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|Zoos have a strong advantage for both, the endangered species as well as for the society
Writing FeedbackSaba ahmed - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2014
|TOEFL: constructing public transportation systems in cities is good?
9 - This writing is good. However, it contains over 400 words, which I think that if you deal with such...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Oct 11, 2014 / eddies - Nov 1, 2014
|Government should persuade workers to go to offices by buses, and build more highways in cities
Writing FeedbackKaty Curie - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2014
|Computers are more accessible and cheaper, more adults work at home and students study at home
2 - you wrote: Some intelligent students might even compete with each other to get the first place in school which...
Writing Feedbackilufatsy16 - Oct 11, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 11, 2014
|My new neighbor is a restaurant
4 - Gbekil, you need to address 2 stands in this particular essay aside from your own in order to effectively...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Newly-invented technology VS the role of teacher at schools.
3 - Tia, you have created a good essay that shows tremendous improvement over your past work. While the grammar remains...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. Patients' Mental Attitude towards Treatment
2 - your essay is rewarding but you should have used an academic words insofar as you know. I've found only...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Oct 11, 2014 / Timberlake - Oct 11, 2014
|TOEFL: working alone appears to be better. It helps us to be more responsible.
9 - Revised essay: Our work describes the way we are. People practice lots of ways of working to get the...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Oct 11, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 25, 2014
|SAT - countless historical evidences show that challenging the authority is necessary at some times.
3 - Thanks for commenting! I do recognize that current events are better to use in essays because they show that...
Writing FeedbackBlueblood - Oct 10, 2014 / Blueblood - Oct 12, 2014
|'kill two birds with one stone' - Public transportation vs roads
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 10, 2014 / nssuraj - Oct 10, 2014
|Technology; the stronger and closer people interaction (IELTS WT2 CAM 8)
3 - Thank you very much, Moodykhedr. I will correct my mistakes and write this essay again. ^^ Ah, the "states"...
Writing FeedbackKaty Curie - Oct 10, 2014 / Katy Curie - Oct 10, 2014
|Think Before You Click (How social media affect our lives)
Writing Feedbackceej - Oct 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 10, 2014
|TOEFL:Drivers should pay fees so that they can be permitted to drive out in traffic busy time?
2 - Song, I will provide comments and revisions to your paper below. Please use them as a guide in your...
Writing Feedbacksonglingyu - Oct 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 10, 2014
|People are born with a skill that makes human different from other organisms - GRE essay
3 - Thank you very much for your suggestion. It is very helpful for me. After reading your comment, I understand...
Writing FeedbackTan14 - Oct 10, 2014 / Tan14 - Oct 10, 2014
|children's involvement in crime- ielts essay
7 - Dude, it is not an opinion or solution essay to give to do like that!!!! in the agree/disagree opinion,...
Writing Feedbackhandsome78boy - Oct 9, 2014 / handsome78boy - Oct 12, 2014
|Teacher can only lead you to the right avenue to walk on, besides he/she can't force you to study.
2 - - Studying with a teacher has become a controversial topic of the past years because of the innovative technologies...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2014
|Vast majority of people fully comprehends the truly important attractions of moving number of times
3 - vangiespen I really appreciate for your help; I hope I will get a good score from writing part, thanks...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 9, 2014 / gbekil - Oct 10, 2014
|IELTS: Regular books will be still appreciated through some traditional readers
9 - You have so much spelling errors: anywere, ussage, continious, belive, ussual. In the test, this will lower your score...
Writing Feedbacknssuraj - Oct 9, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 11, 2014
|IELTS- Families who choose private education should not support the state education system
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Oct 9, 2014 / handsome78boy - Oct 9, 2014
|IELTS- We are more dependent on each other than ever?
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Oct 9, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 9, 2014
|No comfort and experience in life being alone is not good for teens, better keep with parents -TOEFL
Writing FeedbackMiumew - Oct 9, 2014 / Miumew - Oct 10, 2014
|According to eg Carl Jung the colors cure mentally illness patients by the art work in psychotherapy
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 8, 2014 / SHanafi - Oct 10, 2014
|SAT "the harder one works, the luckier they become" - not all changes for easy makes our life better
2 - by and large the essay looks almost flawless, still you ought to add a few details and be more...
Writing FeedbackBrit101 - Oct 8, 2014 / Luke Cameron Jr - Oct 9, 2014
|Supervisor must have a deep knowledge about human, in case something will suddenly emerge
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2014
|IELTS : Children will easier memorize and manage the foreign words since they are young
2 - It is no doubtundoubtedly true that for learning a foreign language is at primary and secondary school. ThoughHowever ,...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Oct 8, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 8, 2014
|IELTS: Potential benefits of zoos overwhelm its pitfalls due to the facts presented below..
3 - Ooh, thank you eddies for responding) I really appreciate your feedbacks. You are completely right, I used Simon's ebook....
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 8, 2014 / Abdurasul - Oct 9, 2014
|My diamond like best friend - descriptive essay
2 - to be honest it is pretty touching essay. Therefore, well done! i can only advise you to change for...
Writing Feedbackedline - Oct 8, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 8, 2014
|When staff is satisfied with their job they are more likely to do their duty very well.
Writing Feedbackvorojak - Oct 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 9, 2014
|Advertisement makes us know what is the recent product available in the market; impact on our choice
4 - Hi there.. its not bad for the first essay, but you have to pay attention for some point like...
Writing Feedbackbassamfarah - Oct 8, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Oct 8, 2014
|TOEFL: In twenty years cars will be gradually exchanged into other transportation systems
2 - Jen, the sentiments that you tried to convey within your essay are very good. You only have a problem...
Writing FeedbackSmile_Jen - Oct 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2014
|Ielts: Dangerous sports are an invisible killer - threatening games should be forbidden.
3 - For this reason, certain individuals consider that athletes should participate to this kind of sports to become wealthy. Although...
Writing Feedbacklourance - Oct 8, 2014 / zzwestmanzz - Oct 8, 2014
|Doing social activities make a strong effect on student's personality; libraries vs sports support
3 - First and foremost, you should make it clear where is your introduction, body and conclusion. Pay attention to the...
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 8, 2014 / Abdurasul - Oct 8, 2014
|Altruism and sacrifice - people donate money for a reason
2 - Vns, what is the prompt for the essay? I realize that it is a commentary on a previously assigned...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|Experiencing is much more pivotal than reading a book because it is more realistic.
2 - Millions of people are reading books since it has numerous useful information to comprehend.Yet, the rest are always learning...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 7, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 7, 2014
|I've always been searching for the perfect room my whole life - interior design essay
2 - meme, it is difficult to help you with your essay because you did not offer to share the essay...
Writing Feedbackmemecx - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|Ielts: Animal testing is used in important medical researches.
2 - - State your opinion immediately. You must say it within the introduction in order to show us the...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|Many people feel that natural resources such as air, oceans, rivers, and forests are under threat.
Writing Feedbackchaita - Oct 7, 2014 / chaita - Oct 8, 2014
|IELTS - Cinema viewers in the four various countries: India, Ireland, New Zealand and Japan
3 - A few details to share: The table chart illustrates the figures for cinema viewers for films in...
Writing Feedbackrubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014 / eddies - Oct 8, 2014
|"Hey my son Military writ came for you" - should national service be mandatory for young adults?
Writing FeedbackKhusel - Oct 7, 2014 / Khusel - Oct 7, 2014
|Upward trend in the national and international call lines and the # of minutes in the mobile calls
2 - national and international fixed line, and mobiles that the two other classes (what?? I think here you have...
Writing Feedbackrubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 7, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 Graphs: UK tourism statistics
Writing Feedbackakifielts - Oct 7, 2014 / eddies - Oct 9, 2014
|Teachers should not instill their social or political points to students.
2 - That is to say, teachers' points as an access for students to discussing mor e social and political issues....
Writing FeedbackMaxineee - Oct 7, 2014 / rubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014
|The increase in selecting to live individually helps people have a better life; some cons though
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Oct 7, 2014 / Abdurasul - Oct 7, 2014
|Eeating food in home has many advantages for family relationship
Writing FeedbackSmile_Jen - Oct 7, 2014 / maryailt - Oct 8, 2014
|"better things that are learned are contained in experiences" - experience vs books knowledge
2 - Your essay has a number of flaws that I will be addressing below. Please consider other ways of presenting...
Writing Feedbackshigaogui - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|As the essential resource for people's lives, easier prepared food means easier to improve our lives
3 - Thanks for your reply, I find it's better for my essay. But I have a question about that. "the...
Writing FeedbackLittleCa - Oct 6, 2014 / LittleCa - Oct 7, 2014
|TOEFL: Make decision by myself or by parents.
Writing FeedbackYuuukily - Oct 6, 2014 / Yuuukily - Oct 7, 2014
|A job should mean a job for life!
3 - Vns, you show a thorough understanding of the essay prompt and have managed to use very informative, logical, and...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|Sports facilities should be adopted parallel with sports contests and health events
2 - Kyrsten,excellent introduction even though you forgot to present your point of view. As you know the essay asks...
Writing FeedbackKrysten Mai - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS: the advertisement aimed at children should be restricted or even banned
3 - Well, overall, not bad. However, do not straightforwardly point on children out. Attempt to write in this way. Advertising...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 6, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS: established preparation at school to become good mother and father?
2 - incomplete sentence While many people agree that formal training for parenting should be given for schoolchildren,...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Oct 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Oct 7, 2014
|IELTS- Should foreign visitors pay more than local visitors for tourist sites?
2 - Sam, I will revise and review your essay by showing you how the content can be improved. My comments...
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|How is energy wasted in school?
2 - is a necessity and essential to modern life - I believe this has a slight grammatical problem- either you...
Writing FeedbackEst2k - Oct 6, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Wheat exports
2 - , from 1985 to 1990,andwhich It is noticeable that the total of wheat exports in the three countries fluctuated...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Oct 6, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 6, 2014
|[IELTS] Cheap flights should not be discouraged
4 - - zjxhz, that is exactly what I was pointing out to you. You must always present a clear point...
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|Academic Writing IELTS about numbers of computer users - graph
Writing Feedbackbaj_roman - Oct 6, 2014 / oktaHrp - Oct 8, 2014
|A Revolutionary Mindset; cultural and political characteristics of revolutionary America
2 - The peoples of America have always been diverse. Our colonial settlers came from many different backgrounds, for various reasons,...
Writing Feedbackrichardjolly - Oct 6, 2014 / rubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014
|IELTS-Task 2: children should take formal training to become good parents
Writing Feedbacklourance - Oct 5, 2014 / lourance - Oct 6, 2014
|There are no such things as freedom and security without independence - importance in your life
2 - There are no such things as freedom and security without independence. It is simply impossible. You cannot live freely...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 5, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 5, 2014
|Our rights as people define who we are as individuals - SAT ESSAY; CENSORSHIP
2 - Our rights as people define who are we are as individuals. Our individual rights in society allow us to...
Writing Feedbackboston1002 - Oct 5, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 5, 2014
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