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|[IELTS Task 1] the number of population in three different countries - biggest in Washington
3 - The introduction is too bulky. Why don't you start writing this: The line graph shows a large portion...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Aug 28, 2014 / eddies - Aug 30, 2014
|IELTS : intelligent machines replacing human beings : advantages and disadvantages
4 - Pyon9x, you can talk about Henry Ford and how he decided that creating a factory line would make cars...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 27, 2014
|No one understands you more than yourself, so do not waste too much time trying to be someone else
6 - Well, the TOEFL is more for American studies while the IETLS is for Canadian/British/Australian studies. So it really depends...
Writing Feedbackjackthomas - Aug 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 27, 2014
|Work and travel for a year? - do not forget to read enough books and improve your knowledge
9 - Vangiespan, good advises, try to put them into practice. P.s. I'm new here, but this is an awesome...
Writing FeedbackGaziF - Aug 27, 2014 / GaziF - Aug 28, 2014
|Doing activities in a short time or live life in slow pace?
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 27, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 28, 2014
|IELTS: 'various jobs can't be limited to a gender'; more women are taking over traditional male work
3 - To begin with, confronting with such severe job competition and economic stress in the society, women can no longer...
Writing Feedbackstephy7658 - Aug 27, 2014 / nguoi_co_doc - Sep 3, 2014
|Retail cashier job - my very first job experience
3 - Yes, this is a very important thing.... you should tell us why and for what purpose you wrote...
Writing Feedbackmrszlexilandero - Aug 27, 2014 / dumi - Sep 4, 2014
|'we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level' - GRE essay
4 - Cancellation is singular form. Since you are talking about more than one advertisement being cancelled, it goes into plural...
Writing FeedbackMysoon - Aug 26, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 26, 2014
|IELTS writing part 1. Popularuty of on-line purchases in different countries.
Writing FeedbackLenaKuzn - Aug 26, 2014 / LenaKuzn - Aug 26, 2014
|IELTS : The examination for alternative energy sources : beneficial or harmful?
6 - Thank Dumi for correcting, your advices are always helpful to me :) can you please tell me what...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 25, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 26, 2014
|Ielts: Modern technology has impacted the traditional cultures in both negative and positive ways.
5 - to me, your essay is overally good, your opinion is well developed with many interesting examples, just a few...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Aug 25, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 25, 2014
|Arts and public services are both important to the community and should be invested properly - IELTS
9 - I have just found it on Appstore and installing it, It seems good as it has 4.5/5 star. Thanks...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Aug 25, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Aug 26, 2014
|'there will be more equipment and we will be dependent on them' - conveniences vs development
2 - You did an excellent job on this essay. You created valid points by using real life examples and made...
Writing Feedbackpinaksalvekar - Aug 25, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 25, 2014
|'I'm really keen on cook since I was a little girl' - Describe a hobby
3 - I'm really keen on cooking since I was a little girl. I usually learn how to cook by searching...
Writing FeedbackJanice yang - Aug 25, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 25, 2014
|Internet and TV have a greater influence over people's lives than politicians. Do u agree?
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Aug 25, 2014 / ruffruff999 - Aug 25, 2014
|"Closing My Eyes" - driving on the expressway at night - PLACE YOU FEEL CONTENT...
4 - I definitely think you should start over. I suggest that you outline the reasons you feel content in your...
Writing FeedbackIyeshaferguson - Aug 24, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 24, 2014
|Why study? Knowledge, experience and career are essential for today's young people to concentrate on
5 - It is clearobvious that knowledge is an important key which leads to success. Most people believe that university and...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Aug 24, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL: 'joining sport team' - the best way for students to make new friends?
3 - Thanks a lot!...
Writing FeedbackPenny Chou - Aug 24, 2014 / Penny Chou - Aug 24, 2014
|People nowadays don't spend too much time on their personal enjoyment because they can't - TPO
Writing Feedbacksircampbell - Aug 24, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|Writing is one of the things I used to hate the most - My first Reflective essay
2 - You were really able to express yourself well in this essay even though you are not a native English...
Writing Feedbackaizuddin - Aug 24, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 24, 2014
|What is one important "easy answer" that we should resist? what dangerous misconceptions hold?
6 - it's an SAT essay thanks for correcting my mistakes and for analyzing my faults Actually I am an unternational...
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 23, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 30, 2014
|'new and exciting sport should be welcomed' - IELTS: Essay on whether to ban dangerous sports
2 - Very good essay so far. Here are my grammar suggestions: "should let people do what they want yet...
Writing Feedbackthanhthanhdo10 - Aug 23, 2014 / yazoo - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: 'bring happiness to my nearest and dearest' - which salary would be better?
4 - I too agree with Pahan. You display good writing skills, good grammar, vocabulary knowledge, sentence structures etc. What you...
Writing Feedbackdiidoobiib - Aug 23, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|Studying major cities helps to understand the most important characteristics of a society -GRE Issue
3 - Thanks Binte! Now that I read again the prompt, I might have understood the statement. I should have focused...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Aug 23, 2014 / dunguyen - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: WOMEN AND MEN EXCLUDED FROM SPECIFIC JOBS ?
2 - leads to the distribution of both genders in some specific... --- This sentence got a little too long and...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Aug 22, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: Reading books has more benefits in development of imagination and language skills
4 - It would have been better if your approached this essay from a comparison point of view since you already...
Writing Feedbacktimexironman - Aug 22, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 2, 2014
|Toefl: people judge others by external appearance but is better also to consider the inner qualities
3 - Thank you Dear dumi.You helped me before a lot. I appreciate your concern. Actually I had a mistake...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 22, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 25, 2014
|Contemporary life prevent people from developing into strong and independent individual - Gre Issue
Writing FeedbackNinad09 - Aug 22, 2014 / pinaksalvekar - Aug 25, 2014
|IELTS: public transportation and more flyovers as a solution for traffic congestion
2 - It is true that traffic congestion is now an increasingly serious problem that many major cities have to face...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 22, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|TOEFL_inventors and science pioneers always try new things and take risks
2 - Throughout history, there have been many inventions and breakthroughs have inventedmade by brave persons. Well.... your sentences...
Writing Feedbackmasih65 - Aug 22, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|Learn variety of cultures, traditions by engaging with local people and visiting historical places
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 22, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS - dramatic increase in the number of Japanese people travelling abroad - Bar chart, Line Graph
5 - Thank Dumi, Eddies, and Pyon9x so much. I will try to understand and fix my mistakes now. Then I...
Writing Feedbackviolethoang - Aug 21, 2014 / violethoang - Aug 23, 2014
|Toefl: It should be mandatory for every company to substitute their old equipment with new ones.
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 21, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 25, 2014
|New way of communication can lead to some undesirable results by preventing direct social contact
Writing Feedbackmacduck - Aug 21, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|Does a person's character determine that person's success in life ?
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 20, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 21, 2014
|Bad memories leaves scars in the heart.
4 - .I agree that memories hinder one to learn past ans success in the future CORRECT IS I agree that...
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 20, 2014 / sadia22 - Aug 23, 2014
|variety is the spice of life - making life worthwhile
4 - The topic is quite rich that's why, it needs more analyze.So I think you need to re-write your arguments...
Writing Feedbacksadia22 - Aug 20, 2014 / Anouar - Sep 8, 2014
|IELTS: Regulation regarding advertisements' unnecessary impact on people's lives
5 - It doesn't give any value to your conclusion. I am too keen using a conclusion signal. Probably you...
Writing Feedbackamalxavier - Aug 20, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 20, 2014
|GRE - Issue task - People should undertake risky action only after they consider its consequences.
5 - Thank you D! It really helps that you clearly mention what the problem is, and I also think the...
Writing FeedbackLauren5102 - Aug 20, 2014 / Lauren5102 - Aug 24, 2014
|IELTS: The earlier ages for learning the second language the better
5 - Nowadays, you can find every parents lookSing forward to plan teaching a foreign language for their children at early...
Writing Feedbackzovaa - Aug 20, 2014 / eddies - Aug 20, 2014
|Unlimited Golden Stars- MIT essay
Writing Feedbacktdshah1 - Aug 19, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 20, 2014
|IELTS school non academic subjects assist in physical development and learning important life skills
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 19, 2014 / EF_Sheri - Aug 19, 2014
|IELTS: Gentle manners vs Material possessions.
7 - "In conclusion, I believe that the value of kindness outweighs any material possession and keeps being the most important...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Aug 19, 2014 / yazoo - Aug 29, 2014
|IELTS: 'opportunity to be healthier physically and mentally' - Children are given too much free time
Writing FeedbackSaadhin - Aug 19, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS Essay Task 1: 'popularity peak took place in 1980' - Teenage vegeterians
5 - * based on my understanding.. In IELTS writing task, if you use overall, you don't need write...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Aug 19, 2014 / Mann_ms - Sep 19, 2014
|Virtual learning beneficials
4 - Let see how I can contribute to you :D Not only the Internet is in urgent need of communities...
Writing Feedbacksssenyoritaa - Aug 19, 2014 / dumi - Aug 20, 2014
|a Table about proportion of female & male genders in sports
Writing Feedbacksssenyoritaa - Aug 19, 2014 / eddies - Aug 20, 2014
|IELTS: higher education or workplace? Professional knowledge is the most decisive factor.
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 19, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 21, 2014
|SAT topic: Is knowledge a benefit or a budern?
3 - Knowledge used to stand a dispensable role in the society due to different levels of classes, and it is...
Writing Feedbackd_ooo70189 - Aug 18, 2014 / dumi - Aug 20, 2014
|GRE: Woven baskets were passed from Palea to Lithos not the vice versa? It's doubtful.
3 - Thank you so much for the reply!! I have never seen the list of logical fallacies before, just googled...
Writing Feedbackteresassssun - Aug 18, 2014 / teresassssun - Aug 19, 2014
|TOEFL: Next 20 years - transportation goes ahead and novel version of automobile will be produced.
4 - Is this you mean? There are many things individuals can do to reduce harmful emissions to our air,...
Writing Feedbackmarger - Aug 18, 2014 / eddies - Aug 20, 2014
|IELTS: Music has come to human kind as a valuable gift that is necessary for a better life
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Aug 18, 2014 / fikri - Aug 19, 2014
|TOEFL: the part-time job can let students experience the real adult life and know more about it
3 - I don't think this is a very good start ... The first sentence of your introduction, ideally a...
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 18, 2014 / dumi - Aug 20, 2014
|Parents teach their children the most important and necessary things; they are the best teachers.
3 - You need to improve the presentation of this sentence. There's lots of redundancy I find there :( This...
Writing Feedbacknasrullah - Aug 17, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|TOEFL: The Face-to-Face communication makes it easy to understand emotion senses.
5 - AsWith the rapid development of technology, many communication tools makehave made it easyeasier for us to communicate with others.each...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 17, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|IELTS - The residents of Edmonton are especially keen on cars
7 - Firstly, it is clear that approximately half of all the people use cars, while around one-third preferred the light...
Writing FeedbackAlfred557 - Aug 17, 2014 / SAM2014 - Sep 22, 2014
|TOEFL: Some students live in their hometowns, but others in different cities - which do you like?
Writing Feedbackkathyt - Aug 17, 2014 / kathyt - Aug 25, 2014
|TOEFL, "Tell the truth" - People need to have some friends who are trustful.
3 - Hi ,Marger ! In the first paragraph " for instant, having a friendship relationship, " ,I think it...
Writing Feedbackmarger - Aug 17, 2014 / kathyt - Aug 17, 2014
|[IELTS] A discursive essay on visitors' attitude toward other countries's culture.
3 - I think you've done a good job argumenting from both sides, I agree with your view. "Foreigners...
Writing Feedbackthanhthanhdo10 - Aug 17, 2014 / Stevie - Aug 17, 2014
|What God thinks about it? - Why cosmetic surgery must be banned
2 - the negative effects <of >cosmetic surgery - In fact, cosmetic surgery is a short term, waste of money, and...
Writing Feedbackgerrard - Aug 17, 2014 / sssenyoritaa - Aug 19, 2014
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