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|It is significant that zoos are used to protect rare animals - IELTS essay
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 6, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 11, 2014
|IELTS: What is the most happy age between teenage and adult. Discuss both views.
5 - It is always struggle among people which period of life is the best. In childhood period, children think...
Writing Feedbackzigolf - Nov 6, 2014 / ali27 - Dec 2, 2014
|Minimum age (21) of legal drinking has not saved as many lives by itself as once thought
2 - M.G. the reason that you are unable to write the body of this essay properly is because you have...
Writing Feedbackmpg109 - Nov 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 6, 2014
|The effects of cheaper flights - IELTS Essay
7 - immense advances = I am afraid it is inappropriate if you using "immense" to "advances" Businessman = business...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Nov 6, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 2, 2014
|Traditional music has the least amount of listeners and this number is more and more shorten
Writing Feedbackel_lee88 - Nov 6, 2014 / el_lee88 - Nov 11, 2014
|I followed several organizations to increase my knowledge about Petroleum Geology - Royal Holloway
3 - Vangiespen, I have passed your meaningful words to her and already inform her to make some changes based...
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|Headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia - GRE / Argument
5 - Dear Louisa, Thanks for the time that you have given for me to advice about English writing. I...
Writing Feedbackstrider10 - Nov 6, 2014 / strider10 - Nov 8, 2014
|The effective leader should try to make other members feel that they are part of decisions.
2 - Gaiyaunqi, Alina meant to say "Initiative" and not "Insiative". Having read your essay though, I believe that you should...
Writing Feedbackgaiyuanqi - Nov 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 6, 2014
|Compulsory Service and why is Necessary in the U.S.
2 - Tia, the essay is good, but it centers on only one reason for the need or benefit of compulsory...
Writing Feedbacktia2129166 - Nov 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2014
|Effect of popular events on our life
Writing FeedbackShaimaa - Nov 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2014
|Repairing our current roads would lead to many positive consequences
6 - Now this essay version definitely aligns itself with the prompt and shows us that you have a clear understanding...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2014
|Events like FIFA world cup can positively improve the international relationships
4 - It is certainly true that international sporting occasions like foot ball cups are very popular incidents, so I strongly...
Writing Feedbackabdelrashed - Nov 4, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 9, 2014
|Drivers have to pay a fee for driving in busy city streets when there is a great amount of traffic.
Writing Feedbackmoow77 - Nov 3, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 4, 2014
|TOEFL - more happy live and more chance to become successful for kids raised up less strictly
4 - update: Undoubtedly, every devoted parents have a yearning for their children's success in the future - children are...
Writing Feedbackmophicyao - Nov 3, 2014 / mophicyao - Nov 3, 2014
|Saving some lands! Ultimately, animals will be our number one priority
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 3, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 4, 2014
|Free time can help us to relieve our stresses; play with kids rather than educating them
2 - Free time vs "Educating".... Talk about the benefits of free time, i.e stress reliever, develop new skills, time...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 3, 2014 / santablue - Nov 3, 2014
|Best invention - development of the treatment against cancer would change people's lives
2 - You have to make your essay more detailed. In fact, in can be done by providing some examples ....
Writing Feedbackzuf - Nov 3, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 3, 2014
|Study 11 months a year can improve students' efficiency in learning much better than long-time learn
Writing Feedbackmoow77 - Nov 2, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 3, 2014
|Right way to spend money
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 2, 2014 / Charphil - Nov 2, 2014
|It is interesting to point out that the number of people buying books in Germany consistently rose
2 - First sentence is a little lengthy. Try condensing it to. It can clearly be concluded that the population of...
Writing FeedbackGman97 - Nov 2, 2014 / nik18 - Nov 2, 2014
|I live independently, enjoy favorite activities and study the subjects that I would like to learn.
6 - Well, firstly, try to provides some examples in order to contribute to your ideas. Secondly, if you do not...
Writing Feedbackpeeraya - Nov 2, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 2, 2014
|Travelling in a group you will have to fully rely on your leader or your members
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 1, 2014 / JuniorR - Nov 1, 2014
|We recommend maintaining Grove College's tradition of all-female education - GRE AW
2 - I would reinforce the message of the conclusion and convince the reader more deeply. JUST THE CONCLUSION...
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Nov 1, 2014 / jdlr22 - Nov 1, 2014
|The best and most cheerful memories we have from our children time
Writing FeedbackGman97 - Nov 1, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 2, 2014
|TOEFL: wearing a uniform by students, when they go to school, is a big timesaver for them
3 - I forgot to mention this, use academic words in your essay. Sexy is not such a word. Besides,...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Nov 1, 2014 / peyman_np - Nov 1, 2014
|I hate smoking the most. People know about smoking's harmful effect, but they still smoke?
Writing Feedbacksontrang_s2 - Nov 1, 2014 / sontrang_s2 - Nov 1, 2014
|Older the railway system is the better and longer it gets. London 1863. IELTS task
2 - the task...
Writing Feedbacksicko22 - Nov 1, 2014 / sicko22 - Nov 1, 2014
|IELTS - despite the obstacles found in the new place, traveller could obtain some new experiences
6 - Travelling is one therapy for some people in order to refresh them from their daily activities. Travelling is...
Writing Feedbackmaritsanur - Oct 31, 2014 / zhugege - Nov 6, 2014
|A family in small village have superb natural resources and weather
3 - Thank you vangiespen. actually I'm beginner to writing an essay but I know the IBC and I didn't explain...
Writing Feedbackmrh54ir - Oct 31, 2014 / mrh54ir - Oct 31, 2014
|Direct communication is always better than emails or telephone calls or letters
4 - Hi, following are my suggestions: 1. You use excessive commas in your essay. You should put periods after each...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 31, 2014 / 4theluvofgod - Nov 1, 2014
|IELTS Essay: The effects of people getting married and having children in their thirties
3 - adapt themselvesFOR new lifestyle. Overall, your essay is good. But you use a lot of strong and unfamiliar words...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 31, 2014 / violethoang - Nov 3, 2014
|Schools, parents, and students would benefit with the requirements of wearing uniforms
4 - I strongly agree that public school should require students to wear uniforms. Uniforms can give school a better environment...
Writing Feedbackbivi1222 - Oct 30, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 31, 2014
|Grades are the motivation for students to study better, they can create a competitive environment
3 - Vns, your essay, while delivering good reasons to support grades as a motivation for learning, needs a lot of...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|My bad experiences help me to fight harder and to go after what I want - CBEST essay
Writing Feedbackbivi1222 - Oct 30, 2014 / bivi1222 - Oct 30, 2014
|IELTS Essay: People have always been seeking for their basic needs - Shopping Habits
3 - I don't know how to express my gratitude for your help Louisa . The best feedback I ever received....
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 30, 2014 / Remansou - Oct 31, 2014
|Spend money on long last thing or spend on short term pleasure;e.g. buying jewelry or takin vacation
Writing FeedbackClark_Z - Oct 30, 2014 / Clark_Z - Oct 30, 2014
|IELTS: Animal Testing should not be banned but its usages need to be minimized
2 - Firstly, great essay, However, some examples will surely consolidate your essay in order obtain better mark....
Writing Feedbackthongdat1608 - Oct 30, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 30, 2014
|'broader roads, logical control'; stuck on road in rush hours - many cars, motorbikes move slowly
Writing Feedbackanthonynguyen - Oct 30, 2014 / thongdat1608 - Oct 30, 2014
|Do we need a teacher to learn English?
5 - Chloe, simply put, you are being asked to explain whether you believe that teachers are necessary for the teaching...
Writing FeedbackChloe121 - Oct 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|I support the argument that the ancient languages are of no practical use and no help in getting job
2 - I would improve upon the grammar of your essay. Try including some sentence variety and transitions. Also, I'm not...
Writing Feedbackkajuthapa - Oct 29, 2014 / mirrrrr - Oct 29, 2014
|Nature vs industry - it is a must for our country to get the most out of our free space
2 - - Your overview is somewhat incomplete. You could have presented a summary of the reasons why you believe that...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 29, 2014
|Argument Essay; part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal
2 - - Arun, you need to make specific mention that first born humans and monkeys exhibit the same tendencies....
Writing Feedbackarunpoppat - Oct 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 29, 2014
|IELTS - I would watch the events live once or twice every month and watch the rest of them on TV
2 - In conclusion, I believe both arguments can hold itstheir ground, and personally, I would go to site to ...
Writing Feedbackianisafk - Oct 29, 2014 / Dapocalypse7 - Oct 29, 2014
|IELTS: Wars essay - natural resources might be considered as a primary reason for wars
Writing Feedbackthongdat1608 - Oct 29, 2014 / thongdat1608 - Oct 29, 2014
|IELTS Democracy has given an opportunity for the people to express their feelings; freedom of speech
3 - I don't think this essay has enough 250 words. BTW, you should check your lay out carefully when you...
Writing Feedbacktest_ielts - Oct 29, 2014 / violethoang - Nov 3, 2014
|Teachers should teach academic or social subjects
2 - The Selection of topics for education is often(has been) very controversial. While I agree that teachers can teach their...
Writing Feedbackielts7 - Oct 29, 2014 / thongdat1608 - Oct 29, 2014
|Illiteracy cause and effect essay
Writing Feedbackthongdat1608 - Oct 29, 2014 / arunpoppat - Oct 29, 2014
|FARMING: Agriculture plays a leading role in our country, Cambodia has abundance of free territories
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 28, 2014 / Charphil - Oct 28, 2014
|A society without school and education system is like a body without brain
7 - Hi Vns9x Firstly, Thank you for your time, I think my essay is not rich enough for using advanced...
Writing Feedbacksina_ns - Oct 28, 2014 / sina_ns - Oct 29, 2014
|Numerous people have a tendency to play at least 1 hour a day - Technologies
4 - Shon, I feel that your argument in this case is flaewed because you tried to relate the use of...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 28, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 29, 2014
|Success is not far-reaching for those who pursue their goals until they will achieve it
3 - Hamed, sorry about not having gotten back to you sooner. I have been a bit busy these days and...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Oct 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|Nowadays, smoking is consider as a world wide phenomenon - should it be forbidden?
7 - Hello there . Hmmm , from what I've learned the body paragraph should start with a topic sentence...
Writing FeedbackNaeemah - Oct 27, 2014 / Naeemah - Oct 30, 2014
|IELTS: The pattern of studying plays a major crucial aspect in the academic achievements
3 - (1)aspect to/from (2)students' academic attainment (3) As this sentence didn't support the topic well, I would say that...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Oct 27, 2014 / eddies - Dec 21, 2014
|IELTS: More People Living by Themselves
6 - I think you are quite off topic. Since, they ask you the reasons of those current problems. Therefore, my...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 27, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 29, 2014
|Nicaragua has experienced a sharp increase in violence and ruthless crimes against woman
Writing Feedbackasdfkjsouplove2 - Oct 26, 2014 / asdfkjsouplove2 - Oct 28, 2014
|People should find what their talent is, to support what they do, to reach their goal in live
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Oct 26, 2014 / fp2014 - Oct 26, 2014
|some paraphrase for some articles about the internet and newspaper
NEW - source 1 Ross Dawson, who wrote the 'Living Networks' book which predicted the social networking revolution, thinks that newspapers...
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|IELTS - under suitable administration, tourism enhances local economic development
6 - While it seems that both of the ideas make sense, my view is that, by being managed properly, booming...
Writing FeedbackLen_hart - Oct 26, 2014 / zzwestmanzz - Oct 28, 2014
|Sentiments about the upcoming university!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 26, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 26, 2014
|IELTS Essay: The government should allocate more funds to public services instead of arts
3 - Many thanks for your worthy feedback. It is really appreciated. I am also concern about grammar and punctuation or...
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