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|Dance is very important for the popularity of the country.
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Dec 4, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Dec 5, 2014
|TOEFL: writing integrate question about "Productivity and Rewards"
2 - May be you can smootly add the topics in one sentence to your introduction. It might be more effective....
Writing Feedbackatousa64 - Dec 4, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Dec 4, 2014
|Would it be better if more good news was reported? - IELTS
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|Assisted Suicide Should be a Persons Final Civil Right
Writing Feedbacktryn2hard2 - Dec 3, 2014 / tryn2hard2 - Dec 4, 2014
|Everywhere people spent more on food, drinks and tobacco; consumer spending - table
Writing Feedbackratnayesu - Dec 3, 2014 / ratnayesu - Dec 4, 2014
|What do accountants do? What characteristics make a good accountant?
Writing Feedbackjjk1346 - Dec 3, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 4, 2014
|IETLS W1 poverty rates by age and gender (bar chart) and family composition of women in poverty...
3 - Thanks to Dumi, our moderator and contributor here, the first and foremost lesson I learn from her is that...
Writing FeedbackLFAle - Dec 3, 2014 / eddies - Dec 3, 2014
|Fundamental stage for the future - Two main reasons for study in college or university
Writing Feedbackadad1120 - Dec 3, 2014 / adad1120 - Dec 9, 2014
|Detailed Crimes in the media should be controlled
Writing Feedbackrcpjj - Dec 2, 2014 / el_lee88 - Dec 3, 2014
|Should teachers be paid more when some people gain huge money, out of scale of their work importance
5 - briannalottchea How about this: appreciate dignity and ethics, which are priceless gifts that many people want to exchange for...
Writing Feedbackvlinh1991 - Dec 2, 2014 / vlinh1991 - Dec 9, 2014
|Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations?
2 - Hi chomphunut , here are some problems of you: 1. NExt time you should include the type of essay...
Writing Feedbackchomphunut - Dec 2, 2014 / SalMon - Dec 3, 2014
|Are nuclear weapons global peacemakers or killing devices?
NEW - Nuclear Weapons are puissant and can kill gargantuan amount of people in very short span of time by the...
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|Due to influence of world-wide media, the gap between cultures is narrowing.
2 - "But opponent of global culture believes, this idea has introduce with powers who have special tools for advertising and...
Writing Feedbackali27 - Dec 2, 2014 / vlinh1991 - Dec 2, 2014
|Traditional skills; keep them alive or let them die out ?
Writing FeedbackShaimaa - Dec 2, 2014 / Shaimaa - Dec 4, 2014
|There are different learning abilities of children in the class to accept same educational ways.
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Dec 2, 2014 / ali27 - Dec 2, 2014
|The Importance of Physical and Social Hobbies In Today's Electronic World
2 - Very informative- I think you did an excellent job with your topic! I do believe that you could add...
Writing Feedbackurgirl1 - Dec 1, 2014 / andreak1022 - Dec 2, 2014
|Being underrated gives you the advantage of a no-pressure situation
3 - Thank you so much eddies. Can you please tell me how to rewrite the last paragraph. I also wanted...
Writing FeedbackMasroor 25 - Dec 1, 2014 / Masroor 25 - Dec 2, 2014
|It is difficult for mothers and fathers to understand their children because of generation gap
3 - 212 words. This is not suitable to your essay development, as you are asking to write 250 words and...
Writing Feedbackdtthuydang259 - Dec 1, 2014 / eddies - Dec 1, 2014
|To get them ready for the adult life, should teenage children be encouraged to take a part-time job?
3 - Thanks for your compliment Mahmoud. Actually I agree with the topic statement that parents should encourage their kids to...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 30, 2014 / rongmui - Dec 2, 2014
|Many Vietnamese students are not good at the local history. What are the cause of this problem?
3 - Thanks for your help. May I ask you what bout my mistakes such as grammar or vocabularies? Is it...
Writing FeedbackMisstuyet94 - Nov 30, 2014 / Misstuyet94 - Dec 3, 2014
|Every individual has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws
Writing Feedbackraynus - Nov 30, 2014 / raynus - Dec 1, 2014
|IEITS-It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they are not happy.
7 - It is not bad as a first attempt.. Try to rewrite the third paragraph,it is not clear enough....
Writing FeedbackWilsonank - Nov 30, 2014 / Shaimaa - Dec 3, 2014
|Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity.
Writing Feedbackvlinh1991 - Nov 30, 2014 / vlinh1991 - Dec 2, 2014
|Would you prefer Indoor or Outdoor for your leisure activities.
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Nov 30, 2014
|If you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it honor, the way of celebration
4 - Like I said, you need to learn to divide your essay into specific topic paragraphs. Right now you have...
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 30, 2014
|IELTS essay. Deforestation caused by human activity.
Writing FeedbackMarceline - Nov 29, 2014 / SHanafi - Nov 30, 2014
|Should people be treated by what they have achieved or what they are capable of?; SAT essay
Writing Feedbacksmartfeet - Nov 28, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014
|'The solid state; crystalline and amorphous solids' - learning scientific writing
Writing FeedbackSwiny - Nov 28, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 30, 2014
|Tragic decrease in the life quality in many major cities; Causes, solutions for poor living standard
2 - Hi Van. You need to focus your writing frame. In the introduction restate the question and tell the readers...
Writing FeedbackVan Anh Nguyen - Nov 28, 2014 / Rogerb - Nov 29, 2014
|Some people are very excited to go to live venue of a sporting event - watching home or at stadium?
NEW - Q) Some people like to go to a live sporting event, while others prefer to stay at home and...
Writing FeedbackIELTSguy - Nov 28, 2014 / — -
|Managing university's budgets effectively requires carefully consider. Money to sports activities!
3 - Ohhh I see... Thank you so much. Next time, I do make sure that I understand what the question...
Writing FeedbackThe beginner - Nov 27, 2014 / The beginner - Dec 2, 2014
|The green spaces are source of knowledge that can provide significant profit for human
2 - I see some keywords/terms to use in the essay, so you can get full credit: economic gain, views on...
Writing Feedbacktagoyaki - Nov 27, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2014
|An intelligent audience watching TV acquire positive sides from it - the perception is important
2 - "They say, population relationships was more strengther than today, because they had more recreation customs which needs presence...
Writing Feedbackali27 - Nov 27, 2014 / zigolf - Nov 27, 2014
|Unhealthy lifestyle - Perfect health in the way of life is a vital aspect in human life
NEW - Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To...
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|Nowadays people are valued by their social rank or materialistic activity - IELTS essay
4 - perhaps, you should hide several words such as and there are inappropriate for academic writing....
Writing Feedbackbang - Nov 26, 2014 / rhino - Dec 5, 2014
|This mean, stubborn, moody and bad-tempered person is my best friend
2 - maybe you can write about something you guys did together or something she does that is unique to her....
Writing Feedbackmorasan - Nov 26, 2014 / SaritaM - Nov 26, 2014
|In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly
3 - Thanks eddies for your suggested introduction. Followed is my revised statement for the 2nd paragraph. Is it better? ...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 26, 2014 / rongmui - Nov 27, 2014
|Roadways remains the most popular mode of transportation in UK; graph
Writing FeedbackSid1316 - Nov 26, 2014 / Sid1316 - Nov 26, 2014
|'A students needs to fill his free time with enjoyable hobbies' - Sports or libraries?
Writing Feedbackmashf - Nov 26, 2014 / mashf - Nov 29, 2014
|My Town: Six independent pairs of eyes fling suspicious glances at me, they shake heads in confusion
3 - Thanks for the correction. I want the reader to have a glimpse of where I come from, and make...
Writing Feedbackdchege711 - Nov 26, 2014 / dchege711 - Nov 26, 2014
|Big city have many entertainment centers, better learning conditions and more jobs there
4 - Then your essay should have a minimum of 50 words per paragraph. Try not to use word fillers like...
Writing Feedbackpnthien2451 - Nov 25, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 25, 2014
|"Who drove them out to the streets?"
Writing Feedbackacc123 - Nov 24, 2014 / acc123 - Nov 26, 2014
|TOEFL : Young adults preference on how long they should live with their parents before moving out
Writing Feedback99winterfell - Nov 24, 2014 / 99winterfell - Nov 25, 2014
|Reckless drivers in United States threaten the lives of thousands of people every year
2 - On grammar, check your subject-verb agreement. "...causes for reckless driving is (are) similar to ones (those)...punishments such as fines...
Writing Feedbacksoriginal - Nov 24, 2014 / dchege711 - Nov 26, 2014
|In fields such as business, politics, etc, its leaders should be renewed every five years.
3 - Thank you for your recommendation man! It's still hard for me to organize everything and write in down...
Writing Feedbacktagoyaki - Nov 24, 2014 / tagoyaki - Nov 27, 2014
|Should parents interfere in any money-spending decision of their kids?
2 - Phuong, though your essay is too wordy, it has actually answered the prompt provided. You could have actually discussed...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 24, 2014
|Who has the most enormous impact among people around the world?
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 23, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Different courses in England - Two pie charts
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Nov 23, 2014 / SHanafi - Dec 10, 2014
|I-E-L-T-S competition and co-operate
4 - This intro uses a straightforward way to your point of view. However, this failed to present what the...
Writing Feedbackjyx940709 - Nov 23, 2014 / eddies - Nov 24, 2014
|I was like every child in my community
16 - Vangiespen, you're amazing. Thanks for your help, more data to your devices, in surfing EF. Yes, British English. Please...
Writing FeedbackModewap - Nov 23, 2014 / Modewap - Nov 30, 2014
|'The world is changing day by day gradually' - essay about consumerism
3 - but this changing is not always occurs (occurring) in a good way. Human activities on the world effects (effect)...
Writing FeedbackFavelani - Nov 23, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 23, 2014
|If we want to save the future of the planet,we will have to drastically change our life. Do you agre
Writing FeedbackSaint Patience - Nov 23, 2014 / Saint Patience - Nov 23, 2014
|Introductory Paragraph about causes of HIV in children
6 - Hi vangiespen, thanks for your input and support. I have now posted my completed essay, maybe you can take...
Writing Feedbackfirstywrites - Nov 23, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 30, 2014
|Descriptive writing; unexpected events, unpredictable situations and unforgettable moments in life
2 - Kanyepi, before I comment on the descriptive essay, may I know what your are being asked to describe in...
Writing FeedbackRosette - Nov 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 23, 2014
|Nowadays, technology and social media is the fourth need of people after food, shelter and clothes
2 - Nisarg, you need to review the content of your essay. While you wrote a very good essay, it does...
Writing Feedbacksaketnisarg - Nov 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 23, 2014
|Process of making maple syrup... - IELTS WRITING TASK 1
5 - I tried uploading a picture but wasn't successful. Can you help me with the overview please Eddies....
Writing FeedbackSid1316 - Nov 23, 2014 / Sid1316 - Nov 23, 2014
|Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university. Good roommate?
2 - Hi! Volkano Generally, you could add more details to your examples. Even though the number of words reaches the...
Writing Feedbackvolkano - Nov 21, 2014 / Ada1206 - Nov 22, 2014
|Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective way to deal with them - IELTS essay
4 - Identifying the part of question to avoid out of topic: Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective...
Writing FeedbackYiliang Chen - Nov 21, 2014 / tiaDS - Nov 22, 2014
|Internet is an excellent source of communication, but some people suggest it's hard to find info
Writing FeedbackLFAle - Nov 21, 2014 / bang - Nov 24, 2014
|Crime and fixed punishments. Discuss both views and give opinion
2 - - Chris, you don't provide this last, you provide this as a part of your introduction in order...
Writing FeedbackChris Yip - Nov 20, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 20, 2014
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