saw some punctuation conventions that you failed to follow such as using a comma...
Writing FeedbackAnnie97 - Jan 3, 2020 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|Task 2: some people think that video games are advantageous - opinion essay
Writing FeedbackThuytran9977 - Jan 3, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: SHOULD WE ACCEPT WHAT LIFE GAVE US OR STAND UP AND FIGHT
4 - A personal opinion should not be presented int he introduction paraphrase because there isn't enough sentence space left for...
Writing Feedbackemillia2003 - Jan 2, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|Writing Task 2 IELTS Essay about having a satisfying career
2 - With only 50 minutes to complete both writing tasks, I do not advise that you write more than 275-300...
Writing Feedbacklinhlinh208 - Jan 2, 2020 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: Some people think that the use of computers should be restricted. Do you agree or not?
4 - For the TA score, due to the lack of proper response to the given prompt, this will most likely...
Writing Feedbackplinh175 - Jan 1, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Day-by-day people's lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What is the reason and how to solve
3 - There are spelling errors in this essay (thier = their) which could have been caught and corrected through proof...
Writing Feedbackchloeec - Dec 31, 2019 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Regional household recycling rates - MY FIRST IELTS WRITING TASK 1
3 - Try to write at least 3 sentences for every paragraph. That way you increase the word count and your...
Writing FeedbackTria170393 - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|A tendency to let children approach the basic education earlier than at the average school age
3 - In your introduction paragraph, you have an incomplete sentence. You refer to 7. A reader who does not know...
Writing Feedbackpenny0127 - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Transformation in transportation infrastructures regarding the routes accessing to a city hospital
2 - 197 words can be considered an acceptable number of words to write for this task, which has a 150...
Writing FeedbackEmily Chiang - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - FRIENDS WITH PEOPLE WITH SAME OPINION OR NOT
4 - There is a lack of clarity in the introduction paragraph. Your paraphrase does not include a reference to the...
Writing FeedbackeNVi - Dec 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Writing Test 2: Job Subject - a work suitable for men or women
2 - Trang, your scored will be helped if you write at least 275-300 words instead of only a little over...
Writing Feedbacklavitaebella - Dec 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2020
|IELTS - Task 1 - Physical Activity awareness among different sexes and age people in Australia
4 - The summary paragraph is missing a trending statement at the end. The summary paragraph is the first paragraph of...
Writing FeedbackRwannajjar - Dec 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|I agree that the media coverage of celebrities have a negative impact on children
4 - Points will be deducted for the missing 25 words. The TA assessment for this essay falls under a 4...
Writing FeedbackPHANTAMANH - Dec 25, 2019 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Task 2: Should air travel be restricted due to its impact on environment?
2 - @phuongthuy1212 Hi there. Thanks for coming to the site! I hope that this feedback welcomes you properly into the...
Writing Feedbackphuongthuy1212 - Dec 24, 2019 / Maria - Jan 2, 2020
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