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|IELTS: IMPROVED MEDICAL CARE > LIFE EXPECTANCY - advantages vs disadvantages.
2 - Is there a word limit? If not, I would suggest elaborating on your main points. Maybe bring up some...
Writing Feedbackkttrung - Oct 16, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 16, 2014
|Life is a complex thing. Every single second is our lesson as well as experience.
2 - Vns, I would like to suggest that you draw the example of this essay from your personal experience in...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 16, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2014
|Biometric - cost, reliability and public acceptance of fingerprint and iris
2 - ...to protect their database and information from theft or loss, stealing or losing, ... and this is done by...
Writing Feedbackhaval - Oct 16, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Oct 21, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY: Many people are afraid to leave their homes because of the fear of crime.
5 - Your conclusion looks like an introduction. In fact, never write from my point of view in conclusion....
Writing Feedbackgingerfly - Oct 15, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 20, 2014
|Argumentative Essay on "Jeremy" by Pearl Jam
2 - Rebecca, what you have written is more of an opinion essay than an argumentative essay. That is because the...
Writing Feedbackbech - Oct 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 18, 2014
|TOEFL: It is essential to control how much time you spent watching TV or movies
Writing FeedbackCarolst - Oct 15, 2014 / Carolst - Oct 15, 2014
|Online learning is becoming a convenient way in which many people are obtaining their degrees.
Writing Feedbacksangnhoxq2 - Oct 15, 2014 / sangnhoxq2 - Oct 16, 2014
|International travel agencies are going to reduce their fees for people. Discuss advantages and dis.
4 - Do not utilize,, in my opinion,, in conclusion. In fact, use it in introduction instead. Moreover, try to work...
Writing Feedbackanthonynguyen - Oct 15, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 17, 2014
|What impact on children has the lack of social and emotional learning from parents and teachers?
Writing FeedbackPqowieuryt - Oct 15, 2014 / Pqowieuryt - Oct 15, 2014
|War is a thrilling escape from the laziness of peace - essay
Writing FeedbackOroro - Oct 15, 2014 / Ororo - Oct 15, 2014
|Summary About Palestine
2 - The war started when 3 Israeli teenagers were kidnapped and killed in June, and in July Israel kidnapped 3...
Writing Feedbackreal_abdullah - Oct 14, 2014 / AlinaSkripets - Oct 15, 2014
|Factory and its aftermaths
8 - Vns, when it comes to verifying the content of your essay, I cannot assure you that the TOEFL examiner...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 17, 2014
|Games are pivotal for adults, they broaden their mind and can reduce stresses
2 - Whenever it comes to games, the majority of people will consider itthem to be fit only for children. However,...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 14, 2014 / AlinaSkripets - Oct 15, 2014
|Internet have opened up new doors for people who need recent information or news
2 - Hamed, you have written an essay that leaves its main thought process under developed because you have tried to...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Oct 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|IELTS : Children are engaged in paid job. Discuss both views and give your opinion
2 - Anh, your desire to learn how to write in English without help from actual classes is admirable. Your work...
Writing FeedbackJennNguyen - Oct 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 14, 2014
|IELTS: The graph illustrates how goods were transported in the UK
2 - It is obvious thatobviously road transportation washas been the this numberhad increased dramatically to 97 million ona par in...
Writing FeedbackKaty Curie - Oct 14, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 14, 2014
|The problems that Facebook can cause for us.
6 - Do not forget about layout. Moreover, attempt to rephrase your reasons in conclusion. It is better....
Writing FeedbackVera Canderine - Oct 14, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 18, 2014
|IELTS: Four countries comparison - Japan spending for food was highest with approximately 23%
3 - Thank Katy Curie for your detailed comment, I red carefully I saw many nice word. I'll notice your...
Writing Feedbacknguyenhien0907 - Oct 13, 2014 / nguyenhien0907 - Oct 13, 2014
|Written assignment, a midterm sales letter for scientific writing course
4 - that climate change is occurring, ; however, there are those scientists who Which begs the question,: why worry about...
Writing Feedbackparth5693 - Oct 12, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 14, 2014
|Lying has disturbed millions of relationships and transformed the previous friends to enemies
5 - About restating the the question I tried to do this by this sentence These historical experiences convince numerous...
Writing Feedbacksallas - Oct 12, 2014 / sallas - Oct 15, 2014
|The reading and lecture are discuss the topic of professor who appears on television; contrast essay
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 12, 2014 / hamedmas - Oct 13, 2014
|University must wisely allot money on sport activities and libraries because those all are essential
4 - The TOEFL tests many avenues of your English skills, one of these avenues is your ability to analyze...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 13, 2014
|IELTS; learning of job skills should be the most important function of Universities
2 - Well, First of all, you mentioned school in the first paragraph, however the statement was about universities. Consequently, it...
Writing Feedbackeissaaskari - Oct 12, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 12, 2014
|TOEFL: The food we eat today may put a damper on our health rather than making us live healthier
7 - Yue, your essay actually answers the prompt or question being posed in the statement. It is actually a very...
Writing FeedbackYUEyue - Oct 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|Charts: students who study for their career / amount of support from the employer
Writing Feedbackhelpmeplz - Oct 12, 2014 / nguyenhien0907 - Oct 13, 2014
|Benefit of education is to create someone smart, skillful, religious, lofty moral and strong in life
3 - Thanks for your advice Prompt is closet in meaning to Outline?I have made an outline ;however, I don't know...
Writing FeedbackTuanphamthanh - Oct 12, 2014 / Tuanphamthanh - Oct 12, 2014
|There are some common factors we all share to gain happiness; each have own definition of happy life
2 - Ni ngo, you need to develop this essay further. It presents good arguments but lacks paragraph development through the...
Writing Feedbackningo - Oct 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|IELTS : what is the impact of technology on the frequency of face-to-face communication?
4 - Overall, it is a good essay. However, I do not consider 5 paragraphs essay is perfect. Furthermore, it is...
Writing FeedbackHarin - Oct 11, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 20, 2014
|Once a person have vast ambitions, it is available to reach the goal which they are struggling for
3 - Firstly, i consider you have to dig deeper before creating new examples. Secondly, your last sentence of your introduction...
Writing Feedbackkatieying1225 - Oct 11, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 14, 2014
|Discuss and critique how the revised Ofsted inspection framework have impacted safeguarding EYFS
Writing Feedbackscentfromabove - Oct 11, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Oct 15, 2014
|Zoos have a strong advantage for both, the endangered species as well as for the society
Writing FeedbackSaba ahmed - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2014
|TOEFL: constructing public transportation systems in cities is good?
9 - This writing is good. However, it contains over 400 words, which I think that if you deal with such...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Oct 11, 2014 / eddies - Nov 1, 2014
|Government should persuade workers to go to offices by buses, and build more highways in cities
Writing FeedbackKaty Curie - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2014
|Computers are more accessible and cheaper, more adults work at home and students study at home
2 - you wrote: Some intelligent students might even compete with each other to get the first place in school which...
Writing Feedbackilufatsy16 - Oct 11, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 11, 2014
|My new neighbor is a restaurant
4 - Gbekil, you need to address 2 stands in this particular essay aside from your own in order to effectively...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Newly-invented technology VS the role of teacher at schools.
3 - Tia, you have created a good essay that shows tremendous improvement over your past work. While the grammar remains...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. Patients' Mental Attitude towards Treatment
2 - your essay is rewarding but you should have used an academic words insofar as you know. I've found only...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Oct 11, 2014 / Timberlake - Oct 11, 2014
|TOEFL: working alone appears to be better. It helps us to be more responsible.
9 - Revised essay: Our work describes the way we are. People practice lots of ways of working to get the...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Oct 11, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 25, 2014
|SAT - countless historical evidences show that challenging the authority is necessary at some times.
3 - Thanks for commenting! I do recognize that current events are better to use in essays because they show that...
Writing FeedbackBlueblood - Oct 10, 2014 / Blueblood - Oct 12, 2014
|'kill two birds with one stone' - Public transportation vs roads
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 10, 2014 / nssuraj - Oct 10, 2014
|Technology; the stronger and closer people interaction (IELTS WT2 CAM 8)
3 - Thank you very much, Moodykhedr. I will correct my mistakes and write this essay again. ^^ Ah, the "states"...
Writing FeedbackKaty Curie - Oct 10, 2014 / Katy Curie - Oct 10, 2014
|Think Before You Click (How social media affect our lives)
Writing Feedbackceej - Oct 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 10, 2014
|TOEFL:Drivers should pay fees so that they can be permitted to drive out in traffic busy time?
2 - Song, I will provide comments and revisions to your paper below. Please use them as a guide in your...
Writing Feedbacksonglingyu - Oct 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 10, 2014
|People are born with a skill that makes human different from other organisms - GRE essay
3 - Thank you very much for your suggestion. It is very helpful for me. After reading your comment, I understand...
Writing FeedbackTan14 - Oct 10, 2014 / Tan14 - Oct 10, 2014
|children's involvement in crime- ielts essay
7 - Dude, it is not an opinion or solution essay to give to do like that!!!! in the agree/disagree opinion,...
Writing Feedbackhandsome78boy - Oct 9, 2014 / handsome78boy - Oct 12, 2014
|Teacher can only lead you to the right avenue to walk on, besides he/she can't force you to study.
2 - - Studying with a teacher has become a controversial topic of the past years because of the innovative technologies...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2014
|Vast majority of people fully comprehends the truly important attractions of moving number of times
3 - vangiespen I really appreciate for your help; I hope I will get a good score from writing part, thanks...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 9, 2014 / gbekil - Oct 10, 2014
|IELTS: Regular books will be still appreciated through some traditional readers
9 - You have so much spelling errors: anywere, ussage, continious, belive, ussual. In the test, this will lower your score...
Writing Feedbacknssuraj - Oct 9, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 11, 2014
|IELTS- Families who choose private education should not support the state education system
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Oct 9, 2014 / handsome78boy - Oct 9, 2014
|IELTS- We are more dependent on each other than ever?
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Oct 9, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 9, 2014
|No comfort and experience in life being alone is not good for teens, better keep with parents -TOEFL
Writing FeedbackMiumew - Oct 9, 2014 / Miumew - Oct 10, 2014
|According to eg Carl Jung the colors cure mentally illness patients by the art work in psychotherapy
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 8, 2014 / SHanafi - Oct 10, 2014
|SAT "the harder one works, the luckier they become" - not all changes for easy makes our life better
2 - by and large the essay looks almost flawless, still you ought to add a few details and be more...
Writing FeedbackBrit101 - Oct 8, 2014 / Luke Cameron Jr - Oct 9, 2014
|Supervisor must have a deep knowledge about human, in case something will suddenly emerge
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2014
|IELTS : Children will easier memorize and manage the foreign words since they are young
2 - It is no doubtundoubtedly true that for learning a foreign language is at primary and secondary school. ThoughHowever ,...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Oct 8, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 8, 2014
|IELTS: Potential benefits of zoos overwhelm its pitfalls due to the facts presented below..
3 - Ooh, thank you eddies for responding) I really appreciate your feedbacks. You are completely right, I used Simon's ebook....
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 8, 2014 / Abdurasul - Oct 9, 2014
|My diamond like best friend - descriptive essay
2 - to be honest it is pretty touching essay. Therefore, well done! i can only advise you to change for...
Writing Feedbackedline - Oct 8, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 8, 2014
|When staff is satisfied with their job they are more likely to do their duty very well.
Writing Feedbackvorojak - Oct 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2014
|Advertisement makes us know what is the recent product available in the market; impact on our choice
4 - Hi there.. its not bad for the first essay, but you have to pay attention for some point like...
Writing Feedbackbassamfarah - Oct 8, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Oct 8, 2014
|TOEFL: In twenty years cars will be gradually exchanged into other transportation systems
2 - Jen, the sentiments that you tried to convey within your essay are very good. You only have a problem...
Writing FeedbackSmile_Jen - Oct 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2014
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