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|IELTS: World Wide Web has been very beneficial invention for humanity
3 - There are a lot of online shopping websites wherethat allow people canto purchase or buy anything from the comfort...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Aug 15, 2014 / dumi - Aug 19, 2014
|GRE essay: Many important discoveries or creations are accidental
Writing Feedbackasdsa111 - Aug 14, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|A lot of students from rural areas and poor families cannot go to school due to lack of money
3 - It's quite a long sentence which does't give a clear and attractive idea. My suggestion is: In some...
Writing Feedbackgarung1187 - Aug 14, 2014 / ningo - Sep 9, 2014
|In undermentioned countries foot/drinks/tobacco has recorded the highest percentage of expenditures
Writing Feedbackandys77a - Aug 14, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 2, 2014
|TOEFL: 'friendly and good at cooking person' - the important qualities of a good roommate.
2 - too much informal forms were used, therefore i recommend you should check for academic words regularly. Dont be worried,...
Writing Feedbacktoannguyen - Aug 13, 2014 / garung1187 - Aug 14, 2014
|'I am always exhilarated when doing my social work job' - the reason for leaving
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Aug 13, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 14, 2014
|'the real achievement is when we can help others' - Summarize your accomplishment
3 - Dear Gagan, About grammar and tenses I strongly agreed with you. Here my self correction, please give me...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Aug 13, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 15, 2014
|TOEFL: respect and loyalty are the conspicuous qualities that all children should have
4 - you seem to lack examples for your ideas. besides, the consequences you mention are all assumptions, therefore, you should...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 13, 2014 / garung1187 - Aug 14, 2014
|ielts - The transformation from childhood into adulthood are every important in each person's life
Writing Feedbackngoctrang123 - Aug 13, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 14, 2014
|IELTS: 'economic, diplomacy, and environmental' - most popular career choices for youth in Indonesia
4 - Here are some issues I reveal that you should pay particular attention to: 1. Spelling 2. Word form...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Aug 13, 2014 / eddies - Aug 17, 2014
|NUCLEAR TECHNOLOGY: The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace.
2 - Nuclear technology is a much debatedheatedissuetopic . Some people think that there are several benefits to use nuclear power...
Writing FeedbackDuong68 - Aug 13, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|The dominance of imported entertainment is harmful to the culture of these countries.Do you agree?
4 - Nevermind Zahra :). This is commonly occured for new member Would you kindly give us the prompt...
Writing Feedbackz_ansari - Aug 13, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 14, 2014
|Scandals can only be solved by a combined effort of all the people of the society - GRE essay
2 - Overall, the essay's main point is clear. It needs some attention given to correcting grammar and a few typographical...
Writing FeedbackInfernuS - Aug 12, 2014 / EF_Sheri - Aug 13, 2014
|IELTS :Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 12, 2014 / fikri - Aug 20, 2014
|Bill Gates as University Professor? - TOEFL Essay
2 - Successful entrepreneurs and sport stars can inspire the lives of many people. Well, I see you are...
Writing Feedbackluongminh97 - Aug 12, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|New restaurant that may be built in your neighborhood will disturb residents of this area
Writing Feedbackjacky5421 - Aug 12, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 13, 2014
|MONEY IS THE ROOT OF ALL EVIL
4 - I wonder that you can write the prompt and purpose of the essay. It is addressed for IELTS, TOEFL...
Writing FeedbackMariuxi - Aug 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 12, 2014
|Experience plays an important role in our lives and teach us valuable lessons which help us succeed
5 - Get rid of the entire first paragraph " personally, I agree..." You don't have to tell the readers this,...
Writing Feedbacksaakshi - Aug 11, 2014 / jwajwa - Aug 21, 2014
|Well-known people who do not go away from the converses of people should be always very affluent
3 - Well, it is better if you align your arguments more with the prompt. Your prompt is focused on...
Writing Feedbackvery_soon - Aug 11, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|Toefl Essay :: Travel within group is always safe and brings more recreations to everyone
5 - Yur essay is very clear and it easy to understand. Yu give many ideas to support for a topic....
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 11, 2014 / ngoctrang123 - Aug 13, 2014
|TOEFL: Drivers have to pay a fee for driving in Rush Hour
4 - Started in theFrom the beginning of late eighteenth century, the industrialization and urbanization witnessed thean explosion in number of...
Writing Feedbackchenwc1 - Aug 11, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Parents should let their children grow up in the city - good preparation for the hard life ahead
NEW - Please read and correct this essay for me. Thank you very much One of the most important factors in...
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|'disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning' - Agreement or disagreement? GRE Issue Essay
NEW - The Issue statement is : We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from...
Writing FeedbackComcop - Aug 11, 2014 / — -
|Government should take the responsibility to make appropriate regulation about the dangerous sports
3 - Actually, people engage in a wide range of sports. So, I like if you change this sentence to;...
Writing Feedbackheylie - Aug 11, 2014 / dumi - Aug 11, 2014
|Not only governments and big companies are responsible for environment but also the whole community
2 - For me your introduction is bit unclear, I have rephrased your introduction. However i am a learner too,...
Writing Feedbacktrantrunghieu - Aug 10, 2014 / latkhan - Aug 10, 2014
|IELTS : Lately more and more work has to be done by machines.
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 10, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 11, 2014
|TOEFL: to be an expert in one field is not better than to have broad knowledge of many subjects
3 - the flow interrupted while you are not explain what is the specific reasons effecting your sister...
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 10, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 13, 2014
|TOEFL: new factory will enhance the quality of life and our town's image promotion
4 - Some people who disagree with the idea of building of the factory argued argue (keep it in present tense...
Writing FeedbackMckenzie - Aug 10, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|'remarkable rise with slight fluctuations' - Japanese tourists on the trip
2 - If I were you, I prefer writing overview paragraph rather than conclusion. Based on IELTS writing task 1 band...
Writing FeedbackAngel Lolla - Aug 10, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 11, 2014
|IELTS: Gender distribution of teachers in different educational institutions
6 - Please allow me to give a try for the introduction and overview: The bar chart illustrates the proportion...
Writing Feedbacktrantrunghieu - Aug 10, 2014 / eddies - Sep 7, 2014
|Ambition motivate people - without it life would be mechanical or meaningless
3 - you can use others listing points to show new ideas; Also, Moreover, Furthermore, etc. Even though...
Writing FeedbackJwala - Aug 9, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 10, 2014
|IELTS: Athletes are very magnificent and important role models for people in their young ages.
4 - This is a poor beggining :( You should begin your essay with a catchy sentence that is meaningful...
Writing Feedbacksoon_Ielts - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; Some people have great ambitions in life, others don't.
NEW - [QUESTION] Some people have great ambitions in life, others don't. Do you think ambition is important to succeed in...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Aug 9, 2014 / — -
|Ielts writing task1 - percentages of population and wealth in world
5 - Well, if this is for IELTS TASK1, you should have uploaded your graphs to enable us providing you with...
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Ielts: it is necessary that parents should be obliged to protect their offspring by vaccination
6 - This sentence has several issues that include clarity issues and grammar issues. Let's take this part ; ...
Writing Feedbackthu van nguyen - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|IELTS: It is necessary for people to choose the appropriate working mode in career growth
2 - Well, I see a difference in what you say by "permanently in the same company" and "not changing...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL: High stress job paid a lot of money or low stress job with just enough to live on?
3 - Thank you for your useful advice, Aichen. I clearly see your point and try to improve them in further...
Writing FeedbackAudi - Aug 8, 2014 / Audi - Aug 9, 2014
|IELTS: Living away from parents provide youngsters opportunity to meet variety of new people
8 - In recent years, Majormajor cities have seen unprecedented growth (of what? you need to specify! ) and have become...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 8, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|Those who are aware of where to go, customs and life are likely to experience satisfactory journey
4 - These days the number of visitors who are travel to foreign countries hashave been markedlysignificantly increased. Culture awareness lead...
Writing Feedbackali1 - Aug 8, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL: A/D? In modern times, parents will learn more from their children
3 - Some people agree with that statement; other people disagree. this sentence can be deleted you can just say"I have...
Writing FeedbackAichen - Aug 8, 2014 / DearbhailS - Aug 10, 2014
|IELTS: Charity among UK people between 1990-2010 in five age groups
4 - The bar chart showpresents data about the proportion of UK people giving money to charity by age range between...
Writing Feedbacklinusyu0313 - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: the figure reflect equally in subjects related to service community; foreign and UK students
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Aug 7, 2014 / nguoi_co_doc - Aug 29, 2014
|"Situation after Reunification of Korean peninsula" - prediction essay
2 - Do not capNot capitalize a word that comes after a,. Only capitalize the first letter of the sentence....
Writing Feedbacksamuela - Aug 7, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2014
|IELTS: Taxpayers don't need pay for public education system in which their children are not enrolled
2 - For instance, the recent bridge construction scam exposed by the media amounts Where ? I am new...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 7, 2014 / latkhan - Aug 8, 2014
|We always like to make progress in our life and it gives us a good sense - Toefl Essay
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 7, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 9, 2014
|TOEFL - Finding a good job and increasing the knowledge are the main reasons for study
4 - First of all, people want to enter to theattend university to improve their knowledge. These people want to...
Writing Feedbackabedkh - Aug 7, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: 'disaster situations' - todays individuals are becoming more dependent on each other
4 - It seems that people have heavy reliance on othersone another because they have to collaborate with each other(sounds repetitive...
Writing Feedbackswfchn - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: The tax reduction of state school for parents who have children studying in private system
2 - On the whole, I do believe that taxes paying for state schools are necessary to be compulsory for all...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Aug 7, 2014 / mvettri - Aug 7, 2014
|How did you get over your fear to speak in English? - Learning From Mistakes
2 - As a non-native speaker it was really hard to say even few sentences out loud, when I didn't really...
Writing Feedbackflorszi - Aug 7, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2014
|toefl: multiple short breaks are good for children to do well in their school life
Writing Feedbacksayes - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Computer skills reassure the future work-life - is it good to use computers from primary school age?
3 - In modern world, the knowledge and skills in computer science is an indispensable requirement. I think...
Writing Feedbackparand - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Celebrities are more famous for the look and wealth than for talents and contribution to their field
2 - I think the crossed phrase is redundant. In addition, I suppose you need to develop or explain more...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 6, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Aug 7, 2014
|IELTS: CELEBRITY'S ROLE - influence of celebrities to the youth is as well positive as negative
7 - In fact, "Effort" can be both countable and uncountable word. Look at this example from macmilandictionary: Despite someone's efforts:...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Aug 6, 2014 / ningo - Aug 7, 2014
|IELTS: The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for these sources
3 - This is a good intro, especially in terms of introducing the background of your issue topic. However, since your...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Self Introduction For UN Young Professional Programme
7 - Dear all of advisers. I try to make a revision. Particularly, the recruiter wants to know the candidate based...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Aug 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 22, 2014
|Efficient presentation saves time, makes the points clear, satisfies its audience
2 - Exactly, one thing more i would like to add is that put many pictures in your presentation so that...
Writing Feedbackahsam - Aug 5, 2014 / Binte Rasheed - Aug 7, 2014
|"WE FIND COMFORT AMONG THOSE WHO AGREE WITH US - GROWTH AMONG THOSE WHO DON'T"; PPST Writing TOPIC
Writing Feedbackeperry1 - Aug 5, 2014 / Binte Rasheed - Aug 7, 2014
|Independent TOEFL essay , Judging people on their appereance
Writing FeedbackBasilMostafa - Aug 5, 2014 / florszi - Aug 7, 2014
|To me studying alone is more useful - students choice
Writing Feedbackahmadaz - Aug 5, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Aug 6, 2014
|Mixed education provide added opportunity for either sex to develop interpersonal skills
NEW - Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Other, however, believe that...
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