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|Clothes have always played a leading role when it comes a person's behavior.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 12, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 13, 2014
|People should use phone in correct occasions and should not use it in specific public areas; IELTS
6 - First of all, it is obvious that human have rights to do their favorable things which is are not...
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 11, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 12, 2014
|Is soaring petrol price the best way to tackle traffic congestion and pollution?
2 - Do not utilize 5 body paragraphs. In other words, try to merge some of your reasons. In fact, by...
Writing FeedbackChrissiePK - Nov 11, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 11, 2014
|Along with job, marriage, having a child comes the moment when you cannot escape from being an adult
5 - All throughout the essay, you made it clear that you were speaking on general terms, that means you were...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 12, 2014
|UM-Twin Cities Educational Interests American Studies
6 - vengiespen Thank you very much for your help! I corrected my sentences as you indicated, and I could...
Writing Feedbackkitakaname - Nov 11, 2014 / kitakaname - Nov 13, 2014
|It takes failure to achive success. SAT
4 - - I suggest that you bring this up as your introductory paragraph. It has an intriguing hook that...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Nov 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 11, 2014
|Difference between the book and computer
Writing FeedbackDaniellePeazer - Nov 11, 2014 / DaniellePeazer - Nov 11, 2014
|Telling the truth is the best policy that a person can adopt in his life.
6 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackebrahimsangsefi - Nov 11, 2014 / ebrahimsangsefi - Nov 11, 2014
|Would I rather be loved for the imperfect person that I am, or for amazing qualities I don't have?
Writing Feedbacksunny17 - Nov 11, 2014 / sunny17 - Nov 11, 2014
|Willy Loman - Family Man, Father, Fake, Fraud - [High School] [Death of a Salesman]
Writing Feedbackorlandok - Nov 10, 2014 / orlandok - Nov 11, 2014
|A new now technology will soon become out of date or even useless; education for further development
4 - - Trung, this is an effective opening statement but it lacks the most important part in an opinion...
Writing FeedbackCE_15 - Nov 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 11, 2014
|High salaries and not disturbing during work are the key factors of encouraging people to teach
2 - - Abdurasul, I suggest that you learn how to discuss each of your reasons as separate paragraphs so that...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Nov 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 12, 2014
|IELTS essay question: if international collaboration is the only way to tackle most problems?
NEW - Many people believe that the world's most urgent problems can only be solved by international collaboration, Do u agree...
Writing FeedbackJeffGC - Nov 10, 2014 / — -
|The best form of care for the elderly depends on the family situation
4 - This is definitely better than the first one Pham. I am just wondering if you cannot be discussing more...
Writing FeedbackTeddy Pham - Nov 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 17, 2014
|'The definition of the word globalization' - Introductory Paragraph for Essay on Globalization
5 - Thanks for the feedback it was really helpful. I want to complete it, but my assignment was only to...
Writing Feedbackfirstywrites - Nov 10, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 16, 2014
|People's life expectancy is getting longer and longer due to many external factors
6 - Shon, you still need to do more work on this essay. Please refer to my notes as suggestions for...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 10, 2014
|I'm more than meets the eye. I am unique. Describe yourself in 140 characters?
3 - Please try to cut out anything which is unnecessary. I am sure you will be able to sum-up yourself...
Writing Feedbacka_sweezy - Nov 9, 2014 / samramandy - Nov 14, 2014
|By 2000, in Australia, the level of electricity generated through hydropower slightly increased
3 - Thank you *confusing girl "*second sentence confusing! how was it different? that was two sentences combined!" - Yes, I...
Writing Feedbackhokagepato - Nov 9, 2014 / hokagepato - Nov 9, 2014
|Technology is the tool that reinforce people to get numerous knowledge overnight
8 - Shon, it will certainly boost your essay score because it will show that you are comfortable with the English...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 10, 2014
|People in the past ate healthier (food) than people do today
3 - An increasing number of people begin to discuss whether people in the past ate healthier food. Many people are...
Writing Feedbackthegreatwall - Nov 8, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 9, 2014
|Topic: Causes Reducing the amount of book-reading "READING-CULTURE WHETHER IT STILL EXISTS"
4 - Thien, it is important that you learn how to outline your essay before you write the draft. The outline...
Writing Feedbackhnlt1093 - Nov 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 9, 2014
|Write an essay that either supports or opposes the use of cell phones.
7 - This essay reminds me of a picture that you could reference if you please, it's a picture of everything...
Writing Feedbackjk98 - Nov 8, 2014 / STEMkid - Nov 9, 2014
|Friendship; constantly borrowing money can lead towards a plenty of negative results
2 - - Borrowing money between friends is something that happens due to circumstances. Depending upon how the loan is...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2014
|Animals are waiting for us to be rescued
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2014
|The city which I enjoy the most is a combination of history and modernity - TOEFL essay
4 - Firstly, congrats your essay contain lots of knowledge and information about historical buildings which is a huge plus for...
Writing Feedbackappleguo - Nov 7, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 7, 2014
|Seeking a bright future in the land of opportunity
4 - You can definitely use this essay for that prompt. In fact, is specifically addresses the needs of the essay...
Writing Feedbackchinita89 - Nov 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2014
|It is significant that zoos are used to protect rare animals - IELTS essay
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 6, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 11, 2014
|IELTS: What is the most happy age between teenage and adult. Discuss both views.
5 - It is always struggle among people which period of life is the best. In childhood period, children think...
Writing Feedbackzigolf - Nov 6, 2014 / ali27 - Dec 2, 2014
|Minimum age (21) of legal drinking has not saved as many lives by itself as once thought
2 - M.G. the reason that you are unable to write the body of this essay properly is because you have...
Writing Feedbackmpg109 - Nov 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 6, 2014
|The effects of cheaper flights - IELTS Essay
7 - immense advances = I am afraid it is inappropriate if you using "immense" to "advances" Businessman = business...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Nov 6, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 2, 2014
|Traditional music has the least amount of listeners and this number is more and more shorten
Writing Feedbackel_lee88 - Nov 6, 2014 / el_lee88 - Nov 11, 2014
|I followed several organizations to increase my knowledge about Petroleum Geology - Royal Holloway
3 - Vangiespen, I have passed your meaningful words to her and already inform her to make some changes based...
Writing Feedbackandial - Nov 6, 2014 / andial - Nov 6, 2014
|Headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia - GRE / Argument
5 - Dear Louisa, Thanks for the time that you have given for me to advice about English writing. I...
Writing Feedbackstrider10 - Nov 6, 2014 / strider10 - Nov 8, 2014
|The effective leader should try to make other members feel that they are part of decisions.
2 - Gaiyaunqi, Alina meant to say "Initiative" and not "Insiative". Having read your essay though, I believe that you should...
Writing Feedbackgaiyuanqi - Nov 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 6, 2014
|Compulsory Service and why is Necessary in the U.S.
2 - Tia, the essay is good, but it centers on only one reason for the need or benefit of compulsory...
Writing Feedbacktia2129166 - Nov 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2014
|Effect of popular events on our life
Writing FeedbackShaimaa - Nov 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2014
|Repairing our current roads would lead to many positive consequences
6 - Now this essay version definitely aligns itself with the prompt and shows us that you have a clear understanding...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2014
|Events like FIFA world cup can positively improve the international relationships
4 - It is certainly true that international sporting occasions like foot ball cups are very popular incidents, so I strongly...
Writing Feedbackabdelrashed - Nov 4, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 9, 2014
|Drivers have to pay a fee for driving in busy city streets when there is a great amount of traffic.
Writing Feedbackmoow77 - Nov 3, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 4, 2014
|TOEFL - more happy live and more chance to become successful for kids raised up less strictly
4 - update: Undoubtedly, every devoted parents have a yearning for their children's success in the future - children are...
Writing Feedbackmophicyao - Nov 3, 2014 / mophicyao - Nov 3, 2014
|Saving some lands! Ultimately, animals will be our number one priority
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 3, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 4, 2014
|Free time can help us to relieve our stresses; play with kids rather than educating them
2 - Free time vs "Educating".... Talk about the benefits of free time, i.e stress reliever, develop new skills, time...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 3, 2014 / santablue - Nov 3, 2014
|Best invention - development of the treatment against cancer would change people's lives
2 - You have to make your essay more detailed. In fact, in can be done by providing some examples ....
Writing Feedbackzuf - Nov 3, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 3, 2014
|Study 11 months a year can improve students' efficiency in learning much better than long-time learn
Writing Feedbackmoow77 - Nov 2, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 3, 2014
|Right way to spend money
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 2, 2014 / Charphil - Nov 2, 2014
|It is interesting to point out that the number of people buying books in Germany consistently rose
2 - First sentence is a little lengthy. Try condensing it to. It can clearly be concluded that the population of...
Writing FeedbackGman97 - Nov 2, 2014 / nik18 - Nov 2, 2014
|I live independently, enjoy favorite activities and study the subjects that I would like to learn.
6 - Well, firstly, try to provides some examples in order to contribute to your ideas. Secondly, if you do not...
Writing Feedbackpeeraya - Nov 2, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 2, 2014
|Travelling in a group you will have to fully rely on your leader or your members
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 1, 2014 / JuniorR - Nov 1, 2014
|We recommend maintaining Grove College's tradition of all-female education - GRE AW
2 - I would reinforce the message of the conclusion and convince the reader more deeply. JUST THE CONCLUSION...
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Nov 1, 2014 / jdlr22 - Nov 1, 2014
|The best and most cheerful memories we have from our children time
Writing FeedbackGman97 - Nov 1, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 2, 2014
|TOEFL: wearing a uniform by students, when they go to school, is a big timesaver for them
3 - I forgot to mention this, use academic words in your essay. Sexy is not such a word. Besides,...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Nov 1, 2014 / peyman_np - Nov 1, 2014
|I hate smoking the most. People know about smoking's harmful effect, but they still smoke?
Writing Feedbacksontrang_s2 - Nov 1, 2014 / sontrang_s2 - Nov 1, 2014
|Older the railway system is the better and longer it gets. London 1863. IELTS task
2 - the task...
Writing Feedbacksicko22 - Nov 1, 2014 / sicko22 - Nov 1, 2014
|IELTS - despite the obstacles found in the new place, traveller could obtain some new experiences
6 - Travelling is one therapy for some people in order to refresh them from their daily activities. Travelling is...
Writing Feedbackmaritsanur - Oct 31, 2014 / zhugege - Nov 6, 2014
|A family in small village have superb natural resources and weather
3 - Thank you vangiespen. actually I'm beginner to writing an essay but I know the IBC and I didn't explain...
Writing Feedbackmrh54ir - Oct 31, 2014 / mrh54ir - Oct 31, 2014
|Direct communication is always better than emails or telephone calls or letters
4 - Hi, following are my suggestions: 1. You use excessive commas in your essay. You should put periods after each...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 31, 2014 / 4theluvofgod - Nov 1, 2014
|IELTS Essay: The effects of people getting married and having children in their thirties
3 - adapt themselvesFOR new lifestyle. Overall, your essay is good. But you use a lot of strong and unfamiliar words...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 31, 2014 / violethoang - Nov 3, 2014
|Schools, parents, and students would benefit with the requirements of wearing uniforms
4 - I strongly agree that public school should require students to wear uniforms. Uniforms can give school a better environment...
Writing Feedbackbivi1222 - Oct 30, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 31, 2014
|Grades are the motivation for students to study better, they can create a competitive environment
3 - Vns, your essay, while delivering good reasons to support grades as a motivation for learning, needs a lot of...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|My bad experiences help me to fight harder and to go after what I want - CBEST essay
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