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|TOEFL - task 2 writing - the independent one - foreign language.
4 - This is not IELTS task. This is TOEFL, which has different writing rubrics. I appreciate your response, but can...
Writing FeedbackStevenSameh1512 - Dec 27, 2018 / StevenSameh1512 - Dec 28, 2018
|PROTECTION WILDLIFE POPULATION - What can we do to help?
3 - Han, the essay is asking you to discuss about wildlife. That does not include flora. Therefore, you should not...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Dec 27, 2018 / Holt - Dec 28, 2018
|Keep healthy by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than a healthy lifestyle
NEW - to be fit or to have health issues? These days, too many people maintain their health by relying...
Writing FeedbackLily Potter - Dec 26, 2018 / — -
|Asking citizens to do military service or some social work - is it a good idea? Essay for Toefl exam
3 - Sara, this essay will automatically receive a failing score due to its inability to respond to the prompt requirements....
Writing Feedbacksou1978 - Dec 26, 2018 / Holt - Dec 27, 2018
|Should gay marriage be allowed? The controversial topic.
2 - Your arguments are well supported and answer the question clearly. I would just make a couple edits. 1....
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Dec 24, 2018 / Junghakkyo - Dec 26, 2018
|IELTS Writting _ Task 1_ The bricks manufacturing process in the construction sector.
2 - As I can't see the flow chart, I can revise your grammer. ......dug from these ground will be....... The...
Writing Feedbackxichvan - Dec 24, 2018 / StevenSameh1512 - Dec 24, 2018
|Dangerous sports. People are free to select which activities make them feel happy.
2 - Overall the essay concept is good, but I believe that you should try to find synonyms to some of...
Writing Feedbackjenn2001 - Dec 24, 2018 / Leihn - Dec 25, 2018
|IELTS task 1: Describe the trend of three diffrent type of domestic access to modern technology
Writing Feedbacknxuanloc - Dec 24, 2018 / nxuanloc - Dec 28, 2018
|It is becoming increasingly popular among students to have a year off between finishing school
2 - Hi. Your essay is quite good in term of lexical resources and reasons provided. However, you were over discussing...
Writing FeedbackGingerlove - Dec 24, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 25, 2018
|Vehicle-free days in an urban center : do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? - IELTS task 2
4 - Hi. Your essay is well-written with clear reasons and sentences. As the Contributor said, I want to emphasize for...
Writing Feedbackdhuyen135 - Dec 24, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 27, 2018
|TOPIC: what can be done to encourage young people to become responsible members of society
2 - Chin, for starters, it would be best if you learn how to paraphrase the original prompt rather than simply...
Writing FeedbackChu - Dec 24, 2018 / Holt - Dec 26, 2018
|Admission essay. The topic is - You have 650 words. Take a risk.
3 - Andrey, when the essay prompt asked you to take a risk, what the instruction meant was for you to...
Writing FeedbackLeihn - Dec 23, 2018 / Holt - Dec 24, 2018
|Some prefer online courses to study and they think it is better. Others prefer classroom education.
3 - Dewa, your essay could use stronger adjectives in its presentation. Rather than using the term "strong arguments", try to...
Writing Feedbacktopswijaya - Dec 22, 2018 / Holt - Dec 23, 2018
|The quantity of requests received by the Tourist Information Office in an urban area
2 - Linh, for starters, you should not use an apostrophe after the S in "customers'". Use the term "customer's" to...
Writing Feedbacklinhhlinhh - Dec 21, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|Underground Station passenger numbers in London! The line graph.
3 - KD, you have shown a very good understanding of the chart. However, your presentation is not always at its...
Writing FeedbackKDHo - Dec 21, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|Computers will replace teachers in the future?
3 - ..., particularly in education. ... the opinion that one day teachers will be obsolete in the classroom computer will...
Writing Feedbackthuduong19 - Dec 21, 2018 / topswijaya - Dec 24, 2018
|Distance-learning progammes cannot bring the same benefits of attending college or university. True?
4 - It woul be better to replace "My view is that self-study ..." with "l totally (or somewhat) agree with...
Writing FeedbackKiritokun - Dec 20, 2018 / topswijaya - Dec 24, 2018
|In graph the tendency of three categories of fast food consumed (hamburger, fish & chips and pizza)
2 - I feel like your essay is a little scattered, because you keep jumping from one unit to the other,...
Writing FeedbackCrystal Pham - Dec 20, 2018 / ch15hann - Dec 21, 2018
|The range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich and poor. Is it true?
4 - In most instances, that could be done. However, since you changed the prompt discussion requirements, your essay cannot be...
Writing FeedbackJusRandom - Dec 20, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|Essay: Parents often give children everything they ask for and do what they like. Is it good or not?
3 - Tran, your opening paraphrase was almost completely correct. You did well by paraphrasing the topic for discussion. You also...
Writing Feedbackthinhtri - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 21, 2018
|The world has become more advanced than in the past. The family structure and capacity has altered.
3 - Annantha, you have a noun phrase problem in this essay. The term "negative changes" should have been written as...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 21, 2018
|Should pictures replace words on TV news and in newspapers?
3 - Han, your opening paragraph is very confusing to read. You have to remember that there is a difference between...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 20, 2018
|The authority is expected to allocate more budget to railroads instead of motorways
Writing Feedbackyuu483 - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 20, 2018
|Parents have a responsibility to both care for and prepare their children as they approach adulthood
Writing FeedbackTHI - Dec 19, 2018 / THI - Dec 20, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Nowadays people concentrated on their job decide to delay owning a child
3 - The problem related to word count has already mentioned above so I won't discuss further. There are other problems...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 19, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 28, 2018
|Different standpoints regarding business size that provide utmost benefits to its employee; TOEFL
2 - Working for a huge firm companies typically are capable I would say "one thing that need to be taken...
Writing Feedbacku5410154 - Dec 18, 2018 / leothewriter - Dec 18, 2018
|Sharing freely information without caring the importance or value of it
3 - Alicia, you once again misunderstood the prompt discussion instructions. This is a 5 paragraph discussion essay that highlights 2...
Writing FeedbackAlicelanphuong - Dec 18, 2018 / Holt - Dec 19, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Today, humans who are staying in big towns must be confronted with lots of challenge.
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 17, 2018 / annanthaayu - Dec 19, 2018
|In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under pressure to work hard.
7 - @HanNguyen5010 the question is from 150 to 200 words ths so much @Alicelanphuong ohhh...ths so much ^^...
Writing Feedbacktrantuandiem - Dec 17, 2018 / trantuandiem - Dec 22, 2018
|IELTS Task2: Social media and sharing personal information on different websites does have risks
2 - Mohammed, please read up on the use of subject sentences in Task 2 presentations. Try to avoid using memorized...
Writing Feedbackbasheertoad9 - Dec 17, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and TV, people do less physical activity
2 - This is a measurement based opinion essay. As such, the prompt clearly requires you to use only one point...
Writing Feedbackchautua - Dec 17, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|Asking for a letter of reference to apply for a job
3 - Swetha, when writing to your teacher, you must remember to show respect for the position of the educator at...
Writing FeedbackSSIELTS - Dec 17, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|The governance and big companies may be permitted to upgrade the environment - not the individuals?
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 17, 2018 / annanthaayu - Dec 17, 2018
|Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise.
3 - Doung, you turned this into a personal response essay by the way that you structured your opening paraphrase. You...
Writing Feedbackduongnt9911 - Dec 16, 2018 / Holt - Dec 17, 2018
|The question about the impact of parents' job on children's future job
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are...
Writing Feedbackpouryapars - Dec 16, 2018 / — -
|The table reveals the threefold of national consumer expenditure category
2 - Quoc, unfortunately, the Task 1 essay requires a minimum of 150 words for the presentation. Since you only wrote...
Writing FeedbackSherk - Dec 16, 2018 / Holt - Dec 17, 2018
|If you had to spend a year in either past or future, which year would you travel to and why?
2 - Kartik, first of all, remove the "we" and references to time travel with your girlfriend. The reviewer wants only...
Writing Feedbackkartikt - Dec 15, 2018 / Holt - Dec 16, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task2: Throwaway culture reasons and consequences
2 - Mohammed, your prompt paraphrase is too close to the original one to be considered a personal version of the...
Writing Feedbackbasheertoad9 - Dec 15, 2018 / Holt - Dec 16, 2018
|The only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel/work in a foreign country
3 - Nguyen, the essay is asking you to discuss both points of public view before you write your personal opinion....
Writing FeedbackAlicelanphuong - Dec 15, 2018 / Holt - Dec 16, 2018
|A common belief that unpaid community services should be made compulsory for high schoolers.
3 - Hi, I just rewrite my thesis statement. Could you please recheck it for me. Thanks a lot. In my...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Dec 15, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 16, 2018
|Illiteracy is undeniably an overwhelming issue to deal with, and it's not only a third world problem
NEW - causes and effect of illiteracy on society Illiteracy has traditionally been viewed as largely a third world problem....
Writing Feedbackduongtran - Dec 14, 2018 / — -
|In your opinion, what has been the most significant invention of the past 200 years?
2 - I am not entirely sure whether this essay was supposed to be a creative writting work or an argumentative...
Writing Feedbackpinarsima - Dec 14, 2018 / kartikt - Dec 15, 2018
|TOEFL Essay Question 2 - Protecting kids from owning cell phones with Internet access
3 - You wrote too many words for the Task 2 essay. The ideal, owing to editing requirements, is only within...
Writing FeedbackArvindvenkat - Dec 14, 2018 / Holt - Dec 15, 2018
|The extinction of animal species. What causes this? How to protect our fauna?
2 - Nella, please use a timer the next time you write a Task 2 practice essay. You will find that...
Writing Feedbacknellawatyahmad26 - Dec 12, 2018 / Holt - Dec 13, 2018
|Should authorities spend money on transportation infrastructure investments or not?
2 - Minh, there are instances when writing that the composer of the text needs to use simpler language to create...
Writing Feedbackminh2001 - Dec 11, 2018 / Holt - Dec 12, 2018
|Many students have to study subjects which they do not like.
3 - Hi. Your essay was really excellent in the quality of vocabulary and grammar usages, and I am sure to...
Writing FeedbackHamidNajafi - Dec 9, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 9, 2018
|How has globalisation had an impact on transportation in your country? (changes and causes)
3 - Hi. It is good when you cite out the timing milestones in the first paragraph, from bicycles, motorbikes and...
Writing Feedbacklhnbich - Dec 8, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 9, 2018
|Should lower secondary school students play video games?
Writing Feedbacktrantuandiem - Dec 8, 2018 / lhnbich - Dec 8, 2018
|People cannot eliminate the habit of smoking
5 - A "cancer stick" is a slang English term. That is not acceptable in formal English which is a requirement...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Dec 8, 2018 / Holt - Dec 9, 2018
|Write about a journey where you got lost to send to the magazine.
3 - Hi Nicole, it appears that you have confused some of the commonly used English words in your essay. "turn...
Writing FeedbackNicole Nguyen - Dec 8, 2018 / Holt - Dec 9, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2: buying products from other countries.
4 - Hi, I think the main problem is the way you write the thesis statement. The question is "to what...
Writing Feedbackforielts - Dec 7, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 15, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Many parents believe that their children should read only serious, educational books.
3 - I can see that you just wrote only positive impacts of reading amusement books and that's your personal preference....
Writing FeedbackJSH - Dec 7, 2018 / Supantha - Dec 8, 2018
|The healthy lifestyle has a direct bearing on our dignity and well-being.
2 - Nicoel, you did not properly represent the prompt discussion instructions in the prompt paraphrase although you discussed the opinions...
Writing Feedbackforielts - Dec 6, 2018 / Holt - Dec 7, 2018
|Introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum to deal with an obesity issue
3 - Phuong, this essay will get a TA score of 1, which will effectively prevent you from getting a passing...
Writing Feedbackthaodang119 - Dec 6, 2018 / Holt - Dec 7, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1 (Academic, barchart) - Employment Rates by Country, 1995-2005
2 - Hi, I guess you linked the wrong image so I cannot give any specific suggestions regarding your essy....
Writing FeedbackBichThuy29 - Dec 5, 2018 / forielts - Dec 7, 2018
|Living in a big city or staying in a village? Both have definite benefits for people.
2 - Nguyet, you cannot separate the word cannot into "can not" as that would be a conflicting reference. "Can" means...
Writing Feedbackmissmoon - Dec 5, 2018 / Holt - Dec 6, 2018
|Learning to distinguish between the right and wrong at an early age is very essential for children
2 - D, the format of your essay is incorrect. You do not place the degree of your agreement at the...
Writing Feedbackphi12012000 - Dec 5, 2018 / Holt - Dec 6, 2018
|Ielts Task 2：Increasing the price petrol is the best ways to solve growing traffic and
3 - Hi, I think the main problem of your essay is the essay structure. In specific, you did not fully...
Writing Feedbackpbaimar - Dec 5, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 15, 2018
|Task 1: 2 flow chart (average monthly spend on children's sports and participation in 3 sports)
3 - hi, Despite the suggestions given above, there are other two things you should pay attention: Do not write...
Writing Feedbackthai1491 - Dec 5, 2018 / forielts - Dec 7, 2018
|A Treacherous Trip to Ratchaprapa Dam
2 - Thaksanpaphon, please remember that you use the determiner "an" before any word that starts with a vowel or vowel...
Writing Feedbackpuppy1111 - Dec 4, 2018 / Holt - Dec 5, 2018
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